**To:** Crimson Leaf Publishing Editorial Board
**From:** Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor
**Project:** The Starfall Accord (ch-07 Review)

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### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Mira’s Voice Signature:** High adherence to the curse scale and sarcasm markers.
    *   *“stars' sake”* (mild): "For stars’ sake, I couldn’t have moved..."
    *   *“burning memory”* (upset): "Burning memory. We’re lambs."
    *   *“past and rot”* (furious): "Past and rot with no hope!"
    *   *“obviously”* (sarcasm): Used correctly in the opening and closing lines to signal the opposite of the literal meaning.
*   **Dorian’s Voice Signature:** High adherence to the formal understatement scale.
    *   *“the circumstances are not auspicious”*: Used twice to signal escalating danger.
    *   *“the situation requiring my undivided attention”*: Used to signal a grave threat when Vane approaches.
    *   *“The evidence suggests”*: Used consistently as his primary analytical filter.
*   **Can I identify voices without tags?** 
    *   **Mira:** YES. The frantic, tactile, and reactive sentence structure is distinct.
    *   **Dorian:** YES. The clinical, grammatically rigid precision remains consistent even under pressure.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **FLAG:** Character Death Inconsistency. 
    *   **The Contradiction:** Chapter 07 depicts the death of Kaelen ("He just... he fell"). However, the **Character State: ch-07** RAG database entry for Kaelen lists his status as **Permanent: YES** with the title "First Regent of the Grey Era." It also places him in the "High Spire Stairwell / Great Hall" with "Singed robes; minor exhaustion."
    *   **Correction:** If this chapter is meant to be the canon version of Chapter 7, the Character State database must be updated to reflect his death, OR the chapter must be revised so Kaelen survives to fulfill his role as "First Regent."
*   **FLAG:** Physical Injury/State Inconsistency.
    *   **The Contradiction:** The **Character State: ch-07** for Mira note "Severe mana-burn on forearms." The chapter text mentions "fine hairs on my arms stand up" and "faint, orange glow radiating from my own skin," but fails to acknowledge the physical limitation or pain of severe mana-burns during the dance or the flight to the archives.
    *   **Correction:** Add a sensory detail of the mana-burns stinging or tightening during the physical exertion or when Dorian touches her arm.
*   **FLAG:** World State/Timeline Inconsistency.
    *   **The Contradiction:** Chapter 07 text says "The sky is now a gold-violet aurora" (RAG: World State) and "The physical bridge of mist now connects the two mountain ranges permanently." However, the chapter narrative places Mira and Dorian at an **Imperial Gala/Ballroom** and the **Imperial Archive** at the Capital/Palace, fearing the Ministry. They discuss "running" to the Spire.
    *   **Correction:** If the "Great Integration" has already happened (as per World State), the stakes of "running to the Spire" change, as the schools are already physically and magically merged. The text needs to clarify if the "Grey Dawn" has occurred *during* this gala or if the RAG status reflects the *end* of this chapter.

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **The "Correction Clause" Mechanics:** 
    *   **Passage:** "the tether was already beginning to whine... that signaled the 'Correction Clause' was hungry."
    *   **Issue:** It is unclear if the Correction Clause is a legal term in the Accord, a sentient magical backlash, or an Imperial tracking spell.
    *   **Fix:** Briefly define if this is a physical pain caused by the distance-limit of the tether or a monitored breach of the Imperial Decree.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Dorian’s "Borrowing" of Keys:** It is noted his fingers are shaking and he "borrowed" keys. Adding a brief mention that this behavior is "highly suboptimal" or "statistically improbable" for his character would reinforce the voice signature of him breaking his own rules for Mira.
*   **Lyra’s Entrance:** Lyra is "High Architect of the Union" in the RAG. Her appearing "shredded" and "missing spectacles" is a strong beat, but a mention of her using a specific "Grey" spell to bypass palace security would bridge the gap between her role as an architect and her arrival as a messenger.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not "fix" Dorian's lack of contraction use.** His refusal to use "don't" or "can't" (e.g., "The circumstances are hardly auspicious") is a core part of his "Soul-Chilling Precision" and must remain.
*   **Do not smooth Mira's interruptions.** "We could — actually. No." is a mandated voice trait for excitement/argument and must be preserved.

### 6. VERDICT
**REVISE**
(The death of Kaelen in the text directly contradicts his "Permanent" status and "First Regent" title in the established Character State database. This is a primary canon collision.)