### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The wind clawed at the warped shutters of the old Victorian house as Mia Harlow dragged her final suitcase over the creaking threshold into Blackwood Hollow's newest resident—or its latest fool."
    *   *Commentary:* This opening effectively establishes both the physical decay of the setting and a cynical narrative tone through the "fool" descriptor.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "In the far corner, she spotted a heavy wooden desk, its surface scarred and stained."
    *   *Commentary:* The use of "scarred" provides a nice touch of personification that aligns with the house's general "wounded" aura.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "A dry, rustling sound, like insects skittering over parchment. It was so close she could almost feel a phantom breath against her ear."
    *   *Commentary:* This sensory detail successfully heightens the tactile horror by bridging the gap between sound and physical sensation.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT
*   **Character: Mia Harlow**
    *   **Dialogue:** “Home sweet gothic nightmare.”
    *   **Vocabulary/Tics Check:** YES. She uses dry, self-deprecating humor and literary references (e.g., “poltergeist with a grudge,” “act two”) consistent with a failed horror novelist.
    *   **Forbidden Patterns Check:** N/A (No specific forbidden patterns provided in RAG for Mia).
    *   **Emotional Register Check:** YES. Her transition from defensive skepticism to paralyzed fear is paced realistically for an adult protagonist.

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Internal Skeptic Archetype:** Mia’s tendency to rationalize supernatural events using her background as a writer provides a grounded character hook.
    *   *Reference:* “Gravity and physics, Harlow. Not a poltergeist with a grudge.”
*   **Sensory "Layering" of Horror:** The progression from smell (stagnant air/wax) to sound (whispers) to touch (phantom breath) builds tension effectively.
    *   *Reference:* The transition from the "scent of floor wax" to the "sibilant sound" in the parlor.
*   **Atmospheric "House as Entity" Language:** The prose consistently treats the building as a living, hostile thing.
    *   *Reference:* "The house held its breath."

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The wind clawed at the warped shutters of the old Victorian house... into Blackwood Hollow's newest resident—or its latest fool."
*   **PROBLEM:** The RAG Project Context identifies the location as "Blackwood Manor," whereas the chapter text calls it "Blackwood Hollow." Additionally, the RAG mentions "The Archive" and "Silas Vane" being present in the sub-level in "ch-03," but the description of the house as a "Victorian house" Mia bought "for a song" contradicts the lore of an established "Archive"/Manor run by "The Board."
*   **FIX:** Change "Blackwood Hollow" to "Blackwood Manor" to align with database. If this is a different property, clarify the relation to the Archive.

*   **ORIGINAL:** "She checked the kitchen... She moved toward the foyer, and it intensified."
*   **PROBLEM:** Emotional continuity. Mia hears a clearly distinct voice say her own name ("*Mia...*") at the end of the chapter, yet earlier she hears "a thousand people whispering" and assumes it's "pipes." The escalation from "thousand voices" to "one voice saying her name" is good, but the RAG mentions Elias Thorne and the "Whisperer" in the sub-levels. The chapter must acknowledge the basement is where the "Great Breach" (from RAG) is located.
*   **FIX:** Ensure the basement scene acknowledges the "hairline crack" or the "scrying glass" mentioned in the World State to maintain continuity with the Archive's lore.

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "...as Mia Harlow dragged her final suitcase over the creaking threshold into Blackwood Hollow's newest resident—or its latest fool."
*   **PROBLEM:** Syntactic confusion. As written, it says she dragged the suitcase *into* the resident/latest fool.
*   **FIX:** Rephrase to: "...dragged her final suitcase over the creaking threshold, marking herself as Blackwood Manor's newest resident—or its latest fool."

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Optional:** Connect the basement desk more explicitly to the RAG context.
    *   *Quote:* "On top of the desk sat a leather-bound book..."
    *   *Enhancement:* Subtly hint at the "failings seals" mentioned in Elias Thorne's secrets by having the desk located near a metallic seal or a faint, shimmering crack in the wall to foreshadow the "Great Breach."

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not remove Mia’s habit of talking to herself.** This dialogue (“Home sweet gothic nightmare,” “I am not having a breakdown”) is a vital character defense mechanism that prevents the horror from feeling generic.
*   **Do not modernize the kitchen.** The "1940s mint-green tile" is a specific aesthetic choice that contrasts well with the "Victorian" exterior and should remain.

### 8. VERDICT
**REVISE**
**SCORE: 78**
**Justification:** While the prose is atmospheric and the character voice is distinct, there are significant continuity discrepancies between the Chapter 1 text and the RAG Project Context (Location name "Hollow" vs "Manor"; residential purchase vs "The Archive's restricted sub-level"). The narrative needs to bridge the "new homeowner" plot with the established "Archive Warden/Blackwood Manor" lore provided in the character states.