### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   "The wind clawed at the warped shutters of the old Victorian house as Mia Harlow dragged her final suitcase over the creaking threshold into Blackwood Hollow's newest resident—or its latest fool." (Early): This opening sets a classic gothic tone by personifying the environment ("wind clawed") to establish immediate hostility.
*   "The clatter was unnervingly loud, a gunshot in a tomb." (Early): This simile effectively heightens the tension by contrasting a mundane action with a violent, death-centric image.
*   "Curiosity, the same trait that usually got her protagonists killed in act two, won out over her desire for tea." (Mid): This meta-commentary successfully bridges Mia’s professional background as a writer with her current actions, grounding her character logic.
*   "The sound persisted. It rose and fell in waves, a chaotic tangle of vowels and consonants that refused to form words." (Late): The sensory description here builds suspense by keeping the threat abstract and auditory before the final escalation.
*   "She wanted to scream, but her throat felt as if it had been swallowed by the same dust that filled the house." (Late): This passage effectively links the physical environment back to the character’s internal physical reaction, reinforcing the theme of being consumed by the house.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT
**Note:** The PROJECT CONTEXT provided (Elias Thorne, Silas Vane) refers to **ch-03**, whereas the CURRENT MESSAGE text is **ch-01** focusing on a new character, **Mia Harlow**. Mia Harlow is not yet in the RAG database for ch-01.

*   **Character:** Mia Harlow
*   **Quote:** "Home sweet gothic nightmare," she muttered.
*   **Constraint Check:**
    *   Signature vocabulary/verbal tics: YES. She uses dry, self-deprecating humor ("latest fool," "law degrees and commitment issues").
    *   Avoid forbidden speech patterns: YES. No noted prohibitions for this new character.
    *   Emotional register: YES. She is oscillating between forced rationalism (the "inner skeptic") and growing dread, consistent with a horror protagonist in the "Entry" phase.

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The "Writerly" Internal Monologue:** Mia’s tendency to frame her life through horror tropes. Reference: "The house was not haunted. That was the first mistake Maria made."
*   **Sonic Atmosphere:** The transition from mechanical sounds to supernatural whispers. Reference: "It sounded almost like a conversation happening three rooms away... '...Mia...'"
*   **The Cellar Discovery:** The use of the 1924 photograph to establish a historical weight without an info-dump. Reference: "The mother’s face was blurred, as if she’d moved at the last second."

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The wind clawed at the warped shutters... Mia Harlow dragged her final suitcase... into Blackwood Hollow's newest resident—or its latest fool."
*   **PROBLEM:** Syntactic error/Logic break. Mia is entering a house *in* Blackwood Hollow, but the sentence says she is dragging a suitcase *into* the resident. A person cannot be dragged into a resident; she is the resident being dragged into the house.
*   **FIX:** "The wind clawed at the warped shutters of the old Victorian house as Mia Harlow dragged her final suitcase over the creaking threshold, marking her as Blackwood Hollow’s newest resident—or its latest fool."

*   **ORIGINAL:** "She checked the kitchen. The whispering grew fainter. She moved toward the foyer, and it intensified."
*   **PROBLEM:** Spatial inconsistency. In the "Mid" section, she finds the cellar in the kitchen. In the "Late" section, the whispering is coming from the vents and walls "from the very bones of the house," yet she moves *away* from the kitchen (and the cellar, the literal bones) to the foyer to find the source. This weakens the cellar’s established importance as a source of "icy air" and "metallic" scents.
*   **FIX:** "She checked the kitchen, glancing at the bolted cellar door where the air felt heaviest. The whispering was a dull vibration here, but as she moved toward the foyer, it sharpened into distinct, rhythmic tones."

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "...the high ceilings and the shadows pooling in the corners of the hallway." vs "She reached for the light switch... The chandelier above flickered..."
*   **PROBLEM:** Structural transition. The text says she is in the "foyer" in the dark, then mentions "the hallway" shadows, then she hits a switch for a "chandelier." It is unclear if she is looking down a long hallway or if the chandelier is in the foyer.
*   **FIX:** "Mia stood in the foyer... shadows pooling in the corners of the cavernous space. She reached for the light switch... The chandelier above the coat rack flickered..."

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Suggestion:** Enhance the connection to the Chapter 3 context provided in the RAG. Reference: "The cellar."
*   **Reason:** The RAG context mentions "The Archive’s restricted sub-level" in Blackwood Manor. While this is ch-01 and she is in "Blackwood Hollow," hinting that the cellar might go deeper or has been modified recently would bridge the gap to the "Shaking of the Foundations" mentioned in the World State.
*   **Optional Quote Adjustment:** "She descended slowly... The basement was a labyrinth of shadows. [Add: She noticed the stone floors looked recently disturbed, as if something much larger had been moved beneath the foundation.]"

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Mia’s Sarcasm:** Do not remove the character’s tendency to talk to herself or make jokes (e.g., "Not a poltergeist with a grudge"). This is her primary defense mechanism and essential to her "voice hoarse" character arc.
*   **Classic Tropes:** The "scary basement" and "creaky stairs" are intentional genre conventions for a horror project titled "Whispers in the Dark" and should not be subverted here.

### 8. VERDICT
**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**JUSTIFICATION:** The chapter effectively establishes atmosphere and character voice, but it contains a significant grammatical/logical error in the very first sentence ("into Blackwood Hollow's newest resident") and has internal spatial inconsistencies regarding the kitchen/cellar relevance to the haunting. These must be corrected to maintain professional standards.