### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Voice Authenticity (Mira):** The use of the "Mira-ism" interruption is perfectly executed: *"Mira’s hand brushed Dorian's. Actually. No. She caught his pinky finger with hers."* This maintains her tactile nature and internal correction process.
*   **Voice Authenticity (Dorian):** His Formal Understatement Scale is used correctly to signal danger: *"The circumstances are... not auspicious"* and *"this represents a situation requiring our immediate and undivided attention"* (paraphrased by his clinical assessment of the Static Shield).
*   **Tactile Magic:** The description of the "Cold-Sick" and Mira’s remedy—*"melting the microscopic rime before it could scar"*—reinforces the adult, intimate, yet high-stakes nature of their magical bond.
*   **The "Grey" Resonance:** The structural payoff of their magical merger in the vault feels earned. The transition from rivals to a "singular, emotional truth" hits the 80% arc mark outlined in the character states.

**VOICE CHECK:**
*   **Mira:** YES. Her "Obviously" sarcasm and specific curses ("Past and rot") are present and correctly mapped to her emotional state.
*   **Dorian:** YES. His reliance on "The evidence suggests" and his grammatical breakdown during the climax—*"You are everything, Mira"*—effectively signals his armor cracking.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **The Inquisitor's Name:** In the Chapter 7 text, the antagonist is referred to as "High Inquisitor Malchor." However, the Project Context/NPC Memory lists him as "High Inquisitor Malchor" but the World State refers to him as "Malchor." **Correction:** Ensure naming is consistent. More importantly, the text mentions a "black-glass sword." Ensure this aligns with the Ministry’s established "Static" and "Imperial" aesthetic from earlier chapters (usually mercury or obsidian-based).
*   **The Burden of the "Monitoring Tether":** The Character State for Mira says she knows the tether is "feeding on her fire" and Dorian *does not know*. In the draft, they both figure it out together in the vault. **Correction:** To maintain the tension of the "Known Secret," Mira should realize the siphoning first and hesitate to tell Dorian to protect his fragile state, rather than them reaching a "synthesis" realization simultaneously.

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **The Vault Transition:** The passage *"Mira’s hand found the tactile trigger in the stone... the stone didn't grind; it dissolved"* feels rushed. Given the "eleventh pulse" stakes, we need one more beat of tension before they slip through.
    *   **Fix:** Add a sentence emphasizing the physical proximity and the heat/cold friction between them as they wait for the 0.9-second gap.
*   **The "Weave" Vision:** The vision of the founders and the early Emperor is vital for the "Starfall Accord" lore, but it currently feels like a data-dump.
    *   **Fix:** Ground the vision in Mira's physical sensations. Instead of just "seeing" the history, she should *feel* the obsidian wedge splitting her soul, making the Imperial theft a personal violation rather than a historical fact.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **The Satchel:** Mira picks up Kaelen’s satchel. A brief mention of the *smell* of the bag (ink, old parchment, or the specific "Reach" ozone) would heighten the emotional weight of her grief.
*   **Dorian’s Stance:** When they exit the vault "like sovereigns," a mention of Dorian specifically *not* adjusting his cuffs or looking for "suboptimal" flaws would reinforce that he has abandoned his rigid Ministry upbringing.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not "fix" Dorian's dialogue:** His repetitive use of "The evidence suggests" is a core character hook. Do not vary this for the sake of "elegant prose."
*   **Do not smooth Mira’s interruptions:** Phrases like *"Actually. No. She wouldn't"* are essential to her kinetic, impulsive voice profile.
*   **Do not reduce the "sensual but tasteful" tone:** The physical intimacy—palms over hearts, shared breathing—is the primary engine of the romance arc for this tier.

### 6. VERDICT: REVISE
The chapter is structurally sound with a strong opening hook (the carriage-coffin) and a defiant closing beat. However, the **Continuity** error regarding the "Known Secret" (Mira’s knowledge of the tether siphoning her specifically) must be addressed to preserve the internal character stakes leading into Chapter 8. The "Known Secret" is a plot anchor that should not be discarded in a shared epiphany too early.