**EDITORIAL REVIEW: CH-13**
**Editor:** Cora, Continuity & Accuracy
**Context:** Verification against Character State (Ch-03) and World State (Ch-03)

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### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Scorched Cuff:** The continuation of Dorian’s "scorched cuff on right wrist" and his choice to keep the mark as a "reminder" (established in Ch-03) remains a critical physical anchor.
*   **Mira’s Somatic High:** The description of her "residual somatic hum" and "liquid gold" marrow aligns perfectly with the Ch-03 state of "residual somatic warmth" and "wild joy."
*   **Kaelen’s Observational Role:** Kaelen’s emotional state (vigilant/suspicious) is effectively maintained. His silence and "darting eyes" reflect his Ch-03 realization that the Chancellors are "testing thresholds."
*   **Voice Signatures:**
    *   **Mira:** YES. Her dialogue is tactile and grounded in fire-elemental metaphors ("liquid gold," "grounding each other").
    *   **Dorian:** YES. His speech remains precise and disciplined ("absolute zero," "handling it implies control"), even when admitting vulnerability.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **Labeling Error:** This chapter is submitted as **Chapter 13**, but the provided narrative content directly references the immediate aftermath of the "canteen brawl" from Chapter 03. 
    *   **Conflict:** Chapter 13 implies ten chapters of progression, yet the dialogue and character states (Mira handing over the floor plan, the scorch mark being fresh, Kaelen delivering the brawl report) are identical to the events listed in the **Ch-03 Character State** and **Ch-03 World State** logs.
    *   **Correction:** Re-label this Chapter 03 or clarify if this is a "retelling" of Chapter 03. If this is truly Chapter 13, the characters are experiencing a localized "Groundhog Day" loop where they are repeating actions and dialogue from ten chapters ago.
*   **Fatal Casualty Contradiction:**
    *   **Conflict:** Ch-03 World State (NPC Memory) identifies the student conflict as a "brawl in the dining hall involving soup and a blizzard," with no injuries listed for Lyra or Kaelen. However, this text has Kaelen deliver "reports on the **casualties**."
    *   **Correction:** "Casualties" implies death or severe injury in a military/emergency context. Change "casualties" to "injuries" or "disciplinary actions" to match the established "soup and blizzard" scale of the brawl.

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **Thermal Burn Localization:**
    *   **Reference:** "Dorian Solas looked like a man made of porcelain... His right hand was tucked into his sleeve, but Mira could see the faint, red Angry glow of a thermal burn..."
    *   **Issue:** Ch-03 notes the burn is on the "right hand" and "right wrist." In the text, Mira says the mark appeared when "fingers brushed during the map handover." However, the text later says "when her hand covered his burn." 
    *   **Fix:** Clarify if the burn is on the palm, back of the hand, or wrist. If it’s under the cuff, she shouldn't see it "glowing" through porcelain-like skin unless his skin is translucent. 

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **The Ministry’s Deadline (Optional):** In Ch-03, it is established that Lyra "owes the Ministry final residency allocations—PAID." However, Kaelen says here that "The Ministry expects them by dawn." If they are already paid/sent, Kaelen’s line feels redundant. 
    *   **Upside:** Tightens the timeline of administrative pressure.
*   **Tone of "Angry" (Optional):** The word "Angry" is capitalized in the phrase "red Angry glow."
    *   **Upside:** If this is a specific magical term (e.g., "Angry Light"), keep it. If not, it should be lowercase for standard flow.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Elemental Metaphors:** Do not remove the "steam," "liquid gold," or "absolute zero" references. These are not clichés in this context; they are literal descriptions of the characters' biological/magical states as established in the Project Description.
*   **Mira’s Attraction:** Mira’s "leaning toward him" despite the political danger is a core "Open Loop" from Ch-03 (physical feedback loop). Do not edit her behavior to be more "rational" or "professional."

### 6. VERDICT

**REVISE**
The chapter is a near-perfect narrative execution of the state established in the RAG database, but it is incorrectly labeled as Chapter 13 when it is clearly Chapter 03. Furthermore, the escalation from "soup brawl" to "casualties" creates a continuity breach regarding the severity of the conflict.