To: Project Lead / Roundtable
From: Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor
Project: The Starfall Accord
Subject: Continuity Review – Chapter 4 (The Sparring Arena Disaster)

My mandate is the integrity of the canon. I have reviewed Chapter 4 against the established facts of the world and the characters of Mira and Dorian.

### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Somatic Tether:** The evolution of the link from Chapter 3 into a "sensory colonization" is a vital continuity point. The detail that Dorian feels "the covers shifting against her skin as if they were grazing his own" perfectly tracks with the magical graft established in the Sanctum.
*   **Dorian’s Internal Consistency:** His obsession with "perimeters," "ledgers," and "absolute zero" remains consistent with his established voice. His use of a "stabilization rod" (white ash/celestial diamond) is a strong, concrete addition to his kit that matches his methodical nature.
*   **The Mercury-Glass Rule:** Establishing a clear failure state (freeze = Pyre loss, melt = Spire loss, shatter = all loss) provides a functional framework for the magic system’s "Equilibrium" concept introduced earlier.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **The Gear Discrepancy (Chapter 4 vs. Future Setup):**
    *   *Error:* Mira is described as wearing "crimson trainers" and "sleeves rolled up." In Chapter 1/2 (world-building notes), the Pyre Academy’s formal attire was established as heavy leather and enchanted silks to withstand heat. "Trainers" (modern athletic sneakers) represent a sudden jarring "Urban Fantasy" tone shift in a "High Romantic Fantasy" setting.
    *   *Correction:* Change "crimson trainers" to "crimson leather boots" or "enchanted buskins."
*   **The Distance Anomaly:**
    *   *Error:* The text states they stopped "five feet away—their new 'working distance'." However, Chapter 3 established that exceeding three feet caused physical pain/nausea. If they are five feet apart without the text acknowledging the "stretching" pain of the tether, the rule of the three-foot proximity established in the previous chapter is broken.
    *   *Correction:* Acknowledge the "dull ache" of the extra two feet or move them to the three-foot threshold.
*   **The Combatants' Status:**
    *   *Error:* Dorian commands "Aric of the Pyre. Elara of the Spire." However, later he says "your girl" to Mira regarding Elara. Elara is a Spire student (Dorian’s school).
    *   *Correction:* Mira should be the one referring to Elara as "your girl" or "your student." Dorian should refer to Aric as "your student."

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **The "Flash-Freeze Transition" Logic:**
    *   *Passage:* "He took the raw... kinetic energy... and... he forced it to undergo a state-change. He converted the heat into a localized, absolute zero."
    *   *Clarification Needed:* In Chapter 1, it was established that mages cannot *create* energy, only *channel* it. If he is "converting" her heat into "absolute zero," the energy has to go somewhere. The text mentions "grounding it back into the ley-lines" earlier, but the climax suggests he just turns heat into cold.
    *   *Fix:* Explicitly state that the heat was *vented* through the rod into the ground to *allow* the cold to manifest, maintaining the Law of Conservation of Mana.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Kaelen’s Role (Optional):** Kaelen is present but his magical reaction time seems slow compared to Chapter 2. Adding a line where he *attempts* to shield the students but is pushed back by the Starfall energy would maintain his status as a high-level mage.
*   **The "Permafrost Vents" (Optional):** Mira mentions Dorian is layering "permafrost into the vents." If these are magma vents, "permafrost" is a bit of a misnomer (as it refers to frozen soil). "Glacial seals" might fit the High Fantasy prose better.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not soften the "Mercury-Glass" explosion.** The high-stakes failure is necessary for the Ministry’s impending intervention.
*   **Do not remove the "somatic interference" level.** While it borders on telepathy ("He felt her screams in his own throat"), this is an intentional escalation of the magical bond and is now canon.

### 6. VERDICT

**REVISE**
(The distance/tether rules and the "trainers" modernism must be aligned with the established world-state.)