**1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE**
*   **The "Paradox" Magic Mechanics:** The descriptions of the magic system as a thermodynamic exchange are excellent. Specifically, "The boiling steam didn't fall; it hung in the air, caught in a permanent magical freeze. It formed a towering, crystalline monument of white mist that was hot to the touch but solid as diamond." This perfectly visualizes the "Binary Star" synergy.
*   **Dorian’s Voice Signature:** His formal understatement scale is perfectly executed. Using "The circumstances are not auspicious" to describe a mental breakdown and "this is suboptimal" for the arena disaster aligns with his non-negotiable profile.
*   **Physicality of the Tether:** The shift from a psychic annoyance to a "biological imperative" in the final scene provides a high-stakes anchor for the romance. The line "He needed her heat to keep his heart beating; she needed his cold to keep her blood from boiling" elevates the "slow-burn" to a "survival-burn."
*   **Voice Signature Check:**
    *   **Dorian:** YES. His dialogue is precise, grammatically complete, and relies on "the evidence suggests" rather than "I think."
    *   **Mira:** YES. Her tactile nature ("touches things to understand them") and her use of "obviously" to denote sarcasm are present.

**2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY**
*   **The Artifact Naming:** In Chapter 2/3 (per RAG), the bond was referred to as the "Binary Star" sigil. In this chapter, internal narration refers to it as the "Starfall pocket" and "Starfall integration." While these are related, the chapter occasionally conflates the *celestial event* (Starfall) with the *personal bond* (The Tether).
    *   *Correction:* Ensure that when Dorian feels the pull in his chest, it is explicitly referred to as the "Tether" or "Accord-bond," saving "Starfall" for the external environmental threat.
*   **Character Injury State:** The Character-State for Ch-04 notes Elara is "COMATOSE" and Aric is "TRAUMATIZED." In the draft, Aric is seen being dragged away "scorched and steaming," but Elara's condition is only described as "breath coming in ragged, frozen puffs."
    *   *Correction:* Explicitly mention Elara failing to wake or being unresponsive to Lyra’s touch to align with the "Comatose" state needed for future chapters.

**3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY**
*   **The "Correction Clause" Introduction:** The text mentions that the Ministry Observers' presence suggests the Correction Clause is now "an execution." However, the specific stakes of this clause haven't been defined for the reader.
    *   *Passage:* "...suggested the 'Correction Clause' was no longer a threat—it was an execution."
    *   *Fix:* Add one line of internal monologue for Dorian or a whispered warning from Lyra explaining that the Correction Clause allows the Ministry to "sever" the Chancellors (metaphorically or literally) to protect the Empire’s stability.

**4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS**
*   **Mira’s Curse Scale:** (Optional) While Mira’s voice is strong, she hasn't used her "emotional thermometer" curses yet. Adding a "Stars' sake" when the lattices flicker or a "Burning memory" when she sees the Starfall breach would reinforce her established voice profile.
*   **Tactile Feedback:** (Optional) Since Mira is "tactile first," a brief beat of her touching the "Transition Stasis" monument before she collapses would emphasize her character trait of touching things to understand their magical nature.

**5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS**
*   **Do NOT "smooth out" Dorian's stiffness.** His clinical, cold dialogue ("Proximity is... mandatory") is a feature, not a bug. It highlights his struggle to maintain a professional veneer while his body is failing.
*   **Do NOT remove Mira’s sarcasm.** Her dismissal of the archives as "ancient and dry" is essential to her "verb-first, action-oriented" profile.
*   **Do NOT provide a technical explanation for the Paradox.** The fact that it "defies every law of thermodynamics" is the point; over-explaining the science would diminish the "magical" nature of their union.

**6. VERDICT**
**REVISE**
The chapter is structurally sound with a brilliant "disaster" midpoint, but the **Continuity** regarding Elara’s medical state and the **Clarity** regarding the "Correction Clause" must be addressed to ensure the stakes of Chapter 5 are properly set. Once the "Correction Clause" is defined as a life-or-death political threat, the ending cliffhanger will carry the intended weight.