### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Voice Accuracy (Mira):** The use of the "Curse Scale" is perfectly calibrated. 
    *   *“Past and rot with the evidence, Dorian”* (Line 13) correctly signals her peak emotional intensity.
    *   *“Actually. No. Yes.”* style mid-thought pivots (Line 115) are present and reinforce her impulsive nature.
    *   *“Burning memory, Dorian”* (Line 101) reflects her genuine affection/exasperation.
*   **Voice Accuracy (Dorian):** The "Formal Understatement Scale" is executed with precision. 
    *   *“The circumstances are... not auspicious”* (Line 23) effectively signals a life-threatening crisis.
    *   *“The evidence suggests”* (Line 67) remains his primary cognitive filter.
    *   The use of *“extraordinary”* (Line 84) is saved for the finale, giving it the required "maximum effect."
*   **The Bridge Imagery:** The transition from the "Obsidian Bridge" (physical tether/pain) to the "Grey Era" (metaphysical harmony) provides a satisfying structural bookend to the series.
*   **Emotional Payoff:** The moment Dorian uses Mira's signature word—*“Obviously”* (Line 125)—is a high-tier romantic beat that signals their true integration.

**VOICE SIGNATURE CHECK:**
*   **Mira:** YES. Identifiable by her "actually" pivots, specific curses, and tactile descriptions ("liquid gold," "static roar").
*   **Dorian:** YES. Identifiable by "the evidence suggests," "suboptimal," and his refusal to use "I think."

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY

*   **The Name Discrepancy:** In Line 88, Kaelen is referred to as "Regent Thorne." In the Character State RAG, Kaelen’s name is "Kaelen," and Dorian’s last name is "Solas" or "Thorne" (the text uses both). However, Line 88 implies Kaelen has taken Dorian’s surname or that the editor swapped the names.
    *   *Correction:* If Kaelen is being promoted, he should be "Regent [Kaelen's Last Name]" or simply "Regent Kaelen." Ensure Dorian is consistently "Thorne" or "Solas" throughout the project. (Context suggests Dorian Thorne/Solas, Mira Vasquez).
*   **The "Six Feet" vs. "Fifteen Feet" Logic:** In Line 75, Mira notes they are "six feet apart" and feels nothing. In Line 79, Dorian walks to "twenty feet away." The text needs to explicitly confirm that the *original* 15-foot limit (established in Ch02) has been shattered, as this was the primary physical obstacle of the book.
    *   *Correction:* Add one sentence in the narrative during Dorian’s walk to the edge: *"He crossed the fifteen-foot threshold—the old boundary of our cage—and the world didn't end."*

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY

*   **The "Binary Star" Sigil Placement:** In the Character State RAG, the sigil is on Dorian’s *hand*. In Line 19 of this chapter, it says: *"The 'Binary Star' sigil on his hand was glowing..."* but in Line 7, the text says: *"white-hot lightning that had screamed between Dorian’s hand and my chest."* It is slightly unclear if the branding is on Mira's chest, Dorian's hand, or both.
    *   *Correction:* Clarify if the bond has branded both of them. Suggest: *"The twin sigil on my collarbone pulsed in sympathy with the one scorched into his palm."*
*   **The Resolution of the "Ministry":** Line 91 mentions the Ministry observers fled. This feels slightly rushed for a 10-chapter buildup. 
    *   *Correction:* Brief mention of *why* they can't return with an army. Suggest: *"They saw the Starfall become a renewable sun; they cannot arrest a force of nature."*

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Tactile Feedback (Mira):** (Optional) Mira’s profile emphasizes she is "physically demonstrative." While she pulls his collar at the end, a beat where she touches the "Grey" mist or the "lukewarm" stone earlier (Line 59) could be heightened to show her grounding herself in the new reality.
*   **Dorian's Paralyzed Arm:** (Optional) The Character State RAG notes his "paralyzed arm fully restored." A small gesture—Dorian reaching out with that specific hand to steady Mira—would provide a silent "win" for his physical arc.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do NOT "fix" Dorian’s dialogue to be more emotional.** His use of "the evidence suggests" even while waking up from a cataclysm is a non-negotiable trait.
*   **Do NOT remove Mira’s sarcasm during the climax.** Her snapping at Dorian (Line 25) is her mechanism for coping with fear and is essential to her "volatile" character voice.
*   **Do NOT smooth out the "A Grey Era" repetition.** It is a thematic anchor.

### 6. VERDICT

**REVISE**

**Reasoning:** The chapter is emotionally resonant and hits all the mandatory "Binary Star" arc closures. However, the **Continuity** error regarding "Regent Thorne" (Line 88) creates a naming confusion that could break reader immersion (is Kaelen a Thorne? Is it a typo for Solas?). Additionally, the **Clarity** fix regarding the 15-foot threshold (the "Correction Clause") needs to be more explicit to provide the "structural non-negotiable" payoff for the central conflict. Once the naming and the threshold-crossing are clarified, this is a very strong series finale.