As Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor at Crimson Leaf Publishing, I have compared the Chapter 2 draft against the established Project Context, Character States, and Voice Signatures.

### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Voice Signature Adherence (Mira):** Mira’s use of her specific curve scale is precise. She uses "stars' sake" relative to the carriage (low irritation) and "past and rot" when the emotional weight of the merger hits her in the carriage. Her use of "obviously" as a sarcasm marker ("You already have the measurements, obviously") is perfectly aligned with her profile.
*   **Voice Signature Adherence (Dorian):** Dorian’s "Formal Understatement Scale" is functioning exactly as established. He uses "suboptimal" for the physical separation and "a situation requiring our immediate and undivided attention" regarding the Neutrality Lattice/tether—signaling to the reader that the latter is a life-threatening complication.
*   **Somatic Continuity:** The physical manifestation of the tether (Mira’s heat affecting Dorian’s biology) is consistent with the Permanent Character State established in Ch-02 ("can no longer cast major magic without affecting Dorian’s biological state").
*   **Identifiable Dialogue:** **YES.** Mira’s kinetic, verb-first patterns ("Stop it," "Thinking. It’s loud.") contrast sharply with Dorian’s structured subject-verb-object precision.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **ERROR:** The chapter text states Dorian is the "master of the **Southern** Lattices."
    *   **CORRECTION:** Per [character-state] and the Project Description, Dorian is from the **Crystalline Spire (North)**. Mira is the one from the **Volcanic Reach (South)**. The dialogue should read "Master of the Northern Lattices."
*   **ERROR:** The chapter text concludes with Dorian looking at the Great Hearth and the text says, "Dorian Solas... in **thirty-four** years..."
    *   **CORRECTION:** This establishes a specific age not present in the RAG metadata. While not a contradiction yet, it creates a "soft fact" that must be indexed. More importantly, the text calls him "Dorian Solas" throughout, but the Voice Signature Profile in the prompt labels him "**Dorian Thorne**." 
    *   **FIX:** Reconcile name. [character-state] says "Dorian Solas." Voice Profile says "Dorian Thorne." I move to stick with **Dorian Solas** as it appears in the RAG database, but the Voice Profile should be updated to prevent future drift.
*   **ERROR:** Location Inconsistency. The chapter begins with them on the "Obsidian Bridge" leaving the Accord signing, then traveling to the Pyre. However, [character-state] for Ch-02 already lists their location as "Chancellor’s Sanctum, Pyre Academy." 
    *   **CORRECTION:** This draft functions as the "travel sequence" to the Pyre, but the [character-state] implies they are already there. The narrative flow must ensure that the "Neutrality Lattice" mentioned in the carriage as being "in your Sanctum" matches the World State entry which says it is already active. If they are just arriving, the Lattice shouldn't be active yet unless pre-installed by Imperial mages.

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **PASSAGE:** "The 'Neutrality Lattice' in your Sanctum has been calibrated to a twelve-foot radius."
*   **FIX:** Cross-reference with World State [ch-02], which defines the Lattice as a "**10-foot** 'Neutrality Lattice'." 
*   **CLARITY ISSUE:** In the carriage, Dorian says the range is "approximately fifteen feet," but the World State says the "Neutrality Lattice... keeps the temperature at 68 degrees." The text needs to clarify if the 15 feet is the *pain threshold* of the tether, while the 12 (or 10) feet is the *magical suppression zone*.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **OPTIONAL:** The transition from the memory of the "boy of seven" to the present is slightly abrupt. A sensory tether (like the smell of ozone) could better bridge the gap between Mira's mind and Dorian's childhood memory.
*   **OPTIONAL:** Reference the "Scorched Mark" on Dorian's wrist [character-state ch-02]. While the scorched cuff is mentioned, seeing the physical mark on his skin would reinforce the "Permanent" status of the tether.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **DO NOT** smooth over Mira’s "imperfect" grammar or her tendency to interrupt herself ("We could — actually. No. Yes."). This is a core voice requirement.
*   **DO NOT** make Dorian's internal thoughts more "emotional" or "poetic." His thoughts must remain clinical ("suboptimal," "variable," "ledger-item"), even when he is under duress.
*   **DO NOT** remove the word "obviously" from Mira's dialogue; it is her requisite sarcasm tell.

### 6. VERDICT
**REVISE**
(Required fixes: Correction of Dorian’s origin from "Southern" to "Northern," reconciliation of the surname Solas vs. Thorne, and alignment of the Neutrality Lattice radius from 12ft to the established 10ft.)