As Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor, I have performed a rigorous audit of Chapter 1 against the established Project Context and Character States.

### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Mira’s Voice Signature Consistency:** The draft accurately utilizes her specific curse scale and speech patterns.
    *   *“The bastard,” Mira whispered.* (Reflecting her volatile heat).
    *   *“We could — actually. No. I don’t think. I know.”* (Perfect alignment with the "interrupts her own sentences" mandate).
    *   *“Obviously, it’s a brilliant plan.”* (Correct usage of “obviously” to denote sarcasm).
*   **Dorian’s Voice Signature Consistency:**
    *   *“A total failure of the firmament would be... suboptimal.”* (Perfect alignment with his formal understatement scale for a "people may die" scenario).
    *   *“The evidence suggests it is a desperate, statistically improbable gamble.”* (Correct use of "the evidence suggests" over "I think").
*   **Tactile World-Building:** Mira’s interaction with the environment (touching the micro-fractures in the Walk of Ash) adheres to her "descriptions are tactile first" rule.
*   **Established Tech:** The mention of the "Founders' Binding" in the scroll aligns with the secret Dorian discovers in the RAG database (Ch08), providing excellent foreshadowing.

**Voice Identification:**
*   **Mira:** YES. Her kinetic, interrupted, and sarcastic tone is distinct.
*   **Dorian:** YES. His clinical, precise, and over-formalized structure is unmistakable.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **ERROR:** The character state for Dorian Solas lists his name as **Dorian Solas**, but the Chapter 1 Voice Profile instructions label him as **Dorian Thorne**.
    *   **CORRECTION:** Standardize to **Dorian Solas** throughout the text and meta-data to avoid confusion with Mira’s proctor, Kaelen Thorne.
*   **ERROR:** The RAG database [character-state] for Ch-08 notes that "Dorian does not know" the Emperor is feeding the Starfall into the ley-lines to sustain his life. However, in Chapter 1, Mira says: *"The Aetheric rot is in the Palace, Kaelen. I smelled it on the wax."*
    *   **CORRECTION:** Ensure Mira keeps this specific "smell" or realization to herself. She can mention the Emperor is desperate or corrupt, but she must not explicitly link it to the "rot" in a way that Dorian or the readers treat as confirmed fact yet, to preserve the "Known secret" status established in the RAG.

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **PASSAGE:** *"I have ninety minutes to reach the Obsidian Bridge for the formal tethering."*
*   **ISSUE:** The transition from the Academy to the Bridge is nearly instantaneous via "thermal-glide." While Mira is a fire mage, the distance between the Volcanic Reach and the Northern Wastes (the Great Crevasse) is described as significant.
*   **FIX:** Add a single sentence clarifying that the "thermal-glide" utilizes the high-speed Waygate or specific Academy ley-lines mentioned by Kaelen earlier, to justify the rapid traversal of such a vast geographical divide within the 90-minute window.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **RELATIONSHIP STATE:** (Optional) In the RAG [character-state] for Ch-08, it is noted Mira/Dorian have a "High Court" exile mystery. While this is Ch-01, a brief mention of the last time they were in the same room (perhaps at Court) would strengthen the "Rivalry" foundation.
*   **PRECISE MEASUREMENT:** (Optional) Dorian’s formal scale uses "the circumstances are not auspicious" for serious problems. Inserting this phrase when discussing the Starfall breach would further solidify the voice profile.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **DO NOT** "smooth out" Mira’s dialogue. Her run-on sentences and mid-thought breaks are intentional features of her emotional state.
*   **DO NOT** make Dorian sound warmer or more empathetic during the tethering. His "funerary tone" and clinical detachment are required for his Ch-01 arc state (Institutional Logic).
*   **DO NOT** remove the specific scents (ozone, burnt sugar, cedarwood). These are established sensory anchors for the magic types in this world.

### 6. VERDICT
**REVISE**
(Required due to the Solas/Thorne naming inconsistency and the need to protect the "Emperor's Secret" continuity for later chapters.)