### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Tactile Technicality:** The description of electricity as a "physical fluid" that "weeps" and "leaks" perfectly aligns with the established world-state of 20th-century hardware meeting 21st-century AI.
*   **Elena’s Voice:** Her dialogue is appropriately dry and focused on physical logistics. *“You think in packets, Marcus... We need a 'slop' variable.”* This remains consistent with her Ch-10 Character State as the "digital architect."
*   **Sarah’s Voice:** The use of "Status code?" and "Error 403" is a direct hit on her established Voice Signature (using tech support jargon to describe emotions).
*   **Arthur’s Voice:** His habit of using cardinal directions (*“North-by-Northeast,” “East-by-Southeast”*) and his refusal to use technical terms are perfectly preserved.
*   **Marcus’s Voice:** His "rhythmic four-beat tap" is present and consistent with the physical habit established in his Voice Signature.

**Voice Differentiation Check:**
*   **Elena:** YES. (Pragmatic, focuses on the "physicality" of tech).
*   **Marcus:** YES. (Analytical, focuses on "predictive models" and "latency").
*   **Arthur:** YES. (Omits 'g's, uses cardinal directions, focuses on the land).
*   **Sarah:** YES. (Uses Error codes as emotional shorthand).

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### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **CRITICAL FAULT: Arthur Silas Vance Status.**
    *   **The Error:** In this chapter, Arthur is physically present, walking, talking, and sitting in a chair. However, **Context [character-state]** and **[voice-sig-arthur]** explicitly state: **"Arthur Silas Vance — DECEASED (Ch-36)"** and **"Died peacefully in his sleep... Legacy: His physical 'dead-zone' property remains the only safe harbor."** Furthermore, the Character State for Ch-10 (the current chapter) notes his legacy but does not list him as an "Active" character in the location.
    *   **The Correction:** Arthur must be removed as a living participant. His dialogue should be repurposed as memories Marcus/Elena recall, or his "presence" should be felt through the "logic of the space" as dictated by the Voice Sig Notes.
*   **MINOR FAULT: Sarah Jenkins Status.**
    *   **The Error:** Sarah is physically present in the cabin, clicking a pen and touching Marcus. However, **Context [character-state]** and **[voice-sig-sarah]** explicitly state: **"Sarah Jenkins — DECEASED (Ch-01)"** and **"Role: Supporting / Emotional Catalyst (Deceased-equivalent/Displaced)."** Her "voice" is established as a feedback loop for the AI, not a living person in the room. 
    *   **The Correction:** Sarah should be removed as a physical entity. Her "clicking pen" can be a phantom sound Marcus hears (as noted in Voice Sig), or her "voice" can emerge from the Sanctuary Node/AI interface, but she cannot physically touch his hand.
*   **CHARACTER INCONSISTENCY: David and Leo.**
    *   **The Error:** Two new characters, "David" and "Leo," appear without introduction or established context in the RAG databases. 
    *   **The Correction:** If these are intended characters, their presence contradicts the isolation of Marcus and Elena established in the Ch-10 Character State. They must be removed or properly introduced in a way that doesn't violate the "Fugitive" status of the leads.

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### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **The "Tractor Repair" Reference:** 
    *   **Passage:** *"Sarah’s already inside... Since the tractor repair. It’s like she’s waitin’ for the other shoe to drop."*
    *   **Problem:** If Sarah is deceased (Ch-01), she cannot have been present for a recent tractor repair.
    *   **Fix:** Remove the reference or reframe it as a memory of a repair done before Sarah's death/displacement.

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### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Thermal Leak Payoff:** (Optional) The Ch-10 Character State mentions an unresolved loop regarding a "thermal signature leak." While this chapter mentions drones looking for thermal blooms, it could be heightened by specifically mentioning the "Server Shed" vs. the "Cabin" to align with the RAG location data.

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### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do NOT "fix" Arthur’s 'g' dropping:** *“Gonna be a heavy one,” “hopin’,” “runnin’.”* These are established imperfection signatures in his Voice Profile. (Note: These should only be used if he is a 'ghost' or memory, given his deceased status).
*   **Do NOT smooth over Marcus’s third-person diagnostics:** *“Diagnostic: Power levels at eighty-four percent.”* This is his established stress response.
*   **Do NOT remove the "Four-beat tap":** It is essential to Marcus's characterization as a grounding mechanism.

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### 6. VERDICT
**REVISE**
The chapter contains high-quality prose but suffers from a **catastrophic continuity failure**. It treats Arthur Silas Vance and Sarah Jenkins as living, breathing characters present in the cabin, despite the project context explicitly listing them as **DECEASED** as of Chapter 36 and Chapter 01 respectively. This fundamentally breaks the established timeline and stakes of the "Sanctuary."