**TO:** Genesis Editorial Roundtable
**FROM:** Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor, Crimson Leaf Publishing
**SUBJECT:** Continuity Review – Chapter 25: "The Hard Freeze"

This chapter marks a critical transition in the "Cypress Bend" narrative, moving from digital defense to physical survival. My review focuses strictly on the adherence to established character states, environmental rules, and the timeline following the Chapter 25 setup.

### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Marcus’s Voice Signature:** The "Diagnostic/True-False" verbal tic remains perfectly calibrated. Lines like *"System check: These are obsolete"* and *"Diagnostic: Lactic acid redlining"* (Para 19, 23) maintain his established persona as a man who translates physical pain into system logs.
*   **Handheld Radio Rationale:** The use of the radio to communicate with Sarah (Para 30) is consistent with the "Sovereign Mesh" established in the World State, which masks technical noise but allows internal communication.
*   **The Smudge Pot Legacy:** Citing the pots as *"Arthur Silas Vance’s legacy"* (Para 14) and David’s line about Arthur’s advice (Para 15) correctly references the deceased mentor’s impact established in the [character-state] and [voice-sig-arthur] files.
*   **Physical Grounding:** The description of Marcus’s hands as *"cracked, soot-stained"* (Para 54) aligns with the "Permanent Arc" transition from digital architect to physical steward.

**Voice Signature Verification:**
*   **Marcus:** YES. (Uses booleans: "True-false logic check").
*   **Sarah:** YES. (Uses status codes: "Error 503").
*   **David:** YES. (Uses land-based metaphors and "Hmph").
*   **Elena:** YES. (Tactical and cold: "Torque isn't just a mechanical variable").

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **The Sarah Paradox:** 
    *   **The Error:** Paragraph 32 describes Sarah in the "kitchen hub" with "Helen and Leo." However, the [character-state] for Ch-25 (and Ch-01) establishes that Sarah is in **Cypress Bend, Florida**. The [voice-sig-sarah] file and Marcus's "Active Obligations" (Ch-01) describe her as the "Victim/Displaced" from **Dallas**. Paragraph 42 mentions her pen clicking in a "Dallas office five years ago." 
    *   **The Contradiction:** If Sarah is physically in the kitchen hub in Florida (as stated in Paras 32 and 46), the narrative needs to explicitly bridge how she moved from being a "ghost in the machine/displaced person in Dallas" to being at the Sanctuary. If she is still in Dallas, Marcus cannot "tell Leo to stay away from the windows" (Para 35).
    *   **Correction:** Clarify if Sarah has successfully relocated to the Sanctuary prior to this chapter. If she is still in Dallas, the dialogue in Paras 32-38 must be framed as a remote transmission. If she is in Florida, update the "Known Secrets" in the character state to reflect her physical arrival.

*   **The Rib Injury:** 
    *   **The Error:** Paragraph 14 describes David "wrestling with the heavy, rusted hulks" and Para 45 has him "drenched in sweat... shoulder-to-shoulder with Marcus." 
    *   **The Correction:** The [character-state] Ch-25 notes David is "fully healed from ribs (Ch-17)." Ensure this chapter does not accidentally mention him clutching his side or favoring his breath, as he is now established as "fully healed." (Current draft is clean on this, but must remain so).

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **The "Leo" Presence:**
    *   **The Issue:** In Paragraph 33, Sarah mentions "Helen and Leo." Paragraph 46 has Leo asking, "Is the Mesh broken, Mama?"
    *   **The Fix:** The RAG context for Marcus's "Active obligations" (Ch-12) states he "owes Leo a future." It is never explicitly stated in this chapter who Leo is (Sarah’s son). A brief tag in Para 33 or 46 (e.g., "her son, Leo") is required for readers who haven't memorized the Ch-12 obligation logs.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **The "Ocala" Signal Connection:** The [character-state] mentions an "UNRESOLVED" open loop: "The Ocala 'Ghost' Signal (Ch-22)." Paragraph 10 mentions "trade-equity with Miller and the Ocala refugees." 
    *   **Suggestion:** Adding a single line of internal monologue for Marcus wondering if the "Ghost Signal" is a precursor to a refugee influx or an Avery-Quinn scout would tighten the tie-in to the unresolved Ch-22 loop.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do Not Clean Marcus’s Dialogue:** His narration of physical sensations (Paras 2, 23, 40) is an "Imperfection Signature" from his Voice Sheet. Do not make his speech more "natural."
*   **Do Not Remove "Hmph":** This is David’s specific stress expression (Para 44).
*   **Do Not Soften Julian’s Absence:** Julian appearing only as a "ghost" or a "predatory eye" (Para 4, 25) is consistent with the [voice-sig-julian] "Blink" and "Threshold Check" notes.

### 6. VERDICT

**REVISE**
(The Sarah/Dallas vs. Sarah/Florida location conflict is a Major Flag that impacts the spatial logic of the scene and the "Active Obligations" timeline).