**STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE**
*   **Mira’s "Actually. No." Habit:** This verbal tic is becoming a structural anchor for her character’s defiance. It appears twice: *"Actually. No. That’s not a threshold..."* and again in her stand against Voss: *"Actually. No. We don't close."*
*   **Dorian’s "The evidence suggests" Habit:** This remains perfectly consistent with his established voice as a clinical, diagnostic mage. Example: *"The evidence suggests... that Councillor Voss has moved the 4th Imperial Purifier Division into the seam."*
*   **The Shared Somatic System:** The evolution of their bond from a "leash" to a "shared nervous system" is a strong continuity progression from Chapter 3's "sensory bleed."
*   **Physicality of Magic:** The description of Mira welding the floor—*"melting the floor until the obsidian spikes were swallowed by liquid rock"*—maintains the "Adult Romantic Fantasy" tone where magic has weight and consequence.
*   **VOICE SIGNATURES:**
    *   **Mira:** YES. Her dialogue is punchy, high-heat, and uses grounded metaphors ("lobotomize," "kiln," "rot with his decrees").
    *   **Dorian:** YES. His dialogue remains multi-syllabic, analytical, and centered on "evidence" and "probability."
    *   **Elara:** YES. She retains her "medic" persona—calm but firm.

**MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY**
*   **Physicality/Injury Inconsistency:** In Chapter 22, Dorian’s right hand is described as: *"His right hand—the one that had once been a ruin of metabolic fatigue—was pressed flat against the glass."* However, **Chapter 04 (Character State)** specifically established that Dorian's right hand knuckles were *"bruised/flushed from thermal contact"* and he *"chose to keep the thermal burn as a reminder."* The text in Ch-22 implies the fatigue is gone or healed but misses the "permanent" choice of the thermal burn scar which was a key emotional beat.
    *   *Correction:* Acknowledge the thermal burn scar on his hand as he presses it to the glass; it is the physical mark of his bond with Mira.
*   **Location/Geography Confusions:** The chapter mentions the "South Gate" and "High Spire Reach," but then says Voss is at the "Junction Level" where "Pyre’s magma-conduits interface with the Spire’s archival vaults." **Chapter 04 (World State)** established the "Obidian Bridge" was the primary connection and that it was *destroyed*, leaving only the "internal Solas Tunnels."
    *   *Correction:* Explicitly state that Voss is attempting to seal the *Solas Tunnels* (the only remaining physical link) rather than a vague "seam" or "South Gate" which implies external access that shouldn't be the primary choke point since the Bridge fell.
*   **Title Discrepancy:** Mira is addressed as "Warden Mira." **Chapter 04** and the Project Description establish her as "Chancellor." While "Warden" might be a Ministry term, it hasn't been established as her formal title in previous chapters.
    *   *Correction:* Ensure Voss uses "Chancellor" or "High Warden" if that is the intended Ministry insult, but "Chancellor" is the established rank.

**MUST-FIX — CLARITY**
*   **The Steam Phoenix's Origin:** The chapter introduces the "Steam Phoenix" as if it’s an established pet or guardian: *"The Steam Phoenix descended the ventilation shaft... It didn't look like a 'localized anomaly' tonight."* 
    *   *Reference:* *"The Steam Phoenix descended... It looked like a god."*
    *   *Fix:* This creature has not been formally named or established in the provided RAG context for Chapters 1-4. If this is its first appearance, Mira or Dorian needs a beat of shock or recognition that this is the *result* of their combined mana from the Bridge incident, rather than treating it as a known entity they were expecting.

**OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS**
*   **Kaelen’s Memory (Optional):** Given Mira is defending the school from "Reclamation," a brief mental flicker regarding Kaelen (who died defending the Bridge in Ch-04) would add emotional weight to her grit.
*   **Imperial Purifier Colors (Optional):** They are described in "solar-gold plate." To sharpen the contrast with the "Grey" of the Union, emphasizing the *unnatural* brightness of their light vs. the *natural* aurora would heighten the theme.

**FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS**
*   **Do not "smooth out" Dorian's dialogue.** His tendency to speak in mathematical probabilities (*"The probability... is mathematically negligible"*) is his core signature.
*   **Do not remove Mira's "Actually. No." repetitions.** They are intentional rhetorical devices marking her "turning point" in the scene.
*   **Do not reduce the "somatic hum" descriptions.** The "Adult Romance" genre tier requires this physical/sensory tether to be present even during action sequences.

**VERDICT: REVISE**
The chapter has minor but critical continuity errors regarding Dorian's hand (the burn scar) and the geography of the school post-Bridge collapse. The sudden appearance of a "Steam Phoenix" without a "discovery" beat creates a clarity gap for the reader.