**STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE**

*   **Mira’s Voice Signature:** The characteristic "Actually. No." interruption is perfectly executed in: *"We need to move. Actually. No. You need to move"* and again in *"This isn't just an anti-magic bolt. Actually. No. The hardware is Imperial..."*
*   **Dorian’s Emotional Fracture:** The transition from his formal "The evidence suggests..." to the broken, grammatically incomplete admission: *"I didn't save the Chancellor. I saved... the only thing that makes me feel like I’m alive"* aligns precisely with his voice profile for a high-stakes emotional breakthrough.
*   **Tactile Magic:** Mira’s description of magic as "tactile language" and finding Ministry magic to feel like "damp parchment" maintains the established sensory rules of her POV.
*   **Kaelen’s Reveal:** The physical description of Kaelen ("grey haze of mana-vein scarring") remains consistent with the "Critical" status established in the Ch-07 Character State.

**Voice Signature Verification:**
*   **Mira:** **YES.** Uses "Actually. No.", "Stars' sake", and "Past and rot" (at the realization of the suicide pact) correctly per the curse scale.
*   **Dorian:** **YES.** Uses "The evidence suggests," "suboptimal," and "not auspicious" correctly, with the intended breakdown in sentence structure during the final confession.

**2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY**

*   **FLAG:** The chapter states Dorian has a "right hand fully restored" (Context/Character State), yet here it says "his fingers digging into the singed silk... with a strength that belied the visible tremors racking his frame."
    *   **Correction:** While the hand is healed, the tremors are psychological/adrenaline-based. Ensure the text clarifies these are "adrenaline tremors" (as noted in the state) rather than lingering injury to avoid the appearance of the healing failing.
*   **FLAG:** This chapter introduces the "Weave of Ages" and "Somatic Synchronization" as new discoveries in the Archives.
    *   **Context Check:** Chapter 06 established the "Soul-tether nature" as an UNRESOLVED open loop.
    *   **Correction:** Ensure the text acknowledges that they *suspected* a tether or bond previously (from the Ch-06 Core stabilization), but the "Weave" provides the *documented proof* and the "suicide pact" deadline.
*   **FLAG:** The text mentions: *"The archives are... curated," he said... "The Ministry didn't just want a merger."*
    *   **Conflict:** Chapter 07 established Dorian as "High Chancellor of the Spire." It is a stretch for the High Chancellor to be unaware of his own "original" founding documents and for them to be "newly" discovered in his own Archive. 
    *   **Correction:** Clarify that these documents were held in a "Restricted Alcove" (as mentioned) that required *dual-mana* (Mira + Dorian) to unlock, explaining why Dorian couldn't access the full truth until the Accord brought Mira to the Spire.

**3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY**

*   **Passage:** *"The results would have been... lethal," Dorian said... "Our resonance."*
*   **Issue:** The "resonance" is mentioned as if the reader already knows they are vibrating at the same frequency. While the "soul-tether" was hinted at in Ch-06, the mechanics of how a bolt "targets a resonance" need one sentence of grounding.
*   **Fix:** Add a brief mention of the "harmonic hum" they felt during the Core stabilization in Chapter 06 to explain why they recognize the bolt's frequency.

**4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS**

*   **Optional:** Mention the "Aric Pyre Chair" (established in World State) as they exit the Great Hall to reinforce the "unified defiance" of the students and the cost of the conflict.
*   **Optional:** In the Archive, have Mira's "tactile" magic sense the cold of the "Weave" book before Dorian opens it, bridging her sensory POV with his analytical one.

**5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS**

*   **Do NOT "fix" Dorian’s technical jargon:** Phrases like "logistical requirements of a dignified exit" or "Formal Understatement Scale" are core to his character defense mechanism.
*   **Do NOT smooth over Mira’s interruptions:** The "Actually. No." must remain staccato and intrusive; it is not a grammatical error.
*   **Do NOT remove "Obviously":** When Mira says *"Obviously, the emergency lamps are... suboptimal,"* it is a clear use of her sarcasm-tell (meaning they are catastrophically bad) and must be preserved.

**6. VERDICT**

**REVISE.** 
While the character voices are perfect, the "discovery" of the founding treaty in Dorian's own archives needs the "Dual-Mana Lock" justification to maintain his competence as High Chancellor. Without that, it's a continuity stretch that he wouldn't know his own basement's secrets.