As Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor at Crimson Leaf Publishing, I have reviewed the submission for Chapter 14. This draft contains catastrophic continuity errors that suggest a fundamental failure in the pipeline's temporal tracking.

### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Scorched Cuff:** The detail of Dorian keeping the "scorched cuff on right wrist" is a vital physical continuity marker from Chapter 03 that reinforces his character arc (30% progress reached in Chapter 03).
*   **Dorian’s Voice Signature:** His dialogue remains clipped and precise ("We aren’t very stable right now, Chancellor"), reflecting his "absolute zero" discipline.
*   **Mira’s Internal State:** The "wild joy" she feels regarding the sensory bleed is a crucial established secret from Chapter 03.
*   **Voice Identification:** 
    *   **Mira:** YES. Her dialogue is proactive and grounded in heat/chaos metaphors.
    *   **Dorian:** YES. His dialogue is reactive, formal, and centered on stability.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **CHAPTER MISMATCH (CRITICAL):** The current text is labeled "Chapter 14," but every physical and emotional beat described—the singed wool, the fresh ink on the floor plan, the bruising on Dorian's hand, and the presence of Kaelen/Lyra in the hall—belongs to the immediate aftermath of **Chapter 03**.
    *   **The Error:** Chapter 03 established that the residency allocations were due, the floor plan was paid, and the mana surge had just occurred. If this is Chapter 14, the "Starfall Accord" plot should be near its resolution. Instead, the text states "One week remains until the full integration," which is the exact "World State" established at the end of **Chapter 03**.
    *   **The Correction:** Relabel this as Chapter 04 or a revision of Chapter 03. If it is truly Chapter 14, the entire narrative must be rewritten to reflect 10+ chapters of progression.
*   **THE FLOOR PLAN STATUS:**
    *   **The Error:** The text says Mira "finalized" the floor plan and it was "fresh ink." 
    *   **Consistency Check:** The Character State for Ch-03 already lists "Owes Dorian a functioning floor plan — PAID." 
    *   **The Correction:** Mira should not be finalized it *now* if it was already marked as paid/delivered in the previous chapter's state. Change this to her "reviewing the finalized plan" or "discussing the plan she delivered."
*   **ALLOCATION STATUS:**
    *   **The Error:** Mira snaps that the residency allocations "have been sent," but Lyra claims the Ministry wants them by dawn.
    *   **Consistency Check:** Chapter 03 World State says: "Owes the Ministry final residency allocations — PAID."
    *   **The Correction:** If they are paid, Lyra should not be demanding them. Lyra should instead be checking on the *receipt* or discussing the next phase of the integration.

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **LOCATION CONTRADICTION:**
    *   **The Passage:** "The smell of ozone... lingered in the air of the Chancellor’s Sanctum, a sharp contrast to the biting frost that usually defined Dorian’s presence."
    *   **The Issue:** Chapter 03 established the Sanctum is "Pyre Academy" (Mira's territory). "Biting frost" should not be the *defining* atmosphere of Mira’s own Sanctum unless Dorian has been there for weeks. 
    *   **The Fix:** Clarify that his presence has *invaded* the Sanctum, rather than implying the Sanctum is usually defined by his frost.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Kaelen’s Observation:** (Optional) In Chapter 03, Kaelen’s arc is at 05% because he "noticed the intimate tension." To progress his arc, he should do more than just stand in the hall; perhaps he should mention the "soup and blizzard" brawl mentioned in the NPC Memory for Chapter 03.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Dorian’s Hand:** Do not "heal" the thermal burn or the flushed knuckles. The Character State explicitly notes he chose to keep these as a reminder.
*   **The "Binary Star" Metaphor:** Do not remove the "binary star" phrasing. This was established in Chapter 02 as the specific term for their stability/instability and is a core world-rule.

### 6. VERDICT
**REVISE**
This chapter is a temporal ghost. It is repeating the plot beats, deadlines, and physical states of Chapter 03 while being labeled Chapter 14. This is a progressive continuity collapse. The chapter must be re-anchored in the correct timeline or relabeled.