**TO:** Project Lead
**FROM:** Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor, Crimson Leaf Publishing
**SUBJECT:** Continuity & Accuracy Review: *Cypress Bend* — ch-02

I have reviewed the second chapter of *Cypress Bend*. While the atmosphere is palpable, there are several severe continuity breaches regarding character identities and vehicle specifications that must be rectified before this draft can proceed. My mandate is the preservation of the established canon, and currently, this chapter contradicts the foundation laid in the project files and Ch-01.

### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The "Sarah" Logic:** The dialogue in which Sarah describes herself as a "permissions error" and "404" is perfectly aligned with her [voice-sig-sarah] profile, using technical jargon to describe emotional states.
*   **Tactile Grounding:** The focus on the "plastic dinosaur" with the snapped-off tail (Leo) and the "scent of unwashed laundry" maintains the grounded realism established in the [character-state] for Ch-02.
*   **Character Voice Differentiation:** 
    *   **Sarah:** YES. Her "Texas lilt" returning in moments of stress and her use of "empathy protocols" as a weaponized reference to Marcus are consistent with her [voice-sig-sarah].
    *   **Marcus (Mentioned):** YES. The reference to his "God-tier" access and his promise that the code was a "buffer" to triage anger matches the [voice-sig-marcus] example lines.
    *   **David:** NO. (See Must-Fix: Continuity).

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **The Vehicle Discrepancy:** The chapter opens describing the car as an "aging Forester." This is a direct contradiction of the [character-state] for ch-02 and the project context, which explicitly defines the vehicle as an **"aging Honda."**
    *   *Correction:* Change all references from "Forester" to "Honda."
*   **The Sarah/Marcus Connection:** Sarah refers to Marcus as "that lead dev in Chicago." However, the [character-state] and [voice-sig-sarah] establish Sarah as being from the **Dallas Logistics Hub**. While Marcus is from Chicago, the chapter implies they are in the car together in Miami, but the [character-state] identifies the driver as **David**, not Marcus. 
    *   *Correction:* Ensure Sarah’s dialogue confirms she is talking *about* Marcus (the ghost in the machine), not *to* him, as David is the physical driver.
*   **David’s Narrative Identity:** The [character-state] identifies David as the protector/driver. However, the [voice-sig-marcus] profile mentions Marcus as the "Protag" fleeing to the cabin. If David is a separate character, his backstory ("a man who knew how to fix a leak") needs to be reconciled with why he is the one Sarah is fleeing with, rather than Marcus. If David and Marcus were intended to be the same person, the name must be unified.
    *   *Correction:* Confirm if David is a secondary character or a naming error for Marcus. Given the [character-state] specifically lists "David," "Sarah," and "Leo" as the passengers in the Honda, I am flagging the name "Marcus" in the [voice-sig-marcus] as a potential placeholder that has been replaced by "David," or vice versa. **Consistency is mandatory.**
*   **Arthur’s Sanctuary:** Sarah mentions "the 'sanctuary' Marcus had mentioned in those frantic, final emails." However, [voice-sig-arthur] and the [character-state] establish that Arthur’s death created a "geographical vacuum" that David and Sarah are "bleeding toward." 
    *   *Correction:* Clarify if Sarah found the cabin via Marcus’s emails or if Arthur (the deceased benefactor) had a direct link to her.

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **The "Transition" vs. "Alpha-7":** The billboard mentions "RESOURCE OPTIMIZATION." We need explicit clarity on whether the Alpha-7 rollout is a secret corporate purge or a known public event causing the "Great Flight."
    *   *Passage:* "They’re using the Alpha-7 protocols to map the evacuation."
    *   *Fix:* Briefly clarify if the public knows Alpha-7 is the cause of their displacement or if they believe it’s a general economic collapse.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **The Dinosaur:** Link the dinosaur more closely to the [character-state] description which notes Leo is "clutching a plastic dinosaur." The chapter adds the detail that the tail is snapped off; this is a strong addition, keep it. (Optional/Keep).
*   **Navigation:** David’s rejection of the GPS ("It’s based on where the system *wants* us to go") is a strong thematic echo of the [voice-sig-arthur] rejection of the "cloud." Strengthen this by having David mention he’s using a "topographic map" he found in the glovebox (referencing Arthur’s influence). (Optional).

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Sarah’s "Error Codes":** Do not "normalize" her speech. Phrases like "Error 404, David. I'm empty" are core to her [voice-sig-sarah] profile and must remain.
*   **David’s Sweat/Panic:** The description of his "white-knuckled grip" and being "drenched in sweat" is a canon requirement from the [character-state] ch-02. Do not "cool him down" for the sake of an action-hero aesthetic.
*   **The Maintenance Ramp:** The move to "go analog" is a core world-rule transition (Urban Grid to Deep South). Do not make this transition smooth; it must feel "glitchy" and violent.

### 6. VERDICT: REVISE
The vehicle contradiction (Forester vs. Honda) and the internal confusion between the roles of "David" and "Marcus" (as the protagonist/driver) are **Major Flags**. This chapter cannot be filed until the lead protagonist's name and the vehicle's make are reconciled across all project databases.