**CONTINUITY EDITORIAL REVIEW: Chapter 1**
**Editor:** Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor
**Project:** The Starfall Accord

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### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Emperor’s Magical Signature:** The description of the scent—"ozone and burnt sugar" (Para 1) and "cloying... aftertaste of something she could only describe as past and rot" (Para 2)—perfectly matches the sensory details established in the [character-state] RAG database.
*   **Physical State Consistency:** Mira’s localized heat causing "floral patterns on the stone floor" and the "bleeding right palm" (from the ritual) align with the established physical consequences of her magic and the chapter's climax.
*   **Progenitor Tech Hint:** Dorian’s dialogue regarding the "technology of survival" being "often ancient" (Para 45) preserves the secret fact that the tether is Progenitor technology, as noted in Dorian's [character-state] "Known secrets."

**VOICE SIGNATURE CHECK:**
*   **Mira:** YES. She uses her curse scale correctly: "Stars' sake" (Para 15) for irritation and "past and rot" (Para 44) when describing the high-level corruption. She uses "obviously" sarcastically (Para 10) and exhibits the "actually. No." self-interruption (Para 20).
*   **Dorian:** YES. He uses the formal understatement scale: "this is suboptimal" (Para 37) and "extraordinary" (Para 37). He avoids "I think" in favor of "the evidence suggests" (Para 37) and "it is probable that" (Para 39).

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### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **Timeline/Location Contradiction:**
    *   **The Error:** Paragraphs 1-32 depict Mira in her private sanctum at Pyre Academy, receiving the decree and then going to the vault. However, the [character-state] for Ch-01 and [world-state] establish that the chapter *begins* or takes place at "The Obsidian Bridge (Center Span)." 
    *   **The Correction:** The narrative flow from the sanctum to the bridge is a strong linear progression, but the RAG metadata labels the *entire* chapter state as being at the Bridge. The metadata must be updated to reflect that Ch-01 covers the *journey* to the bridge, or the opening of the chapter must be adjusted to ensure Mira is already in transit.
*   **Proctor Name/Role Inconsistency:**
    *   **The Error:** In Paragraph 13, the character is introduced as "Kaelen, her senior proctor." However, in Paragraph 20, Mira refers to him as "Kaelen Thorne" (implied by the question "Does Dorian Thorne—?").
    *   **The Correction:** The [character-state] and later text (Para 16) establish the rival as **Dorian Solas**. Kaelen is Mira's subordinate. The text in Para 20 must be corrected to: *"And the Spire? Does Dorian Solas—?"* to avoid confusing the Proctor with the Rival Chancellor.
*   **Distance/Geography Discrepancy:**
    *   **The Error:** Paragraph 9 states the Crystalline Spire is "three hundred miles to the north." Paragraph 16 states Dorian will be at the bridge in "two hours." 
    *   **The Correction:** Unless high-speed teleportation is established as a standard world rule for administrators, traveling 300 miles in 2 hours is a physical impossibility. Either increase the time allotted or decrease the distance to the "neutral stone" of the bridge.

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### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **The Catalyst Ambiguity:** 
    *   **The Passage:** "I'm going to the vault. I need the sapphire catalyst" (Para 20). 
    *   **The Issue:** It is unclear if the sapphire catalyst is a required component of the Imperial ritual or a weapon/tool Mira is bringing for insurance. 
    *   **The Fix:** Add a brief line of internal monologue or dialogue with Kaelen clarifying that the Chancellor's Seal (required for the Accord) must be powered by the Academy's core catalyst.

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### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Dorian’s Entrance (Optional):** Paragraph 33 notes Mira arrived first. The [character-state] RAG notes Dorian is experiencing "hands trembling." Adding a visual cue of his effort to hide this trembling would strengthen the "stoic but internally fractured" note in his character profile.

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### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Mira’s Lack of Apology:** Do not "soften" Mira’s interaction with Kaelen in Paragraph 23. Her refusal to apologize is a hard-coded voice trait.
*   **Dorian’s Technical Speech:** Do not replace "it is probable" with "I think" or "maybe." His clinical detachment is a biological result of his ice magic.
*   **The "Sensory Bleed":** This is a core world rule established in the [world-state]. The chaotic description of feeling his heartbeat/calmness is an intentional mechanical introduction, not purple prose.

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### 6. VERDICT

**REVISE** 
(Due to the name confusion between Kaelen/Dorian/Thorne and the 300-mile/2-hour transit contradiction.)