**TO:** Genesis Publishing Lead
**FROM:** Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor
**PROJECT:** The Starfall Accord (Chapter 3)
**DATE:** Cycle 3

### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Somatic Mechanic:** The physical manifestation of Dorian’s fear causing Mira to freeze ("Because Dorian Solas was terrified... I was freezing") perfectly maintains the tether rules established in Ch-02.
*   **Voice Signature (Mira):** Use of the high-tier curse "past and rot" regarding the soup incident correctly signals her level of fury according to the Voice Profile. Her verb-first, blunt delivery ("Enter, Dorian. Obviously.") is spot-on.
*   **Voice Signature (Dorian):** His use of "suboptimal" to describe a sleepless night and "the evidence suggests" regarding the breakfast hour aligns perfectly with his Formal Understatement Scale.
*   **The "Brand" Continuity:** The scorched cuff and the thumb-shaped mark on Dorian’s wrist are accurately carried over from the physical states recorded in Ch-02/Ch-03 RAG state.

**Voice Signature Verification:**
*   **Mira:** YES. Her internal monologue and dialogue use the "tactile first" rule and her specific sarcasms ("obviously") are correctly inverted.
*   **Dorian:** YES. His adherence to "the evidence suggests" and his increasing formality under stress is consistent.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **Contradiction - The Floor Plans:**
    *   *Error:* In the "Active Obligations" for Ch-03 (RAG), it states Mira "Owes Dorian a functioning floor plan (Ch03) — PAID." However, in this chapter text, she is just now handing them over ("I snatched up a roll of vellum... 'The floor plans'"), and then they are immediately incinerated.
    *   *Correction:* If the debt was "PAID," the chapter must reflect that he already has them, or the RAG state must be updated to "PENDING" until they are successfully delivered and *preserved*.
*   **Contradiction - Physical State (Dorian):**
    *   *Error:* The Ch-03 Character State notes Dorian has a "Healing thermal burn on right hand." In the text, he grabs Mira’s wrists with both hands, yet there is no mention of his existing injury flaring up or hindering him until the *end* of the scene.
    *   *Correction:* Mention the sharp sting or reopening of the Ch-02 burn when he first grips her wrists to maintain physical stakes.
*   **Contradiction - The Stasis Zone:**
    *   *Error:* The World State establishes the Neutrality Lattice as a "12-foot artificial climate zone." The text says, "As I crossed the twelve-foot radius... his presence hit me." But later it says, "I turned to walk away, but... before I could put six feet between us..." and then describes them being within the lattice.
    *   *Correction:* Ensure the spatial math stays consistent; if she is six feet away, she is still deep within the active 12-foot neutral zone.

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **The Transition of the Map:** 
    *   *Passage:* "The vellum on Dorian’s desk ignited... The map was a bonfire now."
    *   *Issue:* These are the floor plans that took the entire previous chapter/off-screen time to create. Their destruction is a major plot point for the merger's progress, yet the characters don't react to the *loss of the data*, only the fire.
    *   *Fix:* Add a brief beat of Mira’s realization that she just destroyed hours of work, or Dorian noting the "suboptimal loss of architectural data."

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **The "Obsidian" Mark:** The ending mentions a dark line circling his wrist like obsidian. Since Ch-02 established his skin carries the "brand" of her touch, explicitly labeling this as a *permanent* magical scarring (Keloid/Mana-burn) would align with the "Permanent: YES" note in the character state.
*   **Kaelen’s Reaction:** Kaelen is noted in RAG as sensing the "scent of ozone." In the text, he focuses on their breathing. Adding a line about the ozone/sulfur smell would tighten the sensory link to his RAG profile.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do NOT "smooth out" Mira’s dialogue:** Her sentence "Enter, Dorian. Obviously" is grammatically short but fits her "verb-first/short declarative" profile.
*   **Do NOT remove Dorian’s repetitive "Auspicious":** This is a confirmed character tic and is working as intended to show his Spire roots.
*   **Do NOT change the soup-brawl incident:** While it seems chaotic, it is the established catalyst for Ministry intervention (the "Correction Clause").

### 6. VERDICT
**REVISE**
(The contradiction regarding the status of the "Floor Plan" obligation and the ignored physical status of Dorian's existing hand burn requires alignment with the RAG database.)