As the Developmental Editor for Crimson Leaf Publishing, I have evaluated **Chapter 10: The Starfall Equilibrium**. This chapter serves as the emotional resolution of the "The Starfall Accord," transitioning the leads from rivals to life-long anchors.

### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The "Five-Foot Rule" Constraint:** This is a classic "forced proximity" trope used effectively to ground the high-fantasy stakes into intimate, physical tension. 
*   **Mira’s Voice Signature:** Her use of "Actually. No." as a self-correction mechanism and her "obviously" sarcasm are perfectly deployed. 
    *   *Quote:* "Obviously, the Emperor wants us to kill each other now that the work is done."
*   **Dorian’s Understatement:** The use of "suboptimal" and "the circumstances are not auspicious" maintains his clinical armor even in collapse.
*   **The Poetry Reveal:** The line *"Without the cold, the flame is but a scream"* is a powerful structural payoff for the thematic conflict established in Chapter 1.

**VOICE CHECK:**
*   **Mira:** YES. Her curse scale is accurate ("past and rot" used during the high-stakes revelation) and her tactile nature is present.
*   **Dorian:** YES. His subject-verb-object precision holds until the moment he admits his love, where his grammar finally fractures.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **The "Thorne" vs. "Solas" Discrepancy:** The Voice Profile identifies him as **Dorian Thorne**, but the chapter text and character-state metadata refer to him as **Dorian Solas**. 
    *   *Correction:* Standardize his surname to **Solas** throughout the project to match the "Solas-Pyre Academy" branding, or update the Voice Profile if Thorne was an earlier placeholder.
*   **The Healing of the Arm:** The Character State metadata for Ch-10 says Dorian’s "paralyzed arm healed by Nexus surge," yet the text says he is sitting up "his face the color of a winter moon" and "rubbing his temple" without acknowledging the return of function to a limb that was presumably useless in Ch-9.
    *   *Correction:* Add a brief sensory beat when he makes the tea or reaches for Mira where he notices the lack of phantom pain or the return of warmth to that specific arm.
*   **The "Five-Foot" Logistics:** The text states they must stay within five feet. They are moved to a suite. Later, Dorian is "standing by the small tea-table" while Mira is "lying on the long chaise by the window." 
    *   *Correction:* Explicitly state that the tea table is positioned immediately adjacent to the chaise. If he is "walking over to her" later, he must have already been within the limit, or the "snarl of white-hot static" needs to trigger.

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **Kaelen’s Condition:** Mira says, "I'm thinking about Kaelen... I can't fix him." Then she mentions he is in the infirmary with "cauterized mana-veins." However, the [character-state] metadata says Kaelen’s "shrapnel wounds healed; minor fatigue" and he is "ready to lead."
    *   *Reference:* "I didn't know how to fix Kaelen. I couldn't fix a soul-burn with a localized heat-pulse."
    *   *Fix:* Sync the text with the metadata. If Kaelen is the "First Regent" and "ready to lead," Mira’s despair over his "soul-burn" creates a false tragedy that confuses the resolution. Soften her worry to "exhaustion" rather than a permanent magical disability.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **The "Glacial Rot" Payoff (Optional):** The revelation that Dorian used the Accord as a life-line is a brilliant dark-moment reveal. To heighten the "Adult Romance" aspect, emphasize the physical relief he feels when she touches his heart—describe the literal melting of the internal ice not just as magic, but as a physical release of chronic pain.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do NOT "fix" Dorian’s dialogue to be more emotive.** His "The evidence suggests" framing is his identity. Even in the final romantic beat, his refusal to use "I think" must remain.
*   **Do NOT remove Mira’s "past and rot" or "stars' sake."** These are essential emotional thermometers for the reader.
*   **Do NOT smooth out Mira’s run-on sentences.** When she says, *"I'm thinking about Kaelen... And you're making tea,"* the abruptness is an intentional character trait.

### 6. VERDICT

**REVISE**

**Reasoning:** While the emotional arc is earned and the voices are pitch-perfect, the **continuity errors** regarding Dorian’s surname (Thorne vs. Solas) and the **contradictory state of Kaelen** (metadata says he's fine; text says he's broken) must be reconciled before this can be archived as the final chapter. Additionally, the physical logistics of the "five-foot radius" in the tea scene need a quick spatial calibration to ensure the tension of the constraint is maintained.