### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Mira’s Voice Signature:** The "Actually. No." pivot is used effectively to signal her shifting thought process as she integrates Dorian’s logic. (e.g., *"We could — actually. No. Yes. We could."* mirrored in *"Actually. No. We don't use fire."*)
*   **Dorian’s Formal Understatement Scale:** Consistent use of "suboptimal," "not auspicious," and "situation requiring... undivided attention" to signal escalating danger. His use of "extraordinary" regarding the harmonization of the void (a deeply meaningful moment) adheres to his voice profile.
*   **Tactile vs. Logical Perception:** Mira correctly uses "it feels like" and "I can feel," while Dorian maintains "the evidence suggests" and "it is probable."
*   **Character Voice Identification:**
    *   **Mira:** YES. Her short, declarative commands ("Move!", "Run") and sarcastic "obviously" are distinct.
    *   **Dorian:** YES. His grammatically precise, subject-verb-object structure and clinical distance remain intact even under physical duress.

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### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY

*   **FLAG:** **Surname Inconsistency (Dorian).**
    *   *The Chapter 10 text* refers to him as "Dorian **Thorne**" in the voice profile instructions and "Dorian **Solas**" in the narrative text (e.g., "Solas lineage," "Solas tunnels").
    *   *Character State (Ch-10)* and previous context establish him as **Dorian Solas**.
    *   **CORRECTION:** Ensure "Thorne" is scrubbed; he is Dorian Solas.

*   **FLAG:** **Status of the Severance Key.**
    *   *Character State (Ch-10)* for High Inquisitor Malchor explicitly states: "Active obligations: Activate the Severance Key (Ch09) — COMPLETED (**Device Destroyed**)."
    *   *Chapter 10 text* says: "Malchor was a silhouette... the Severance Key pulsing in his hand," and later, "He held the Severance Key aloft."
    *   **CORRECTION:** If the device was destroyed in the previous chapter's metadata, it cannot be functioning as a physical beacon here. Either the metadata in the RAG is a mid-chapter update error, or the text needs to reflect that Malchor is using a *shard* or a *residual echo* of the Key. Given the plot needs, the text should likely prevail, but the RAG must be updated for Ch-11 to avoid further confusion.

*   **FLAG:** **Nature of the "Grey" Power.**
    *   *The Project Description* defines Mira as a "fire mage" and Dorian as an "ice mage."
    *   *Chapter 10 text* says "I can't find the 'fire' anymore. It’s all just... this."
    *   *World State (Ch-10)* confirms this is a "Permanent" change to a "Grey resonance."
    *   **CONTINUITY CHECK:** This aligns with the "Paradox Regent" arc transition established in the character states. No fix required, just noting the successful adherence to the new world-rule.

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### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY

*   **The "Twelve Hour" Timeline:** 
    *   *Passage:* "Twelve hours... until the Imperial seal completes its cycle... Four hours in... By the eighth hour... Nine hours... Only three left."
    *   *Issue:* The math is consistent, but the transition from the subterranean tunnels to a "sea-cave" feels abrupt given the Capital is usually depicted as an inland "Reach" or "Bastion." 
    *   **FIX:** Add one sentence during the "eighth hour" walk to clarify the geographical transition (e.g., "The tunnels sloped sharply toward the coast, following the subterranean veins of the continent toward the Eastern shelf.")

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### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **The "72-hour vigil" reference:** (Optional) The very last sentence mentions a "72-hour vigil." However, the Malchor scene established a "12-hour" deadline. If the "72 hours" refers to a traditional rite or a previous plot point not detailed in this specific chapter text, it might confuse readers. 
    *   *Suggestion:* Clarify if the "72-hour vigil" is a metaphor for their entire ordeal or a specific ritual requirement for the original Breach site.

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### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do NOT "smooth out" the bilingual internal monologue:** The blending of "it feels like" and "the evidence suggests" is a critical manifestation of the "Grey resonance" and must be preserved as written.
*   **Do NOT remove Mira’s sarcasm:** Her use of "obviously" when the situation is clearly dire is a vital character defense mechanism.
*   **Do NOT fix the "fragmented" speech during the escape:** Dorian's incomplete sentences are an intentional "emotional tell" from his voice profile, indicating his composure has finally cracked.

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### 6. VERDICT

**REVISE**
(Required fixes: Standardize surname to **Solas**; reconcile the "Destroyed" status of the Key in the RAG database with its physical presence in the text to ensure the next author agent knows it still exists.)