**1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE**
*   **Mira’s Voice Signature:** The draft perfectly executes her interruption tic: *"We could—actually. No. Yes. We could"* (Project Guide) is mirrored in *"I wanted to reach for my ceremonial brand... actually. No. We were to be ornaments."* Her use of "obviously" to denote sarcasm and her tactile descriptions ("second skin of cooling lava") are consistent with her profile.
*   **Dorian’s Formal Understatement:** His use of "suboptimal" to describe a student brawl and "the situation requires our undivided attention" to signal life-threatening danger aligns precisely with his established emotional thermometer.
*   **Somatic Tension:** The description of the "Binary Star" anchor—the siphoning of heat—maintains the world-building rules established in Chapter 02 regarding their magical polarity.
*   **Character Voice Identification:**
    *   **Mira:** YES. Her sentences are reactive and tactile.
    *   **Dorian:** YES. His adherence to "the evidence suggests" and grammatically complete structures (until the end) makes him distinct.

**2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY**
*   **FLAG:** Dorian’s Surname.
    *   **The Error:** In the Herald’s announcement and Chapter 06 dialogue, he is called "Dorian Solas." 
    *   **The Contradiction:** The Non-Negotiable Voice Profile and Chapter 01 establish him as **Dorian Thorne**. However, the Chapter 06 Character State (RAG) and the "Aldric Solas" plot point in this chapter use "Solas."
    *   **Correction:** This is a major internal conflict. Per the Voice Profile (the highest authority for character identity), he is **Dorian Thorne**. The chapter must be scrubbed to replace "Solas" with "Thorne" unless "Solas" is a secret maternal name or a specific plot-driven alias. If it is an alias, Mira should not be surprised by it in the Herald's call.
*   **FLAG:** Location Inconsistency.
    *   **The Error:** Chapter 06 Opening: "I stood before the floor-to-length mirror in the High Spire guest quarters."
    *   **The Contradiction:** Chapter 06 Character State (RAG) and later Chapter 06 text ("The Imperial Ballroom") establish the setting as **The Capital**. The Spire is Dorian's academy, located in a different geographical region.
    *   **Correction:** Change "High Spire guest quarters" to "Imperial Guest Wing" or "Capital Spire."
*   **FLAG:** Dead Men Walking.
    *   **The Error:** "Aldric Solas... turned him into a pile of salt and ash."
    *   **The Contradiction:** Chapter 04 established that **Kaelen** died at the Obsidian Bridge. There is no prior mention of Aldric. While this could be new backstory, the text treats it as a realization of a known figure.
    *   **Correction:** Clarify if Aldric is Dorian’s ancestor or if the text meant to reference Kaelen’s "salt and ash" death. If Aldric is new, define the relationship explicitly.

**3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY**
*   **The Transition:** "The Library of Ash."
    *   **The Issue:** The chapter fluctuates between "three hours ago" (past tense) and current events, but the "Protocol Omega" discovery feels like it's happening in real-time through the "sensory bleed" during the dance.
    *   **The Fix:** Explicitly establish if the Library of Ash was a flashback or a scene that occurred earlier that day. Currently, the "realization" during the dance is cluttered by too many new proper nouns (Protocol Omega, Severance Key, Aldric) introduced simultaneously.

**4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS**
*   **Scale Check:** Dorian uses "extraordinary" once in this chapter. Per his profile, this is his highest superlative. Since he uses it during the dance, the subsequent whisper "You saved me" should perhaps be even more stripped of formality to show the "cracked armor."
*   **Tactile Consistency:** Mira notes Dorian’s pulse is "erratic" through his wool sleeve. This is a great touch; increasing the "heat" description of her hand leaving a glowing mark on his tunic would reinforce her "demonstrative" trait.

**5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS**
*   **Do not "smooth" Mira’s run-on sentences** during the assassination attempt. They are a required part of her "excited/emotional" voice signature.
*   **Do not remove Dorian’s "the evidence suggests."** Even in the middle of a ballroom floor after an assassination attempt, this is his anchor.
*   **Do not clarify the "Binary Dance" mechanics too much.** The ambiguity of "mana-cello" vs "static-violin" fits the romantic fantasy genre perfectly.

**6. VERDICT: REVISE**
The surname discrepancy (Thorne vs. Solas) is a high-level continuity failure that will break the RAG database indexing for future chapters. The location error (Spire vs. Capital) must also be rectified to maintain the timeline of the "Isolation Decree" from the world state.