**TO:** Facilitator
**FROM:** Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor
**SUBJECT:** Continuity Review – Chapter 5: The Inquisitor's Warning

This chapter introduces High Inquisitor Vane and moves the protagonists into a "forced proximity" scenario within the Sanctum. While the atmospheric tension is high, there are several mechanical and world-rule inconsistencies that threaten the internal logic established in Chapters 1-4.

### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Somatic Tether Mechanics:** The description of the physical sensation when they separate—"The separation was physical agony. As her heat retreated, a violent chill slammed into Dorian’s core"—perfectly maintains the "somatic bleed" rules established in Chapter 3.
*   **Dorian’s Diplomatic Mask:** The transition from "Glacial Dean" to a man delivering "a masterpiece of Spire-bred diplomacy" (Line 64) is consistent with his characterization as the more politically savvy of the two.
*   **Environmental Result of Magic:** The "forest of frozen steam pillars" and "jagged crystal pillars" (Lines 3, 44) accurately reflect the byproduct of fire and ice mages clashing/merging, consistent with the "obsidian sand" and "Mercury-Glass" physics established in earlier arena descriptions.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **ERROR: The Waygate/Transport Logic.** 
    *   *The Issue:* In Line 30, Dorian tells Kaelen to use the "Imperial Waygate" and not to "worry about the cost-credits." However, in Chapter 2, it was established that the Waygates are currently restricted for "Crown-official use only" due to the Starfall instability. Furthermore, in Chapter 4, Mira mentioned the Academy’s budget was frozen. 
    *   *Correction:* Dorian should acknowledge he is overstepping his authority or using a "Chancellor’s override" that he knows will alert the Ministry, which better foreshadows Vane’s immediate arrival. 
*   **ERROR: The "Nocturnal Stability" / Lower Apartments Contradiction.**
    *   *The Issue:* In Line 106, Vane says he is "commandeering the lower apartments of the Chancellor's wing" to observe them. However, in Chapter 3, it was established that the Chancellor’s Sanctum is located at the *pinnacle* of the Neutral Zone spire, and the "lower apartments" are occupied by Senior Proctors like Lyra. 
    *   *Correction:* Vane should state he is commandeering the "adjacent viewing suite" or the "Antichamber," rather than "lower apartments," to maintain the vertical geography of the Spire.
*   **ERROR: The Imperial Seal Location.**
    *   *The Issue:* In Line 114, Vane says he is placing a seal on "the doors" (plural, presumably the main entrance to the Sanctum). However, the final line of the chapter says the seal is on "the locked brass handle of their shared *quarters*." 
    *   *Correction:* Clarify if the seal is on the main Sanctum entrance (trapping them in the whole office/living complex) or specifically their bedroom door. The narrative implies they are trapped in the *entire* suite, so the final image should reflect the main entrance seal.

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **PASSAGE:** "The obsidian sand was still hot enough to hiss against the hem of Dorian’s frost-rimed robes..." (Line 1).
    *   *Issue:* In Chapter 4’s conclusion, the arena was described as being doused in Mira’s "magma-rain." This line suggests a quick cool-down that feels rushed.
    *   *Fix:* Add a brief descriptor noting the "unnatural cooling" caused by Dorian's massive ice-pillar conjuration to explain why the sand isn't still molten.
*   **PASSAGE:** "He felt her hand sneak into the crook of his elbow—a public display of intimacy that was entirely out of character..." (Line 84).
    *   *Issue:* The transition from Mira's "fury" (Line 59) to a calculated public display of affection is slightly too fast without a beat of her acknowledging the plan.
    *   *Fix:* Insert a micro-beat where Mira catches Dorian’s "Be silent" command and her gaze shifts from the Inquisitor to the students, showing her pivot into "survival mode" before she grabs his arm.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Title/Rank Consistency:** Vane refers to Dorian as "Solas" (Line 53). Throughout Chapters 1-4, Dorian is almost exclusively called "Chancellor" or "Dorian." Using his surname is a great way to show Vane’s lack of respect; however, ensure "Solas" is added to the character sheet as Dorian’s formal house name.
*   **The "Forty-Eight Hours" Deadline:** Vane demands a demonstration in 48 hours (Line 101). Tracking this timeline will be crucial for the next three chapters. I suggest an internal thought from Dorian about the "Stellar Conjunction" mentioned in Chapter 1 to tie the deadline to a celestial event.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not tone down the "Cheap Romance" dialogue:** Mira’s critique of Dorian’s "common heart" line (Line 119) is a necessary lampshade. It acknowledges the trope while keeping their "rivals" dynamic alive.
*   **Do not remove the "Weapon" vs "Union" distinction (Lines 158-159):** This is a key thematic setup for the political climax. Even if it feels dramatic, it’s essential for the "Adult Fantasy" stakes.

### 6. VERDICT
**REVISE**
The Waygate logic and the Sanctum's internal geography (lower apartments vs. pinnacle) must be reconciled with Chapters 2 and 3 to maintain a "clean" canon for the remainder of the book. Once the spatial and logistical facts are aligned, this chapter is structurally sound.