**EDITORIAL REVIEW: Chapter 17**
**Author:** Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor

### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Steam Phoenix’s Stability:** The creature appearing in the Great Hall ("shedding feathers of jagged ice that hissed as they hit the Marshal’s golden armor") is a perfect continuation of the "living proof" established in the Ch17 World State.
*   **Aric’s Legacy:** The mention of the "Aric Pyre Chair" and the charcoal-grey ribbon maintains the emotional continuity of Ch10 and Ch17's legacy metadata.
*   **Dorian’s Physical State:** Mentioning his "restored right hand" and the "silver scarring" aligns perfectly with the recent Ch17 character state update following the Gala.
*   **Elara’s Role:** Her transition to "First Warden" leading the students in "Synthesis-Shielding" honors her 100% arc completion as the administrative bridge.

**VOICE SIGNATURE CHECK:**
*   **Mira:** YES. Her use of "Actually. No." and "Obviously" are consistent verbal tics from Ch01-16.
*   **Dorian:** YES. His "The evidence suggests" and "suboptimal/inauspicious" phrasing remains his clinical, analytical anchor.

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### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **FLAG:** The chapter states Voss "doesn't have his orison-rod this time." However, the Ch17 world state and Ch16 events (Gala confrontation) established Dorian *shattered* Voss's rod/influence and Dorian’s hand was restored during that high-stakes conflict. 
    *   *Correction:* Ensure internal narration acknowledges the rod was destroyed in the recent Gala, rather than implying he simply chose not to bring it.
*   **FLAG:** The text refers to "The Sovereign Regency Act of 282." While the Chronology is mostly internal to this chapter, we must ensure "282" matches the established timeline of the "Grey Era" which is noted as starting *permanently* in Ch17. 
    *   *Correction:* Confirm years since the Starfall began to ensure 282 is an ancient act, not a modern one.
*   **FLAG:** Character Death Reference. Mira leans against the "obsidian pedestal of Aric’s memorial."
    *   *Context:* Ch04 established Kaelen’s legacy as a "scorched patch on the rug," and Ch10 established Aric’s legacy as an "empty chair." 
    *   *Error:* There has been no prior mention of an "obsidian pedestal" for Aric. 
    *   *Correction:* Change "obsidian pedestal" to "Aric's empty chair" or the "scorched patch" to maintain established memorial markers.

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### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **FLAG:** The Timeline Loop.
    *   *Passage:* "Dorian said... the twelfth day was three days ago. Before the Gala."
    *   *Issue:* The Gala occurred in Ch16. If Ch17 is the "next morning" (as implied by the "dawn drills"), then the "three days ago" must align with the travel time Voss took to get there. If he arrived *at* the Gala with the mandate already signed, the dialogue needs to be explicit that he was carrying treasonous papers while pretending to audit.
    *   *Fix:* Clarify if Voss arrived *before* the Gala or *during* it. The text currently implies he arrived "four hours" after the ice surrendered (which happened at the end of Ch16).

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### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Physicality (Dorian):** Mention the "high-frequency adrenaline tremors" noted in his Ch17 character state. They are currently missing from the prose, which focuses only on his "absolute-zero" composure. Adding a slight tremor to his restored hand while he holds the scroll would add depth.
*   **World State:** Mention the "Mercury-grey sky" more prominently as the new ecological baseline established in the RAG Ch17 world state.

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### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **DO NOT** move Voss's "mottled purple" face or "oily" descriptions. These are established NPC descriptors.
*   **DO NOT** change the repetitive sentence structures "Actually. No." and "The evidence suggests." These are the core voice signatures and are mandatory for CLP character consistency.
*   **DO NOT** remove the "clinically cold" vs "wild heat" metaphors; while they are thematic, they are the primary way these two specific characters perceive mana.

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### 6. VERDICT

**REVISE**
(Minor flags regarding the specific memorial marker of Aric vs. Kaelen and the chronological logic of the Gala/Mandate timeline must be tightened to ensure the "G-Credit" quality threshold is met.)