### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Rhythmic Somatic Descriptions:** The "somatic hum" and "resonant frequency" descriptions are sensory anchors that differentiate this romance from standard fantasy.
    *   *Example:* "The somatic hum that lived between them—the Paradox signature—was active, a steady, deep thrumming in her marrow..."
*   **The Flower Metaphor:** The "Aurelian Bloom" serves as a perfect physical manifestation of the Chancellors' merged magic.
    *   *Example:* "...five-petalled stars of a gold so deep it looked like molten sun-blood, yet their stems were a pale, translucent silver..."
*   **Distinct Character Voices:**
    *   **Dorian:** His adherence to clinical data even in moments of vulnerability is a strong, consistent trait. *Voice Check:* **YES.** (Can identify by his use of "The evidence suggests," "categorical shift," and "incidental variable.")
    *   **Mira:** Her voice is punchy, defiant, and grounded in action. *Voice Check:* **YES.** (Can identify by her dismissive "Past and rot with him" and "Obviously.")
    *   **Elara:** Professional yet observant, acting as the bridge between the high-level magic and student reality. *Voice Check:* **YES.**

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY

*   **The "Restored" Hand:**
    *   *Error:* "He reached out with his restored hand..." Earlier in the chapter it says: "His right hand—the one that had been silver-scarred and ruined—rested steadily at his side." 
    *   *Correction:* In Chapter 04 (RAG context), the hand was "bruised/flushed from thermal contact," and Dorian "chose to keep the thermal burn as a reminder." "Restored" implies the scar is gone, which contradicts his character state of keeping it as a reminder. Change "restored" to "scarred" or "marked."
*   **The Timing of the Loom's Collapse:**
    *   *Error:* Elara says, "since the Loom collapsed" and "worst of the Loom's discharge."
    *   *Correction:* In the established World State (Ch-04), it was the *Obsidian Bridge* that collapsed during the *Paradox/Starfall* event. While the "Loom" might be the magical source, the physical event was the Bridge collapse. Ensure terminology aligns: "since the Bridge fell" or "the Starfall discharge."

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY

*   **The Ending Sentence:**
    *   *Reference:* "The flower didn't just smell like us; it smelled like a future the Empire was already preparing to burn."
    *   *Fix:* This sentence appears as a standalone orphan after the scene has clearly concluded. It feels like a "meta-commentary" or a placeholder. It should be integrated into the final paragraph or deleted to preserve the rhythm of the atmospheric ending.
*   **The "Actually. No." Tic:**
    *   *Reference:* Mira says, "Actually. No. That's not possible." and Elara says, "Actually. No. It's more than healing."
    *   *Fix:* Having two different characters use the exact same idiosyncratic sentence structure—including the period for a mid-sentence stop—muddies their voice distinction. Keep it for Mira (as it fits her bluntness) and change Elara’s transition to something more scholarly like "On the contrary" or "Not quite."

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Tightening Dialogue Tags:**
    *   *ORIGINAL:* "Actually. No. That's not possible," Mira whispered to the wind.
    *   *SUGGESTED:* "Actually. No. That's not possible." Mira's whisper was lost to the wind.
    *   *Rationale:* The "whispered to the wind" is a bit trope-heavy; making the wind the "consumer" of the dialogue tightens the imagery.
*   **Removing Redundant Adverbs:**
    *   *ORIGINAL:* "Mira finally looked back at him."
    *   *SUGGESTED:* "Mira looked back at him."
    *   *Rationale:* "Finally" is a weak adverb; the preceding paragraphs of her looking at the ground already establish the delay.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Dorian’s "The evidence suggests":** Do not remove this or smooth it over. It is his primary verbal defense mechanism and its "failure" at the climax of the chapter is a key emotional beat.
*   **Mira’s "Obviously":** This is her signature verbal tic. It signals her impatience with things she considers self-evident.
*   **Fragmented Sentences:** "Cedar and winter-mint, starlight and stone." These fragments are intentional for rhythm and sensory impact; do not convert them into full "The room smelled like..." sentences.

### 6. VERDICT

**REVISE**
(The continuity error regarding the "restored" hand vs. the established choice to keep the scar needs correction to maintain character integrity from Chapter 04.)