**1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE**
*   **Voice Differentiation:** YES. David and Marcus are sonically distinct. David’s dialogue adheres perfectly to the [voice-sig-arthur] legacy—using cardinal directions ("wind's out of the North-by-Northwest") and tactile, grounded metaphors ("Models don't eat"). Marcus’s internal monologue and dialogue remain consistent with [voice-sig-marcus], specifically the "diagnostic" stress expression ("Diagnostic: Total systemic failure") and the four-beat rhythmic thigh-tap.
*   **The "Long Wait" Implementation:** The chapter successfully bridges the gap between the deceased Arthur Silas Vance and the living mentor, David. The line, "He used the 'Long Wait'—the steward’s logic Arthur had left in the soil," honors the project context regarding Arthur's legacy.
*   **Sensory Grounding:** The transition from digital abstraction to physical reality is earned through the "grit" metaphor. "Marcus felt the grit against his skin—the same 'ghost of grit' Arthur Vance had looked for in the clinic." This creates a strong continuity link to previous thematic beats.

**2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY**
*   **The "Ghost" Signal Loop:** The character-state for Ch-22 notes an "UNRESOLVED" Ocala "Ghost" Signal (unindexed hardware). While the chapter addresses the "Ghost" of the boar, it fails to advance or acknowledge the technical "Ghost Signal" mentioned in the RAG world-state. 
    *   *Correction:* During the moment Marcus is looking at his ruggedized screen before leaving the cabin, add a brief mention of the anomalous signal pinging from the deeper woods to maintain the mystery thread.
*   **David’s Physical State:** The character state for David says "Rib-cage fully healed." However, the text says: "His ribs didn't whistle when he breathed anymore, but the memory of the sluice gate in Chapter 17 sat between them like an uncashed check." This is slightly contradictory—if he is *fully* healed, there should be no lingering physical "whistle" or struggle. 
    *   *Correction:* Ensure the text explicitly confirms he moves with "predatory efficiency" as per his character state, rather than just "not whistling," which implies a recent or partial recovery.

**3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY**
*   **The Cardinal Direction Command:** David shouts "North!" to get Marcus to move. While the text says "The cardinal direction acted like a command-line override," it isn't immediately clear *why* Marcus knows which way North is in a moment of "Total systemic failure" without his tablet.
    *   *Fix:* Earlier in the "track" scene, have David explicitly point out a North-facing marker (like moss growth or the wind direction) so Marcus has a "data point" to latch onto when the panic hits.
*   **The Hog’s Retreat:** "The hog paused... It didn't flee; it simply de-allocated the space." The transition from a 400lb charging beast to a peaceful retreat is a bit abrupt.
    *   *Fix:* Add one line of physical interaction—David making himself look larger or a specific sharp sound—to justify the boar's decision to "de-allocate" rather than finish the charge, especially since Marcus was already clipped.

**4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS**
*   **The Seed Pouch:** (Optional) The chapter opens with the corn seeds as a "physical encrypted key" but they are forgotten once they enter the Scrub. Mentioning that the hog's rooting is a direct threat to the *location* where these seeds must be planted would raise the stakes of the hunt.
*   **Sarah’s "Ghost":** (Optional) In the boardroom flashback during the hog charge, explicitly mention the "retractable pen clicking" sound from Sarah's [voice-sig] to heighten the sensory overwhelm Marcus feels.

**5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS**
*   **Do NOT remove tech-jargon:** Phrases like "unoptimized gasp," "Error 404," and "latency" are essential to Marcus’s character arc. They are not "clunky" writing; they are his specific [voice-sig-marcus] imperfection.
*   **Do NOT "fix" David’s speech:** His dropping of 'g's (rootin', lookin') and his use of "ain't" are protected by the legacy mentor profile and should not be modernized.
*   **Do NOT add more action:** This is a developmental beat about "indexing" Marcus into the land's logic. Expanding the hog fight into a longer "battle" would undermine the "Long Wait" philosophy.

**6. VERDICT**
**REVISE**
The chapter is structurally sound with a clear want (David wants Marcus to "walk on the earth"), obstacle (the hog/Marcus’s digital blindness), and outcome (Marcus finding "North" without a screen). However, the failure to address the "Ghost Signal" mentioned in the RAG status and the slight ambiguity regarding how Marcus identified "North" mid-panic require minor adjustments for continuity and logic.