**1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE**

*   **Voice Signature Consistency (Mira):** The use of her specific emotional thermometer is perfectly executed. Quote: *"Past and rot, Dorian, I’ve been waiting a month to say something like that to a Ministry lapdog."* Her use of "Actually. No." as a mid-thought pivot in the opening scene also aligns with her established profile.
*   **Voice Signature Consistency (Dorian):** His use of formal understatement is spot on. Quote: *"The immediate threat has transitioned from 'existential' to 'bureaucratic.' A situation requiring... significantly less of my undivided attention."* The use of "suboptimal" and "the evidence suggests" maintains his clinical yet thawing persona.
*   **Thematically Loaded Imagery:** The description of the "Grey Era" as mercury-grey and the sensory detail of the resonance—*"winter mint and ancient parchment"*—strengthens the romantic integration.
*   **Structural Resolution:** The chapter successfully closes the "High Inquisitor/Ministry" threat loop and the "Student Body" tension loop, providing the necessary catharsis for a Series Finale/Conclusion.

**Voice Signature Identification:**
*   **Mira:** YES. Identified by "past and rot," "obviously" (sarcastic), and tactile descriptions.
*   **Dorian:** YES. Identified by "evidence suggests," "suboptimal," and grammatically precise understatements.

**2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY**

*   **The Restoration of Dorian's Hand:** In Chapter 11 (implied by the Character State RAG), Dorian’s right hand was restored. In this draft, the text mentions his *"sleeves pushed back to reveal hands that were no longer trembling."* However, given the "Adult Romance" genre and the tactile nature of Mira’s character, the narrative misses a crucial beat regarding the *scarring* or *newness* of that hand.
    *   **Correction:** Add a single sentence when Mira touches his hand at the desk acknowledging the lack of silver-scars or the smooth, new texture of the skin Kaelen/the Paradox restored.
*   **The "15-Foot Limit" Timeline:** The text states: *"The physical leash... was gone."* Later, it says: *"The 15-foot limit was a ghost of the past, but we hadn't quite learned how to exist further apart than that."* This is a minor internal contradiction in pacing.
    *   **Correction:** Clarify that while the *painful* pull is gone, the *habitual* proximity remains a psychological comfort rather than a physical tether.

**3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY**

*   **The "Correction Clause" Mechanism:**
    *   **Reference:** *"Malchor is halfway to the Capital, probably still trying to explain to the Emperor why his 'Correction Clause' melted in his hands."*
    *   **Problem:** For a series finale, the "defeat" of the primary antagonist happens entirely off-screen/in flashback. This muffles the emotional payoff.
    *   **Fix:** Ensure Chapter 11 explicitly depicted the melting of this clause. If not, Chapter 12 needs a slightly more vivid internal monologue from Mira recalling the moment the Imperial magic broke against their combined resonance to ground the "current" peace.

**4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS**

*   **The Memorial Beat:** (Optional) The transition to the memorial service is a bit abrupt. Adding a transition sentence about the "mercury-grey" sky deepening into evening would smooth the jump from the Sanctum to the Courtyard.
*   **Somatic Integration:** (Optional) Since this is "Adult Romance," the final scene on the roof could lean slightly more into the "sensual but tasteful" mandate by describing the physical sensation of their magics *merging* (not just touching) as a metaphor for their physical intimacy.

**5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS**

*   **Do NOT "fix" Dorian’s dialogue:** His speech is repetitive ("The evidence suggests") and overly formal. This is not a "stiff" writing error; it is his core identity. Do not make him sound "relaxed" or "normal" even in love.
*   **Do NOT remove Mira’s "Actually. No.":** This linguistic tic is her "voice signature." It should remain fragmented.
*   **Do NOT smooth over the "Soup" anecdote:** The humor regarding Aric and Elara’s soup spill provides necessary "Low Stakes" contrast to the "High Stakes" of the previous chapters.

**6. VERDICT:**

**REVISE**

**Reasoning:** The chapter is emotionally resonant and hits all the required HEA (Happily Ever After) beats. However, the continuity regarding the "Correction Clause" defeat feels too summarized. To satisfy the mandate of a "Clear Want, Obstacle, and Outcome," the "Outcome" (the Emperor's retreat) needs to feel earned through a clearer recollection of Malchor's specific failure. Once the physical detail of Dorian's restored hand is addressed to match the Character State RAG, this will move to a PASS.