**TO:** Genesis Publishing Lead
**FROM:** Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor
**SUBJECT:** Editorial Review: *The Starfall Accord* – Chapter 13 (The Mid-Winter Gala)

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### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Residual Scar:** Mira’s reference to the "right-hand palm scar" as a "faint, silvery line" (Line 15) correctly tracks the somatic damage and subsequent healing established in Chapters 02 and 03.
*   **Dorian’s Physical Restoration:** The description of Dorian’s right hand as being "the one that had been a ruin of black frost... rested steadily at his side" (Line 29) maintains perfect continuity with the healing arc concluded in the prior chapter.
*   **Aric’s Legacy:** The presence of the "empty Aric Pyre Chair" (Line 79) and its role as a "primary moral anchor" is maintained accurately from the Chapter 04 disaster and Chapter 12 resolution.
*   **The Grey Equilibrium:** The setting description—"Fire-pits burned with a low-temperature amber flame, while towering ice-sculptures... stood nearby, not melting" (Line 66)—perfectly renders the world-state change established in the RAG "World State: ch-13."

**VOICE SIGNATURE CHECK:**
*   **MIRA:** **YES.** Known for internal technical/emotional contradictions ("suboptimal," "Obviously," "Stars' sake") and high-energy metaphors ("wildfire," "kinetic forge").
*   **DORIAN:** **YES.** Known for Bayesian/Analytical speech patterns ("The evidence suggests," "inconsistent," "approximately three degrees," "variable").
*   **VOSS:** **YES.** Distinguishable by his focus on "Ministry" authority and "traditionalist" condescension, though his magic scent (damp parchment) is a new (stable) addition.

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### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **ERROR:** The chapter text states Mira has spent "**thirty-four years** as a wildfire" (Line 18).
    *   **CORRECTION:** Per Chapter 01/Character Bio, Mira is **28 years old**. The text should be corrected to "twenty-eight years" to avoid an age contradiction.
*   **ERROR:** The text says, "Kaelen’s chair was filled now by Elara" (Line 100).
    *   **CORRECTION:** Chapter 04 and Chapter 12 established that Kaelen died on the Obsidian Bridge and his legacy is a "scorched patch on the rug," but he did not have a "Chair" in the same formal administrative sense as the Aric Pyre Chair. Furthermore, Elara was established as the "First Warden" (bridging Spire/Pyre) in Ch 12, not specifically as Kaelen's replacement. The phrasing should be adjusted to reflect her role as First Warden without implying Kaelen held a Chancellor-level chair.
*   **ERROR:** Mira reacts to Voss's magic as "stagnant water" (Line 118). 
    *   **CORRECTION:** Ensure this is cached as a permanent fact for Voss if he appears in Phase 2/3. (Minor tracking note).

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### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **PASSAGE:** "He turned me around. His hands rested on my waist for a second longer than was strictly professional. In the mirror, we looked like a singular shadow—a blend of charcoal and silver." (Line 48)
*   **FIX:** This moment needs to clarify the "15-foot rule" status. While Line 42 mentions the rule is a "legal relic," the RAG context states the "72-hour stabilization threshold has passed." Explicitly noting that they are now within the "Post-Stabilization Era" during this physical contact would clarify why the traditional "mana-clash" isn't occurring for the casual reader.

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### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **STABILIZATION DATA (Optional):** Dorian mentions "The Academy’s output has increased by fourteen percent" (Line 134). To deepen the link to Chapter 12, he could specifically mention the "Grey Arcanum" curriculum progress, as Mira’s "Active Obligation" in the RAG is still listed as "UNPAID." This would show they are working on it.
*   **ELARA’S STATUS (Optional):** Since Elara is in the room (implied by her being in the chair), a brief visual confirmation of her "charcoal-grey robes" would reinforce the "Student Body: UNIFIED" state from the RAG.

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### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Dorian’s Outburst:** Do not tone down Dorian’s "resonant roar" or his threat to Voss (Line 158). While it breaks his clinical mask, this is an intentional character arc beat ("Relinquished clinical isolation") established in the Chapter 13 Character State.
*   **Mira’s "Suboptimal" Tic:** Do not remove Mira’s use of "Actually. No." or "Obviously." These are established verbal tics from the project voice guide.
*   **Atmospheric "Grey":** The repetitive use of "mercury," "charcoal," and "slate" is intentional to reflect the new "Grey Era" world state; do not seek "color variety."

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### 6. VERDICT

**REVISE**
(Must fix Mira’s age contradiction and the Kaelen/Elara chair designation to maintain canon integrity.)