**TO:** Creative Lead / Lead Author
**FROM:** Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor
**SUBJECT:** Continuity Review – Chapter 03: "The Long Game"

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### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Arthur’s Voice Consistency:** The dialogue perfectly matches the established `voice-sig-arthur`.
    *   *Cardinal Directions:* "That door is facin’ East-by-Northeast, son" and "heading West-by-Northwest."
    *   *The Dropped 'g':* "Runnin’, hopin’, fightin’"—this correctly signals his physical regression/exhaustion as per his signature.
    *   *Tactile/Olfactory focus:* "the sticky residue of a slashed pine," "smelled of tobacco and wet dogs."
*   **Julian’s Proxy/Environmental Echo:** Though Julian is not present, the character Soren uses Julian’s specific vocabulary: "Efficiency is our baseline" and "clean transition." This maintains the corporate "voice" of Avery-Quinn established in the world state.
*   **Helen’s State:** Her physical description ("pale," "knuckles the color of bleached bone") aligns with the `character-state` from the Annex observation ward.

**Voice Signature Verification:**
*   **Arthur:** **YES.** The blend of directional navigation and agricultural metaphors ("cypress tryin’ to bloom in December") is unmistakable.
*   **Helen:** **YES.** Her desperation for "forty more years" and the "garden" matches her transition from terminally ill observer to active survivor.

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### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **LOCATION CONTRADICTION:**
    *   **The Error:** Chapter 03 places Arthur and Helen in a "clinic in West Palm" and describes them driving "away from the coast... toward the heart of the state." 
    *   **The Fact:** The `character-state` for ch-03 and the `World State: ch-03` explicitly establish the location as the **Avery-Quinn Medical Annex, Chicago**. Specifically, Julian is on the "Executive Observation Deck" and Arthur is in a "Private Recovery Suite" in Chicago.
    *   **Correction:** The setting must be reverted to the Chicago Annex. Arthur can still harbor his desire for the Florida "Bend," but the medical procedure and the exit from the facility must occur in Chicago to align with Julian's presence and the established world state.

*   **TIMELINE/STATUS CONTRADICTION:**
    *   **The Error:** Chapter 03 depicts the Vances undergoing the treatment and then physically leaving the facility immediately after ("Arthur... stood up... We’re leavin’, Helen. Now."). 
    *   **The Fact:** The `character-state` for ch-03 establishes Arthur as "Permanent: YES" in the Recovery Suite and notes he "has accepted the 'burden' of longevity only to use it as a weapon." It also states Julian considers them "v0.9 hardware successfully patched." If they escape minutes after the procedure, Julian’s "triumphant" state and the "Unresolved" loop of Julian’s "long-term containment" are invalidated.
    *   **Correction:** Arthur and Helen cannot successfully "flee" to Florida in the same hour they are treated if they are being monitored by Julian in a "closed-loop system." The escape needs to be framed as a future plan or a much later event, or the "NPC Memory" of the Medical Staff treating them as "server clusters" must be addressed to show how they bypassed high-tier corporate security.

*   **ARTHUR’S VITALITY:**
    *   **The Error:** Chapter 03 has Arthur "swimming" in a truck and driving three hours immediately after a neural graft and gene-mapping.
    *   **The Fact:** The `character-state` notes "Residual tremors from the neural-graft." Driving a heavy-duty dually for three hours through a storm contradicts the "stabilized by bedside monitor" physical state.
    *   **Correction:** Soften his physical capability; emphasize the "tremors" mentioned in the state logs to show the cost of his defiance.

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### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **The Memory Log Theft:** 
    *   **Reference:** "the drive he’d stolen from the clinic... swiped from Soren’s desk." 
    *   **The Issue:** It is unclear if this is the same "Alpha-7 back-end log" that the `voice-sig-marcus` says *Marcus* is currently carrying. If Arthur has a redundant log, this needs to be explicitly labeled as a "Physical Redundant Log" (as it currently is) but clarified how it relates to Marcus’s mission.
    *   **Fix:** Briefly note that this log is a "field-unit backup" or "architect-tier key" to differentiate it from Marcus’s primary data set.

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### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Arthur’s Thumb Habit (Optional):** The text mentions him searching for "grit" and finding "chemical film." To strengthen the link to his `voice-sig`, have him mention that the sanitizer "killed the feel of the North," linking his cardinal direction tic to his sense of touch.

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### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do NOT "correct" the cardinal directions:** Arthur using "North" for "forward" or "top of the map" is a non-negotiable character trait. 
*   **Do NOT fix the dropped 'g's:** "Runnin’" and "Hopin’" are essential markers of his regression/aging process.
*   **Do NOT make the technician more "human":** Soren’s robotic, data-driven nature is required to contrast Arthur’s grounded realism.

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### 6. VERDICT

**REVISE**
The geographical shift from Chicago (established in Context) to West Palm Beach (Chapter 03) creates a major continuity break regarding Julian Avery’s location and the corporate oversight established in the World State. Arthur cannot be in West Palm if Julian is currently observing him in Chicago.