**EDITORIAL REVIEW: Chapter 4 - The Arena Disaster**
**Editor:** Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor

### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Mira’s Voice Signature:** The use of her internal correction and tactile focus is perfectly executed: *"Mira adjusted the heavy obsidian fastening of her mantle, her fingers trembling—actually, they weren't just trembling, they were humming."*
*   **Dorian’s Voice Signature:** Stays true to the Formal Understatement Scale. Referring to a potential mana-detonation as *"suboptimal"* and the disastrous interference as *"not... auspicious"* maintains the established character profile.
*   **The Shared Brand:** The continuity of the silvery line and the "Binary Star" resonance correctly references the events of Chapter 3.
*   **Dialogue Recognition:** 
    *   **Mira:** **YES.** Identified by tactile descriptions ("tasted of copper," "hissed against the stone") and the "actually. no." interjection pattern.
    *   **Dorian:** **YES.** Identified by clinical precision ("atmospheric density," "wave-function") and the transition to fragmented grammar during the trauma at the end.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **FATAL CONTRADICTION (Character Death):** 
    *   *The Error:* This chapter features **Kaelen** walking into the arena at the end, alive, to carry Aric's body. However, the [character-state] for Chapter 4 explicitly lists Kaelen as **DECEASED**. The RAG database states: *"Kaelen — DECEASED (Ch04). Died standing on the central span of the Obsidian Bridge to tactically brace the pylons during the Paradox collapse."*
    *   *The Correction:* Kaelen cannot appear in this chapter. He is dead. The person retrieving Aric's body must be changed to another proctor, or Mira must handle the body herself.
*   **LOCATION INCONSISTENCY:**
    *   *The Error:* This chapter takes place in the "Great Arena" and describes the destruction of a mana-sphere and Aric's death. However, the [character-state] for Ch-04 and [world-state] for Ch-04 describe the "Bridge Collapse" as the primary catastrophe and state Mira is currently at the "Obsidian Bridge, High Spire Reach" dealing with the aftermath of Kaelen's death.
    *   *The Correction:* This chapter text appears to be an alternate version of Chapter 4 or a complete departure from the established State Files. If this is Chapter 4, Aric should be in the Infirmary (per state files) and Kaelen should be dead. The "Arena Disaster" contradicts the "Bridge Disaster" already logged in the permanent record.

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **The "Binary Star" Mechanics:**
    *   *The Passage:* *"Our resonance is... feeding the collapse!"*
    *   *The Fix:* In Chapter 3, the resonance was described as a "sensory bleed." Here it acts as physical interference. We need a clearer bridge explaining *why* their emotional proximity suddenly affects a localized weave when it didn't during the Bridge event (other than "it just does").
*   **The Ending Sentence:**
    *   *The Passage:* *"His weight was nothing like she expected—cold and precise, even in unconsciousness, like holding a blade that had forgotten it could cut."*
    *   *The Fix:* The sentence implies she is holding **Dorian**, but the previous paragraph says Dorian is holding **her** ("He caught her as she fell"). The POV flickers here; clarify who is holding whom and who is unconscious.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Voss’s Reaction:** (Optional) If the Ministry is as hostile as the [world-state] suggests, Voss should likely be making an arrest or a formal declaration immediately rather than just "shouting orders." 
*   **Aric’s Rank:** (Optional) Mira calls him her "best initiate," but [character-state] calls him a "student." Using "Initiate" consistently across both characters (Aric and Elara) strengthens the school's internal terminology.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not "fix" Dorian's fragmented grammar** at the end (*"The... the trauma is... extensive"*). This is a vital violation of his voice signature used to signal extreme emotional distress.
*   **Do not remove Mira’s curses** (*"Stars' sake," "Past and rot"*). These are keyed to her emotional thermometer as per the Voice Profile.
*   **Do not smooth out Mira’s tactile interruptions** (*"Actually. No."*). This is her established thought pattern.

### 6. VERDICT: REVISE
**MAJOR FLAGS.** The chapter is a total continuity break from the established RAG World State. It resurrects a character (Kaelen) who is explicitly listed as deceased and replaces a Bridge Collapse catastrophe with an Arena Disaster. The internal facts of the story are currently in a state of paradox.