**TO:** Author
**FROM:** Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor
**DATE:** [Current System Date]
**SUBJECT:** Editorial Review – Chapter 24: "The Vertical Limit"

The technical and physical stakes of this chapter are high, but several critical continuity errors regarding the state of characters and the timeline established in the provided RAG context must be addressed to maintain canon integrity.

### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Elena’s "Analog" Logic:** The transition from digital defense to physical destruction perfectly maintains her arc from "physical architect to digital sentinel." The line *"I’m orpahnin' the logic-gates faster than he can index them"* is a strong reinforcement of her mechanical approach to data.
*   **The "Axe" Failsafe:** This is a direct and satisfying payoff to the secret established in **Chapter 10**, where Elena knows the manual axe-throw is the only physical failsafe. 
*   **Voice Differentiations:** 
    *   **Marcus:** YES. His use of "Error 404" and "diagnostic chill" aligns with his **Voice Sig**.
    *   **Elena:** YES. Her focus on "stiction," "load," and "tension" correctly identifies her as the tactile counterpart to Marcus’s abstraction.
    *   **Julian (via the Mesh):** YES. Describing the probe as the "rhythm of Julian’s cufflinks" is a brilliant sensory tie-in to his **Physical Habit** established in his Voice Sig.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **The Sarah Jenkins Paradox:** 
    *   **The Error:** Elena commands Marcus to *"Get David and Sarah to the cabin"* and later says *"Tell Sarah I’m sorry about the fridge."* 
    *   **The Contradiction:** The **Character-State for Ch-24** (the very chapter being written) and the **Voice Sig for Sarah** both Establish that Sarah is either in Dallas or acting as a "displaced/deceased-equivalent" or "listening via Mesh-comms" from a remote Hub. Most critically, the **Character Sheet for Arthur (Ch-36)** and the Project Context indicate a timeline where the attack has *already* happened or Sarah is a "ghost in the machine." If she is physically in the Florida swamp, it contradicts her established location in the Dallas Logistics Hub.
    *   **The Correction:** Clarify Sarah’s presence. If she is a digital presence or a voice on the comms, Marcus cannot "get her to the cabin." If she is physically there, the RAG database `character-state: ch-24` needs to be updated to reflect her move from Dallas/The Kitchen Hub to a physical field asset. 

*   **Arthur Silas Vance Status:**
    *   **The Error:** Elena references the axe as a failsafe Arthur *"left for her."*
    *   **The Contradiction:** **Chapter 36** (Context) states Arthur died "peacefully in his sleep." However, the **Voice Sig for Marcus** states Arthur is a "deceased benefactor" as of **Chapter 1**. The timeline of Arthur’s death versus the construction of the Mesh needs to be airtight. If the Mesh was built "weeks" ago by Marcus and Elena, Arthur must have been alive or it must be explicitly stated they built it over his legacy architecture.
    *   **The Correction:** Ensure the text reflects that Arthur is already deceased and the "weeks" spent building the Mesh occurred after his passing, utilizing his "legacy shielding."

*   **The Handshake/Back-end Log:**
    *   **The Error:** Marcus says *"If it touches the back-end logs, Julian will have a sub-millisecond route back to your physical coordinates."*
    *   **The Contradiction:** **Chapter 1** establishes that Marcus *already* has the Alpha-7 back-end logs. Julian is looking for the "hole." If Julian gets the logs, he doesn't just get coordinates; he gets proof of the Alpha-7 empathy protocol fraud.
    *   **The Correction:** Elevate the stakes. It’s not just a "route"; it’s the exposure of the logs Marcus is carrying as a "Fugitive of Conscience."

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **Internal Timeline of the Attack:** 
    *   **Passage:** *"The Sovereign Mesh... Successfully withstood a Tier-1 Cyber Attack"* (from World State Ch-24).
    *   **The Issue:** The chapter writes the attack as happening *now*, but the RAG World State describes it in the past tense as "RESOLVED." 
    *   **The Fix:** Align the chapter’s resolution exactly with the RAG state—the "recalibrating" of Avery-Quinn needs to be the closing beat of this chapter to match the `NPC Memory` entry.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Tone Consistency:** (Optional) In the radio comms, Marcus refers to a "ghost in the marl." While Elena hates the word, Marcus’s Voice Sig mentions he uses "defensive irony." This works, but could be sharpened to reflect his "God-tier" hangover—he should sound more frustrated that his "math" is failing.
*   **The "Sarah-partition":** (Optional) Explicitly link the "Sarah-partition" to the logs Marcus kept in **Chapter 1** to reward readers tracking the "Known Secrets" thread.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do NOT remove Elena’s technical jargon:** Terms like "high-alpha torque," "stiction," and "vertical slop variable" are core to her identity as a physical-to-digital architect.
*   **Do NOT "fix" Marcus’s stuttering dialogue:** When he says *"The filter is... we just finished,"* it correctly reflects his **Emotional State** (humbled/latency) as established in the Ch-24 Character State.
*   **Do NOT remove the four-beat "ping" habit:** This is a non-negotiable verbal/physical tic from his Voice Sig.

### 6. VERDICT

**REVISE**
The conflict regarding Sarah Jenkins’ physical location vs. her "Displaced" status in Dallas is a Major Flag. We cannot have a character being "walked to a cabin" if she is a digital ghost or a thousand miles away. Additionally, the timeline regarding Arthur's death and the Mesh construction needs a precision check to ensure no "Ghost Arthur" interactions occur during the "weeks" of construction.