### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Mira’s Voice Signature (Accuracy: High):** The use of "Actually. No." and her habit of interrupting her own thoughts is perfectly captured in: *"We could — actually. No. Yes. We could"* (Project Context) and mirrored in the text: *"Actually. No. I’d find the energy. For you? Always."*
*   **Dorian’s Understatement Scale (Accuracy: High):** His reaction to a literal atmospheric collapse using the phrase *"The structural integrity of this position is... well, it is not auspicious"* aligns exactly with his "serious problem" tier. 
*   **Tactile Internalization:** Mira’s description of magic is physical and grounded in her profile: *"Every inhalation felt like swallowing needles of glass."*
*   **The "Binary Star" Payoff:** The mechanical transition from fire/ice to "Magma" (Liquid Heat/Vessel) is a consistent escalation of the "Grey Magic" established in Chapter 08/09 state files.

**Voice Identification Check:**
- **Mira:** YES. Identified by "obviously" used sarcastically and the "Actually. No." stutter-correction.
- **Dorian:** YES. Identified by the "not auspicious/suboptimal" scale and grammatically precise subject-verb-object structures.

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### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY

*   **FLAG:** Location Contradiction.
    *   **The Error:** Chapter 09 text places the characters on the "Grand Balcony" of the "Imperial High Court" in the capital city.
    *   **The Evidence:** The [character-state] for Ch-09 explicitly states the location is "The Crystalline Spire, High Archives (The Shattered Sealing Chamber)." The [World State] confirms the "Obsidian Siege" is surrounding the **Spire**, not the Imperial Capital.
    *   **Correction:** Relocate the scene to the Crystalline Spire's heights. The "Imperial High Court" should be the antagonist's location, not where the Chancellors are currently holding their "suicide" stand.

*   **FLAG:** Physical Injury Inconsistency.
    *   **The Error:** The text describes Mira having "thermal bruising along her collarbone."
    *   **The Evidence:** [character-state] ch-09 establishes Mira has "severe internal crystallization of mana," is "bleeding from ears," and has her "right hand fused to the conduit."
    *   **Correction:** Mira’s physical state must reflect the crystallization and the ear-bleed. The "fused hand" is a major mechanical constraint that the current text ignores (she "flicks her wrist" and "clutches robes" with both hands).

*   **FLAG:** Dorian’s Physical State.
    *   **The Error:** Dorian "raised his hand" and "thrust their hands forward together."
    *   **The Evidence:** [character-state] ch-09 establishes Dorian's "right arm [is] paralyzed by kinetic backflow" and he has "frost-blindness in left eye."
    *   **Correction:** Dorian must struggle with the paralyzed limb; he cannot use both hands for the discharge.

*   **FLAG:** Character Knowledge/Revelation.
    *   **The Error:** Mira thinks about the "Emperor's decree of execution."
    *   **The Evidence:** [character-state] ch-09 establishes a much deeper secret: Mira knows the Emperor is a "vacuum that will collapse the world if severed."
    *   **Correction:** Mira's internal monologue should reflect the terror of this "Living Battery" revelation rather than a standard execution decree.

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### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY

*   **The "Binary Star" vs. "Magma":** 
    *   **Passage:** *"They underwent a phase-shift. The heat became liquid. The cold became a vessel. The Magma."*
    *   **Fix:** Ensure it is clear that "The Magma" is the *result* of the "Solar-Frost Flare" stability mentioned in the open loops of Chapter 09. Currently, the text introduces it as a new noun without tethering it to the established project terminology "Grey resonance."

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### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Vocabulary Enhancement (Mira):** Use the "cursing scale" more aggressively. Since she is facing High Inquisitor Vane, this is a "past and rot" situation.
*   **Vane’s Tactics:** The [World State] mentions Vane will use "Entropy Charges" to level the Spire. Integrating these specific weapons instead of generic "obsidian rods" would tighten the connection to the world-building notes.

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### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do NOT** fix Dorian’s "The... circumstances... are moderately better." It perfectly captures his "Formal Understatement" scale and his "incomplete sentence" emotional tell.
*   **Do NOT** remove Mira’s sarcastic "obviously." It is her primary voice marker.
*   **Do NOT** polish the "shove you off this ledge" banter. This rivals-to-lovers friction is essential for the slow-burn arc established in the Project Goal.

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### 6. VERDICT

**REVISE**
The chapter is voice-accurate but fails significantly on spatial and physical continuity. The Chancellors are in the wrong city (Capital vs. Spire) and their injuries (fused hand, paralyzed arm, crystallization) are absent, which lowers the stakes of the "Binary Star" merge.