As Lane, Line Editor at Crimson Leaf Publishing, I have audited the prose for Chapter 6. The rhythm of the ballroom scene is evocative, and the somatic "bleed" between the characters is handled with excellent sensory economy. However, there are specific voice-signature lapses and a POV shift at the end that require immediate correction.

### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Somatic Texture:** The description of the mana-bleed is visceral and establishes the stakes of their proximity. 
    *   *“I felt his magic flow into the empty spaces of my depleted mana-wells like the first rain after a drought.”* (Excellent use of tactile imagery).
*   **Rhythmic Contrast:** The shift from the "slow-motion" realization of the assassination attempt to the "explosion" of the fire magic is timed perfectly.
*   **Voice Hits:** Mira’s use of "past and rot" (Line 41) to describe the Imperial Court is a strong emotional anchor for her fury.

**VOICE SIGNATURE CHECK:**
*   **Mira:** YES. Her use of "obviously" to denote sarcasm and her tactile descriptions ("grinding ice against my molars") are distinct.
*   **Dorian:** YES. His "Formal Understatement Scale" is well-employed (e.g., "This is suboptimal," "not auspicious").

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### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **Name Consistency:** In the Voice Profile context, he is **Dorian Thorne**. In the chapter text, he is introduced as **Dorian Solas**.
    *   *Correction:* Standardize to **Dorian Solas** (per the RAG Character State) or **Dorian Thorne**. *Solas* appears consistently in this draft; ensure the Voice Profile in the guide is updated to match the active Character State.
*   **POV Breach:** The final paragraph shifts from Mira’s Internal Monologue to an Omni/Third-Person perspective of Dorian.
    *   *Original:* "She had pulled him out of the path... she stood in the middle of the empty ballroom..."
    *   *Correction:* Rewrite into Mira’s POV or delete. As a tight-third chapter centered on Mira, we cannot suddenly see her from the outside.

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### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **The "Calculated" Extraordinary:** Dorian’s voice profile states he reserves "extraordinary" for maximum effect. In the dance scene, he uses it—which is great. However, Mira uses it in her internal monologue twice and then Dorian repeats it. It dilutes the impact.
    *   *Reference:* "the extraordinary... display they required." (Line 104).
    *   *Fix:* Change Line 104 to "The... *sufficient*... display they required." This saves Dorian's "Extraordinary" (Line 126) for the moment he truly means it.

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### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Rhythmic Economy:** (Line 13) 
    *   *ORIGINAL:* "Dorian Solas looked like a portrait of Imperial perfection, which only made me want to set his coiffed silver hair on fire."
    *   *SUGGESTED:* "Dorian Solas looked like a portrait of Imperial perfection. I wanted to set his coiffed silver hair on fire."
    *   *RATIONALE:* Removing "which only made me want to" tightens the punchline and fits Mira’s blunt, action-oriented voice.
*   **Adverb Cull:** (Line 103)
    *   *ORIGINAL:* "Dorian whispered, stepping back but keeping his hand firmly in mine."
    *   *SUGGESTED:* "Dorian whispered, stepping back, his grip tightening on mine."
    *   *RATIONALE:* "Firmly" is a weak adverb. Replacing it with an action (grip tightening) shows the tension better.

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### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do NOT "fix" Mira’s sarcasm.** Phrases like "obviously" used in contexts where the truth is the opposite (Line 11, Line 116) must remain.
*   **Do NOT smooth Dorian’s dialogue.** His "Evidence suggests" and "Suboptimal" are his character armor; they should feel slightly stiff to the reader.
*   **Do NOT remove the "smell of past and rot."** It is a specific world-building metaphor that functions as Mira’s highest curse.

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### 6. VERDICT: REVISE
The chapter is strong, but the **POV shift at the final paragraph** and the **Name Discrepancy (Thorne vs. Solas)** are technical failures that must be reconciled before this moves to the Roundtable.