### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The "Five-Foot Rule" Implementation:** The use of a physical constraint to force intimacy is classic romance trope-work, executed here with high stakes.
*   **Dorian’s Linguistic Shielding:** The phrase *"the circumstances are... not auspicious"* (following a near-death experience) perfectly captures the Formal Understatement Scale.
*   **Mira’s Tactile Processing:** Descriptions like *"the heat of the stone against my cheek"* and *"the rhythmic, maddeningly precise clink of a spoon"* align with her tactile-first character profile.
*   **Voice Signature Consistency:** 
    *   **Mira:** Uses "obviously" sarcastically (*"Obviously, a perfect cup of tea is the most important thing..."*); uses the self-interrupting "Actually. No." (*"We could — actually. No. Yes."*); uses the peak-fury "Past and rot."
    *   **Dorian:** Uses "the evidence suggests"; uses "extraordinary" as a heavy-weight superlative; maintains rigid grammar until the final emotional break.
*   **Can identify dialogue without tags?** **YES** for both Mira and Dorian. Their sentence structures (Mira's fragments vs. Dorian's clinical precision) are highly distinct.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **Naming Inconsistency (Dorian):** The Project Description and Character State list him as **Dorian Solas**. However, the Chapter 10 text refers to him as **Dorian Thorne**. 
    *   *Correction:* Change all instances of "Thorne" to "Solas" to match the established series bible and the specific mention of the "Solas-Pyre Academy."
*   **Healing Discrepancy (Dorian's Arm):** The Character State for Ch-10 notes his "paralyzed arm healed by Nexus surge." However, the text says he is *"measuring the tea leaves... his movements slow and agonizingly deliberate"* and then *"He handed me a cup."* Using both hands for delicate tea service suggests he is fully healed, but the text attributes his slowness to "exhaustion" rather than the transition from paralysis.
    *   *Correction:* Add a brief line via Mira’s POV noticing his arm moving—a silent acknowledgment that the "Grey" resonance fixed what the "Ice" resonance broke.

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **The Proximity Logic:** The Imperial mage states they must stay within five feet, but later Mira says, *"I walked over to him, stopping when my heat-aura began to mingle... We were exactly four feet apart."* If the limit is five feet, "exactly four feet" isn't a moment of tension; it's well within the safety zone. 
    *   *Correction:* Adjust the dialogue to emphasize that even at four feet, the "static" or "pull" is physically taxing, or reduce the safety margin to three feet to make four feet a "danger zone."
*   **The "72-hour" vs. "60 years" jump:** Mira says, *"If I have to share your blood and your pulse for the next sixty years..."* but the medical decree was only for 72 hours of stabilization.
    *   *Correction:* Clarify if Mira is referring to the permanent soul-bond/tether (the "Grey" resonance) or just the immediate medical proximity.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Rhythm/Economy (ORIGINAL):** *"I manage to roll onto my side, my arm brushing against Dorian’s sapphire-blue robes. The contact sent a jolt of ice-water through my veins that balanced the fever in my skin."*
    *   **SUGGESTED:** *"I rolled onto my side. My arm brushed his sapphire robes—a jolt of ice-water that leveled my fever."*
    *   **Rationale:** Tightens the prose by removing "managed to" (filler) and "through my veins" (cliché).
*   **Rhythm/Economy (ORIGINAL):** *"He was measuring the tea leaves with a silver scale, his movements slow and agonizingly deliberate."*
    *   **SUGGESTED:** *"He weighed tea leaves on a silver scale, his movements agonizingly deliberate."*
    *   **Rationale:** Increases the "weight" of the sentence by removing "slow and" (redundant with deliberate) and "was measuring" (passive).

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not "fix" Mira's repetitive use of "It feels like" or "It seems like."** These are her specific voice markers for processing the world through intuition/tactile sensation.
*   **Do not "fix" Dorian's "the evidence suggests" as being repetitive.** It is his primary verbal tic.
*   **Do not smooth out the technical/clinical "medical" dialogue** from the Imperial mages; it provides the necessary contrast to the emotional heat of the leads.

### 6. VERDICT
**REVISE** (Mainly for the Surname/Continuity error regarding "Solas" vs "Thorne" and the arm-healing clarity). The voice work is exceptional and needs no adjustment.