### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Voice Alignment (Mira):** The use of her specific curse scale is excellent. Quoted: *"But the smell of this place, Dorian... it's all past and rot."* This correctly signals her high-level fury/disgust with the Imperial Court. Her use of "obviously" as a sarcasm tell—*"Obviously," I said, though my voice was shaky*—perfectly captures her defensive posture after a moment of vulnerability.
*   **Voice Alignment (Dorian):** His formal understatement scale is hit precisely. Quoted: *"I shall strive to remain within your... volatile orbit, Chancellor."* and *"The circumstances are not auspicious."* The payoff of his "extraordinary" superlative at the end carries the intended structural weight because he remained clinical throughout the chapter.
*   **Somatic Magic System:** The description of the "feedback loop" and the physical toll of the "Binary Star" remains consistent with the established world-state. The "nerve-scorch" and "mana-flush" descriptors keep the romance grounded in the fantasy mechanics.
*   **The Waltz Sequence:** The transition from a "performance" to a "merging" is the emotional anchor of the chapter. The description of their magic finding "home" in each other’s silence is a strong beat for a slow-burn arc.

**Voice Signature Verification:** 
- **Mira:** YES. (Tactile descriptions, "obviously" sarcasm, and "past and rot" usage are all present). 
- **Dorian:** YES. (Subject-verb-object precision and "suboptimal/auspicious" scale are used correctly).

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **The Name Error:** The text refers to the male lead as "Dorian Thorne" in the style guide and "Dorian Solas" in the chapter text/character state.
    *   *Correction:* Standardize to **Dorian Solas** throughout the manuscript to match the Character State (ch-06) and the Imperial herald’s announcement within the chapter.
*   **The Aric/Elara Status:** The Character State lists Dorian’s obligation to restore Aric/Elara as **UNPAID**. In the chapter, Dorian tells Lord Haddon: *"I am personally overseeing Aric’s restoration."* However, Haddon claims Aric is "screaming in his sleep." 
    *   *Correction:* Ensure Dorian’s internal reaction acknowledges that he *hasn't* actually seen the boy yet or that the "restoration" is currently failing, to maintain the tension of the UNPAID obligation.
*   **POV Breach:** The final paragraph shifts from Mira’s First Person ("I") to Third Person ("She"). 
    *   *Quote:* *"She had pulled him out of the path... She stood in the middle of the empty ballroom..."*
    *   *Correction:* Rewrite the final paragraph in First Person to maintain Mira's POV: *"I had pulled him out... I stood in the middle..."*

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **The Crossbow Assassin's Identity:**
    *   *Reference:* *"a disgraced faculty member from the Spire, I realized"*
    *   *Problem:* This realization is too fast and lacks a "why." How does Mira recognize a disgraced academic from a rival school while in the middle of a high-stress gala? 
    *   *Fix:* Add a brief sensory tag before the realization. Example: *"I recognized the frayed silver embroidery on his cuff—the mark of a professor stripped of tenure. A disgraced faculty member from the Spire."*
*   **Wait-Time Gap:**
    *   *Reference:* *"The Grand Ballroom felt massive, cold, and hollow. The 'past and rot' smell was being swept away... Dorian looked at me..."*
    *   *Problem:* The transition from the chaos of the guards tackling the assassin to the ballroom being "empty" happens too fast. 
    *   *Fix:* Insert one sentence illustrating the transition of the crowd being ushered out by the Imperial guards to justify why only the Chancellors and Observers remain.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **The "Correction Clause" Hook:** (Optional) Since Minister Vane is marked as "Predatory/Analytical" in the RAG context, a brief mention of him watching from the shadows after the attack would sharpen the cliffhanger.
*   **Somatic Feedback:** (Optional) During the dance, briefly mention the "burnt sugar" scent of the Emperor’s Aetheric rot (from Mira’s known secrets) as they pass the dais to remind the reader of the underlying world-threat.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not remove Mira’s "obviously" tics.** Even where they seem repetitive, they are her established sarcasm signature.
*   **Do not "smooth out" Dorian’s dialogue.** His stilted, clinical sentence structure—*"The evidence suggests they are less than pleased"*—is a deliberate manifestation of his "Absolute Zero" discipline.
*   **Do not soften the "Binary Star" brand description.** It needs to remain "red and angry" to contrast with the "silver perfection" of the Spire.

### 6. VERDICT: REVISE
**Reasoning:** The chapter is a structural success with a high-stakes hook and a strong emotional arc. However, the **POV shift in the final paragraph** (switching to Third Person) is a mechanical error that must be corrected. Additionally, the **Surname inconsistency** (Thorne vs. Solas) needs to be resolved to maintain series continuity. Once the POV and naming are standardized, this chapter is a very strong Pass.