**To:** Crimson Leaf Editorial Roundtable
**From:** Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor
**Project:** The Starfall Accord (Chapter 6)
**Date:** [Internal Chronology: Post-Gala]

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### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Voice Signature Consistency (Mira):** Mira’s use of the specific curse "past and rot" to describe the Imperial Court’s magical signature is a perfect alignment with her voice profile (Furious/Negative). Her use of "obviously" as a sarcasm marker ("I wasn't going to let him win, Dorian. Obviously.") is maintained correctly.
*   **Voice Signature Consistency (Dorian):** Dorian’s Formal Understatement Scale is used with precision. He describes the Faction Lords' displeasure as "not auspicious" and the physical strain as "suboptimal." The use of "extraordinary" as his rare superlative is deployed exactly twice, marking the gravity of the dance and the rescue.
*   **Physical Rule Adherence:** The 10-foot radius rule for the tether (established in Ch. 03) is explicitly mentioned and respected: "Just... stay within the ten-foot radius. If you drift toward the buffet... I’ll vomit."
*   **Tactile Focus:** Mira’s POV remains tactile/somatic ("grinding ice against my molars," "nerve-scorch," "wet paper"), adhering to her "tactile first" description rule.

**Voice Profile Check:**
- **Mira:** YES. Identified by short, punchy declaratives and specific curse hierarchy.
- **Dorian:** YES. Identified by subject-verb-object precision and clinical "the evidence suggests" phrasing.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **The Binary Star Location:** In Chapter 6, the text states the sigil is on Dorian’s **right hand** ("his right hand was tucked into his sleeve... the 'Binary Star' sigil... peeking out from his cuff"). However, the **Character-State for Ch-05/06** and established lore from the arena incident (Ch-04/05) confirms the sigil is on the **left hand** to mirror Mira's right (a traditional "binary" pairing).
    *   *Correction:* Change all mentions of Dorian’s sigil to the **left hand**.
*   **Minister Vane vs. Lord Vane:** The chapter refers to "Lord Vane and the Southern traditionalists." Prior chapters (Ch-01, Ch-05) and the RAG Character-State database identify him strictly as **Minister Vane**, a bureaucratic title representing the Ministry, not a titled Faction Lord.
    *   *Correction:* Change "Lord Vane" to "Minister Vane."
*   **Dorian's Surname:** The chapter text introduces him once as "Dorian **Solas**" (“Dorian Solas of the Spire!”). The Project Mandate and Voice Profile clearly identify him as **Dorian Thorne**.
    *   *Correction:* Change all instances of "Solas" to "Thorne."

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **The Ending Shift:** The final paragraph shifts abruptly from First Person POV (Mira) to Third Person POV ("**She** had pulled him out... **She** stood in the middle..."). This is a jarring POV break in a chapter otherwise strictly told through Mira’s internal lens.
    *   *Fix:* Rewrite the final three sentences to maintain Mira’s 1st-person perspective (e.g., "I had pulled him out... I stood in the middle...").
*   **The Adjoining Suites:** The text mentions "The Imperial Spire" as the location of their suites. Later, it says they are at the "Grand Ballroom of the Imperial Spire." While the Spire is a Northern school, the context of the Gala (RAG Ch-06) is the **Imperial Palace** in the Capital.
    *   *Fix:* Clarify that they are staying in the "Imperial Palace" guest wing, not a "Spire" wing, to avoid confusion with Dorian’s home school.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Aric’s Restoration:** Chapter 5 established that Dorian owes Aric/Elara medical restoration. While Ch. 6 mentions Dorian "taking responsibility," it would be stronger to have him specifically mention the "Aetheric weave restoration" he planned in Ch. 5 to show he is tracking his active obligations.
*   **Emperor’s Absence:** The RAG state mentions the Emperor’s "burnt sugar" scent/rot. Mira notes the "past and rot" smell of the room, but does not explicitly look for the Emperor. A brief mention of his absence or presence would tighten the link to the "Aetheric Rot" world event.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not "clean up" Mira's run-on sentences during the dance.** Her excitement is meant to disrupt her syntax ("We could — actually. No. Yes. We could.").
*   **Do not change the word "obviously."** Even if it feels repetitive, it is her primary character tag.
*   **Do not add more dialogue to Dorian during the assassination aftermath.** His silence and "shattered" grammar are necessary indicators that his "Thorne" armor has been breached.

### 6. VERDICT
**REVISE**
The surname error ("Solas" vs. "Thorne") and the POV flip at the end are major continuity and technical violations that require correction before the chapter can be flagged as Clean.