**1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE**
*   **Mira’s Voice Signature (Tactile/Active):** The description of the bond merging is perfectly aligned with her profile: "I could feel the structure of his soul... as a vast, silent glacier." Her use of her curse scale is accurate: "Stars' sake" for mild realization and "burning memory" for the high-stakes emotional resolution. Her interruptive thought pattern is preserved: "Actually. No. Yes. We could." / "Actually. No. It's perfect."
*   **Dorian’s Voice Signature (Formal Understatement/Analytical):** His emotional peak is signaled correctly via his superlative "extraordinary." His reliance on "The evidence suggests" and "The circumstances are... not auspicious" maintains his established persona even in the face of a cataclysm.
*   **Power Dynamics:** The reversal where Dorian uses Mira's sarcasm tell ("Obviously") effectively signals their completed arc and new unity.
*   **Thematically Consistent Resolution:** The "Grey Era" feels earned through the established "Binary Star" and "Paradox" mechanics from Chapters 02 and 07.

**VOICE CHECK:**
*   **Mira:** YES. Identified by tactile descriptions ("fingers locking into... silver-fox fur"), verb-first dialogue, and specific tiered cursing.
*   **Dorian:** YES. Identified by analytical framing ("assessing the transition," "not entirely guaranteed") and rigid grammatical completeness until the very end.

**2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY**
*   **NAME ERROR:** The text refers to Dorian's subordinate as "Regent Thorne" (line: "Regent Thorne," Dorian corrected him softly).
    *   **Contradiction:** Chapter 10 and the [character-state] RAG established **Kaelen** as the First Regent and his name as **Kaelen**. "Thorne" is listed in the prompt instructions as **Dorian's last name** (Dorian Thorne — Voice Profile). Calling Kaelen "Regent Thorne" implies he is Dorian’s brother or that Dorian is addressing himself in the third person.
    *   **Correction:** Change "Regent Thorne" to "Regent Kaelen."
*   **LOCATION INCONSISTENCY:** The text places the climax at "High Spire Peak" and the "Crystalline Spire."
    *   **Contradiction:** Chapter 01 and 05 established the schools as the **Pyre Academy** (Mira) and the **Solas Conservatory** (Dorian). While "Crystalline Spire" is a poetic descriptor, the established name of Dorian's school is the **Solas** institution.
    *   **Correction:** Ensure "Solas Conservatory" is referenced at least once to ground the location in established geography.
*   **CHARACTER RECOVERY:** The text states Kaelen's "soul-burn from Ch10 [is] fully cauterized and stable." In Ch 12, he appears "favoring his left leg."
    *   **Ambiguity:** While not a direct contradiction, the [character-state] notes he is "uninjured" physically, though exhausted. 
    *   **Correction:** Align the physical description in the text with the RAG state or update the RAG state to include a limp.

**3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY**
*   **DISTANCE LOGIC:** The text says, "the tether... vanished. It didn't break; it expanded until it encompassed everything." Later, it says Mira "waited for the sensation of my bones being pulled toward him by a metaphysical wire. Nothing."
    *   **Clarity Issue:** The transition from "the tether is now everywhere/everything" to "the tether is gone/I feel nothing" is slightly jarring. 
    *   **Fix:** Explicitly state that the *restriction* of the tether is gone while the *connection* remains as a voluntary background hum. (e.g., "The leash was gone, replaced by a radio frequency I could finally tune out—or in.")

**4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS**
*   **Dorian's Sigil:** The [character-state] mentions a permanent scar on his *right* hand. The text mentions "the 'Binary Star' sigil on his hand" generally. Specifying "right hand" would tighten the continuity between the character sheet and the final prose.
*   **Lyra's Spectacles:** The text notes they are "cracked." Since the Nexus surge healed Aric and Elara, it might be a nice "Grey Era" touch if her vision was restored, though keeping them cracked serves her "professionally satisfied" aesthetic.

**5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS**
*   **DO NOT** smooth out Mira’s "Past and rot" or "Obviously" usage. These are her primary voice markers.
*   **DO NOT** change Dorian's "The evidence suggests" to "I think."
*   **DO NOT** fix the dialogue where Mira interrupts herself. It is a documented character trait.

**6. VERDICT**
**REVISE** (Due to the name error "Regent Thorne" conflicting with the character names/roles established in RAG and Chapter 10).