**EDITORIAL REVIEW: Chapter 7 - The Weave of Ages**
**Editor:** Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor

### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Mira’s Voice Signature:** The use of "past and rot" correctly signals her peak fury regarding Minister Vane. Her internal monologue, *"We could—actually. No. Yes. We could,"* remains consistent with the established pattern of self-interrupting when agitated.
*   **Dorian’s Voice Signature:** His use of "suboptimal" to describe a life-threatening magical surge and "the evidence suggests" at the height of a confrontation are perfectly aligned with his Formal Understatement Scale.
*   **Tactile Magic:** Mira’s physical interaction with the environment—the smelling of "ozone and burnt sugar" in the Imperial decree (referenced from Ch 1) and the "bisalt walls turning translucent" in Ch 7—maintains the tactile-first description required for her character.
*   **The Binary Star:** The reference to the "Binary Star" sigil on Dorian's palm as a "permanent reminder" of their fusion is a strong anchor for the established physical rules of the soul-tether.

**Voice Signature Verification:**
*   **Mira:** **YES.** Her dialogue is action-oriented and her internal corrections (*"Mira, wait—actually. No."*) are distinct.
*   **Dorian:** **YES.** His transition from grammatically complete sentences to the broken *"I am... tied to you"* effectively signals the cracking of his armor.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **ERROR:** **Dorian’s Surname.** In Chapter 1, Mira refers to him as "Dorian Solas" (*"Does Dorian Solas—?"*). However, the Project Character Voice Profile and the later sections of Chapter 7 refer to him as "Dorian Thorne."
    *   **CORRECTION:** Standardize the surname. Per the Voice Profile, it should be **Dorian Thorne**. Update Ch 1 and the intro of Ch 7 to reflect "Thorne."
*   **ERROR:** **The Distance / Geography.** In Chapter 1, the Crystalline Spire is established as being "three hundred miles to the north" of the Pyre Academy. In Chapter 7, Dorian states the Starfall Drift moved "thirty leagues" (approx. 90-100 miles) closer to the vents since they departed the Gala. While not a direct contradiction, the travel time of a "heavy iron-bound carriage" from the Imperial Capital to the Volcanic Reach (presumably a significant distance) back to the Pyre needs to be internally consistent with the "two hours" mentioned in Chapter 1. 
    *   **CORRECTION:** Ensure the "Imperial Capital" location is mapped relative to the North (Spire) and South (Pyre). If the Gala was in the Capital, the carriage ride suggests the Capital is much closer to the Reach than the Spire is.
*   **SIGNATURE DISCREPANCY:** In Ch 1, Mira says Dorian will be at the bridge "polishing his buttons." In Ch 7, he is described as wearing "gold-spun silk of his formal Spire robes." 
    *   **CORRECTION:** Ensure the "buttons" from the Ch 1 mental image match the actual attire described in Ch 7.

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **PASSAGE:** *"He’s going to trigger a catastrophic surge, claim we can't stabilize the Union, and execute the dissolution papers by dawn."*
    *   **FIX:** Clarify the "Correction Clause" mentioned earlier. If the Correction Clause is the legal mechanism for dissolution, explicitly link Vane's seeding of the vents to the triggering of that specific clause so the stakes are mechanically tied to the Imperial Decree from Chapter 1.
*   **PASSAGE:** *"The red spark in the west wing didn't go out; it was extinguished..."*
    *   **FIX:** Explicitly state if Mira is seeing this through a specific magical "sight" or simply "feeling" it through the tether. Since Mira is established as tactile/feeling, ensure the "visual" metaphor of a spark doesn't drift into a different POV or magical rule.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **OPTIONAL:** Reference the "sapphire catalyst" mentioned at the end of Chapter 1. Mira noted she needed it for the Seal before leaving; having her reach for it or realize it's missing during the confrontation with Vane’s rot would reward readers for tracking the Ch 1 setup.
*   **OPTIONAL:** The administrative "Soul-tether" was described as a nauseating "copper" taste in Ch 1. Re-introducing that specific sensory "copper" taste when the tether snaps taut in the plaza would solidify the world-rule of how their bond feels physically.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **DO NOT** "fix" Dorian's lack of a direct apology after Mira strikes him. His response ("The evidence suggests... you are attempting to incinerate the only person left...") is his specific way of showing care.
*   **DO NOT** smooth out Mira’s redundant "obviously" or her "stars' sake" interjections. These are essential thermometers for her emotional state.
*   **DO NOT** change the "suboptimal" dialogue. It is a core pillar of Dorian’s characterization, even in grief.

### 6. VERDICT
**REVISE**
(Required due to the **Solas/Thorne** surname contradiction and the need to align the **Correction Clause** mechanics with the Chapter 1 Decree.)