### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The High Dais of Blackthorn Keep gleamed under torchlight veined with hemomantic runes, but beneath her blood-soaked silk gloves, Isabella Voss felt only the insistent lash of the Peace Vow, demanding her silence."
    *   **Commentary:** This effectively establishes the dual conflict of the scene—the external political ceremony versus the internal, magical agony Isabella must conceal.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "He leaned down, his lips inches from her ear. 'You’re bleeding,' he whispered, a sound meant only for her."
    *   **Commentary:** This line successfully shifts the tension from a broad, public threat to an intimate, personal danger, reinforcing Damien’s predatory vitality.
*   **Quote 3 (Mid):** "*Blood. Blood everywhere,* a voice panicked in the back of her mind. *The gloves won't hold it. The stone is drinking me.*"
    *   **Commentary:** This passage correctly utilizes the character’s "imperfection signature" of repeating keywords when panicked, as defined in her Voice Signature profile.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "He shoved her back against the tapestry-lined wall, his body a barrier of heat and shadow."
    *   **Commentary:** While effective at conveying physical dominance, the "heat and shadow" imagery is slightly cliché for the genre, though it functions well to ground the shift in location.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Isabella Voss**
*   **Line:** "Pray tell, Lord Reginald... does the Blackthorn Coven always treat its guests with such clinical fascination? Or is this scrutiny reserved solely for those you fear might still possess a spine?"
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses "Pray tell" as a sarcastic prefix.
*   **Avoid Forbidden Patterns:** YES. No casual slang; maintains elegant, mid-length sentence structures.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. Performing the "regal correction" mask despite internal panic.

**Damien Blackthorn**
*   **Line:** "Survival is a messy business, is it not?"
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** NO/ERROR. The voice profile for Isabella states she ends sentences with "is it not?" as a specific quirk. Damien using it here dilutes her unique verbal signature. (Note: Damien's profile is less specific on tics, but he should avoid mimicking the protagonist's specific reflective habit).
*   **Avoid Forbidden Patterns:** YES. Maintains a predatory and cruel tone.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. Focused on "dismantling Isabella’s composure" as per his profile.

**Lord Reginald Thorne**
*   **Line:** "The lineage of Voss is ancient, though notoriously... unstable. We shall see if the Blackthorn soil can tame such wild growth."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** N/A (Profile focuses on physical presence/intent).
*   **Avoid Forbidden Patterns:** YES. No slang; maintains a cold, clinical tone.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. Triumphant and acquisitive.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Physical Habit/Tell:** The narrative consistently references Isabella’s relationship with her gloves and the scars beneath. *“Isabella felt a warm, sickening dampness spread further across her palms. The silk of her gloves was already saturated...”* (Early). This aligns perfectly with the "Undamaged Vessel" facade loop.
*   **The Power Dynamic Interaction:** The moment Damien presses his thumb into her scar (Late) is a strong physical manifestation of his profile's "testing the limits" objective. *“He pressed his thumb directly into the center of her weeping scar. Isabella gasped...”*
*   **The Peace Vow Mechanic:** The internal lashing is well-integrated as an active antagonist. *“It was a rhythmic, searing pulse... a phantom whip of thorns that tightened every time her mind strayed toward thoughts of rebellion.”* (Early).

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The Peace Vow... demanding her silence." (Early) / “Pray tell, Lord Reginald,” Isabella said... (Mid) / “Pray, do shut up and finish the theater,” Isabella snapped... (Mid)
*   **PROBLEM:** The text establishes early on that the Vow "demands her silence" and lashes her for "rebellion," yet she engages in multiple instances of sharp, overt backtalk and insults to the High Elder and his son without immediate physical consequence until the very end. This undermines the established "Peace Vow" as a punishing force for dissent.
*   **FIX:** Add a physical beat of pain following her "spine" comment to Reginald to show the cost of her speech. *Rewrite:* “Pray tell, Lord Reginald... reserved solely for those you fear might still possess a spine?” Even as the words left her, the Vow flared, a hot needle of magic sewing her lips shut in her mind, forcing a sharp, silent intake of breath.

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The bride will be escorted to the North Tower to prepare for the night." (Late)
*   **PROBLEM:** Reginald gives a command for an escort, but Damien is able to intercept her and pin her against a wall in a corridor without any of the mentioned escort or court members present.
*   **FIX:** Clarify that Isabella dismissed her guards or that they lagged behind out of fear of Damien. *Rewrite:* "Isabella brushed past the waiting handmaids, her pace too quick for their comfort as she sought the shadows of the corridor."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Isabella’s hand moved instinctively to the lace at her throat, her fingers brushing the Vow-Sealed Locket hidden beneath her collar... She traced the metal, using the small sharp edge of the latch to ground herself."
*   **PROBLEM:** Isabella’s hands are described as being in "blood-soaked silk gloves" that are "already saturated." Touching her collar/locket would logically leave visible bloodstains on her ivory/white throat and lace, which contradicts her objective of maintaining the "Undamaged Vessel" facade.
*   **FIX:** Have her touch the locket *through* the fabric or emphasize she uses a part of her hand not yet soaked. *Rewrite:* "She reached for the locket, then froze, her blood-dampened fingers hovering just inches from the pristine lace of her collar."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Damien's Dialogue (Late Mid):**
    *   **Quote:** "Actually, it is my only concern."
    *   **Suggestion:** This feels slightly too modern/plain compared to the "silken menace" described. Consider adjusting to: "It is the only concern I find worth entertaining."

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do not remove Isabella’s repetitive thoughts:** The line "*Blood. Blood everywhere*" is an intentional voice signature trait for her panic and must remain.
*   **Do not remove the phrase "is it not?":** Even if it sounds repetitive, it is a recorded speech quirk for Isabella.
*   **Do not soften the cruelty:** The physical pressing of the thumb into the wound is essential for the Dark Romance beats and Damien's established "cruelly intrigued" emotional state.

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### 8. VERDICT

**SCORE: 82**
**REVISE**

**Justification:** While the prose is evocative and the characters align well with their profiles, there are two significant "MUST-FIX" items regarding the mechanics of the Peace Vow (which is ignored for the sake of dialogue) and the physical logic of blood-soaked gloves touching white lace while trying to hide a wound. Additionally, Damien encroaches on Isabella's unique verbal tic ("is it not?"), which requires a minor adjustment to maintain character distinction.