### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The High Dais of Blackthorn Keep gleamed under torchlight veined with hemomantic runes, but beneath her blood-soaked silk gloves, Isabella Voss felt only the insistent lash of the Peace Vow, demanding her silence."
    *   **Commentary:** This opening sentence effectively establishes the core conflict—the physical toll of the magic and the disparity between Isabella’s outward "regal" appearance and her internal agony.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "Damien Blackthorn entered with the stride of a man who owned the shadows he walked through. He did not wear the ceremonial robes of his station; instead, he wore charcoal-hued leather and silk that clung to a frame built for violence."
    *   **Commentary:** This passage successfully uses "predatory vitality" as established in the character profile to distinguish Damien from the more clinical or decrepit elders.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "Damien’s expression shifted. The mocking light in his eyes vanished, replaced by something dark and unreadable. He felt the tremor in her arm, the way her magic was fraying under the strain of the Peace Vow’s punishment."
    *   **Commentary:** This accurately executes the "shadow-husband" role, showing his hyper-vigilance toward Isabella’s hemomancy while maintaining his "cruelly intrigued" emotional state.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Isabella Voss**
*   **Quote:** “Pray, do shut up and finish the theater,” Isabella snapped, her composure flickering for the briefest second.
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Uses the sarcastic "pray" prefix as dictated in the voice signature.
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** **YES.** Avoids slang; maintains elegant, mid-length sentence structures.
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** Consistent with her "regal correction" mask and 15% arc position (transitioning to hostage-bride).

**Damien Blackthorn**
*   **Quote:** “Survival is a messy business, is it not?” Damien murmured, his face inches from hers.
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Matches his "predatory vitality" and the profile's description of his taunts masking protectiveness.
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** **YES.** No casual or modern slang used.
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** Focuses on "dismantling Isabella’s composure" as required.

**Lord Reginald Thorne**
*   **Quote:** “The alignment is perfect,” Lord Reginald Thorne murmured... “The lineage of Voss is ancient, though notoriously... unstable.”
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Tone is clinical, acquisitive, and derisive toward the Nightbloom bloodline.
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** **YES.** Language is formal and commanding.
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** Displays the "triumphant; acquisitive" register of an architect of annexation.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Sensory Hemomancy:** The physical description of Isabella’s gloves being "saturated" and her skin "weeping" ("The silk of her gloves was already saturated, the deep crimson fabric hiding the fact that her own skin was weeping") creates a visceral sense of her hidden suffering that must remain.
*   **The Power Dynamic:** The moment Damien catches Isabella’s wrist ("He noticed the way the silk clung too tightly, the way a dark stain was beginning to creep toward her lace cuffs") perfectly captures the "unresolved open loop" of him testing her hemomantic limits.
*   **Refined Defiance:** Isabella’s refusal to grovel even under physical pain—specifically her use of "regal correction"—maintains her character agency despite her legal isolation.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** “Actually, it is my only concern,” Damien replied, his eyes dropping to her gloved hands.
*   **PROBLEM:** Damien’s character profile states his Arc is 08% and his current motivation is "cruelly intrigued." While the dialogue works, his "Known Secret" is that he is *already aware* she is hiding bleeding. The text treats this as a fresh discovery on the dais, which contradicts the RAG "Known Secrets: Aware Isabella is hiding hemomantic scarring/bleeding."
*   **FIX:** Amend the realization to reflect prior knowledge. REWRITE: "“Actually, it is my only concern,” Damien replied, his eyes dropping to her gloved hands with the knowing look of a man who had already scented her secret."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The Peace Vow, combined with the stress of the morning’s preparations, had reopened the scars on her wrists—the etchings of previous oaths that had been the price of her mother’s life and her own temporary safety."
*   **PROBLEM:** This implies Isabella has "reopened" scars, but the RAG world state for Chapter 01 says she is "Active bleeding beneath gloves; severity hidden from Elders." It is unclear if these are scars from *today's* Peace Vow or old scars.
*   **FIX:** Clarify that the new Vow is straining old wounds. REWRITE: "The fresh pulse of the Peace Vow combined with the stress of the morning, forcing the old, jagged etchings on her wrists to weep anew—blood shed for the price of her mother’s life, now mingling with the cost of her own."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Suggestion:** Reference the "Vow-Sealed Locket" more concretely during her interaction with Damien at the end.
*   **Quote:** "She walked through the derisive glances of the court, her head high, the Vow-Sealed Locket burning against her skin."
*   **Reason:** Since this is her "last link to her lineage," having her clutch it when he corners her in the hall would heighten the stakes of her isolation.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do NOT remove** the repetitive use of "is it not?" in Isabella’s dialogue (e.g., "Survival is a messy business, is it not?"). This is a specific speech quirk identifying her psychological state. (Note: Damien mirrors it at the end to taunt her).
*   **Do NOT smooth over** Isabella's fragmented thoughts during her panic ("Blood. Blood everywhere"). This is her specific "imperfection signature" for panic/exhaustion.
*   **Do NOT soften** Damien's cruelty (e.g., pressing his thumb into her wound). This is essential for his "primary tormentor" role in Chapter 01.

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### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** The chapter is atmospheric and follows voice guidelines excellently; however, it has a continuity conflict regarding Damien’s "Known Secret" (his awareness of her bleeding) and some ambiguity regarding the timeline of her wrist scarring versus the current "Peace Vow" trauma. These must be aligned with the RAG character-state.