### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "Liora’s boots scraped against the corroding rungs of the maintenance ladder, each descent syncing with the frayback tremors ripping through her frayed palm..."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively establishes the physical toll of her magic (frayback) and the oppressive setting within the first sentence.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "Liora reached out, her fingers brushing against the rough fabric of his tunic before finding his hand. As their skin met, the violet tether between them flared."
    *   *Commentary:* This illustrates her tactile nature ("reaches for the tactile") as established in her profile, grounding the magic in physical contact.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "The bone-white architecture was becoming so translucent they could see the void of the atmosphere outside the Spindle."
    *   *Commentary:* The visual of the "bone-white" becoming translucent reinforces the "Harmonic Decay" world-state where architecture becomes brittle and see-through.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "The violet tether thrummed like a vein exposed, and in its glow, Liora saw it—not a bond, but teeth closing around her thread."
    *   *Commentary:* This closing line creates a sharp, visceral cliffhanger that mirrors the Loom's transition to a "hunting call."

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Liora Voss**
*   **Line:** "I’ll sever every damn thread you have left!"
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses the specific "I'll sever every damn thread!" phrase from her profile's "Maximum stress" scale.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Speech:** YES. She shows no optimism and avoids saying "Fate will decide."
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. She is vengeful and survivalist, refusing to let Thorne sacrifice himself.

**Thorne Quill**
*   **Line:** "My life for yours. That’s the weave, isn’t it?"
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. He views his life as secondary to Liora’s, manifesting his arc of transition from passive victim to navigational guide.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Speech:** YES. 
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. He is "eerily detached," which matches his status in the context.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Tactile Magic Mechanics:** Liora's fingers "always tracing invisible threads in the air" (Mid) and "fingers snapping an invisible thread" (Mid) are vital character traits that make her Threadbinding feel physical rather than ethereal.
*   **World-State Integration:** The use of "Null-Gas" and "Harmonic Decay" is handled as a physical threat rather than background flavor. Reference: "The gravity here was... wrong. It pulled at her from the left" (Mid).
*   **The Loom’s Evolution:** The shift from a "purr" to a "hunting call" and "clicking teeth" (Late) maintains the horror-thriller escalate required for Chapter 7.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "She wiped a smudge of indigo phlegm from her lip, her heart racing." (Mid)
*   **PROBLEM:** Per the character-state for Ch-07, **Elder Maros** is the one "choking on indigo phlegm (spiritual rot)." Liora’s symptoms are "violet shards in left palm" and "ocular hemorrhaging." Having Liora cough indigo phlegm confuses her symptoms with Maros's specific spiritual decay.
*   **FIX:** "She wiped a smudge of violet-tinted blood from her lip, her vision tunneling as the hemorrhaging worsened."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The Stained Binder... Their eyes were clouded, the pupils gone, replaced by swirling patterns of violet smoke." (Mid)
*   **PROBLEM:** The text identifies this person as a "Stained Binder." While the "Stained" are NPCs in the prompts, it is unclear if this specific character is meant to be a previously known NPC or a new representative. More importantly, the Binder mentions: "The Dirty Circuit... It was never meant to control you."
*   **FIX:** Clarify that this is an anonymous representative of the Stained. Rewrite to: "A Stained Anchor-priest stepped closer, their eyes clouded..."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Optional (Mid):** "Liora’s boots scraped against the corroding rungs... each descent syncing with the frayback tremors ripping through her frayed palm."
    *   *Improvement:* Use "frayed" only once to avoid word repetition. "Each descent syncing with the frayback tremors ripping through her jagged palm."
*   **Optional (Late):** "Through the bone-like substance, she saw it—not the interior of the Spindle, but the space between reality."
    *   *Improvement:* Emphasize the "Loom-sight" shared vision here to clarify *how* she is seeing through solid matter better.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do not remove Liora's repetitive "bind-bind-bind" or "bind or break" mantras.** These are intentional verbal tics representing her panic and decision-making signature (e.g., "Bind or break," she muttered).
*   **Do not soften Liora's dialogue.** Her harshness ("Shut up!", "I'm nobody's anchor") is a core part of her survivalist/vengeful persona in this arc stage.
*   **Do not fix the "weird" gravity.** The warping of architecture is an intentional World State effect called "Harmonic Decay."

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### 8. VERDICT

**VERDICT: REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** While the character voices are perfectly aligned with the RAG data, a significant continuity error exists where Liora manifests the spiritual rot symptoms (indigo phlegm) specifically assigned to Elder Maros in the project brief. This must be corrected to maintain the distinction between their respective "failing" states.