### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The Heart Tree pulsed without a heartbeat, its ancient roots thrumming through Lena's veins like the bayou's own endless breath."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively establishes the "Apotheosis" state described in the RAG context, bridging the gap between biological life and environmental sentience.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "He was different now—his humanity had been pared down to a sharp, efficient blade."
    *   *Commentary:* This succinctly communicates Jax’s 100% arc completion from a corporate asset to a "predatory" guardian.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "The industrial scars were fading, replaced by the rhythmic bioluminescence of a world that didn't need electricity to shine."
    *   *Commentary:* This utilizes the "World State" focus on the ecosystem metabolizing pollutants to create a strong visual of the "Grand Recession."
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "The bayou whispered its final truth—eternal, unyielding, alive—and in that hush, Cypress Bend dreamed forever."
    *   *Commentary:* The rhythmic, almost liturgical quality of the sentence mirrors the "bayou chants" cadence described in Lena’s voice signature.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**LENA DUVAL**
*   **Dialogue:** "*Gator’s truth,* she thought... *The land don’t just take. It keeps.*"
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Uses the required "Gator’s truth" tic.
*   **Avoid Forbidden Speech:** **YES.** Does not say "I give up" or offer any "sorry if" apologies.
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** Matches the "Transcendent serenity" of her finalized state.

**REMY LEBLANC**
*   **Dialogue:** "Always did say this place had a mind of its own, didn't I, cher?"
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Uses the "cher" endearment consistent with his sheet.
*   **Avoid Forbidden Speech:** **N/A.** (No specific forbidden phrases for Remy).
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** Matches the "peaceful resignation" and "Witness" role.

**AUNT MARIBELLE DUVAL**
*   **Dialogue:** "Grand-mère would be proud, Lena... The blood has found its level. The water has filled the glass."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Maintains the "subservient devotion."
*   **Avoid Forbidden Speech:** **N/A.**
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** Align's with her transformation into a "biological component."

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Sensory Grounding:** The chapter consistently hits the "magnolia and mud" scent profile requested in the notes.
    *   *Quote:* "Further out, in the Interior Grove, the scent of magnolia and mud was strongest."
*   **The "Great Silence" Concept:** The enforcement of the EM dead zone is handled with high stakes and clear imagery.
    *   *Quote:* "The magnetic boundary shivered, a ripple of translucent distorted air that sent the drone spiraling into the blackwater..."
*   **Internal Monologue Consistency:** Lena’s panic-response (repeating words) is used correctly even in her transcendent state to show the lingering memory of her human-self.
    *   *Quote:* "*No no, it wasn't a death, no no,* she thought, the words repeating in her mind like a soft chant."

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The Duval Coven (The Grove): DEVOTED — They have transitioned into a priesthood..." (RAG Context) vs. Text: "She found Aunt Maribelle there... She was tending to the bio-maintenance of the Hub, whispering prayers..."
*   **PROBLEM:** While the text captures Maribelle, it refers to the "Duval Coven" as the "machinery... operated with a religious, rhythmic precision" but fails to explicitly show the other members as a "priesthood" beyond Maribelle.
*   **FIX:** Add a brief mention of other coven members dressed in ritualistic or organic garb assisting in the Hub to solidify the "priesthood" imagery.
    *   *Suggested Revision:* "Maribelle moved through the wet tunnels, followed by the silent shadows of the coven—a priesthood in moss-slicked robes tending the roots with rhythmic precision."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The land claims had been swallowed. The boardrooms were silenced."
*   **PROBLEM:** This is slightly too abstract for a final chapter resolution regarding the "TDC Executives."
*   **FIX:** Be more specific about the "No-Fly" containment zones mentioned in the World State RAG to ground the global reaction.
    *   *Suggested Revision:* "The land claims had been swallowed by the rising silt. In distant cities, the boardrooms were silenced as executives signed the 'No-Fly' decrees, surrendering the region to the Veil."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Optional (Physical Tell):** Lena’s sheet mentions she twists her silver locket when lying/hiding. In the text, the locket is now "encased in the living wood of her chest."
    *   *Improvement:* Have her mental focus or a root-tendril brush that specific spot on her chest when she contemplates the "Grand Recession" to signal her lingering human secrets.
    *   *Quote context:* "She felt the silver locket she still wore—or rather, the place where the locket was now encased..."

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do NOT change:** Lena's repetitive "no no" thought pattern. This is an intentional "Imperfection signature" from her character sheet.
*   **Do NOT change:** Jax's lack of dialogue. His arc dictates "humanity secondary" and "silent movement"; his silence is his voice.
*   **Do NOT change:** The "Great Hum" capitalization. This is a specific world-state faction/entity.

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### 8. VERDICT

**SCORE: 92**
**JUSTIFICATION:** The chapter is an excellent capstone that adheres strictly to the character states and voice signatures provided, with minor continuity/clarity fixes required to better align the Hub scenes with the "priesthood" world-building and the specific "No-Fly" zones.

**PASS** (Given the fixes are minor and the prose/voice quality is high).