### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   "Liora's left palm throbbed with violet insistence, the aperture pulsing like a second heartbeat as she slumped against the Threshold's unyielding bulkhead, the air thick with lanolin and the metallic tang of frayed threads." (Early): This effectively establishes the sensory "permanent" markers from the character state (lanolin/indigo) while grounding the reader in her physical distress.
*   "He looked less like a man and more like a map of the Loom’s current erratic geography." (Early): A strong metaphorical bridge that reinforces Thorne’s transition from sacrifice to a necessary component of the machinery.
*   "A demon is just a thread we haven't learned to weave yet." (Mid): This line perfectly encapsulates the character's tactical, fatalistic worldview and her refusal to acknowledge supernatural mystery over mechanical weaving.
*   "The gravity shifted. It was sudden and nauseating—a lurch that made Liora’s stomach drop. Her feet left the floor for a fraction of a second before the Spindle’s dampeners screeched and slammed her back down." (Mid): This passage provides a necessary physical manifestation of the "Indigo Contagion" world event mentioned in the context.
*   "She saw the parents she had lost—brief flickers of their souls, unbound and drifting in the sub-strata of the machine." (Late): This successfully pays off the "Known Secrets" requirement regarding the trauma of her parents' unbinding.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Character: Liora Voss**
*   "Line: 'You’re an anchor-weight, not a martyr,' she snapped, her fingers snapping an invisible thread of discordance by his ear. 'Watch the weave, or it’ll unravel us both.'"
*   **Signature vocabulary/tics?** YES. She uses "anchor-weight" and "weave/unravel" metaphors. She also performs her "snapping an invisible thread" fidget.
*   **Avoids forbidden speech?** YES. She does not say "Fate will decide" or act optimistic.
*   **Emotional register consistent?** YES. She is defiant and fatalistic (Arc 25%).

**Character: Thorne Quill**
*   "Line: 'It’s talking to me,' Thorne whispered, his voice laced with a terrifying awe. 'The Loom. It’s not just a machine anymore. It’s... counting.'"
*   **Signature vocabulary/tics?** YES. Reflects his "Communicating with the Loom" secret.
*   **Avoids forbidden speech?** N/A (No specific forbidden patterns listed for Thorne).
*   **Emotional register consistent?** YES. He is hyper-attuned and protective of Liora.

**Character: Elder Maros**
*   "Line: 'I am delaying... But the Archival Guards are no longer listening to me. They see the stains on your skin, and they see jailers, not protectors.'"
*   **Signature vocabulary/tics?** YES. Uses his bone-white cane and expresses political panic.
*   **Avoids forbidden speech?** N/A.
*   **Emotional register consistent?** YES. Fearful of the Purist breach and his own loss of control.

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The "Dirty Circuit" Mechanics:** The scene where Liora uses Thorne as a "dampening rod" ("drawing the excess frequency from the Loom through Thorne... filtering the purified resonance back into her own weakening thread") beautifully illustrates the unpaid obligation from Chapter 4.
*   **Sensory Consistency:** The repeated mention of "lanolin and indigo dye" and the "violet pulse in her palm" maintains the physical state established in the RAG character-state.
*   **Low-Level Sentience:** Thorne’s auditory isolation from the others regarding the Loom's voice ("...into a single, audible word only Thorne heard: 'Unravel'") maintains the tension of his hidden communication.

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "she slumped against the Threshold's unyielding bulkhead... Liora pushed off the wall, her boots clicking unnervingly loud in the pressurized silence of the lockdown."
*   **PROBLEM:** Earlier in the same page, it establishes "the air thick with... the metallic tang of frayed threads" and "a low-frequency hum that matched the thrum of the Core Drive-Spindle." Describing the room as having "pressurized silence" contradicts the established auditory environment of humming machinery and screaming circuits.
*   **FIX:** "Liora pushed off the wall, her boots clicking unnervingly loud against the industrial thrum that permeated the lockdown."

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The indigo staining had climbed past her elbow, itching beneath her skin like a thousand microscopic needles stitching her flesh to the machine." 
*   **PROBLEM:** The Context (ch-05) states the staining is reaching "mid-bicep." The prose says "past her elbow," which is accurate but less specific than the bicep. More importantly, the character state says she has "indigo staining reaching mid-bicep" but the prose later says "her indigo-stained arm reaching up to finish the braid in her hair." If it's only to the bicep, her hand/fingers wouldn't necessarily be stained unless it's from the aperture.
*   **FIX:** Ensure the distinction between the *aperture* staining her palm/fingers and the *creeping stain* on her arm is clear. "The indigo staining had reached her mid-bicep, while the violet discharge from her palm aperture left her fingertips tacky with dye."

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Metabolic Toll:** (Optional) Given that Liora's state is "physically exhausted," a brief mention of the "Dirty Circuit" actively draining her caloric or thermal energy during the resonance dance would heighten the "biological toll" mentioned in the world state. 
    *   *Quote:* "It felt like hot lead being poured into her veins..."

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Repeated Phrasing:** Do NOT change Liora’s "Bind-bind-bind" repetition. This is her "imperfection signature" for when she is panicked.
*   **Fatalistic Dialogue:** Do NOT "soften" Liora's dialogue with Thorne. Her refusal to touch him or offer comfort ("You’re an anchor-weight, not a martyr") is a core part of her character arc (25%) and her need to avoid vulnerability.
*   **The Metallic Smell:** The smell of lanolin must remain; it is her signature scent linked to her tools.

### 8. VERDICT
**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** While the chapter captures the character voices and specific world-state triggers (Dirty Circuit, Indigo Contagion) with high fidelity, there is a distinct continuity error regarding the "silence" of a room previously described as humming with a sentient machine, and some slight spatial ambiguity regarding the indigo staining vs. the aperture discharge.