### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   "Liora's left palm throbbed with violet insistence, the aperture pulsing like a second heartbeat as she slumped against the Threshold's unyielding bulkhead..." (Early) — This effectively establishes the physical toll of her magic while grounding the scene in the specific setting of the Core Drive-Spindle.
*   "The violet tether stretched, a glowing umbilical cord that shimmered with the wrongness of the Thirteenth Strand." (Early) — The use of "umbilical cord" and "wrongness" succinctly conveys the unnatural, parasitic nature of the new bond between Liora and Thorne.
*   "Maros looked ancient in the indigo glare. The cataracts in his eyes had turned a milky violet, reflecting the heresy below." (Mid) — This visual description reinforces the "Indigo Contagion" world-state and the physical corruption of the Conclave leadership.
*   "She felt the Loom’s frequency. It was a cold, vast intelligence, a consciousness made of a billion intersecting lives, and it was waking up hungry." (Late) — This passage masterfully bridges the "Loom Frequency" world-state with the character's internal sensory experience of the machine's budding sentience.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Character: Liora Voss**
*   **Quote:** "You’re an anchor-weight, not a martyr... Watch the weave, or it’ll unravel us both."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. She uses "anchor-weight" and weaving metaphors ("the weave," "unravel").
*   **Forbidden Speech:** YES. She avoids optimism and remains fatalistic.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. She is defiant and physically exhausted, consistent with her ch-05 state.

**Character: Thorne Quill**
*   **Quote:** "The Loom is... breathing, Liora. It’s heavy. Everything is so heavy now."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. He is hyper-attuned to the Loom, echoing the world-state that he is the only one who can hear it.
*   **Forbidden Speech:** N/A (None listed).
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. He is protective and seething with the Loom's power.

**Character: Elder Maros**
*   **Quote:** "They are here... The breach is starting."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. His dialogue reflects political panic and fear of the Purists.
*   **Forbidden Speech:** N/A (None listed).
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. He is portrayed as hostage to the ritual’s success, matching his 20% arc position.

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Physical Manifestation of Magic:** The description of the indigo staining ("indigo staining had climbed past her elbow, itching beneath her skin like a thousand microscopic needles") is a visceral representation of the "biological toll" described in the Project Context.
*   **Character Physical Habits:** Liora’s specific fidget ("Liora’s fingers went to her hair, unconsciously beginning to braid a stray lock") perfectly matches her Character Sheet instruction: "Unconsciously braids her own hair strands when deep in thought."
*   **Integration of "The Stained" Lore:** The scene where Junior Binders are "obsessively scratching symbols into the floor tiles" successfully foreshadows the "Nascent/The Stained" faction attitude from the World State.

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "Maros looked ancient in the indigo glare. The cataracts in his eyes had turned a milky violet..."
*   **PROBLEM:** The World State for Elder Maros explicitly lists "Physical: ...eyes clouded by **indigo** cataracts," while the text describes them as "**milky violet**." While similar, consistency in high-burn colors is vital for the "Indigo Contagion" motif.
*   **FIX:** "The cataracts in his eyes had turned an indigo-shot milky film, reflecting the mapping of the heresy below."

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The sensation was a violent intrusion. It felt like hot lead being poured into her veins, but the violet pulse in her palm began to synchronize with the beat of the Core." (Mid)
*   **PROBLEM:** It is unclear if she is drawing power *from* Thorne or passing power *to* him at this specific moment, which matters for the "Dirty Circuit" stabilization mechanic.
*   **FIX:** "The sensation of drawing his excess heat was a violent intrusion. It felt like hot lead being poured into her veins..."

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Contextualizing the NPC Memory (Optional):** "Among them, a few Junior Binders sat huddled on the floor... [scratching] forbidden geometries of the Thirteenth." (Late). Suggestion: Explicitly refer to the Binders struggling not to look at the violet light to heighten the "Traumatized/Intrigued" status mentioned in the RAG.

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not change Liora's fatalism:** Her refusal to use hopeful language (e.g., "A minor snag") is a core voice requirement.
*   **Do not change the repetitious verbal tic:** "Bind-bind-bind" (Late) is her established "imperfection signature" when panicked.
*   **Do not remove the smell of lanolin:** This is a specific physical marker in her Character Sheet and must remain in the sensory descriptions.

### 8. VERDICT
**SCORE: 92**
**REVISE**
The chapter is an excellent tonal match for the Project Context and Character Sheets; however, the minor color discrepancy in Maros’s eyes (indigo vs. milky violet) and a slight mechanical ambiguity in the energy transfer during the resonance ritual require targeted revisions for continuity and clarity.