### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   **Early:** "The sap rose in Lena's veins like a lover's fever-dream, pulling her deeper into the Heart Tree's embrace, where the roots no longer whispered—they sang."
    *   *This effectively marries the biological and the ethereal, signaling the finality of Lena's transformation into the land's anchor.*
*   **Mid:** "Jax didn't reach for a rifle. He didn't have one. Instead, he stepped into the waist-deep blackwater, his boots sinking into the rich, rotting muck."
    *   *The short, declarative sentences mirror Jax's shift from a tech-reliant corporate weapon to a primal guardian.*
*   **Mid:** "He felt the digital heartbeat of the TDC—the black-site maps, the kill-codes, the data-mines. He didn't save them. He purged the signal, feeding the electrical pulses directly into the mud."
    *   *Strong imagery showing the "Great Hum" neutralizing technology by metabolizing it.*
*   **Late:** "The ego—the 'Lena' who wanted a normal life, a city apartment, a world without mud—was a thin, tattered veil."
    *   *This provides a clean tie-back to the character's internal conflict and "Want" outlined in the RAG context.*
*   **Late:** "The locket was gone now, fully absorbed, its silver providing a metallic sheen to her translucent ribs."
    *   *A hauntingly specific visual that physicalizes her loss of human identity and the resolution of her "Wound" regarding her mother.*

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT
**Lena Duval**
*   **Line:** "Hellfire... Not yet. No no, not that, no no."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses "Hellfire" (upset) and the repetition "no no, not that, no no" (panicked) as required by the Imperfection Signature.
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** YES. She does not apologize or say "I give up," staying true to her refusal to surrender.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. She is in the late-stage transition to "Bayou Nirvana," oscillating between human panic and serene collective consciousness.

**Jax Harlan**
*   **Line:** "Finality. That's it. Done." (Also "Gator's truth, Lena.")
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Use of "Gator's truth" to state an undeniable fact.
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** N/A for this character.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. His voice is clipped and focused, consistent with a character who has achieved "profound finality and peace."

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Physicality of the Transformation:** The detail of the silver locket softening ("The silver was softening. The metal was weeping into her skin") is a vital sensory anchor for her losing her human connection to her mother.
*   **Jax’s Biological Integration:** The way he handles the drone ("The swamp swallowed the energy before it could even travel ten feet, the moss absorbing the charge like a sponge") reinforces his role as the "apex predator-guardian" rather than a standard action hero.
*   **The Resolution of the Duval Coven:** Describing the coven as "husks of service, their eyes clouded with green cataracts" provides a chilling conclusion to the antagonist thread of Aunt Maribelle.

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "Gator's truth, Lena, he thought, the connection as physical as a hand on her shoulder. The land's gotta eat."
*   **PROBLEM:** The voice signature for **Jax Harlan** does not list "Gator's truth" as his verbal tic. According to the Voice Signature for **Lena Duval**, "Gator's truth" is *her* specific verbal tic. Having Jax use it violates character-specific voice signals.
*   **FIX:** Change Jax's line to reflect his own stoic voice or a shared mental rapport that doesn't borrow her specific verbal tic.
    *   *Revised:* "*It’s the swamp’s way, Lena,* he thought... *The land's gotta eat.*"

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "To her left, the Duval coven moved in a slow, rhythmic circle... They began to chant, a clipped, staccato rhythm that mirrored the drumming of rain on a tin roof. *Take the salt, give the silt. Take the breath, give the wilt.*"
*   **PROBLEM:** This indicates the Coven is physically present in the Siphon Hub Core, but the RAG context states they have transitioned to "Acolytes of the Heart Tree, serving as biological maintenance for the Grove." It is unclear if they are "husks" or if they still possess enough agency to chant.
*   **FIX:** Clarify that the chant is part of their "biological maintenance" or a repetitive, hive-mind echo.
    *   *Revised:* "They began to chant—less a choice and more a biological function of the grove—a clipped, staccato rhythm..."

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Suggestion:** In the scene where Jax purges the drone, emphasize the "Green Fever" scars more as the conduit.
    *   *Reference:* "He felt the digital heartbeat... He purged the signal."
    *   *Reason:* It highlights his unique status as "immune to man-made toxins" and his physical connection to the Great Hum.

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not "clean up" Lena's repetitive speech:** Phrases like "no no, not that, no no" must remain as they are her "Imperfection Signature" for panic.
*   **Do not remove Cajun French:** "Cher" and "mon coeur" are essential to her relationship with Jax and her heritage.
*   **Do not make the ending "happier":** The transition to a "biological singularity" is a permanent world state (ch-17). Attempting to make Lena more "human" at the end would violate the Project Context.

### 8. VERDICT: REVISE
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** While the prose is atmospheric and the character arcs reach their thematic conclusions, there is a significant **Voice Audit failure** where Jax Harlan uses Lena’s specific verbal tic ("Gator's truth"), which dilutes her unique character signature. Fix this and clarify the Coven's physical state to move to a PASS.