### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The high dais of Blackthorn Keep rose like a fang from the shadowed heart of the keep, where the air thickened with the scent of iron oaths and unwilling blood."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively establishes the gothic atmosphere and the central "blood debt" theme of the novel through visceral sensory details.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "It was the look of a wolf who had finally cornered the stag and decided to play with his kill before the first bite."
    *   *Commentary:* While functional, this is a somewhat clichéd predator/prey metaphor that lacks the specific "Blackthorn" or "hemomantic" flavor found elsewhere in the prose.
*   **Quote 3 (Mid):** "Ethereal chains, shimmering with a dark, rubious light, began to manifest around Isabella and Damien."
    *   *Commentary:* This successfully visualizes the magical mechanics of the Binding Ritual, grounding the abstract concept of an "Annexation" into a physical hazard.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "My secrets have a habit of being... rather corrosive."
    *   *Commentary:* This line perfectly encapsulates Isabella’s "managed defiance" and hints at the "Crimson Oath Lash" power without becoming overtly aggressive.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Character: Isabella Voss**
*   **Line:** "Pray tell, Damien, how does one bind a heart with vows of crimson, only to watch it bleed defiance?"
    *   **Signature/Tics?** YES. Uses the sarcastic "Pray tell" prefix and the "is it not?" tag later in the scene.
    *   **Avoid Forbidden?** YES. She maintains her regal distance and avoids all casual slang or apologies.
    *   **Emotional Register?** YES. She is in a state of "managed defiance" and hyper-vigilance, reflecting her 15% arc position as a bound bride.

**Character: Damien Blackthorn**
*   **Line:** "You're late, little bird. I began to fear the Nightbloom had found their spine..."
    *   **Signature/Tics?** YES. His "predatory vitality" is present in the "little bird" diminutive.
    *   **Avoid Forbidden?** YES. He maintains a cruel, aristocratic tone.
    *   **Emotional Register?** YES. He is focused on "dismantling Isabella’s composure," consistent with his profile.

**Character: Lord Reginald Thorne**
*   **Line:** "The sunset fades. The blood of the two houses must become one before the light dies, or the Treaty is forfeit..."
    *   **Signature/Tics?** YES. Commands with "acquisitive power" and treats Isabella as a resource/vessel.
    *   **Avoid Forbidden?** YES.
    *   **Emotional Register?** YES. He behaves as the "architect of the Annexation," focused on the harvest.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Isabella’s Internal Monologue/Coping Mechanism:** The use of "a touch inconvenient" ("It is a touch inconvenient, she thought...") is a vital beat from the voice signature that highlights her specific brand of stoicism.
*   **The Physical Manifestation of Magic:** The description of the Peace Vow as an "internal lash" ("It was a phantom lash, a cognitive whip that struck from the inside out") accurately reflects the Character State documentation and sets the mechanical stakes for her behavior.
*   **The Hemomantic Habit:** The specific action of tracing scars ("She was tracing the faint, jagged outlines of the scars through her gloves...") should be preserved as it is the primary physical "tell" established in her character sheet.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Reginald held out a ceremonial dagger... He caught Damien’s palm first... Then, he turned to Isabella. He didn't wait for her to offer her hand... he sliced through the glove and the skin beneath."
*   **PROBLEM:** This violates the "Open Loop" in the character state for Lord Reginald: *Monitoring the "unmarked vessel" clause*. If the vessel must be "unmarked," Reginald physically scarring her hand in front of the court contradicts his goal of ensuring she remains an "unmarked vessel." Furthermore, the Character State notes her secrecy regarding scars from Reginald is an "UNRESOLVED" loop.
*   **FIX:** Reginald should avoid an intentional cut on her hand, perhaps instead demanding she press her already-bleeding hand (which he suspects or she "conveniently" offers) against the stone, or he uses a drop of the blood already soaking through her glove.
    *   *Rewrite:* "Reginald caught Damien’s palm first... Then he turned to Isabella, his eyes narrowing at the dark stain on her silk. He did not cut her; he simply squeezed her wrist until the existing wounds beneath the lace wept freely for the rite."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Isabella’s vision flared white... Her hemomancy surged. For a heartbeat, the ethereal chains around her bloomed into vicious, spiked lashes, glowing with a blinding, bloody light. The court gasped. Reginald recoiled, his eyes widening with greed. 'Such power,' he whispered."
*   **PROBLEM:** This creates a logic gap. Isabella is under the "Peace Vow," which "punishes Isabella’s dissent with internal lashes." If her magic flares so violently that the court gasps and the antagonist recoils, it should logically trigger a near-fatal backlash from the Peace Vow. The text mentions the Vow and the Ritual "confluencing," but it doesn't clarify why she isn't immediately incapacitated by the Vow's enforcement.
*   **FIX:** Clarify that the surge is a result of the Ritual pulling the magic out of her, rather than her own "dissenting" use of it, to explain why the Peace Vow doesn't kill her instantly.
    *   *Rewrite:* "The Binding Ritual acted as a siphon, dragging the hemomancy from her marrow despite the Peace Vow’s tightening grip. The magic didn't lash out by her will; it was being torn from her, turning the ethereal chains into jagged reminders of the power Reginald intended to harvest."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **The Ending Tone:** (Optional) "Shall we see how much more your magic can spare before you break?"
    *   *Suggestion:* Damien suspects she is hiding the severity of the scarring. It might be more impactful if he mentions the "scars" specifically rather than just "magic" to heighten the tension of her secret being compromised.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do not "fix" Isabella's repetitive thoughts:** The repetition of "blood blood everywhere" (though not used in this specific draft, the obsessive fixation on the blood on her gloves is intended) is a signature of her panic.
*   **Do not remove the "is it not?" tag:** This is a specific ghostly affirmation quirk mentioned in the voice signature.
*   **Do not soften Damien:** His predatory nature is a core element of the "primary tormentor" role established in the context.

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### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** While the prose and character voices are highly accurate to the RAG context, there is a significant continuity error regarding the "unmarked vessel" clause and the unresolved loop of Reginald's ignorance of her scars; having him cut her hand directly contradicts the established world-state tension. The clarity of the Peace Vow's mechanics during the magical surge also requires tightening.