### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   "The sap rose in Lena's veins like a lover's fever-dream, pulling her deeper into the Heart Tree's embrace, where the roots no longer whispered—they sang." (Early) — This successfully establishes the sensory shift from the external world to the internal bioluminescent "Bayou Nirvana."
*   "The silver was softening. The metal was weeping into her skin, its molecular structure being disassembled by the relentless hunger of the swamp." (Mid) — Excellent tactile imagery that visualizes the "Great Hum" metabolizing human technology/artifacts.
*   "Lichen bloomed across its lenses in seconds. Rust bubbled up through the black paint as the 'Great Hum' began to metabolize the metal..." (Mid) — This passage effectively demonstrates the aggressive, sentient nature of the world state "The Grand Recession."
*   "The Duval bloodline hadn't ended; it had simply flowered." (Late) — A concise, punchy sentence that encapsulates the "100% Transitioned" arc of the protagonist.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Lena Duval**
*   **Dialogue:** “Hellfire,” she whispered, her voice sounding like dry leaves skittering over water. “Not yet. No no, not that, no no.”
*   **Signature vocabulary/tics?** YES (Uses "Hellfire" for upset; uses the repetition "no no... no no" which is her explicit imperfection signature for panic).
*   **Avoids forbidden speech?** YES (Does not apologize; does not say "I give up").
*   **Emotional register consistent?** YES (Reflects the struggle of the "ego" being absorbed as per her ch-17 state).

**Jax Harlan**
*   **Dialogue:** "Finality," he grunted, his voice a low predator’s rumble. "That's it. Done."
*   **Signature vocabulary/tics?** YES (Clipped, rhythmic speech reflecting his "corporate weapon" background; uses his internal monologue to confirm "Gator's truth").
*   **Avoids forbidden speech?** YES.
*   **Emotional register consistent?** YES (Reflects his finalized role as "apex predator-guardian").

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Biological-Digital Intersection:** The description of the Siphon Hub being reclaimed is vital. Quote: "Steel girders were being bent into the shape of gothic arches by the weight of the vines. The concrete floor was cracking, allowing the ancient, hungry earth to rise up and swallow the turbines."
*   **The Shared Mental Connection:** The non-verbal communication between Jax and Lena preserves their unique bond. Quote: "There was no need for a kiss, no need for promises. They were the two halves of a new world’s immune system."
*   **Grounding Sensory Details:** The adherence to the voice signature's scent requirement. Reference: "...the air was thick with the scent of magnolia and ancient mud..."

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "To her left, the Duval coven moved in a slow, rhythmic circle... they were husks of service, their eyes clouded with green cataracts."
*   **PROBLEM:** While the RAG context says the Duval Coven is "DEVOUT/SUBSERVIENT," the character sheet for Aunt Maribelle Duval lists her as "antagonist + manipulative coven elder who hoards power." Having the entire coven already reduced to "husks" ignores the specific narrative tension of Maribelle's manipulation mentioned in her relationship profile.
*   **FIX:** Acknowledge Maribelle's specific presence or her final resistance/succumbing to the Heart Tree to close her antagonist arc. Change to: "To her left, the Duval coven moved in a slow, rhythmic circle. Even Aunt Maribelle, once so hungry for her own power, was now just a petal caught in the Great Hum's current, her manipulative grip finally broken by the land's superior claim."

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The air hissed. A TDC extraction drone, a sleek, obsidian-colored bird of prey, broke through the heavy canopy."
*   **PROBLEM:** The "Great Silence" is established as a "Permanent status... where all human technology fails." The explanation that it is a "shielded prototype" is a bit thin given the established rule that the swamp "metabolized technology into nutrients." It creates a brief moment of mechanical confusion.
*   **FIX:** Clarify that the drone is failing *as* it arrives. Change to: "A TDC extraction drone, a sleek, obsidian-colored bird of prey, screamed through the canopy, its engines already coughing sparks as the Great Silence began to claw at its circuits."

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Suggestion:** Enhance the tactile grounding during Lena's panic.
*   **Quote:** "She reached out, her fingers searching for the rough, comforting texture of the cypress bark..."
*   **Reasoning:** The voice signature states she "fingers trails moss, water, bark to ground herself." This is already present, but could be heightened by mentioning the silver locket twisting habit *before* it melts to show her "guilt signal" regarding the life she is leaving behind.

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not "fix" Lena’s repetitive speech:** "No no, not that, no no" is her specified imperfection signature.
*   **Do not remove "Gator's truth":** This is a mandatory verbal tic for stating undeniable facts.
*   **Do not make the prose less "viny":** The meandering sentence structure during Lena’s POV ("her thoughts meandering like a slow-moving creek") is a specific voice signature requirement.

### 8. VERDICT: REVISE
**SCORE: 82**
**JUSTIFICATION:** The chapter is atmospheric and matches most voice signatures perfectly, but it requires a revision to address the continuity of Aunt Maribelle's specific antagonistic role and a slight clarity fix regarding the drone's interaction with the "Great Silence" dead zone.