### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The high dais of Blackthorn Keep rose like a fang from the shadowed heart of the keep, where the air thickened with the scent of iron oaths and unwilling blood."
    *   *Commentary:* This establishes the "Imperial" and "Dark" atmosphere of the Blackthorn Coven while immediately grounding the reader in the central conceit of "iron oaths."
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "He looked at her not as a woman, nor even as a bride, but as a ledger looks at a debt finally being collected."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively communicates Lord Reginald's "acquisitive power" and his view of Isabella as a "biological asset" as established in the RAG context.
*   **Quote 3 (Mid):** "It was the look of a wolf who had finally cornered the stag and decided to play with his kill before the first bite."
    *   *Commentary:* While functional, this is a somewhat cliché metaphor that slightly undercuts the "predatory vitality" attributed to Damien in the character state.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "The blood was beading through the fresh lace she had used to cover the wound, a crimson flower blooming in the center of her palm."
    *   *Commentary:* This physical habit (tracing/beading blood) perfectly aligns with Isabella's "physical habit or tell" while maintaining the chapter's "Hemomantic exhaustion" theme.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Isabella Voss**
*   **Line:** "Pray tell, Damien, how does one bind a heart with vows of crimson, only to watch it bleed defiance?"
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses the "Pray" prefix sarcastically.
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** YES. No use of casual slang; maintains mid-length poetic flourishes.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. Exhibits "managed defiance" and "hyper-vigilance" regarding her scars.

**Damien Blackthorn**
*   **Line:** "I shall hold what is mine until the marrow of the Voss line is spent."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses cold, possessive language ("claim the vessel," "mine").
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** YES. Maintains a "predatory vitality" and "cruelly intrigued" tone without groveling.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. 08% Arc position as "shadow-husband" is clear.

**Lord Reginald Thorne**
*   **Line:** "The blood of the two houses must become one before the light dies, or the Treaty is forfeit and the Nightbloom shall see their gardens salted with the ash of their kin."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Exhibits the "commanding" and "aged" presence of an architect of annexation.
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** YES. No informalities.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. Treats characters as "harvestable resources."

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **The Hemomantic Manifestation:** The physical reaction of Isabella's magic to her environment is a high point. *Quote: "For a heartbeat, the ethereal chains around her bloomed into vicious, spiked lashes, glowing with a blinding, bloody light."*
*   **Isabella’s Internal Monologue Style:** The contrast between her royal external mask and her biting internal sarcasm. *Quote: "It is a touch inconvenient... To be flayed by one’s own magic before the 'I do' is even uttered."*
*   **Damien’s Observational Threat:** His focus on her secrets over her beauty reinforces his "cruelly intrigued" state. *Reference: The moment he ignores the ritual to whisper about her "well of secrets" at the end of the chapter.*

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "He grabbed it, his fingers digging into the space where the silk was dampest. With a swift, cruel motion, he sliced through the glove and the skin beneath."
*   **PROBLEM:** Per the RAG character state, Reginald's open loop is "Monitoring the 'unmarked vessel' clause." If Reginald believes she must be "unmarked," his intentional scarring of her hand during the ceremony (beyond a standard ceremonial prick) contradicts his own obsession with her status as a vessel.
*   **FIX:** "He grabbed it, his fingers digging into the space where the silk was dampest. With a swift, clinical motion, he applied the obsidian blade to her palm—unaware his cut overlapped the jagged, forbidden marks she already carried."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The Peace Vow—that invisible, jagged tether coiled around her soul—snap tight at the flicker of resentment in her chest. It was a phantom lash..."
*   **PROBLEM:** The mechanics of the Peace Vow vs. the Crimson Oath Lash (her magic) are slightly blurred in the middle of the chapter. It is unclear if the chains manifesting are the Vow's punishment or her own magic reacting.
*   **FIX:** Clarify that the Peace Vow is the *internal* deterrent while the Binding Ritual/Crimson Oath Lash are *external* manifestations. "The internal lash of the Peace Vow struck first, a warning against her hatred; then, in response to the ritual's call, her own Hemomancy flickered outward as the Crimson Oath Lash."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **OPTIONAL:** Strengthen the link between the dead mother (Elara) and the current scene.
*   **Quote:** "...who had watched her mother face the headsman with a smile of broken dignity."
*   **Suggestion:** Have Isabella explicitly channel her mother's "regal correction" mask to show the "traumatic template" mentioned in the RAG Context.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do not remove "is it not?" at the end of reflective sentences.** *Example: "Scars are merely the history of one's endurance, is it not?"* This is a specific voice quirk for Isabella seeking "ghostly affirmation."
*   **Do not soften Isabella's reaction to pain.** The "icy silence" followed by "explosive magic" is a core faction/personality trait.
*   **Do not remove the "silk gloves" focus.** The saturated gloves are the primary tension-builder for her "unresolved" secret.

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### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** While the prose is atmospheric and the voice signatures are perfectly aligned with the RAG character sheets, there is a significant continuity conflict between Lord Reginald's "unmarked vessel" mandate and his "cruel" scarring of her hand, and the terminology of the "Peace Vow" vs. "Oath Lash" needs sharper distinction to avoid reader confusion regarding the magic system's stakes.