**EDITORIAL REVIEW: BINDING THREAD (CH-07)**

### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   **"The violet tether between her palm and Thorne's thrummed violent indigo, the only compass in a geometry that had forgotten its shapes..." (Early)**: This effectively establishes the surreal, high-stakes nature of the Blind Weave using the core magic system as the anchoring imagery.
*   **"The air here didn't just smell of ozone; it tasted of unfinished histories and the metallic tang of unmade matter." (Early)**: A strong sensory expansion that reinforces the "unfiltered sea of potentiality" described in the world state.
*   **"Thorne finally turned, and the sight of him made Liora’s breath catch. The violet light was leaking from his tear ducts, staining his cheeks in luminescent tracks." (Mid)**: This provides a visceral, haunting visual of Thorne’s "semi-corporeal" transition mentioned in the character state.
*   **"She grabbed the Violet Tether with both hands, the soul-anchor burning into her palms, charring the skin. The strain was agonizing." (Late)**: This creates a necessary physical consequence for the high-level weaving, aligning with her "frayback" limitation.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Liora Voss**
*   **Line:** "I’ll sever every damn thread in this place before I let you go,"
*   **Signature vocab/tics?** YES. Uses "sever every damn thread," matching her fury scale ("I’ll sever every damn thread!" = furious).
*   **Avoids forbidden speech?** YES. Avoids optimism; humor remains dark/fatalistic.
*   **Emotional register consistent?** YES. Terrified but resolute, moving toward her need to embrace vulnerability (voluntary bond).

**Thorne Quill**
*   **Line:** "It’s not pulling me, Liora... It’s calling you. I’m just the... the conduit. The wire."
*   **Signature vocab/tics?** YES. Reflects his "semi-corporeal anchor" state and resistance to Loom-assimilation.
*   **Avoids forbidden speech?** YES (No specific forbidden patterns listed for Thorne).
*   **Emotional register consistent?** YES. He is increasingly "phased" and struggling against the "hunger."

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Internalization of Magic:** The passage where Liora's fingers "unconsciously braiding a thick strand with frantic, trembling precision" perfectly captures her tactile fidget and the way she reaches for weaving as a grounding mechanism.
*   **Visual Continuity of Corruption:** The description of Thorne’s pupils as "jagged diamonds of indigo" maintains the color-coding of the corruption established in the context (Violet Tether/Luminescent violet veins).
*   **Specific Antagonism:** The revelation that "the 'Dirty Circuit' was engineered sabotage by Elowen Shade" (Late) successfully pays off the open loop from Ch-06 and Ch-07 context.

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "Liora lay there, her chest heaving... She didn't look at him... Liora slowly turned her head. Thorne was standing over her."
*   **PROBLEM:** This overlooks a physical state transition. Earlier, Thorne "tumbled onto a shelf of solid light" with her. If he is now standing over her with "perfect" posture while she is still winded, the transition from him being "not twitching anymore" to standing needs a sharper beat to emphasize the Loom's takeover.
*   **FIX:** "Liora lay there, her chest heaving... By the time her vision cleared, Thorne was already standing over her, his movements no longer jerky but terrifyingly fluid."

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The 'Dirty Circuit' wasn't a natural failure caused by the harmonic decay... And the weaver’s mark at the center of the code was unmistakable."
*   **PROBLEM:** It is slightly unclear how a "Threadbinder" reads "code" on a "terminal" in a way that distinguishes it from digital hacking versus weaving-rituals.
*   **FIX:** "The 'Dirty Circuit' wasn't a natural failure... Within the flickering terminal interface, the underlying thread-logic bore an unmistakable weaver’s mark—the distinct, jagged signature of Elowen Shade."

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Optional:** Enhance the sensory overload. When Liora hears Thorne’s voice as a "layering of sounds," she could briefly mention her "frayback distortion" making the sounds bleed into colors, as per her physical state context.
*   **Quote:** "Liora’s vision was narrowing. The 'frayback' tunnel had begun to take hold..."

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not remove:** Liora’s repetitive "bind-bind-bind" chant. This is identified in her Voice Signature as an "imperfection signature" when panicked.
*   **Do not remove:** Thorne’s "hollow resonance" or "tectonic" voice at the end. This is a deliberate indicator of his "Loom-assimilation" arc (40%).
*   **Do not soften:** Liora’s tactile responses (snapping fingers, braiding hair) as these are her core grounding habits.

### 8. VERDICT: REVISE
**SCORE: 82**
**JUSTIFICATION:** While the prose is atmospheric and the voice signatures are highly accurate to the RAG context, there are critical clarity issues regarding the "Dirty Circuit" reveal (blending tech and magic without a clear bridge) and a slight continuity gap in Thorne's physical repositioning at the end of the scene. Individual fixes are required for the "MUST-FIX" sections.