### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Fundamental World Metrics:** The geographic and magical distances established here are vital anchors for the series: The Crystalline Spire is "three hundred miles to the north" of the Pyre Academy, and the "Obsidian Bridge" marks the "Great Crevasse" where the "Volcanic Reach met the permafrost of the Northern Wastes." These establishing facts must remain the baseline.
*   **The Six-Foot Safety Margin:** The text establishes a concrete world rule: "The statutory limit for elemental safety." This provides a physical metric for the "Slow Burn" trope. The fact that their auras clash and create "white noise and stinging vapor" when this limit is breached is a strong mechanical foundation for their conflict.
*   **Sensory Magic Signatures:** Mira’s scent profile (cedarwood and white ash) versus the Emperor’s (ozone and burnt sugar) and Dorian’s (winter air and ancient ice) are distinct and must be tracked to ensure they don't drift in later chapters.
*   **The Soul-Tether Mechanics:** The physical sensation of the "bridge of light that slammed into her solar plexus" and the subsequent "sensory bleed" (feeling Dorian’s heartbeat and loneliness) creates a high-stakes magical bond that justifies the "Forced Proximity" trope.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **Contradiction: Mira's Travel Time:** In the first scene, Mira notes Dorian will be at the bridge "in two hours." She describes the Spire as being "three hundred miles to the north." Shortly after, she arrives first. 
    *   *The Error:* Unless Mira or Dorian possess near-instantaneous teleportation (which isn't explicitly stated), a 300-mile journey in under two hours is a violation of travel logic for this tech level.
    *   *The Correction:* Either explicitly mention Mira using a "High-Heat Flare" or "Thermal Glide" to travel, or adjust the timeline/distance to be more realistic (e.g., "The bridge was the halfway point, 150 miles away," and it took a day of travel).
*   **Contradiction: The Nature of the Accord:** Mira calls it "The Starfall Accord" and later the "Imperial Accord." She mentions "The Emperor has signed the Accord." However, the document she reads is described as an "Imperial Decree."
    *   *The Error:* An Accord usually implies a negotiated agreement; a Decree is a mandate. While the *result* is a merger, the terminology swaps between Mira's internal monologue ("The bastard") and her dialogue ("The Emperor has signed the Accord") are slightly inconsistent with her personality.
    *   *The Correction:* Ensure Mira consistently refers to it as "The Decree" or "His Mandate" in her head, while "The Starfall Accord" is used only when referring to the formal document title.

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **Internal logic check on "Soul-Tether":** 
    *   *Reference:* "The technology of survival is often ancient... The Emperor’s mages have prepared the parchment."
    *   *The Issue:* It is unclear if the Emperor *knows* this will cause a sensory bleed/soul-bond, or if this is a side effect of Mira and Dorian’s specific elemental incompatibility. If the Emperor intended the soul-bond, it’s an act of war; if he didn't, it's a catastrophe.
    *   *The Fix:* Add a single sentence to Dorian's dialogue or Mira’s thought process clarifying if this "Soul-tether" was the *intended* result of the "Starfall Union" decree or an ancient ritual they are forced to perform to make the Union work.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Magic School Hierarchy (Optional):** Define the "Senior Proctor" (Kaelen) rank more clearly. Is he second-in-command, or just a bodyguard? This will help when the faculties merge.
*   **Visual Distinction of Blood (Optional):** Mira’s blood is "hot, almost steaming" and Dorian’s is "crimson-black." Mentioning if Dorian’s blood is unusually cold (viscous/sluggish) would enhance the elemental contrast.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not soften Mira's anger:** Her aggressive use of magic ("footsteps leaving faint, smoking floral patterns") is essential to her characterization as the "kinetic" foil to Dorian's "stillness." Even if it seems "un-chancellor-like," it is her established character.
*   **Do not clarify the Starfall yet:** The "silver-black ether" devouring constellations should remain an ominous, slightly vague threat for now to maintain the atmospheric tension.

### 6. VERDICT
**REVISE** 
(Required for travel-time logic and terminology consistency regarding Decree vs. Accord.)