### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   **Early:** "The mist didn’t just drift; it coiled, heavy and possessive, around the rusted iron struts of the machine that was no longer just a machine. It was a throat, and Lena was the voice."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively establishes the fusion of industrial and organic elements that defines the current "Warden" state of the setting.
*   **Mid:** "She was anchored. The Siphon was a golden nail driven through her soul into the floor of the bayou."
    *   *Commentary:* The metaphor of the "golden nail" powerfully communicates the permanence and pain associated with Lena’s arc transformation.
*   **Mid:** "Reality felt soft, like water-logged wood. For a second, Lena saw two versions of Jax: the man standing before her, and a shimmering, translucent shadow of him, tethered to her heart by an ethereal, golden cord."
    *   *Commentary:* This visually manifests the "Life-Debt" mechanic described in the context, grounding a magical concept in the physical viewpoint of the protagonist.
*   **Late:** "Without hesitation, she pricked the center of her silver-scarred palm. A single drop of dark, thick blood welled up."
    *   *Commentary:* This reinforces the "Bayou Binding" core principle where power requires a physical, symbiotic sacrifice from the practitioner.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT
**Lena Duval**
*   "The cypress don't lie, cher—the roots whisper what your heart's too stubborn to hear." 
    *   Signature vocabulary/tics? **YES** (Uses "The cypress don't lie," uses "cher").
    *   Avoids forbidden patterns? **YES** (No preemptive apologies).
    *   Emotional register consistent? **YES** (Reflects her new maternal/Warden authority).
*   "Gator's truth. I can’t leave the water without tearing the world in two." 
    *   Signature vocabulary/tics? **YES** (Uses "Gator's truth" to state undeniable fact).

**Jax Harlan**
*   "Hellfire, Lena. We fought TDC to get you free, not to turn you into a damn battery for the swamp."
    *   Signature vocabulary/tics? **YES** (Uses "Hellfire"—though Lena’s sheet lists this as her ‘upset’ scale, the genre context supports Jax using rougher, similar bayou-slang).
    *   Avoids forbidden patterns? **N/A** (No forbidden patterns listed for Jax).
    *   Emotional register consistent? **YES** (Shows his transition to combatant-guardian who is protective but terrified of her change).

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Tactile Grounding:** The prose consistently follows Lena’s profile to reach for tactile sensations: "fingers trailing over a patch of damp, velvet moss" and "twisting the chain until it bit into her skin."
*   **The Siphon/Swamp Symbiosis:** The description of the environment acting as an immune system ("The flora and fauna are actively aggressive toward outsiders") is well-executed when "tangled vines... accelerated their growth... sealing the land-approaches."
*   **Mechanical Stakes:** The mention of "Harmonic Bleed" (early/mid) and the specific detail that Jax is looking for a "mole within Terrebonne Security" (mid) keeps the plot anchored in the established chapter 12/13 open loops.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "...she pricked the center of her silver-scarred palm. A single drop of dark, thick blood welled up."
*   **PROBLEM:** Earlier in the chapter, the text states: "Her palm, once an open wound of light and agony, was now a sealed silver brand—a dormant mark of what she had become." If the palm is now a "silver brand" or "scarred," drawing blood easily with a "dried garfish tooth" might conflict with the idea of it being a supernatural, sealed mark, but more importantly, the prompt states her skin "radiates a faint silver bioluminescence." The blood itself should likely reflect this integration.
*   **FIX:** "She pricked the center of her silver-scarred palm. A single drop of dark blood, shot through with threads of silver light, welled up."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The air began to shimmer. Blue-white ghost-lights... Reality felt soft, like water-logged wood. For a second, Lena saw two versions of Jax..."
*   **PROBLEM:** It is unclear if this is a literal hallucination caused by the "Harmonic Backflow" or a specific "School/Discipline" ability Lena is consciously using to see the Life-Debt. 
*   **FIX:** Clarify that her "merged" state is thinning the Veil. "As the Siphon’s frequency spiked, the Veil thinned, and Lena’s new sight bled into the physical world. She saw two versions of Jax..."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Voice Reinforcement:** In the passage "She leaned back against the pulsating metal, her spine aligning with the Machine-Witch resonance," adding a mention of her scent would satisfy the "Notes for Writers" regarding her smelling of "magnolia and mud," which balances the metallic setting.
*   **Cajun French:** Lena’s voice profile mentions she uses "mon coeur" for those she cares for. Adding this to her interaction with Jax during her "fever" moment would deepen the emotional stakes. Quote: "Jax," she breathed... "Stay still, *mon coeur*."

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Repetitive Panicked Speech:** The line "no no, not that, no no" must remain. It is her "Imperfection signature" for when she is panicked.
*   **Clipped Chants:** The rhythmic, clipped nature of her spell ("Water bind, root entwined...") must not be expanded into flowery prose, as it mirrors the "sentencing length pattern" of bayou chants in her profile.
*   **Dialect:** The use of "cher" and the lack of standard formal apologies ("I'm the Warden now... I can't leave") are vital to the "stubborn independence" and "maternal authority" of the character.

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### 8. VERDICT: PASS
**SCORE: 92**
*The chapter expertly integrates the complex RAG requirements for the "Warden" transformation, the Life-Debt, and Lena’s specific voice tics ("Gator's truth," "The cypress don't lie"). Only minor continuity points regarding the physical description of her blood/scar and clarity on the Veil-thinning required attention. No major structural rewrites are necessary.*