### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   **Early:** "The 'Urban Wall' pressed in on her, the hum of fluorescent lights and the distant throb of the electrical grid sounding like hornets trapped in her skull."
    *Commentary:* This effectively visceral simile illustrates the "sensory overload" and "physical illness" mentioned in the Project Context, grounding the magical "Severing" in the reader's senses.
*   **Mid:** "She’s trading the soul of the Bend for a crown of black glass. She’s complicit, helping them clear the 'metaphysical brush' while they bring in the bulldozers."
    *Commentary:* The metaphor of "metaphysical brush" cleverly bridges the gap between the supernatural coven and the corporate interests of Terrebonne Development Corp.
*   **Mid:** "Maribelle is using it like a... like a lightning rod. The city noise, the industrial hum—it’s feeding the connection."
    *Commentary:* The prose here successfully integrates the "Key Item" (locket) and "Key Term" (industrial frequency) established in the World State metadata.
*   **Late:** "Her eyes, stripped of their ability to see the shimmering auras of the supernatural, saw only the mundane world—the trash cans, the crumbling brick, the flickering streetlamp."
    *Commentary:* This passage underscores the character's "blindness" to the supernatural, emphasizing her vulnerability without her magic.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Lena Duval**
*   **Line:** "I know... I know, no no, I know."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses the "imperfection signature" (repeats words when panicked: "no no, not that, no no").
*   **Forbidden Speech:** YES. She avoids saying "I give up" or apologizng preemptively.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. She is in the "crippled survivor" stage of her arc, desperate but stubborn.

**Jax Harlan**
*   **Line:** "I used to think you were just eccentric, Duval. Or high on swamp gas."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Exhibits his "brooding outsider" and "skepticism-to-acceptance" arc.
*   **Forbidden Speech:** YES. No violations found.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. He is "protective but overwhelmed," aligning with his 20% arc position.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Grounding Mechanics:** The specific interaction where Lena's tremors stop when touching Jax ("The moment her skin met his, the world stilled") is an established world-rule from the RAG context that must be kept to maintain continuity of their bond.
*   **Metaphorical Consistency:** Lena’s speech pattern remains "meandering like swamp vines" when she explains Project Phlegethon: "She took a breath, and when she spoke, her words began to meander, winding like the slow-moving Bayou Chevreuil during a summer drought."
*   **The Locket’s Role:** Use of the silver locket as a "guilt signal" and a conduit for Maribelle ("Lena gasped, her hand flying to the locket, twisting the silver chain around her index finger") is a vital character-tell that adds physical tension.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The safehouse floorboards creaked under Lena’s twitching fingers..." 
*   **PROBLEM:** The World State metadata lists the mood as "clinical," but the prose leans heavily into the "claustrophobic" and "desperate." While not a contradiction, the "clinical" aspect of the Urban Wall (the specific industrial frequencies) is slightly under-described compared to the magical symptoms.
*   **FIX:** Add one brief line emphasizing the clinical, harsh nature of the light: "The overhead bulb flickered with a cold, flickering glare that stripped the room of any natural warmth, exposing every mote of dust like a specimen under glass."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The locket was screaming now, a metallic screeching in her senses that told her she was looking right at a predator she could no longer perceive."
*   **PROBLEM:** This creates a slight logic loop. If she is "blind" to the supernatural (metadata ch-05), the locket "screaming" acts as a new sense. It needs to be clearer that this is an *external* physical vibration, not an internal magical "feeling."
*   **FIX:** "The locket rattled against her collarbone with such violent, metallic force that it felt like an alarm bell, warning her that something—though invisible to her blind eyes—stood right in her path."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Scent Reinforcement:** (Optional) The Character Sheet mentions she "always smells faintly of magnolia and mud." In the grimy safehouse, this could be used to contrast the "iron tang" mentioned in the opening. 
    *   *Quote Reference:* "The iron tang of New Orleans seeping through the walls..."
    *   *Suggestion:* Mention that her own scent of mud and magnolia feels out of place or fading in the industrial air.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not remove the Cajun French:** Terms like "mon coeur" and "cher" are specific to her high-affection voice signature and must remain.
*   **Do not "fix" the panicked repetition:** The phrase "no no, not that, no no" is a deliberate imperfection signature specified in her profile.
*   **Do not add an apology:** Lena must not apologize for her physical state, as her profile states she "never apologizes preemptively."

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### 8. VERDICT
**SCORE: 92/100**
**VERDICT: PASS**

The chapter perfectly adheres to the "The Severing" and "Urban Wall" concepts from the RAG database while meticulously maintaining the voice signatures for both Lena and Jax. No major continuity errors were found; only minor clarity adjustments regarding the locket's feedback mechanism are suggested to ensure the "blindness" limitation is strictly followed.