1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   "The mist clung to the ancient oaks like a lover's reluctant farewell, and Elara stepped into the forest's embrace before dawn could chase it away." (Early): This establishing shot effectively utilizes personification to set a romantic yet somber tone appropriate for YA fantasy.
*   "It was a sigh. Not a human sigh, but the sound of a thousand dry leaves skittering across a marble floor, forming a word." (Mid): The use of specific sensory phonetics creates a distinct auditory texture for the "Echoes" that distinguishes them from standard dialogue.
*   "It moved like ink dropped into a clear pool, a suffocating blackness that moved with mechanical precision." (Mid): This simile successfully introduces the "Iron Rot" by contrasting organic imagery with jarring, "mechanical" movement.
*   "The violet leaf was still in her hand. It was warm—hot, even. It pulsed. Thump-thump. Thump-thump. A rhythm perfectly synced with her own heart." (Late): The rhythmic onomatopoeia reinforces the visceral, biological connection between the protagonist and the forest.

2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT
*   **Elara Vance**
    *   *Dialogue:* "The mushrooms grow better where the magic is thickest," Elara countered, though she kept her eyes down. "You said so yourself. 'The best medicine comes from the most bitten bark.'"
    *   Signature vocabulary/tics: **YES** (Uses apothecary/foraging terminology).
    *   Avoids forbidden patterns: **YES** (Speech is grounded and earnest).
    *   Emotional register consistent: **YES** (Reflects her 55% arc position of accepting weight/memory, even in this chronologically earlier stage).
*   **Silas**
    *   *Dialogue:* "I say a lot of things. Most of 'em are meant to keep you alive long enough to inherit this gods-forsaken shop. Don’t use my own proverbs to... to hang yourself."
    *   Signature vocabulary/tics: **YES** (The use of "gods-forsaken" and gruff, protective admonitonal tone).
    *   Avoids forbidden patterns: **YES**.
    *   Emotional register consistent: **YES** (Anxious and protective).

3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Sensory Logic of the Echoes:** The description of the forest memories as "a laugh from a century ago, the rhythmic clink of a phantom blacksmith" is a unique world-building element that should remain the primary way Elara interacts with the environment.
*   **The Horror of the Blighted Stag:** The scene where "Its fur was matted with a strange, oily resin, and its eyes... were a milky, sightless white" provides a necessary stakes-escalation that justifies Elara's flight.
*   **Mechanical Paradox:** The description of the shadow having "mechanical precision" and smelling of "scorched metal" (Mid) is a vital foreshadowing of the "Iron" threat that must not be softened into generic magical darkness.

4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The mist clung to the ancient oaks... Elara stepped into the forest's embrace before dawn could chase it away."
*   **PROBLEM:** World State context (Ch-06) places Elara at "The Shimmering Falls" in the "Northern Perimeter." However, the [character-state] for Ch-06 indicates Elara has already "harmonized with the Water Aspect" and Silas is not mentioned as alive, while Elder Thalric is DECEASED. This text is labeled "CHAPTER: ch-01" but the provided RAG context is for "ch-06." 
*   **FIX:** Ensure the RAG database tags the "Ch-01" world state. If this text is intended to be Chapter 1, it functions as a flashback or the RAG context must be ignored as "future state" data. (Note: Since the prompt asks to review the *Chapter 1* text provided, the specific continuity error within the chapter is the Ward-Stone's effect on the stag).
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The creature... dissolved into a pile of gray, ash-like dust, leaving nothing behind but the faint scent of ozone."
*   **PROBLEM:** The Great Blight (RAG World State) describes water spirits becoming "hostile," but the stag’s death by "ozone" and "ash" suggests a lightning/electrical barrier not established in the "safe woods" lore.
*   **FIX:** Replace "scent of ozone" with "scent of scorched pine or damp rot" to align with the Elderwood’s natural/spiritual themes.

5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "...before the iron bites."
*   **PROBLEM:** While "Iron Rot" is later mentioned by Silas, the initial Echo's use of "iron" is too abstract for a first-chapter hook without a clearer visual link to the mechanical shadow.
*   **FIX:** "Guardian... find the heart... before the cold iron bites the root."

6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Suggestion:** (Optional) Enhance the transition into the vision.
*   **Quote:** "The moment her skin touched the stem, the world exploded into an Echo."
*   **Reason:** For a YA audience, adding one sentence of physical disorientation (vertigo or a drop in temperature) would heighten the "immersion" mentioned.

7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not change** Silas’s use of " 'em " or " 've " (e.g., "Most of 'em," "I've heard stories"). These are established character markers for his "gruff, gravel-edged" voice.
*   **Do not change** the repetitive "Thump-thump" onomatopoeia. This is a deliberate stylistic choice to link Elara’s physiology to the leaf.
*   **Do not change** the "lover's reluctant farewell" simile in the opening. While flowery, it fits the "Young Adult" genre expectations for atmospheric prose.

8. VERDICT: **REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
The chapter is atmospherically strong and character voices are distinct; however, it requires revision due to a lack of clarity regarding how the "Ward-Stones" function (the "ozone" smell contradicts the forest's established magical profile) and the abstract nature of the "iron" prophecy requires a stronger anchor to the "mechanical" imagery seen in the vision.