### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The heavy oaken door of the Bridal Chamber thudded shut behind Damien Blackthorn, sealing Isabella Voss within the gilded cage of Blackthorn Keep’s High Tower."
    *   *Commentary:* This efficiently establishes the claustrophobic setting and the power dynamic using the "gilded cage" motif consistent with the project description.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "Damien chuckled, a sound like dry leaves skittering over a tombstone."
    *   *Commentary:* This simile effectively reinforces Damien’s "predatory vitality" and the gothic, death-associated atmosphere of the Blackthorn faction.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "Isabella stood frozen, the silence of the room rushing back in to suffocate her. She slowly peeled back the silk glove, her breath hitching as the fabric tore away from the clotted blood."
    *   *Commentary:* The visceral detail of the fabric tearing away from the wound underscores the physical stakes of the "Unmarked Vessel" clause and her hemomantic exhaustion.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Character: Isabella Voss**
*   **Line:** "Pray tell, how does one bind a heart with vows of crimson, only to watch it bleed defiance?"
*   **Signature Tics:** YES. She uses "Pray tell" and the reflective "is it not?" at the end of the chapter.
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** YES. She avoids casual slang and maintains "regal corrections" throughout.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. She fluctuates between elegant composure and fragmented panic ("Blood, blood everywhere") as per her voice signature.

**Character: Damien Blackthorn**
*   **Line:** "Hide it better. Tomorrow, the scrutiny begins in earnest. If you cannot play the part of the pristine bride, I cannot ensure the 'protection' your coven sold you for."
*   **Signature Tics:** YES. His voice is described as a "jagged silk" and "melodic rasp," matching his cruel/predatory profile.
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** YES. He remains observant and dominant.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. He transitions from mocking to "clinically dangerous" once the blood is discovered, aligning with his 08% arc position.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **The Hemomantic Tension:** The physical sensation of the Peace Vow reacting to her internal state is excellent. 
    *   *Reference:* "A sharp, phantom lash of heat bloomed in her chest... The vow didn’t merely bind the covens; it policed the spirit."
*   **Regal Defiance:** Isabella’s refusal to grovel, even when terrified, is perfectly maintained.
    *   *Reference:* "I am no trophy, Damien. I am a signatory. There is a distinction, is there not?"
*   **The "Unmarked Vessel" Conflict:** The visual of the blood soaking through the white silk glove provides a high-stakes ticking clock. 
    *   *Reference:* "...a tiny, crimson stain blooming like a crushed petal."

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The heavy oaken door of the Bridal Chamber thudded shut behind Damien Blackthorn, sealing Isabella Voss within..." (Early) AND "As Damien's shadow lingered in the doorway..." (Ending).
*   **PROBLEM:** Logical contradiction in positioning. The chapter begins with Damien entering and the door shutting *behind* him (meaning he is inside). However, the ending implies he is still entering or that there is a POV leak, as he is watching her from the doorway after he supposedly "stepped out" and the door "latched with a heavy, final thud."
*   **FIX:** Remove the final sentence or adjust it to be Isabella’s memory/reflection. *Correction:* Remove "As Damien's shadow lingered in the doorway, his gaze fixed on the faint crimson bead seeping through her glove," as he has already left the room and the door is shut.

*   **ORIGINAL:** "To her left, a silver-framed mirror offered a glimpse of a woman she barely recognized..."
*   **PROBLEM:** World-state contradiction. The RAG context identifies these characters as belonging to "vampiric witches." While "vampiric" can vary, standard genre expectations/audience often question mirrors. If they are vampiric but have reflections, it should be noted, but here it feels like a default "getting ready" trope that might clash with the faction's nature.
*   **FIX:** Briefly acknowledge the magic of the mirror or ensure it aligns with the "Nightbloom" version of vampirism. (Minor note, but crucial for genre audience).

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "I will end you" (Voice Signature reference) vs "It is... intolerable... to be scrutinized like a mare at auction."
*   **PROBLEM:** Isabella's stress scale in the profile says "this is intolerable" = upset. In the text, she uses "intolerable" while facing Damien. However, her physical state (hemomantic exhaustion and bleeding) suggests she should be at the "furious" or "panicked" level of her signature.
*   **FIX:** Ensure the dialogue reflects the internal "fragmented" pattern more clearly when the blood is discovered. *Correction:* "It is... intolerable. It is... blood. Just blood." (Aligning better with her panicked repetition tic "blood blood everywhere").

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **OPTIONAL:** Regarding the line "My kinsmen downstairs are placing bets..." 
    *   *Quote:* "A conquered trophy usually has more to say for herself."
    *   *Suggestion:* Damien could mention a specific currency or "blood-tithe" being bet to deepen the world-building of the Blackthorn Coven’s "Imperial" attitude.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do NOT remove the repetition:** The phrase "blood. It is just... blood" and the internal "blood, blood everywhere" are intentional imperfection signatures for Isabella’s panic and must remain.
*   **Do NOT "soften" Isabella:** Her refusal to apologize for her "regal corrections" is core to her identity.
*   **Do NOT modernize the dialogue:** The use of "Pray," "Signatory," and "is it not?" are essential to the Victorian-Gothic tone.

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### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** The chapter is atmospheric and follows the voice signatures almost perfectly; however, there is a significant continuity error at the end where Damien is described as being in the doorway watching her *after* the text explicitly states he left and the door thudded shut. This must be resolved to maintain POV integrity.