### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   "The life-debt hummed through Lena’s veins like a gator’s heartbeat under black water, pulling her silver-glow gaze toward the perimeter where Jax stood guard." (Early): **This effectively bridges the physical world of the bayou with the metaphysical mechanics of the life-debt established in Ch-12.**
*   "Lena didn't walk so much as she was ushered along by the shadows." (Early): **This emphasizes her transition into 'The Warden' persona, suggesting she is becoming an extension of the environment rather than an independent actor.**
*   "She pricked her palm on a thorn, a single drop of blood falling into the black water. 'By the bayou's bones, *dormez*,' she chanted, her voice low and rhythmic." (Mid): **This accurately mirrors the specific magic mechanics and voice tics (blood-oaths and signature fury-phrases) defined in the persona profile.**
*   "The ghost signal of Maribelle shattered into a thousand jagged fragments before vanishing into the dark." (Late): **This provides a necessary visual payoff for the 'Harmonic Backflow' world-state event while resolving the familial conflict.**

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT
**Lena Duval**
*   **Quote:** "The cypress don't lie, cher—the roots whisper what your heart's too stubborn to hear."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Uses "cher" and "gator's truth" elsewhere ("Gator's truth: if I let go now...").
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** **YES.** She does not apologize or say "I give up."
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** She is detached yet protective, consistent with her "100% -- The Warden" arc status.

**Jax Harlan**
*   **Quote:** "What price now, Warden? You saved the swamp, but look at you. You’re fading into the mud, cher."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **NO.** Profile states "Peppers Cajun French endearments... only for those she [Lena] truly cares for." Jax is a "brooding outsider boat captain." Having him use "cher" violates the exclusivity of Lena's voice quirk.
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** **YES.** No specific forbidden patterns listed for Jax.
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** He is resolute but wary, matching his "Guardian" 98% arc rating.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Symbiotic Aesthetic:** The blurring of biological and mechanical elements ("Steel and sap had become one thing here") maintains the unique "Eco-Tech" atmosphere of Cypress Bend.
*   **Magic Methodology:** The use of "tactile" grounding (trailing fingers on moss/bark) aligns perfectly with the voice signature "What they REACH FOR: tactile."
*   **Stakes Maintenance:** The ending scene with the TDC drones ensures that despite the victory over Maribelle, the tension remains high. "Their red navigation lights bloomed through the mist like blood orchids..."

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "Maribelle. Hellfire, she’s trying to drown the Core out of spite." / "Maribelle wasn't there physically, but her presence was a rot in the air. A 'ghost signal'..."
*   **PROBLEM:** The Context/RAG data explicitly states: **"Aunt Maribelle -- DECEASED (ch-14)... Her death leaves Lena as the sole Duval matriarch."** The chapter text treats her as an active antagonist (even as a ghost signal) with agency to open valves. If she died earlier in the chapter (implied by the RAG ch-14 summary), the prose needs to clarify this is a residual echo, not an active sabotage attempt. More importantly, the RAG states the Secondary Bypass is "DESTROYED/OVERGROWN."
*   **FIX:** Rewrite the encounter to clarify that the "backwash" is a mechanical failure caused by the bypass’s destruction in the previous scene, and Maribelle’s "presence" is a haunting memory or a psychic residue rather than a conscious "ghost signal" opening valves.

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The pulse neutralized the demolition charges... The survivors fled into the swamp and are being hunted." (RAG Context) vs. **"A group of TDC stragglers... scrambled out from behind a stand of Tupelo trees... 'Contact!' one shouted."** (Chapter Text)
*   **PROBLEM:** The RAG indicates the TDC Sabotage team was "DEFEATED" and the survivors are "being hunted" (presumably by the swamp). The text shows them as an active, organized squad ready for combat. This creates a disconnect in the threat level.
*   **FIX:** "A group of TDC stragglers, mud-caked and wild-eyed, scrambled from the brush. They didn't look like soldiers anymore—they looked like prey, their pulse rifles shaking in slicked hands."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Suggestion:** Improve Jax’s dialectic distinction.
    *   **Quote:** "What price now, Warden? You saved the swamp, but look at you. You’re fading into the mud, cher."
    *   **Reason:** Jax is an outsider. Using "cher" makes him sound too much like Lena. Removing the endearment emphasizes his role as the "brooding outsider" who doesn't quite fit the Bayou's linguistic rhythms.
*   **Suggestion:** Clarify the "Life-Debt" sensation.
    *   **Quote:** "The life-debt hummed through Lena’s veins... it was a physical cord..."
    *   **Reason:** Since this is Chapter 14, reminding the reader *why* she owes Jax (saving her in Ch-12) briefly through a sensory flashback would strengthen the emotional weight of her transformation.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not change the repetitious dialogue:** "No no, not that, we have to close it, no no." (This is Lena's "Imperfection signature" when panicked).
*   **Do not "fix" the sensory focus on mud and magnolias:** This is a specific requirement of the voice signature to ground her.
*   **Do not remove the "Gator's truth" tic:** It is a required verbal marker for her character.

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### 8. VERDICT
**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** While the prose is atmospheric and the voice signatures are largely respected, there is a significant continuity conflict between the RAG context (which lists Maribelle as deceased and the Bypass as destroyed) and the chapter text (which features Maribelle as an active 'ghost' antagonist and the Bypass as a functional, heated machine). Jax using the endearment "cher" is also a character-voice violation.