### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The air in Sub-Level 3 had grown thick, tasted of ionized copper and wet, disturbed soil."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively anchors the transition from a digital/technological threat to a physical, subterranean horror using sensory details.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "The PA system hummed, a deep, resonant tone that seemed to bypass the ears and vibrate directly in the marrow."
    *   *Commentary:* This reinforces the "Resonance Harvest" theme by emphasizing that the signal is no longer merely auditory but biological.
*   **Quote 3 (Mid):** "Security Checkpoint Alpha. Mark was there, his uniform disheveled, his service weapon drawn but hanging limp at his side."
    *   *Commentary:* This provides a clear, grounding visual for Mark’s state of "catatonic" terror mentioned in the project context.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "The heavy reinforced concrete of the Archive floor didn't crack; it unraveled."
    *   *Commentary:* The use of "unraveled" is an excellent word choice that mirrors the "metaphysical decay" and the linguistic/vocal theme of the story.
*   **Quote 5 (Late):** "The floor split open beneath Elias with a wet, earthen gasp, exhaling not air but the subterranean Whisper itself—directly into his mouth."
    *   *Commentary:* A visceral closing image that personifies the facility and forces a literal "consumption" of the signal.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Sarah Miller**
*   **Line:** "Elias, empirically speaking, we need that explanation now—before this place finishes swallowing us."
*   **YES:** Uses signature vocabulary ("empirically speaking").
*   **YES:** Avoids forbidden patterns (no "sign from the beyond").
*   **YES:** Emotional register is consistent with her 85% arc progression (radical acceptance).

**The Curator**
*   **Line:** "The Harvest cannot be sabotaged by the grain, Elias."
*   **YES/NO:** While the Curator does not have a formal voice sheet, the cold, triumphant, and impatient tone matches the [Emotional] "non-physical / distorted" profile in the RAG context.

**Mark**
*   **Line:** "I see you. I know you're in the dark. This place... it’s breathing."
*   **NO:** Per the [voice-sig-mark] block, Mark's stress expression, verbal tics, and "What they REACH FOR" are listed as **Unknown**.
*   **Violation:** The line "The shadows are... they're moving on their own!" assigns a specific behavioral reaching for "The Shadows," which is not substantiated by the provided signature. However, since the signature is "Unknown" rather than "Forbidden," this is a minor drift, but the catatonia from the context is somewhat contradicted by his vocal pleading.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Scientific Pivot:** Sarah's struggle to find rational explanations mid-collapse, specifically: "Th-th-subterranean? Elias, from a rational standpoint, that’s impossible. Oakhaven is built on a granite shelf." This preserves the "Skeptical Anchor" trait defined in her character sheet.
*   **Body Horror Elements:** The physical manifestation of the signal, such as: "the monitors are sweating. There’s an oily residue forming on the screens." This aligns with the "World State" of metaphysical decay.
*   **The Metaphor of the "Gardener":** The Curator’s line, "The Curator isn't an administrator. He’s a gardener," effectively transitions the antagonist from a manager to the architect of the harvest.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "'Locked,' Mark whispered. 'Everything's locked. Help! Someone get me out of here!'"
*   **PROBLEM:** The [character-state] for Mark defines him as "catatonic" and "paralyzed by terror." In the chapter, he is actively moving, slamming palms against scanners, and shouting for help. This contradicts the "catatonic" state and the instruction that he "Refused to move or help Elias further."
*   **FIX:** "Mark sat slumped against the scanner, his eyes wide and fixed on the encroaching dark. He didn't scream; he only whispered 'locked, locked, locked' as the shadows curdled around his boots, refusing to acknowledge Elias’s voice through the monitor."

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The Curator’s voice returned, whispered now, as if he were standing right behind Elias’s ear."
*   **PROBLEM:** The [character-state] for The Curator specifies he is "Non-physical; manifested as a distorted audio-visual entity." While the "whisper" is thematic, the description of "standing right behind Elias's ear" implies physical presence/proximity that conflicts with his non-physical manifestation.
*   **FIX:** "The Curator’s voice returned, not from the speakers, but vibrating through the very air surrounding Elias’s head, intimate and inescapable. 'The Harvest cannot be sabotaged...'"

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The Final Sequence has already begun."
*   **PROBLEM:** The [character-state] for Elias under Open Loops states: "[Elias/The Curator] The true function of the 'Final Sequence' (Ch-12) -- **RESOLVED**." However, the text only mentions it's "the collection of the fruit" without actually clarifying what that means for the characters or the facility beyond a vague "Harvest." It feels like the "Resolution" mentioned in the metadata is missing from the prose.
*   **FIX:** Add a line of dialogue for the Curator explaining the reformatting: "The Final Sequence has already begun. Your consciousness is the soil; the Whisper is the seed. Once the harvest is complete, Oakhaven will not be a tomb, but a transmitter."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Suggestion:** Lean harder into Sarah’s physical habit defined in the voice sheet.
*   **Quote:** "...punctuated by the frantic click-tap of her digital recorder."
*   **Improvement:** Mention her wincing or massaging her temples more explicitly to align with the "Notes for Writers" regarding her persistent audio-feedback headache.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Verbal Tics:** Do not remove Sarah's "empirical" or "rational" qualifiers even when the world is ending; these are core to her "skeptical anchor" voice.
*   **Physical Imperfections:** Elias’s bleeding hands and severe exhaustion must be maintained as they are core to his [character-state] at "75% Arc."
*   **Tone:** The sudden shift from "technology" to "organic/fungal" horror (the floor unraveling) is an intentional world-state choice and should not be smoothed over for better "logic."

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### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**Score: 82**
**Justification:** The chapter fails on Mark's continuity—shifting him from "catatonic/unmoving" to "actively lunging for doors"—and lacks the explicit resolution of the "Final Sequence" loop promised in the project context. The voice audit for Sarah is excellent, but the world-state coherence regarding Mark requires a rewrite.