### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   **Early:** "The air in the narrow stairwell was thick with the scent of ozone and scorched copper, a sharp, synthetic tang that scraped against the back of her throat."
    *   *This effectively establishes the "industrial resonance" theme by contrasting the magical protagonist's senses with unnatural, harsh chemical descriptors.*
*   **Mid:** "Usually, the city at this hour was a symphony of cicadas, the distant thrum of jazz, and the heavy, sweet rot of the river. Now, the silence was unnatural."
    *   *This passage successfully utilizes the setting’s New Orleans roots to highlight the high-stakes atmospheric shift caused by Project Phlegethon.*
*   **Late:** "I bind thee to the mud, not the wire. I bind thee to the rot, not the steel. Drink, you hollow thing. Drink and be blind."
    *   *The rhythmic, repetitive structure mimics the "bayou chants" mentioned in the voice signature, reinforcing Lena’s heritage during a moment of crisis.*
*   **Late:** "The mechanical hum didn't stop, but it stuttered. A surge of heat blossomed in her hand, hot enough to blister. The neon blue light flickered and died, replaced by a dull, pulsing red that felt heavy and wet."
    *   *This transitions the magic from the "synthetic" blue of the enemy back to the "heavy and wet" tactile nature of Lena’s swamp-based power.*

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Lena Duval**
*   **Line:** "Gator's truth, Jax—everywhere is a trap now."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** She uses "Gator's truth" correctly as an undeniable fact.
*   **Avoid Forbidden Patterns:** **YES.** She does not apologize or say "I give up."
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** Her panic-induced repetition ("No, no, not that, no no") matches her "Imperfection signature" for when she is frantic.

**Jax Harlan**
*   **Line:** "If I’m dying in a ditch tonight, I want to know the name of the ghost pulling the trigger."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** His tone is "grimly determined" and "hyper-vigilant" as per his emotional state in ch-07.
*   **Avoid Forbidden Patterns:** **YES.** (No specific forbidden patterns listed in RAG).
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** He is moving into the "active tactician" role, demanding intel to survive.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Sensory Grounding:** The insistence on the scent of "magnolia and mud" and "rotting citrus" remains consistent with the character sheet.
*   **The Locket Synergy:** The mechanical vibration of the locket ("A high, thin whine that matched the industrial drone perfectly") serves as a strong physical manifestation of the conflict between the Duval Coven's industrial magic and Lena's natural roots.
*   **Tactile Magic:** Lena’s reliance on physical touch to ground herself ("fingers trailing along the damp, crumbling brick") is a key trait that emphasizes her connection to the physical world rather than the abstract grid.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The safehouse basement stairs groaned under Jax's boots as he hauled her up..."
*   **PROBLEM:** Per the **Location** metadata for ch-07, both characters are at an "Abandoned trolley barn." This chapter text refers to it as a "safehouse" and a "kitchen," which conflicts with the established gritty, industrial setting of a trolley barn basement.
*   **FIX:** Change references of "safehouse" and "kitchen" to "trolley barn" and "breakroom" or "maintenance office."

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The wards Maribelle had pierced hung in the air..."
*   **PROBLEM:** Per **NPC Memory**, Maribelle has pulsed a "tracer signal," but the "Drowned Man" spirit is the one actually in the barn's basement where the characters currently are. The spirit's presence is ignored in this text.
*   **FIX:** Mention the flooded basement or the "Drowned Man" spirit's influence as they flee the lower levels to align with the "Active Obligations" regarding the "Tithe of Salt."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "She reached out, her fingers trailing along the damp, crumbling brick of the foundation... But the brick felt dead."
*   **PROBLEM:** The text describes her touching brick to find "moss or the gritty truth of dirt," but the character prompt says she "reaches for tactile (fingers trails moss, water, bark to ground herself)." The jump to the brick feeling "dead" is good, but it contradicts the transition to the next scene where she suddenly knows the city is "ticking" without a clear explanation of how the brick communicated that.
*   **FIX:** "She reached for the foundation, searching for the heartbeat of the damp earth behind the brick, but found only the hollow, rhythmic throb of the machines."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Contextualizing the Locket:** In the mid-section, Lena says, "It’s all I have left of my mother." While emotional, the RAG metadata mentions the locket has a "mechanical synchronization." It might be worth adding a line about how the gears—not just the magic—are grinding differently.
    *   *Quote reference:* "The mechanical hum intensified, a psychic drill pressing against her temples." (Optional: Add "I can feel the gears biting into each other.")

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not "fix" the Cajun French:** Terms like "mon coeur" and "cher" are character-specific markers of affection and must remain.
*   **Do not remove the "Gator’s truth" tic:** Even if it feels repetitive, it is a hard-coded verbal signature.
*   **Do not smooth out Lena's panic:** The repetitive "No, no, not that, no no" is an intentional imperfection signature.

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### 8. VERDICT
**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** While the voice and prose are excellent and adhere closely to the voice signatures, there is a significant continuity error regarding the location (Safehouse/Kitchen vs. Abandoned Trolley Barn) and the omission of the "Drowned Man" spirit mentioned in the active ch-07 world state. Changing these ensures the chapter aligns with the project’s RAG database.