### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   "The absolute silence pressed in like a physical weight, heavier than the tinnitus ringing that had finally, mercifully, faded to a dull throb in Sarah's battered skull." (Early) — This effectively establishes the sensory aftermath of the Chapter 06 climax, grounding the reader in Sarah’s physical trauma.
*   "Then, a new sensation. Not sound, but a shudder through the floor joists. A heavy, rhythmic thudding that moved through the soles of her feet. *Thump. Thump. Thump.*" (Mid) — The shift from auditory to tactile horror creates a visceral transition that underscores the "dead zone" environment.
*   "He was the only tether she had left to a reality that made sense." (Late) — This sentence efficiently progresses the relationship arc, showing Sarah’s shift from isolation to dependence on Elias.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Sarah Miller**
*   **Dialogue Line:** "E-Elias," she stammered, grabbing his sleeve. "I have the 1927 data. The chants. I took them."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses the "Th-this" stammering (E-Elias) triggered by her head trauma/stress as per her profile.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES. She avoids "flowery supernatural affirmations," framing her confession around "data" rather than "spirits."
*   **Consistent Emotional Register:** YES. She remains analytical but physically compromised, reflecting her 55% arc transition.

**Elias Thorne**
*   **Dialogue Line:** "Why... didn't... you... tell... me?"
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** N/A (Note: Elias's specific voice-sig was not provided in the prompt, but he adheres to the physical/urgent tone of his character state).
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES.
*   **Consistent Emotional Register:** YES. He is "intensely protective" and "vindicated," shown through his notebook communication and immediate focus on the signal’s biology.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The 14Hz Physicality:** The moment where Sarah feels the pulse in Elias’s neck ("He pressed her palm flat against the side of his neck... right over the carotid artery") is a crucial payoff for Elias’s secret that the "Signal matches his pulse."
*   **Sensory Consistency:** The "scent of scorched electronics and ozone" and the "cloying scent of sulfur" maintain the atmospheric continuity from the World State notes.
*   **The Notebook Device:** The switch to writing notes because Sarah is deafened ("He held it up: *ARE YOU DEAF?*") is a creative and logical consequence of the 110dB burst mentioned in the project context.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Something was coming up the stairs... Elias Thorne crashed through the threshold of the hallway..."
*   **PROBLEM:** The World State and Character State for Elias place him already in the "Hallway/Kitchen" with Sarah, while Mark is in the "Living Room." The narrative treats Elias as if he just arrived from outside ("He looked like he’d been running for miles"), contradicting the Context which says Elias is already at the location and "Physical: No physical injuries."
*   **FIX:** Acknowledge Elias was in the adjacent room (the kitchen) and rushed to the hallway upon hearing the burst, rather than arriving as if from a distance. Revise to: "Elias staggered from the kitchen, his face pale but unscathed, his flashlight cutting through the smoke of the hallway."

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The 110-decibel feedback loop she had unleashed..."
*   **PROBLEM:** The World State explicitly says her feedback loop was a "110dB localized feedback loop," but Sarah later says "SPIKE. 110dB." technically she is repeating herself, but the world state says the power surge fried all electronics.
*   **FIX:** Ensure it is clear that the "Electronic Dead Zone" mentioned in the World State is the reason Elias's flashlight "was beginning to yellow," but clarify why his LED flashlight (usually solid-state) is failing vs. being "fried" like Sarah’s recorder.

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "She reached for the digital recorder... The 'ghost-loop' of Oakhaven was gone, silenced by a superior force of her own making."
*   **PROBLEM:** The prompt context lists the "Digital recorder 'ghost-looping'" as an UNRESOLVED open loop. By stating it is "gone," the narrative might prematurely close a plot point that the RAG database expects to remain active or be resolved through a specific beat.
*   **FIX:** Clarify that the hardware is dead, but the *threat* or the *memory* of the loop remains. "The recorder was a hunk of dead plastic, but the echo of the local-loop felt branded into the air itself."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Optional:** In the context, a character named **Mark** is listed as "immobile" and "shocked" in the Living Room. Sarah and Elias ignore him completely in this draft.
    *   **Reference:** "Mark... Location: Miller Household, Living Room (Presumed)."
    *   **Upside:** Briefly mentioning Mark—even if just to show he is catatonic or unresponsive—would ground the scene in the full reality of the household described in the character states.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not fix Sarah’s stammering:** The "Th-this" and "E-Elias" are part of her "Imperfection signature" and must remain.
*   **Do not remove "Empirically speaking":** This is a mandatory verbal tic.
*   **Do not make the dialogue "cleaner":** The choppy, shouted communication is necessary because the characters are suffering from "extreme high-frequency ringing (tinnitus)."

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### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** The chapter is atmospheric and follows the voice signatures well, but it contains a significant continuity error regarding Elias's location and physical state (treating him as if he just arrived at the house when the context states he was already present in the hallway/kitchen area). It also effectively kills an "Open Loop" (the recorder) without clarifying if this is a permanent resolution or just a temporary hardware failure.