### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   **"early":** "The Threshold was humming a low, jagged note that tasted of copper and ozone."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively utilizes synesthesia to establish the sensory intrusion of the magic system on the environment.
*   **"mid":** "Gravity didn't just fail; it became subjective."
    *   *Commentary:* This pithy phrasing successfully conveys the high-concept weirdness of the "Indigo Contagion" without over-explaining the physics.
*   **"mid":** "The sound of his cane thudding against the stone floor echoed down to her—*thump, thump, thump*—a beat of desperate uncertainty."
    *   *Commentary:* This auditory detail reinforces Elder Maros's physical frailty and psychological state as established in the world state.
*   **"late":** "Liora felt a chill that had nothing to do with the Core's temperature."
    *   *Commentary:* This is a somewhat clichéd "internal reaction" phrase—it functions but lacks the unique "weaving" flavor present in the rest of the prose.
*   **"late":** "Inside, the contagion was spreading, the gravity shifts leaving the furniture at odd angles, the very air bleeding violet."
    *   *Commentary:* The imagery of "air bleeding violet" provides a strong visual anchor for the escalating stakes of the lockdown.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT
**Character: Liora Voss**
*   **Dialogue:** "You can't bind what wants to be fed," (Note: This is Thorne's line, Liora responds with): "Don't give into the metaphor, Thorne. It’s a tool. We bind it, or it breaks us."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** She uses "bind or break" (early) and repeats "bind-bind-bind" (mid) during panic.
*   **Excluded Speech Patterns:** **YES.** She maintains a cynical, tactical outlook and avoids optimism.
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** Consistent with her "Defiant; tactical" state and her 25% arc position (managing the integration).

**Character: Thorne Quill**
*   **Dialogue:** "I'm here, Weaver... But the Loom... it isn't a machine, Liora. It’s a map. And we’re just the ink."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** He uses "Weaver" as a specific identifier for Liora and his speech reflects his new "hyper-attuned" status.
*   **Excluded Speech Patterns:** **YES.** (No specific "Never Says" listed in RAG, but his tone is correctly "Seething" yet "Awe-struck").
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** He reflects the "sentient, necessary anchor" arc shift.

**Character: Elder Maros**
*   **Dialogue:** "I have bought you time... But I need proof of stability. I need to see that you haven't lost the boy to the machine."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** He uses a "manipulative, paternal cadence" and references his cataracts.
*   **Excluded Speech Patterns:** **YES.**
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** He is "politically panicked" and "desperate."

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The "Dirty Circuit" Tactility:** The description of the magic as visceral and painful ("Liora plunged her violet-pulsing palm into the primary interface") grounds the high fantasy concepts in physical stakes.
*   **Liora’s Specific Fidgets:** The RAG-compliant habit of Liora "unconsciously beginning to braid a stray lock of dark hair" (late) adds character depth without dialogue.
*   **Thorne's Evolving Perspective:** The shift from sacrifice to a being who sees the Loom as a "map" and humans as "ink" (late) perfectly captures his 25% arc milestone.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "'Anchor me. Don't let your mind wander into the static.' ... Through the link, she felt his response—not words, but a predatory surge of focus."
*   **PROBLEM:** The RAG state for Thorne explicitly states: "Communicating with the Loom's sentient intent—hidden from Liora." However, at the end of the chapter, Liora thinks: "*He heard it too... The voice in the static.*" This suggests she has detected his secret too easily, potentially neutralizing the "Known Secret" listed as UNRESOLVED in the RAG.
*   **FIX:** Soften Liora’s realization so she suspects *something* is wrong but does not explicitly confirm he is hearing the voice. Change "He heard it too" to: "She felt a ripple in the link she couldn't name—a shadow of something that shouldn't be there."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The indigo stain had climbed past her elbow now, mapping its way toward her shoulder in a bruise-colored web..."
*   **PROBLEM:** This contradicts the Character State: ch-03, which says "indigo staining reaching mid-bicep." If it has reached her shoulder, she is further progressed than the state allows.
*   **FIX:** Align with the bicep description: "The indigo stain had climbed past her elbow now, mapping its way toward her mid-bicep in a bruise-colored web..."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Improvement on Internal Reaction:** (Late) "Liora felt a chill that had nothing to do with the Core's temperature." This is a bit generic. 
    *   *Suggestion:* "A cold thread of dread stitched its way through Liora’s chest, separate from the Core's artificial hum." (Uses the character's weaving metaphor/voice).
*   **Clarification of Communication:** (Mid) Maros speaks through "overhead comms." In a world of "bone-white canes" and "Threadbinding," it isn't clear if these are magical or mechanical. 
    *   *Suggestion:* Briefly mention if they are "brass speaker-tubes" or "resonant binding plates" to clarify the tech-level.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Liora's obsessive repetition:** Do not remove "bind-bind-bind it now." This is a specific RAG imperfection signature.
*   **Personification of threads:** Do not change "The red thread whispers betrayal." This is a core voice signature for Liora.
*   **Dialogue tag "snapped":** While often discouraged as "telling," Liora’s RAG voice profile specifies she uses "clipped commands" and is "furious," justifying the sharp tags.

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### 8. VERDICT
**SCORE: 88**
**REVISE**
The chapter is atmospheric and adheres strictly to character voice and established world-building, but it contains a continuity error regarding the "Known Secret" (Thorne's communication with the Loom) and a minor physical discrepancy regarding the indigo staining depth. These must be aligned with the RAG Character States to maintain project integrity.