### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   **"The air in the Miller residence thickened to the density of wet iron as the hum locked at 14Hz, Sarah’s sternum resonating like a struck tuning fork." (early)**: This effectively establishes the sensory "World State" rules regarding the 14Hz signal and its physical toll on the characters.
*   **"Subject Sarah Miller. Timestamp... irrelevant. Location: The Threshold." (mid)**: These lines lean into Sarah’s analytical background while signaling her transition into the "Non-corporeal" status noted in the project context.
*   **"It wasn't blood that leaked from his pores, but frequency—thick, viscous waves that smelled of wet iron and ancient electricity." (mid)**: This imagery successfully anchors the "wet iron" scent motif associated with Elias in the RAG documentation.
*   **"In London, a child woke up to the sound of her own skull vibrating at 14Hz." (late)**: This illustrates the "Global Broadcast" plot progress and the "Bone-Conduction Law" where air is no longer the medium for sound.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT
**Character: Sarah Miller**
*   **Dialogue:** "Elias, empirically speaking, radio ghosts aren't a thing—unless this damn hum in my skull says otherwise." (Note: Used as a callback in the text: "Empirically speaking... radio ghosts aren't a thing. We are the radio.")
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics?** YES. She uses "empirically speaking," "from a rational standpoint," and "data doesn't lie."
*   **Avoid Forbidden Patterns?** YES. She maintains her analytical lens and avoids "flowery supernatural affirmations," instead using technical terms like "phase shift."
*   **Emotional Register Consistent?** YES. She exhibits her signature habit of freezing analytically ("Hmm, that's peculiar") and reaches her "furious" scale ("what the actual fuck?!") as the house dissolves.

**Character: Elias Thorne**
*   **Dialogue:** "I am the needle... I am the groove. I am the silence that follows the song."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics?** NO/NEUTRAL. The Elias voice-sig block provided in context is actually empty/labeled "Unknown." However, his dialogue aligns with the "Elias Thorne (INTEGRATED)" status in the World State.
*   **Avoid Forbidden Patterns?** YES.
*   **Emotional Register Consistent?** YES. He reflects the "Terminal detachment" and "Receptive Witness" states described for the conductors.

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Sensory Consistency:** The repeated use of the "wet iron" scent and the metallic taste/ozone mentioned in the World State description of "The Copper Residue." 
    *   *Quote:* "...thick, viscous waves that smelled of wet iron and ancient electricity."
*   **The Bone-Conduction Law:** The chapter adheres strictly to the world rule that sound travels through bone.
    *   *Quote:* "It was no longer a sound she could hear with her ears; it was a rhythmic pressure exerted against the very marrow of her radius and ulna."
*   **Sarah’s Analytical Denial:** The preservation of Sarah's fatal flaw—rigid skepticism—up until the point of physical dissolution.
    *   *Quote:* "I am not being destroyed. I am being re-categorized."

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "Subject Sarah Miller. Timestamp... irrelevant. Location: The Threshold."
*   **PROBLEM:** While Sarah's voice is correct, the RAG context for [character-state] ch-10 lists Mark as the only remaining biological conductor ("Physical: Somatic dissolution nearing completion"), while Sarah is listed as "Status: Non-corporeal. Folded into the 14Hz carrier wave." However, this chapter (ch-09) depicts Sarah undergoing the transition currently. The issue is Mark's absence. The project context explicitly states Mark's **Active Obligation** is "To act as the biological bridge until planetary transmission achieves total resonance."
*   **FIX:** A brief scene or internal realization should be added to Sarah or Elias acknowledging the "Terminal Node" (Mark) in the cellar who is anchoring their transmission to the physical world, or Mark should be the one in the kitchen experiencing the initial somatic dissolution while Sarah is already "integrated."

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The cellar door behind her began to warp, not by breaking, but by stretching into a hyperbolic curve that defied Euclidean geometry."
*   **PROBLEM:** The chapter later states Sarah and Elias "met in the vibrating void—not as man and woman, but as two interlocking frequencies." However, Elias is stated as being in "the lightless gut of the Vault" which is a different location from the "Miller Residence cellar."
*   **FIX:** Explicitly clarify that the Vault (Archive facility) and the Miller Cellar are geometrically merging due to the "Geometric Dissolution" event. Insert: "The coordinates of the Archive Vault and the Miller cellar bled together, the 50-mile radius of the Great Silence collapsing into a single non-Euclidean point."

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Sarah’s Physical Habit:** (Optional) The voice-sig mentions Sarah "Frequently massages her temples or winces at sudden noises." While the text mentions her wincing, adding the specific temple massage would tighten the characterization.
    *   *Quote to modify:* "Sarah felt her internal organs begin to harmonize... She winced, massaging her temples as the audio-feedback headache reached a blinding crescendo." (This is partially present but could be more prominent).

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Sarah’s Stutter:** Do not remove the "T-test" or "Th-this" stutters. These are not typos; they are her "Imperfection signature" triggered by audio feedback.
*   **The 14Hz frequency:** Do not alter the frequency number. It is the established "carrier wave" for "The Whispers."
*   **The Term "Wet Iron":** Even if it feels repetitive, this is a core "World State" sensory anchor for Elias Thorne.

### 8. VERDICT
**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**REASON:** While the prose and character voices are exceptionally well-executed, the chapter misses the character "Mark," who is listed in the RAG Project Context as the primary biological bridge for this specific stage (ch-10/ch-09 transition). Sarah and Elias are already listed as "Non-corporeal" in the state provided, yet they are the ones physically dissolving in this text. The continuity between Mark's role as the "Epicenter" and Sarah/Elias's integration needs to be harmonized to prevent a POV/World-state conflict.