### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   "The air in Sub-Level 4 thicked, turning viscous and heavy, as if the oxygen had been replaced by a dense, metallic vapor." (Early) — This effectively establishes the transition from a purely auditory anomaly to a physical, environmental threat.
*   "Th-th-thistle. The consonants caught in her throat as she tried to force her brain back into its analytical grooves." (Mid) — This passage captures the internal breakdown of Sarah’s mental defenses by mirroring her stutter with her desperate need for "grooves" of logic.
*   "A static discharge arched from the mainframe to a nearby desk, shattering a glass paperweight and sending a shower of sparks across the floor." (Late) — This demonstrates a clear escalation of the "EM distortions" mentioned in the world state, providing a high-stakes visual anchor.
*   "The audio began to loop, a segment of three seconds repeating over and over. Within the loop, she heard her own voice. *—from a rational standpoint—from a rational standpoint—from a rational standpoint—*" (Late) — This use of the character’s own verbal tic against her effectively weaponizes her established personality for horror.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT
**Character: Elias Thorne**
*   **Dialogue:** "The Great Silence wasn't an ending. It was an incubation."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Elias uses ritualistic and rhythmic language ("respiration," "communion," "incubation") consistent with his abandoned logic arc.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES. No restrictions noted in character sheet.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. He is transfixed and obsessive, mirroring the "religious or ritualistic awe" in his state description.

**Character: Sarah Miller**
*   **Dialogue:** "E-Elias, get back from the console... Empirically speaking, this is... this is acute acoustic trauma."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses "empirically speaking," "rational standpoint," and "data doesn't lie."
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES. She does not use flowery supernatural affirmations; she interprets the sparks and the chanting through the lens of physics and recording errors.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. She exhibits "analytical paralysis," attempting to categorize a supernatural threat with decibel measurements.
*   **Imperfection Signature:** YES. Stammers initial consonants (*"Th-th-thistle," "Th-this"*) specifically when audio feedback triggers her.

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Sensory Consistency:** The recurring scent of "wet iron" is maintained and evolved. *Quote: "The scent of wet iron became cloying, sweet and thick, as if the walls were weeping blood."*
*   **Bio-Feedback Integration:** The world state requirement for biometric mirroring is realized through the synchronization of environmental elements to Elias. *Quote: "The blood from his nose was dripping steadily now... in a rhythmic beat that mirrored the 14Hz pulse."*
*   **Sarah's Analytical Shield:** The narrative stays true to her character sheet by having her "freeze analytically" rather than scream. *Quote: "Sarah froze. Analytical paralysis took hold. Her mind raced through the physics of the discharge—dielectric breakdown, potential difference..."*

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The digital thermometer on the rack clicked down: 46... 44... 42 degrees."
*   **PROBLEM:** World State (Environmental Constants) defines the temperature as "stabilized at 42°F." The chapter suggests a plummeting drop occurring in real-time, which contradicts the "stabilized" status of the sub-level state.
*   **FIX:** "The temperature in the room had settled at a biting 42 degrees, the digital thermometer on the rack frozen at the floor of its plummet."

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "Th-th-thistle. The consonants caught in her throat..."
*   **PROBLEM:** The word "Thistle" appears without context. While it demonstrates her stutter, the choice of word feels like an accidental insertion or a hallucination that isn't connected to the surrounding dialogue or thoughts.
*   **FIX:** "Th-th-this... The consonants caught in her throat..." (Or use a word she was actually attempting to say, like "threshold").

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Visual Alignment (Optional):** "Elias felt the warm, salt-iron slip of blood crossing his upper lip, but he didn't reach to wipe it away." (Early). To better align with the 14Hz convergence, suggest that the blood droplets themselves vibrate or pattern on his skin before they fall.
*   **Recorder Detail (Optional):** "She looked down at her recorder’s small LCD screen." (Mid). Mention Sarah "tapping 'record' during a tense moment" to align with her "Notes for Writers" habit of doing so without thinking.

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do Not Correct:** Sarah’s repetitive use of "empirically speaking" or "from a rational standpoint." These are intentional tics meant to show her psychological rigidity.
*   **Do Not Correct:** Elias’s lack of concern for his physical state (bleeding). This is central to his "Logic is abandoned" arc.
*   **Do Not Correct:** The heavy technical/scientific jargon used by Sarah (e.g., "dielectric breakdown"). This is her specific character "mask."

### 8. VERDICT: REVISE
**SCORE: 82/100**
**Justification:** The prose is evocative and leans heavily into established voice signatures; however, there is a minor continuity error regarding the "stabilized" temperature vs. a real-time drop, and a specific clarity issue with the word "thistle" which stalls the reader. Processing these two fixes will bring the chapter to a 95+.