### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   "The heavy oaken door of the Bridal Chamber thudded shut behind Damien Blackthorn, sealing Isabella Voss within the gilded cage of Blackthorn Keep’s High Tower." (Early)
    *   *Commentary:* Effectively establishes the Gothic atmosphere and the theme of imprisonment through the "gilded cage" metaphor.
*   "It was a touch inconvenient, the way the body insisted on reminding one of its fragility." (Mid)
    *   *Commentary:* This perfectly captures Isabella’s "regal correction" mask, using clinical understatement to dismiss extreme physical pain.
*   "His kinsmen downstairs are placing bets on how long it takes for a Nightbloom witch to wither in a Blackthorn garden." (Mid)
    *   *Commentary:* This line efficiently builds the world-state of "Imperial" hostility from the Blackthorn faction while characterizing Damien’s mocking tone.
*   "Isabella gasped, her hand flying to her heart. The Peace Vow. It sensed her internal dissent, the flicker of pure, unadulterated hatred she harbored..." (Mid)
    *   *Commentary:* Good mechanical implementation of the "Peace Vow" world-rule, showing rather than just telling how the magic polices her emotions.
*   "Isabella realized the true vow had only just begun to bleed." (Late)
    *   *Commentary:* A strong closing image that ties the internal hemomancy theme to the external plot stakes.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Isabella Voss**
*   **Quote:** "Pray, do not feel obligated to ruin it with your observations."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses "Pray" sarcastically and ends a later sentence with "is it not?" ("vows are meant to be endured, is it not?") as per her profile.
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** YES. She avoids slang and groveling; she issues a "regal correction" even when bleeding.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. She displays the "regal correction" mask while concealing "fragmented panic."

**Damien Blackthorn**
*   **Quote:** "You look as though you’re being strangled by your own dignity, Isabella."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. His voice is "jagged silk" and "predatory," consistent with a "cruelly intrigued" groom.
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** YES. He remains dominant and observant.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. He transitions from mocking to clinical as he discovers her secret, staying within his 08% arc position.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Hemomantic Tension:** The physical manifestation of Isabella’s secret is handled with high stakes.
    *   *Reference:* "The silk of her glove was darkening—a tiny, crimson stain blooming like a crushed petal."
*   **The "Unmarked Vessel" Conflict:** The immediate introduction of this specific clause creates a ticking clock for the protagonist.
    *   *Reference:* Damien’s warning: "If the Elders see this, Isabella, they won't see a bride. They’ll see a defect."
*   **Psychological Policing:** The "Peace Vow" acting as a literal pain-inducer for dissent is a unique and compelling magic system constraint.
    *   *Reference:* "A sharp, phantom lash of heat bloomed in her chest... The vow didn’t merely bind the covens; it policed the spirit."

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "As Damien's shadow lingered in the doorway, his gaze fixed on the faint crimson bead seeping through her glove..."
*   **PROBLEM:** This line occurs *after* the text states "He stepped out, the door latching with a heavy, final thud." and while Isabella is alone peeling off her glove. It creates a POV/spatial impossibility where Damien is both gone and still looking.
*   **FIX:** Delete the sentence "As Damien's shadow lingered in the doorway..." effectively ending the chapter on Isabella's "is it not?" reflection or her internal realization.

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The sound pulsed through the stone floor, vibrating up through the soles of Isabella’s silk slippers."
*   **PROBLEM:** The text previously states Damien entered and the door "thudded shut behind [him]." If the door is already shut, the sound has already happened. The subsequent paragraph treats the sound as a lingering "mechanical click of a trap," but the "pulsing through the stone" feels like a delayed reaction.
*   **FIX:** "The oaken door thudded shut behind Damien Blackthorn, a sound that pulsed through the stone floor and up through the soles of Isabella’s silk slippers." (Combine for immediate cause/effect).

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Suggestion:** Enhance the "Voss-blooded heir" tension by having Damien more explicitly reference the "harvest" mentioned in the world-state.
    *   *Quote context:* "And in exchange, I am owed a legacy."
*   **Suggestion:** The transition between Damien being "predatory" and then "clinical" happens very quickly.
    *   *Quote context:* "He looked at the glove, then up at her face..." — A slightly longer beat of him weighing whether to expose her or hide her could heighten the "smoldering rival" dynamic.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Verbal Tics:** Do not remove "Pray," "it is... intolerable," or "is it not?" as these are established voice signatures for Isabella.
*   **Repetitive Phrasing:** The repetition of "blood" during her panic ("Blood. It is just... blood.") is an intentional "imperfection signature" listed in her profile and must remain.
*   **Melodramatic Tone:** The high-Gothic, poetic descriptions (e.g., "column of obsidian," "chime," "jagged silk") are essential to the genre and character voice.

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### 8. VERDICT

**Verdict: REVISE**
**Score: 82**
**Justification:** The chapter is atmospheric and matches character profiles perfectly, but the continuity error at the end (Damien's shadow appearing in the doorway after he has already left and the door has thudded shut) is a significant spatial logic break that requires a fix.