### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The air in the ravine’s gut did not behave like air; it had the consistency of silt, pulling at Elara’s lungs until every inhale felt like dragging a stone upward through her throat."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively establishes the "spiritual gravity" of the location using the tactile, heavy imagery consistent with Elara’s world-view.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "Elara swayed like mist-shrouded reeds, her eyes glazing as she looked past Kaelen. 'I... I flow... the current is too heavy...'"
    *   *Commentary:* This passage accurately executes the technical requirement for Elara’s "imperfection signature" when spiritually drained.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "Thorne stepped from the shadows, his thorn-choked arm raised in a mockery of a blessing. 'The roots remember,' he whispered, 'and they recognize their own.'"
    *   *Commentary:* This uses the antagonist's verbal tic to punctuate a high-stakes reveal, successfully merging character voice with the plot twist.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "She fumbled for the Root-Key, intending to use its resonance to blast a path through the corruption, to find one last spark of the Elderwood’s purity."
    *   *Commentary:* This internal beat clearly anchors the character’s "Want" (halting the Blight) against the "Need" (facing the darker truth).

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Character: Elara Vance**
*   **Line:** "The falls whisper what the roots already know—debt binds us deeper than stone, Kaelen."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses "roots," "stone," and "whisper" metaphors.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES. No slang or "no big deal" colloquialisms.
*   **Emotional Register/Arc:** YES. Reflects 85% arc progression where she accepts the physical toll but struggles with the Council’s secret.

**Character: Kaelen**
*   **Line:** "I’m already drowning. Give me the truth. I'd rather die knowing what I'm fighting than rot in this fog."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses blunt, soldier-like imagery ("fighting," "rot").
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES.
*   **Emotional Register/Arc:** YES. Reflects 80% arc—subordinating his safety to her status as Vessel, prioritizing her "truth" over his survival.

**Character: Thorne Blackroot**
*   **Line:** "Hark. The false Vessel brings the key. The roots remember, and they are thirsty."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses "Hark" and "The roots remember."
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES. No apologies or doubt.
*   **Emotional Register/Arc:** YES. 60% arc—he is acting as a "conduit" for the Blight’s song.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Environmental Manifestation of Corruption:** The synchronization of the Blight with the protagonist’s physical state is a core pillar.
    *   *Evidence:* "The bark was slick, weeping a black, viscous sap that pulsed in time with the violet burn on her palm."
*   **Physical Manifestation of Guilt/Secrets:** The prose treats information as a physical burden, which heightens the stakes of the "Vessel" role.
    *   *Evidence:* "To keep it was a burden that made her spine feel like brittle glass."
*   **Antagonist Presentation:** Thorne’s lack of individual agency in favor of becoming a conduit is well-realized.
    *   *Evidence:* "...his thorn-choked arm raised in a mockery of a blessing."

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "...the low-frequency hum of the Root-Key vibrating against her marrow told her exactly where the Blight-Walkers stood."
*   **PROBLEM:** Per the World State [Canon Artifacts], the Root-Key is emitting a "high-pitched resonance that is shattering nearby stone." It cannot be both a "low-frequency hum" and a "high-pitched resonance" simultaneously without explanation.
*   **FIX:** "the high-pitched resonance of the Root-Key, sharp enough to shard the stagnant air, told her exactly where the Blight-Walkers stood."

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The air in the ravine’s gut did not behave like air; it had the consistency of silt..." vs. "...his voice a rasp of dry leaves."
*   **PROBLEM:** Thorne’s location is "overlooking the protagonists" at the start of the chapter [Character State: Thorne], yet by the end, he is "on a throne of calcified roots" at the base. This is a minor spatial inconsistency regarding how Elara feels his presence "yards away" while he is supposed to be above them initially.
*   **FIX:** Ensure the transition from the overlook to the throne is acknowledged: "Thorne had descended from the ridge, now perched upon a throne of calcified roots..."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Elara reached into her satchel, her fingers closing around the Root-Key. It was scorching hot now, a piece of a fallen star that vibrated with a low, hungry frequency."
*   **PROBLEM:** The Root-Key was noted in the World State as "shattering nearby stone." The prose here describes it as "hungry" but fails to show the environmental destruction described in the RAG context (shattering stone/wood), which makes the threat feel localized to Elara rather than a world-altering artifact.
*   **FIX:** "She fumbled for the Root-Key, which vibrated with a frequency so violent the pebbles near her feet began to crack and splinter into dust."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Suggestion:** Heighten the visual transition of the Sunstone. 
    *   *Quote:* "The Sunstone in his other hand gave one final, spasmic flash before receding to a dull, ember-like glow."
    *   *Reason:* The RAG context mentions the light turned "jagged, pale white." Adding a specific reference to the color shift would strengthen artifact continuity.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do not "fix" Elara's stammering:** The water metaphors ("I flow... no, I mean falter") are essential character signatures of spiritual depletion.
*   **Do not remove Thorne’s "Hark":** This is a specific speech quirk for "lesser beings."
*   **Do not smooth out the "fragmented and urgent" sentence patterns:** These are required voice signatures for when the characters are depleted.

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### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82/100**
**Justification:** The chapter is tonally perfect and follows voice signatures meticulously. However, it contains a significant continuity error regarding the Root-Key's resonance frequency (low vs. high) and fails to visually depict the artifact’s stated ability to shatter stone, which is a key part of the current World State.

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