### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   **"The digital recorder's feedback loop cut out with a dying squeal that left Sarah's molars vibrating, or perhaps that was merely the blood congealing in her ear canals." (Early):** This effectively grounds the reader in the immediate sensory aftermath of the Chapter 6 climax, merging mechanical and biological trauma.
*   **"The silence that followed wasn't the absence of sound; it was a physical weight, a pressurized vacuum that seemed to suck the very air from her lungs." (Early):** This reinforces the "Great Silence" world-state through a tactile metaphor that makes the environmental shift feel claustrophobic.
*   **"The kitchen was a graveyard of modern technology. The microwave’s digital clock had melted into a black smear; the overhead light fixture hung by a single copper wire, its bulb shattered." (Mid):** This imagery provides concrete evidence of the "Electronic Dead Zone" mentioned in the world state.
*   **"Below, in the dirt, there were no footprints. But there were patterns. The soil had been vibrated into perfect, concentric circles, like a Japanese rock garden designed by a madman." (Late):** This visual successfully translates the abstract concept of "acoustic displacement" into a chilling, physical manifestation.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Sarah Miller**
*   **Quote:** "The 110-decibel inversion... it forced a phase-shift. Empirically speaking, it couldn't occupy the same spatial coordinates as the feedback loop."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses "empirically speaking" to prefix her logic.
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** YES. Avoids flowery supernatural affirmations; relies on technical jargon (decibel inversion, phase-shift).
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. She is "stuttering initial consonants" ("T-t-the") which aligns with her voice signature for stress/audio feedback trigger.

**Elias Thorne**
*   **Quote:** "In the 1927 logs, they called this the 'Breath-Hold.' It isn't gone, Sarah. It’s holding its breath. It’s listening to us."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Reaches for historical precedent and sentient-biological explanations as per his profile.
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** YES. No violations noted.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. Shifts from observer to "intensely protective" participant.

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Technical Integration of the Signal:** The use of specific frequencies (14Hz vs 13Hz) and acoustic terminology keeps the "Whispers" grounded in the project’s unique speculative science. Reference: "A low, subterranean thrum began. It was 13Hz. A new number. A new adaptation."
*   **The Physicality of the Threat:** The transition from sound to gravity/pressure maintains the stakes. Reference: "The floorboards in the kitchen groaned. The crater where the refrigerator sat seemed to deepen, the wood fiber splintering with the sound of snapping bone."
*   **Sarah’s Refusal to Panic:** Maintaining Sarah’s analytical coldness even while bleeding is vital to her character arc. Reference: "I'm already its target... The only difference is whether I'm standing or lying down."

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "Mark... was now a broken instrument. He was staring at his own hands as if they belonged to a mannequin."
*   **PROBLEM:** The World State for Mark explicitly states: "Location: Miller Household, Living Room." This scene begins in the kitchen. In the text, Sarah and Elias "found him slumped in an armchair" in the living room, but then the narrative continues: "Before Sarah could respond, a sound rose from beneath their feet... Scrape. Pause. Scrape. It was moving along the floor joists directly under the living room floorboards." The dialogue/action then shifts back to the kitchen hatch. Mark is forgotten/left in the living room while the entity is explicitly moving *under* him, yet Sarah and Elias treat the kitchen hatch as the primary point of egress/danger.
*   **FIX:** Acknowledge the danger to the catatonic Mark.
    *   *Correction:* After "He's out of the equation," add: Elias looked back toward the living room as the scraping started. "It's right under him. We have to move him or draw it away." Sarah shook her head, "No—the hatch is the source. If we pull the signal here, he’s a non-target."

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The secondary adrenaline that ignored the blood in her ears and the nausea in her gut... She pulled."
*   **PROBLEM:** It is unclear if Sarah is carrying the primary tool she needs. The text says "If I can reset the primary transmitter," but the Chapter 7 World State says "electronics are destroyed by EM surge; only battery-operated gear remains functional." It’s never established if she grabbed a battery-operated transmitter.
*   **FIX:** Insert a brief beat where she retrieves the necessary tool.
    *   *Correction:* "She reached for the heavy, battery-shielded transmitter she’d salvaged from the wreckage, her fingers locking around the handle. She moved toward the pantry..."

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Suggestion:** Mention the "Digital recorder ghost-looping" earlier to resolve the open loop from Ch-02 more explicitly before the climactic "is it cold" moment.
*   **Relevant Quote:** "Her right hand moved instinctively toward her belt... She didn't press record yet."
*   **Reasoning:** Since the ghost-loop is a Ch-02 unresolved item, Sarah should perhaps notice the recorder acting up *before* it speaks, heightening the dread.

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not "fix" the stuttering:** Sarah’s "Th-th-this" and "T-t-the" are mandated by her profile under audio-stress.
*   **Do not soften Sarah’s "What the actual fuck":** This is her specific "furious" register marker.
*   **Do not remove "Data doesn't lie":** This is her established pivot and must remain.

### 8. VERDICT
**SCORE: 82**
**REVISE:** The chapter is tonally perfect and adheres strictly to voice signatures, but contains a significant continuity/logic gap regarding Mark’s safety (the entity is under him, but they ignore him to focus on the kitchen hatch) and the location/functionality of the "transmitter" Sarah intends to use in a dead zone.