### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   **Early:** "The air in the narrow stairwell was thick with the scent of ozone and scorched copper, a sharp, synthetic tang that scraped against the back of her throat."
    *   *This effectively establishes the "industrial resonance" theme by using sensory details that contrast with the natural world Lena prefers.*
*   **Mid:** "She reached out, her fingers trailing along the damp, crumbling brick of the foundation, desperate for the cool dampness of moss or the gritty truth of dirt."
    *   *This reinforces Lena's "Reach For" tactile anchor—seeking moss and bark to ground herself—as established in her voice signature.*
*   **Mid:** "Usually, the city at this hour was a symphony of cicadas, the distant thrum of jazz, and the heavy, sweet rot of the river. Now, the silence was unnatural."
    *   *The prose successfully utilizes the "Mood" metadata of "damp" and "subterranean" by highlighting the absence of natural swamp sounds.*
*   **Late:** "I bind thee to the mud, not the wire. I bind thee to the rot, not the steel. Drink, you hollow thing. Drink and be blind."
    *   *The clipped, rhythmicincantation mimics the "bayou chant" pattern specified in the character's voice signature for moments of focus.*

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Lena Duval**
*   **Line:** "Gator's truth... The land has been gagged, mon coeur. They’ve put a bit in its mouth."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Uses "Gator's truth" and the Cajun French endearment "mon coeur."
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** **YES.** She does not apologize or say "I give up."
*   **Emotional Register/Arc:** **YES.** She is at 55% arc, moving from running to realizing the industrial resonance follows her, forcing her to use swamp magic (binding the locket).

**Jax Harlan**
*   **Line:** "If I’m dying in a ditch tonight, I want to know the name of the ghost pulling the trigger."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** His tone is "grimly determined" and "hyper-vigilant" as per his character state. 
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** **N/A.** (No forbidden patterns listed for Jax).
*   **Emotional Register/Arc:** **YES.** He is acting as the "active tactician," prioritizing escape and demanding intelligence on the threat.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Sensory Grounding:** The consistent use of Lena’s scent profile and tactile needs.
    *   *Quote:* "The smell of the swamp greeted her like a long-lost sister—half-decay, half-life, a thick, humid embrace."
*   **Magic System Logic:** The "Tithe of Salt" and biological cost of magic remain consistent with the RAG context.
    *   *Reference:* Lena pricking her thumb to bind the locket aligns with "Weaves vines or summons fog... by pricking her palm."
*   **Key Item Integration:** The Silver Locket is successfully advanced from an "unresolved open loop" to a plot-driving device.
    *   *Quote:* "It’s not just a keepsake. It’s... it’s a tuning fork."

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The safehouse basement stairs groaned under Jax's boots as he hauled her up... They burst into the kitchen of the safehouse."
*   **PROBLEM:** The Ch-07 Character State specifically places Lena and Jax at an **"Abandoned trolley barn, outskirts of the Garden District,"** not a "safehouse." The narrative mentions her "Aunt Maribelle had pierced" the wards of this house, but the Project Context states the trolley lines are the conductors for tracking spells, making the barn a thematic necessity.
*   **FIX:** Change references from "safehouse" and "kitchen" to "trolley barn" and "maintenance office."
    *   *Suggested Rewrite:* "The trolley barn’s rusted iron stairs groaned... They burst into the foreman’s office."

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Identifying the frequency-scrambler device found in the barn (ch-07) — UNRESOLVED." (Text omission).
*   **PROBLEM:** The chapter ignores the **Scrambler Device** Key Item listed in the Metadata. Jax should be using this to mask their movement, especially since the "Grid Hum" is active.
*   **FIX:** Insert a mention of Jax activating the brass-and-silicon box when they exit the building to explain why they aren't immediately caught by the SUV.

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "I'm magically blind because the light I use has been switched out for something else... I'm just tuned to the wrong station."
*   **PROBLEM:** This metaphor is slightly muddled. It compares magic to light, then radio stations, then industrial resonance. 
*   **FIX:** Align the metaphor more closely with the "Industrial Frequencies" established in the world state.
    *   *Suggested Rewrite:* "I'm not empty, Jax. I'm just being drowned out. They haven't taken the power; they've flooded the channel with steel noise."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Reference missing NPC:** (Optional) Since the chapter mentions a "tithe of salt" in the RAG context but doesn't show the encounter with the Drowned Man (who is in the barn's flooded basement), adding a brief mention of the salt Lena had to leave behind or the spirit’s gaze would bridge the transition from Chapter 6 to 7. 
    *   *Quote context:* "The Drowned Man (Spirit)... demands a 'tithe of salt' for safe passage."

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not "clean up" Lena's repetitive panic:** "No, no, not that, no no" is a specific "Imperfection signature" from her Voice Signature block and must remain.
*   **Do not remove "Gator's truth":** This is a mandatory verbal tic.
*   **Do not soften Jax's dialogue:** His "grimly determined" and "protective" nature allows for the harshness in "Move, Lena! We don't have a minute."

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### 8. VERDICT: REVISE
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** The chapter has excellent voice work and captures the atmospheric tension perfectly. However, there is a **location continuity error** (Safehouse vs. Trolley Barn) and the failure to include the **Scrambler Device** Key Item, which is a critical piece of tech for their survival in this specific chapter. Correcting the setting and integrating the scrambler are required for a PASS.