**TO:** Crimson Leaf Editorial Roundtable
**FROM:** Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor
**RE:** Continuity & Voice Audit – *Binding Thread* Ch. 01

This chapter establishes the foundational "physics" of the Binding Thread and introduces our leads. While the atmospheric consistency is high, there are critical identity and lore contradictions between the draft and the established character sheets/world state that will collapse the series if not reconciled immediately.

### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Law of the Binding Thread:** The mechanical relationship between the map and reality is perfectly executed. "Reality followed the pattern, not the other way around. Her father had shouted that into her ears... The structure is the truth, Lyra." This aligns with the "Conservation of Connection" rule in the world state.
*   **Lyra’s Tactile Fixation:** Her constant need for texture ("Her thumb traced the hem of her tunic, feeling for the familiar rough weave") and her refusal to look at faces ("She didn’t look at the screaming people... She looked at their hands") matches her [voice-sig-lyra] perfectly.
*   **Dorian’s "Precisely" Tic:** Used correctly as a corrective tool rather than agreement.
*   **Voice Identification:**
    *   **Lyra:** YES. Her triplets vs. clipped commands and weaving metaphors ("snag," "half-stitch") make her distinct.
    *   **Dorian:** YES. His clinical distance ("The information you require is currently unavailable") and lack of contractions are unmistakable.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **The Father Contradiction (CRITICAL):**
    *   **The Error:** The chapter names Lyra’s father as "Lyra Vance" and "the village of Oakhaven" as her home where she hid from her father’s lessons. However, the [voice-sig-lyras-father] character sheet explicitly identifies him as **Silas Vane**, an *exiled* Artificer. 
    *   **The Correction:** Ensure Lyra’s surname matches her father’s (Vane or Vance) and clarify if Silas was hiding in Oakhaven or if they lived there before his exile. Currently, the draft treats him as a standard village figure, while the context says he is "Exiled."
*   **Dorian’s Discipline:** 
    *   **The Error:** In this chapter, Dorian uses something that looks like Lyra's magic to anchor her: "He was anchoring her... his shadow stretching out... she felt a sudden, sharp tension." The context [voice-sig-dorian] lists his discipline as **Umbral Kinesis (Shadow-Stitching)**. However, Dorian’s dialogue says, "The Archive is missing a thread... that went missing the day your mother disappeared." 
    *   **The Correction:** Per [voice-sig-lyra], it was Lyra’s mother who saved her from a "time-collapse." If Dorian is looking for a thread related to the mother, his motivation needs to align with the Shadow-Stitcher discipline's "Conservation of Tension" rather than just Chrono-Weaving.
*   **The Silas/Silas Conflict:**
    *   **The Error:** The [voice-sig-lyra] sheet lists her rival/antagonist as **Silas Thorne**. Her father's name is **Silas Vane**. 
    *   **The Correction:** This creates a naming collision. Chapter 1 introduces **Dorian Thorne**. We must ensure the reader doesn't confuse the rival (Silas Thorne) with the father (Silas Vane) or the love interest (Dorian Thorne).

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **The Location Transition:**
    *   **The Passage:** "I didn’t reach for the handle; I reached for the pulse of the wood... The door didn't slam; it simply ceased to exist behind her."
    *   **The Fix:** This transition is slightly jarring. We need a concrete sentence established in the WORLD STATE [Active World Events] that the Archive door "manifested in the forest where none existed." The text implies she found a door that "shouldn't have been there," but it should explicitly feel like a response to her "proximity and distress" as per the RAG database.
*   **The Discarded Status:**
    *   **The Passage:** "It was a Master’s work, or it would have been, if she hadn't been Discarded."
    *   **The Fix:** Briefly clarify *why* she was discarded or what that entails. The [character-state] mentions she finished the map that coincided with the erasure, but the internal timeline of "when" she was discarded vs "when" the village vanished is slightly muddy.

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Dorian’s Cufflink Ritual (Optional):** The draft says he "adjusts his left cufflink when he lies or withholds information." In the final scene, he does this when asked what he wants. We could strengthen this by ensuring he is explicitly withholding the full truth of the Archive’s purpose here.
*   **The "Vane" Name Drop (Optional):** Dorian calls her "A Vane" and she corrects him to "Vance." This is a great breadcrumb for the Silas Vane/exile plotline, but it needs to be clearly linked to her father’s "Perfect Knot" theory later.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not remove Lyra’s counting:** The "One, two, three, four" is her core stress-management tool and power-manifestation ritual. It must stay exactly in sets of four.
*   **Do not add contractions to Dorian:** His "High-Born Filter" (never using "don't," "can't," etc.) is a strict rule. *Note: The draft actually has him use "don't" twice: "If you don't tighten the tension" and "Don't touch anything."* **Wait—THIS IS A MUST-FIX.**
    *   **Correction:** Per [voice-sig-dorian], he **never** uses contractions unless exhausted/in pain. He is currently composed. Change "don't" to "do not" in all Dorian dialogue.

### 6. VERDICT
**REVISE**
The father's name/status discrepancy and Dorian's use of contractions (violating his voice signature) are major flags. These must be corrected to maintain the internal logic of the Binding Thread series.