### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Early:** “The Consummation Silk, stained with their mingled blood and fluttering like a false banner of surrender, caught the moonlight as Damien’s grip on her waist finally eased.”
    *   This effectively establishes the "political theater" theme by using the silk as a visual metaphor for their fabricated union.
*   **Mid:** “Isabella felt the surge immediately. It was like drinking liquid starlight, a rush of stolen heat that flooded her veins and stilled the tremors in her hands.”
    *   This passage gracefully illustrates the sensory nature of the hemomantic bond, moving beyond mere mechanical description into high-fantasy prose.
*   **Mid:** “A queen does not perform on command like a trained hound. Or has the Blackthorn Coven forgotten the basic etiquette of the Treaty?”
    *   This line reinforces Isabella's "regal" persona and the inherent tension between her perceived low status as a captive and her high status as a Voss.
*   **Late:** “The blood didn't drip; it rose in the air, swirling like crimson smoke, drawn by the force of her will.”
    *   The visual of "crimson smoke" provides a distinct aesthetic for Nightbloom magic that differentiates it from standard gore.
*   **Late:** “Is it not the greatest irony, she thought, that to keep the peace, I must become the ultimate traitor?”
    *   This internal monologue reinforces her specific verbal tic—ending reflective thoughts with a seeking question—even within her own mind.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Isabella Voss**
*   **Quote:** “Pray, do release the theatrics, Damien. The audience has retired to toast their perceived conquest. We are quite alone, are we not?”
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Uses sarcastic "Pray" as a prefix and ends the reflection with "are we not?"
*   **Forbidden Speech:** **YES.** Avoids slang; maintains elegant, mid-length sentence structures.
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** Calculating and performatively submissive to the scout, but sharp with Damien.

**Damien Blackthorn**
*   **Quote:** “I’ve always preferred heresy to tradition. Tradition would have me break you. This… this is much more interesting.”
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Uses a "predatory" and "cynical" tone consistent with his profile.
*   **Forbidden Speech:** **YES.** Does not use prohibited slang.
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** Protective yet masked by "rough velvet" delivery; matches his 35% arc position of "shielding" Isabella.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **The Power Dynamics of the "Anchor":** The physical cost of the magic is well-integrated. Specifically, the line: *"My body is merely… negotiating the terms"* perfectly captures Isabella’s voice and the mechanics of Hemomancy.
*   **Isabella’s Agency within Submission:** Even when exhausted, she weaponizes status. Reference: Her retort to the scout regarding "basic etiquette of the Treaty" maintains her character's refusal to grovel.
*   **The False Pregnancy Subplot:** The introduction of the "phantom heir" through magic: *"We must weave an extension into our vow—a concealment that hides the Unmarked Vessel within me and mimics the presence of a burgeoning life."* This is a high-stakes, logical escalation of the "false consummation" ruse.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** “Isabella drew a breath, wincing as the movement pulled at the scorched skin of her chest where the Peace Vow had flared in its silent, searing rebuke.”
*   **PROBLEM:** Per [World State: ch-04], the Peace Vow "constrains direct violence between the heirs." In Ch-03, they bypassed it via blood-sharing. However, the text here suggests the Vow flared *because* they shared blood/staged the union, which contradicts the "Known Secret" that blood-sharing *bypasses* the Vow. If the Vow flared, the trick failed.
*   **FIX:** Clarify that the pain is from the *Blood-Ink Pact* or hemomantic exhaustion, not a "rebuke" from the Peace Vow itself. Rewrite: "Isabella drew a breath, wincing as the blood-ink pact under her skin throbbed with the weight of their deception, a searing price for the magic that bypassed the Peace Vow’s gaze."

*   **ORIGINAL:** “Your coven is fracturing, Isabella. I hear whispers of splinter cells...”
*   **PROBLEM:** Per [Faction Attitudes], the Nightbloom Coven was "Fractured" in ch-03 and remains "No change from ch-03" in ch-04. While this dialogue reflects that state, Damien's knowledge of "splinter cells" is new information not present in NPC Memory or World State.
*   **FIX:** Adjust the prompt or world state to acknowledge Damien’s intelligence network has confirmed these splinter cells, or change the dialogue to reflect widespread rumors rather than specific "whispers of splinter cells" to maintain the "Fractured" status without overstepping.

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** “Damien... looked lethargic, the usual predator’s grace dampened by the vitality he had poured into her through their pact.”
*   **PROBLEM:** The [Character State] for Damien says "Physical: No injuries; slight sympathetic pulse from the blood-link." It does not mention lethargy or significant vitality loss. This creates a discrepancy between the metadata and the prose.
*   **FIX:** Adjust the prose to match the "slight sympathetic pulse" or update the Character State. Suggested prose fix: "Damien’s gaze snapped to her... his predator's grace narrowed into a keen, watchful focus, though a slight tension in his jaw betrayed the sympathetic pulse of the link."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Contextualizing the Scout's Fear:** (Optional) The scout's sudden hesitation when Damien threatens him: *"The scout hesitated, then bowed again—deeper this time..."* This could be strengthened by acknowledging the specific dread NPCs have for Damien's "predator" status.
*   **The Locket Resonance:** (Optional) The ending mentions a heat from the locket: *"It was a pulsing, rhythmic resonance, a whisper of intent that didn't belong to her."* It would be beneficial to explicitly hint if this intent is coming from the locket (vow-sealed talisman) or the blood-link (Damien).

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do not remove "is it not?" or sarcasm:** Isabella's speech pattern of ending sentences with rhetorical, ghostly affirmations is a key character trait identified in the Voice Signature.
*   **Do not "soften" Isabella:** Her refusal to apologize to the scout (*"A queen does not perform on command"*) is an intentional character signature.
*   **Do not remove the scars/physical habit:** Tracing the scars is a documented physical tell for her anxiety.

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### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** The chapter is tonally excellent and follows the Voice Signatures perfectly. However, there is a significant continuity error regarding the Peace Vow "rebuking" the characters when established lore states their method bypasses it. Additionally, Damien's physical state in the prose contradicts the "No injuries" character state in the provided context. These must be rectified to ensure world-building consistency.