### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   "The growls grew louder, vibrating through the cave walls like the forest's own heartbeat, while the echoes in Elara's mind screamed for her to run." (Early) — This effectively establishes the dual-threat level by paralleling the physical environment with Elara’s internal psychic distress.
*   "Where its face should have been, there was only a void of swirling soot, save for two pinpricks of bioluminescent violet that pulsed with every ragged breath." (Mid) — The use of "bioluminescent violet" provides a sharp, visual anchor for a creature otherwise described through abstract shadow.
*   "The steel didn't hit flesh; it struck the obsidian shard with the ringing sound of a hammer on an anvil." (Late) — This sensory description provides a satisfyingly tactile resolution to the combat, emphasizing the unnatural nature of the enemy.
*   "Elara pointed toward a ridge shrouded in a thick, unnatural mist." (Late) — This sentence is functionally weak, relying on the generic adjective "unnatural" rather than describing the specific quality of the mist to evoke unease.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Character: Elara**
*   **Dialogue:** "The echoes… they’re terrified. They’re saying it’s 'forgotten.'"
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Elara consistently references the "echoes" and "whispers," maintaining her role as a conduit.
*   **Avoid Forbidden Patterns:** YES. No modern slang or out-of-character technical jargon used.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. She is "unsettled yet determined," moving from paralysis ("boots felt rooted") to action ("She surged forward").

**Character: Thorne**
*   **Dialogue:** "Don't look back for me, Elara. Just get to the hollow oak."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses pragmatic, directive language typical of a protector/guide.
*   **Avoid Forbidden Patterns:** YES. Maintains a rugged, period-appropriate fantasy tone.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. He is "guarded and skeptical" initially, but his transition to acknowledging the supernatural mirrors Silas's established arc.

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **The Visualization of the "Break":** The sequence where the creature is revealed as a "fractured crystal" (Late) is a strong manifestation of Elara's 30% arc progress, showing her growing mastery over forest magic.
*   **Tactile Magic:** The moment the "Elderwood root... whipped upward like a serpent" (Mid) grounds the high fantasy elements in the physical environment, consistent with the "Great Awakening" world event.
*   **The Shared Vulnerability:** The interaction where Thorne’s "hand was shaking—just a tremor" (Late) adds necessary depth to the YA-targeted character dynamics, showing the cost of the encounter.

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Thorne hissed. He was pressed against the damp limestone of the cave entrance... Thorne, above! Elara screamed."
*   **PROBLEM:** **Character Name Discrepancy.** The project context and RAG database list Elara’s guide/companion as **Silas**, not Thorne. Elder Thorne is an NPC in Oakhaven who is "UNTRUSTING" and "Vowed to report the 'theft'." It is a major continuity error for the "Guarded and skeptical" guide Silas to be replaced by the hostile village Elder in a protective role.
*   **FIX:** Replace all instances of "Thorne" with "Silas" throughout the chapter. Ensure the dialogue reflects Silas’s "high-alert status" and "muscle tension" described in the RAG character state.

*   **ORIGINAL:** "I’ve spent my whole life patrolling these woods. I thought I knew the risks... Spirits, legends... I thought they were just stories..."
*   **PROBLEM:** **World State Contradiction.** Silas (the guide) is already noted in ch-03 as having "Transitioned from a mere guide to a protector who acknowledges the forest's sentient threats." He should not be processing this as "just stories" in ch-04; he should already be in the "High-alert/Guarded" phase regarding these phenomena.
*   **FIX:** "I’ve spent my whole life patrolling these woods. I thought I'd seen the worst of it. But I was wrong—it's not just spirits in the trees anymore. It's this."

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The Moon won't stay up forever." (Late)
*   **PROBLEM:** Temporal confusion. The chapter opens "Outside the cave mouth, the twilight of the forest had curdled." By the end, they are moving toward a ridge at night. However, the Mercenary Deployment event states they reached the valley "as of sunset." If they are moving now, they are walking directly into the mercenaries in the dark, but this danger is not acknowledged in the dialogue.
*   **FIX:** "The moon won't stay up forever, and the Blackwood scouts won't stay in the valley floors once they see that light. We have to move."

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Suggestion:** Reference the map. Elara is noted as having an "UNPAID obligation" regarding Silas and the map. 
*   **Quote Context:** "I hear its intent," she snapped... 
*   **Improvement:** Adding a brief mention of the map humming or reacting to her blood during the vision would weave in the "Known Secrets" from the project context.

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do not change the specific terminology of "Echoes" or "Whispers."** These are central to Elara’s character trait as a "Seeker of Echoes."
*   **Do not "clean up" Thorne/Silas's gruffness.** His "short, sharp grunt of disbelief" is vital to his established "Guarded and skeptical" emotional state.
*   **Do not remove the "translucent, needle-like teeth made of hardened sap."** This organic horror element is central to the Forest's "Great Awakening"/Blight theme.

### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**SCORE: 65**
**Justification:** The chapter contains a critical character name error, substituting the hostile NPC Elder Thorne for the primary companion Silas. This creates a total breakdown of established continuity and character arcs. Additionally, Silas's dialogue ignores his ch-03 character development regarding his acceptance of supernatural threats.