### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "Each exhale felt like pulling dry wool through a narrow needle-eye."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively leverages the story’s weaving motif to ground the reader in Liora’s physical distress through a tactile, genre-specific metaphor.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "Liora looked up, her ocular hemorrhaging casting a crimson filter over the world."
    *   *Commentary:* This provides a visceral visual anchor that aligns perfectly with her physical state (ch-06) while explaining her distorted perception of the scene.
*   **Quote 3 (Mid):** "Elder Maros’s voice boomed over the chamber’s internal vox, but it lacked its usual granite authority. It sounded thin, like parchment being torn."
    *   *Commentary:* The "parchment" simile maintains the scholarly/archival aesthetic of the Conclave while signaling Maros’s crumbling political power.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "The gravity in the chamber took a hard 45-degree tilt. The guards were thrown against the far wall, their red threads flailing like severed nerves."
    *   *Commentary:* This passage illustrates the "Indigo Contagion" gravity fluctuations mentioned in the world state while emphasizing Liora’s specialized "Threadbinding" perception of her enemies.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Liora Voss**
*   **Line:** "You can't just pull at fate's hem like it's your favorite cloak—watch the weave, or it'll unravel us both." (Note: This is spoken by Thorne back to Liora, but she speaks the core sentiment throughout the chapter).
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics?** YES. She uses "Bind or break" (early) and repeats "bind-bind-bind" (mid) when panicked.
*   **Forbidden Speech?** YES. She avoids optimism/free laughter; her tone remains fatalistic.
*   **Emotional Register?** YES. She is defiant and obsessed with "fixing" the connection.

**Thorne Quill**
*   **Line:** "Lean on me. Stop trying to hold the sky up by yourself. Use the tether. Share the load."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics?** YES. He uses the term "anchor," consistent with his role as "anchor-weight." 
*   **Forbidden Speech?** YES. No violations found.
*   **Emotional Register?** YES. He is protective and attuned to the Loom’s predatory nature.

**Elder Maros**
*   **Line:** "You have introduced a rot into the Great Weave! This heresy... this filth..."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics?** YES. His vocabulary is steeped in the "Purist" faction’s militant condemnation.
*   **Forbidden Speech?** YES. No violations found.
*   **Emotional Register?** YES. Panicked authority; 25% arc position (Witnessing heresy).

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Sensory Magic System Integration:** The way Liora perceives magic is consistently tied to her trade. (Reference: "...their threads appeared to Liora’s strained perception as militant red knots, tight and aggressive...")
*   **The "Loom's" Presence:** Maintaining the Loom as an active, sentient predator rather than a machine. (Reference: "...a low-frequency hunger that made her molar teeth ache.")
*   **Physicality of the Tether:** The violet tether is treated as a physical burden that dictates movement. (Reference: "...their movements a clumsy, synchronized dance dictated by the tether.")

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "...the Archival Guards were advancing. Their heavy boots thudded in unison... Devoid of the nuanced shimmer of a True Binder."
*   **PROBLEM:** The World State for ch-06 notes "Archival Guards (Spindle Perimeters): Hostile... They are now targeting anyone with 'corrupted' biomatter." However, the chapter mentions "Level four containment" which usually implies biological sealing, yet Liora is able to "break" a "secondary service duct" to an "access shaft" which should be physically sealed under "Lockdown Protocol: Core Spindle is sealed."
*   **FIX:** Acknowledge that she is forcing a breach in a sealed system. Change to: "She aimed for the secondary service duct—a vertical spindle used for maintenance drones—and forced the lockdown seals to scream and shatter."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The gravity in the chamber took a hard 45-degree tilt."
*   **PROBLEM:** It is unclear if this is a localized effect caused by Liora or a global failure of the Spindle's gravity due to the Indigo Contagion mentioned in the World State.
*   **FIX:** Harmonize with her intent. "Liora didn't untie the iron-threads; she snapped them, inducing a localized gravity lapse that sent the chamber into a hard 45-degree tilt."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Suggestion:** Lean harder into the specific "lanolin and indigo" smell during the moment of contact with Thorne to emphasize her "Notes for Writers" profile. 
*   **Verbatim Quote:** "He smelled of ozone, burnt salt, and the deep, earthy scent of indigo dye."
*   **Improvement:** "He smelled of ozone and burnt salt, a sharp contrast to her own constant scent of lanolin and indigo dye."

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **DO NOT REMOVE:** Liora’s repetitive chanting ("bind-bind-bind"). This is a stated imperfection signature in her Voice Signature profile.
*   **DO NOT SMOOTH:** The technical jargon of "Threadbinding" (e.g., Dirty Circuit, frayback, iron-thread). These are essential world-building components.
*   **DO NOT SOFTEN:** Liora’s fatalism. Even when escaping, she should not sound "heroic" in a traditional/optimistic sense.

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### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** While the prose is evocative and the character voices are perfectly aligned with the provided signatures (especially the tics and metaphors), there are minor clarity and continuity issues regarding how the "Lockdown Protocol" interacts with Liora's ability to trigger an exit. Every Must-Fix item provides a verbatim quote and correction.