### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The water came out in a rusty burst before settling into a clear stream. He splashed his face, the frigid temperature shocking his skin. He kept his eyes open. He refused to blink."
    *   *Commentary:* This passage effectively builds tension by subverting the common trope of closing one's eyes to rinse, grounding the horror in a conscious choice to remain hyper-vigilant.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "Mrs. Gable, the town’s resident historian and lead archivist, peering at him over a pair of spectacles that hung by a beaded chain. She looked like she was made of parchment and pressed flowers."
    *   *Commentary:* The sensory details here provide a vivid, tactile description of the character that reinforces the archival setting.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "The shadow from the mirror was standing in the middle of the room now. It was no longer a reflection. It was a physical weight, a hole in reality that sucked the light and heat from the air."
    *   *Commentary:* This description successfully transitions the horror from psychological to physical, using the metaphor of a "hole in reality" to maintain the supernatural tone.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT
**Elias Thorne**
*   **Dialogue:** "I don’t believe in ghosts, Mrs. Gable. I’m a restorer. I believe in dry rot, foundations, and bad plumbing."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Elias uses technical, skeptical language consistent with his "skeptical scholar" starting point.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES (No forbidden patterns listed in Project State).
*   **Consistent Emotional Register:** YES. His transition from skepticism to "cornered madness" matches his 10% Arc shift toward becoming a believer in supernatural danger.

**Mrs. Gable** (NPC)
*   **Dialogue:** "And what do you believe when the plumbing whispers your mother’s maiden name?"
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Her dialogue is cryptic and uses rural/local metaphors ("The Sink").
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES.
*   **Consistent Emotional Register:** YES. She remains "imperious and dismissive" of the danger while enjoying Elias's discomfort.

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Auditory Horror:** The specific description of the voice—"a wet, rattling vibration that had smelled of stagnant water and old copper"—is visceral and unique, moving beyond a standard ghostly whisper.
*   **The Archive Subversion:** The scene where Elias seeks safety in the "solid and honest" mahogany of the archives, only to have the librarian dismantle his security, is a strong pivot from physical threat to psychological dread.
*   **The Anatomical Blueprints:** The transformation of the house plans into "anatomical diagrams. Veins. Arteries. A heart" creates a potent visual metaphor for the sentient house.

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The sun, pale and indifferent, filtered through the grime-streaked windows of the local archives."
*   **PROBLEM:** Location Inconsistency. The World State and Character State explicitly place Elias at "The Archive, Sub-Level 4, Oakhaven," which is described as an administrative facility with a "Board of Regents." Chapter 3 describes a "local archives" with a "town historian" (Mrs. Gable), treating it like a small-town public library rather than the professional/academic Sub-Level 4 facility established in the RAG context.
*   **FIX:** Change the setting of the morning scene to "The Archive, Sub-Level 4" and replace Mrs. Gable with Sarah Miller or the Curator, or establish that Elias has left the facility to visit a separate municipal library.

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The Miller family. There’s a police report tucked in the back. Something about a ‘hollow space’ behind the master bedroom."
*   **PROBLEM:** Timeline/Faction Inconsistency. Sarah Miller is currently characterized as a skeptic and Elias's colleague in Sub-Level 4. Having her family be part of a 1980s police report regarding the manor she is currently investigating (without Elias mentioning this prior connection) creates a massive logic gap.
*   **FIX:** If the Millers are the family in the ledger, Sarah’s motivation for being at the Archive must be updated in her Character State to include her personal history with Blackwood Manor, or the name in the ledger must be changed to avoid confusion with the existing character Sarah Miller.

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "He had sunk every penny of his inheritance and his savings into the renovation of Blackwood Manor."
*   **PROBLEM:** Contextual Disconnect. The project context states Elias is in "The Archive, Sub-Level 4" and is a "skeptical scholar." Chapter 3 suddenly introduces "Blackwood Manor" as his primary location and personal financial burden. It is unclear if Oakhaven and Blackwood are the same, or why he is living in a house under renovation while also working shifts in a high-security archive sub-level.
*   **FIX:** Add a brief internal monologue or dialogue line clarifying that Elias is staying at Blackwood Manor while working his contract at the Oakhaven Archive to investigate the signal.

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Suggestion:** (Late Chapter) The transition of Elias's hands "fading" so he can see the wood through them is very high-fantasy for a grounded horror piece.
*   **Quote:** "He could see the grain of the wooden door through his palms. He wasn't just losing his mind; he was being erased."
*   **Reason:** If the signal is occult/frequency-based (as per the frequency matching 1920s patterns), keeping the horror grounded in auditory/visual hallucination or physical shifting of the house might be more effective than a "disappearing" protagonist.

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Verbal Tics:** Mrs. Gable’s "humming" like dead leaves and Elias's "pathetic, thin and reedy" whispering are essential markers of their current emotional states and should not be polished into "stronger" dialogue.
*   **Genre Conventions:** The lights failing and the cell phone receiving creepy texts are genre staples that serve to isolate the protagonist; these should remain despite being "tropes."

### 8. VERDICT: REVISE
**SCORE: 78**
**Justification:** The chapter introduces significant continuity errors regarding the setting (Small town library vs. High-security Sub-Level 4 Archive) and the Miller family connection, which contradicts the established character state for Sarah Miller. These factual inconsistencies must be reconciled before the project proceeds.