### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The Bridal Chamber was a cage of opulence, carved into the very crown of Blackthorn Keep. Mortared with ancient spite and lit by the low, guttering flame of black tallow candles, the room smelled of cold incense and the metallic tang of the storm brewing outside..."
    *   **Commentary:** This effectively establishes the gothic atmosphere while reinforcing the "trapped" status of the protagonist through the metaphor of "mortared with ancient spite."
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "Isabella felt the first sharp needle-prick of the Peace Vow. It stirred in her marrow, a cold, oily sensation that punished the flicker of hatred she felt for the man standing before her."
    *   **Commentary:** This passage successfully translates an abstract magical concept (The Peace Vow) into a visceral physical sensation that raises the stakes of the dialogue.
*   **Quote 3 (Mid):** "'I find I wish to have mine sharpened. I am a student of details, Isabella. For instance, I noticed you haven't removed those gloves since the ceremony began.'"
    *   **Commentary:** This line creates immediate narrative tension by having the antagonist directly target the protagonist's primary secret established in the project context.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "With a swift, ruthless tug, the white fabric finally slipped, sliding down the length of her arm to reveal the crimson lattice of jagged, glowing scars beneath."
    *   **Commentary:** The prose here provides a high-impact visual payoff to the tension built throughout the chapter, though the reveal happens slightly faster than the internal resistance might suggest.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Isabella Voss**
*   **Quote:** "Pray, do not mistake a bride’s exhaustion for a conspirator’s guilt. It is quite gauche to cross-examine one’s wife before the wine has even been poured."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics (YES):** Uses the sarcastic "Pray" prefix.
*   **Avoid Forbidden Speech (YES):** Maintains elegant, formal diction; avoids slang.
*   **Emotional Register (YES/NO):** **NO.** While she maintains her "regal correction" mask, the profile states she repeats key words obsessively when panicked (e.g., "blood blood everywhere"). In the text, she repeats "The wine, the wine" (Mid-Late), which fits the "imperfect signature," but she quickly reverts to high-elegance without the "fragmented sentences" mentioned in the profile for moments of rage or extreme stress.

**Damien Blackthorn**
*   **Quote:** "It is a cell, Isabella. Pray, let us not drape it in the finery of delusion."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics (YES):** Appropriates Isabella's "Pray" sarcastically, fitting his role as a "smoldering rival."
*   **Avoid Forbidden Speech (YES):** Speech is appropriately dark and authoritative.
*   **Emotional Register (YES):** Reflects the "darkly impressed" and "predatory focus" noted in the [character-state].

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **The Power Dynamic Shift:** The transition from Isabella attempting to control the room with wit to her physical vulnerability is masterfully handled in the sequence where her knees buckle: "She gasped, her knees buckling for a fraction of a second before she caught herself against the mahogany bedpost."
*   **Sensory Anchors:** The recurring smell of blood and metallic tangs (e.g., "the metallic taste of her own magic") serves as a constant reminder of the hemomancy at the heart of the story.
*   **Strategic Use of the Peace Vow:** The way the magical oath acts as an internal antagonist, punishing her for her thoughts ("The internal lash of the Peace Vow struck her then... the price of her arrogance"), adds a layer of conflict that makes the dialogue scene feel like an action sequence.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Isabella froze. If she moved, the friction of the fabric would surely cause the raw, unhealed marks to bleed."
*   **PROBLEM:** This contradicts the [character-state] which explicitly says she has "fresh bleeding from wrist scars beneath gloves" at the *start* of the chapter. She isn't just afraid they *will* bleed; they already are.
*   **FIX:** "Isabella froze. She could already feel the warm, copper stickiness of fresh blood matting the silk to her skin; any sudden movement would cause the stains to bloom visibly through the white fabric."

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The Unmarked Vessel Clause was the cornerstone of the treaty; if the Blackthorns discovered she was a scarred hemomancer..."
*   **PROBLEM:** The [character-state] lists as a RESOLVED open loop: "Testing the limits of Isabella’s hemomancy (ch-01) -- RESOLVED." This implies Damien already has a suspicion or knowledge of her nature, but the chapter treats it as a brand new discovery for him.
*   **FIX:** Ensure Damien’s dialogue acknowledges his previous suspicions more clearly. "The Treaty specifies an Unmarked Vessel, Isabella. I have seen the way you flinch; I have already begun to count the cost of your deception."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "'Then show me,' he challenged... 'Command me to stop. Bind me with the strength of your house.'"
*   **PROBLEM:** This is confusing given that Isabella already *has* bound him in Chapter 1/2 according to the [world-state]: "The Blood-Ink Anchor: ACTIVE... links Damien’s life to her own." If he is already bound, his challenge for her to "bind him" lacks clarity—is he unaware of the link, or is he asking for a different kind of binding?
*   **FIX:** "Command me to stop. Use that foul anchor you've tethered to my soul and force my hand. Or are you too weak to hold the leash you've made?"

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Enhancing the "Leaking Vessel" metaphor:** (Late) Since the "Unmarked Vessel" clause is central, emphasize the sacrilege of her bleeding more heavily during the glove removal. 
    *   **Quote:** "...the stagnant blood of her broken oaths beginning to bead upon her skin." 
    *   **Suggestion:** Change to "the stagnant blood of her broken oaths weeping from her skin—a vessel cracked and overflowing with forbidden power."

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do not remove the "Pray" verbal tics.** These are essential character signatures.
*   **Do not "soften" Damien.** His predatory nature is a core element of the "smoldering rival" and "absolute predator" arc position.
*   **Do not remove the repetitive "The wine, the wine."** This is an intentional "imperfection signature" for Isabella in high-stress moments.

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### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** While the prose is atmospheric and the character voices are largely accurate, there is a significant continuity error regarding the state of Isabella's bleeding (the text suggests she is afraid to start bleeding, while the project context states she is already bleeding). Additionally, the interaction regarding the "Blood-Ink Anchor" needs clarification to align with the established world state.