### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The Threshold was humming a low, jagged note that tasted of copper and ozone."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively utilizes synesthesia to establish the high-stakes, sensory-heavy atmosphere of the magical "Dirty Circuit."
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "The air thickened into the consistency of water, shimmering with indigo contagion. This was the environmental bleed—the Thirteenth Strand was eating the physical laws of the room."
    *   *Commentary:* This passage successfully visualizes the abstract "heresy" of the magic by showing its tangible, disruptive effect on gravity and physics.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "The indigo staining was no longer just a mark; it felt like a second skin, a layer of cold, synthetic nerves that hummed when the Loom hummed."
    *   *Commentary:* This grounding metaphor reinforces the character’s physical transformation and the high cost of her arc's 25% integration milestone.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "Inside, the contagion was spreading, the gravity shifts leaving the furniture at odd angles, the very air bleeding violet."
    *   *Commentary:* While the imagery is consistent, the phrase "very air bleeding violet" borders on repetitive given the earlier mentions of "violet light bleeds" in the context.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Liora Voss**
*   **Quote:** "You can't bind what wants to be fed," she replied. (Response to Thorne)
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** She uses "bind or break" early in the chapter and repeats "bind-bind-bind it now" when stressed.
*   **Forbidden Speech Patterns:** **YES.** She maintains her fatalistic, dry tone and never expresses optimism.
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** She is tactically sharp despite physical exhaustion, matching her "Defiant; tactical" state.

**Thorne Quill**
*   **Quote:** "I'm here, Weaver... But the Loom... it isn't a machine, Liora. It’s a map. And we’re just the ink."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** His dialogue reflects his growing hyper-attunement to the Loom's voice and his shift from sacrifice to sentient anchor.
*   **Forbidden Speech Patterns:** **N/A.**
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** He feels "heavy" and "vibrating," consistent with the physical weight increase noted in his profile.

**Elder Maros**
*   **Quote:** "The Conclave requires an anchor, not a corpse."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Maros exhibits his manipulative and politically panicked nature.
*   **Forbidden Speech Patterns:** **N/A.**
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** He remains behind the safety of the glass, leaning on his cane, projecting authority while clearly desperate.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Tactile Magic System:** The way Liora interacts with the Loom is visceral and consistent with her "Reach For" profile.
    *   *Reference:* "Liora plunged her violet-pulsing palm into the primary interface" and "She reached into the air, her fingers twitching, tracing the invisible ley-lines."
*   **The Liora-Thorne Psychic Link:** The chapter perfectly captures the "Shared Link" obligation from the context.
    *   *Reference:* "Thorne’s presence felt like scorched earth and sharpened iron. He was vibrating at the same frequency as the Loom."
*   **Internal World Consistency:** The mention of "lanolin and indigo dye" (from the profile notes) provides a consistent sensory anchor.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Liora felt a chill that had nothing to do with the Core's temperature. She thought of her parents—the way their threads had simply... dissolved."
*   **PROBLEM:** The character profile (Known Secrets) states Liora witnessed her parents' souls being "unbound" in a ritual failure. "Dissolved" is a vague verb that contradicts the specific mechanical horror of unbinding established in the world state.
*   **FIX:** "She thought of her parents—the way their threads had simply snapped and frayed into nothingness, souls unbound in the white glare of the failure."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "'The red thread whispers betrayal,' she muttered... 'Too much tension on the southern axis. Bind-bind-bind it now.'"
*   **PROBLEM:** Without the profile's context regarding her "Personifies threads" quirk, the line about the "red thread" feels like a disconnected plot point about a character betraying her, rather than a technical assessment of the machine's "Dirty Circuit."
*   **FIX:** "'The red thread of this circuit whispers betrayal—it won't hold the weight,' she muttered, her eyes tracking a phantom strand of crimson..." (Adding "of this circuit" clarifies she is diagnosing the machine).

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Optional:** Enhance the gravity shift imagery.
    *   *Quote:* "Liora felt as if she were falling upward toward the High Observation Gallery, her boots losing purchase on the metal grate."
    *   *Suggestion:* Mention the blood from her ocular hemorrhaging "falling" toward the ceiling to emphasize the subjectivity of gravity mentioned in the prose.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do not "fix" the repetition** of "bind-bind-bind." This is a documented imperfection signature for Liora when panicked.
*   **Do not remove the "Personifying threads" dialogue.** Phrases like "the red thread whispers" are essential to her specific voice signature.
*   **Keep the technical braiding habit.** "unconsciously beginning to braid a stray lock of dark hair" is a direct carry-over from her physical habits in the profile.

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### 8. VERDICT

**SCORE: 88**
**REVISE**

**Justification:** The chapter is atmospheric and adheres wonderfully to the complex voice signatures and world-state constraints provided. However, two "MUST-FIX" items regarding the specific terminology of her parents' death (Continuity) and the technical clarity of her thread personification (Clarity) are required to ensure the text aligns perfectly with the established RAG database.