### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   "Liora's left palm throbbed with the violet pulse of the tether, indigo veins snaking like rebellious threads up her arm, as the Loom's predatory purr vibrated through her bones." (Early) — *This sentence effectively establishes the physical toll of the magic while grounding the abstract "Loom" in a tactile, predatory sensation.*
*   "Elder Maros’s voice boomed over the chamber’s internal vox, but it lacked its usual granite authority. It sounded thin, like parchment being torn." (Mid) — *The contrast between "granite" and "parchment" mirrors Maros’s crumbling political power described in his character state.*
*   "Fine, silver-white filaments were peeling away from her indigo-stained skin—her own life-thread, beginning to unspool under the mechanical pressure of the Dirty Circuit." (Mid-Late) — *This provides a clear visual for the "frayback" mechanic, making the metaphysical stakes visible to the reader.*
*   "The gravity in the chamber took a hard 45-degree tilt. The guards were thrown against the far wall, their red threads flailing like severed nerves." (Late) — *This passage successfully translates the "Indigo Contagion's" gravity fluctuations into a kinetic action sequence.*

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Liora Voss**
*   **Quote:** "Bind-bind-bind. Keep the loom-song muted. Keep it tight."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses the obsessive repetition "bind-bind-bind" flagged in her Imperfection Signature.
*   **Forbidden Speech:** YES. Avoids optimism; maintains a fatalistic tone.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. Shows the "grim triumph" and "fatalistic dread" noted in ch-06 state.

**Thorne Quill**
*   **Quote:** "You can't just pull at fate's hem like it's your favorite cloak—watch the weave, or it'll unravel us both."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. His protective nature and transition to an "active, sentient anchor" are clear.
*   **Forbidden Speech:** YES. He challenges Liora’s need for control, consistent with her arc constraints.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. Resolute and attuned to the Loom’s predatory nature.

**Elder Maros**
*   **Quote:** "You have introduced a rot into the Great Weave! This heresy... this filth..."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses weaving metaphors ("rot into the Great Weave") and displays the "politically panicked" state from the context.
*   **Forbidden Speech:** YES. No violations found.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. Consistent with a man losing control of a ritual's narrative.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Sensory Magic Detail:** The description of the violet tether as a "taut umbilical cord of light" (Early) creates a visceral, uncomfortable connection that emphasizes the "permanent metaphysical tether" required by the prompt.
*   **Liora’s Fatalism:** Her refusal to accept help until the last second—"Fine... But if we snap, it’s on your head" (Mid-Late)—preserves her "compulsive need to 'fix' every connection" and her "dry humor laced with fatalism."
*   **The Loom’s Sentience:** The transition of the Loom's sound from a "shriek" to a "predatory purr" (Early) and finally to a "wordless, screaming demand for more" (Late) maintains the established lore that the Loom is predatory.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "Thorne’s hand, still partially bound but able to reach, pressed against her shoulder."
*   **PROBLEM:** Earlier in the chapter, Thorne is described as "bolted into the restraint chair... his muscles bunch... trying to pull against the restraints." There is no mention of his hands being freed or having any range of motion until Liora later "tore at Thorne’s restraints" and they "melted."
*   **FIX:** "Thorne, straining against the bolts that bit into his wrists, managed to lean his weight toward her, his proximity acting as a heat-sink for the resonance."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "She reached into the floor, tracing the lines of the lockdown protocols. They were thick, clumsy weaves of iron-thread. She didn't try to untie them; she simply introduced a dissonant frequency."
*   **PROBLEM:** This happens while she is "moving toward the service spindle" but *before* she melts Thorne's physical restraints. It is unclear if she is interacting with a console or using pure Threadbinding on the architecture.
*   **FIX:** "She reached her stained hand toward the floor's conductive inlay, tracing the physical lines of the lockdown protocols through the obsidian. They were thick, clumsy weaves of iron-thread. She didn't try to untie the physical locks; she flooded the floor's circuit with a dissonant frequency."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Suggestion:** Clarify the physical state of the "Stained" witnesses.
*   **Quote:** "...and the whimpering of the Stained witnesses who had stayed to watch the heresy." (Late).
*   **Reason:** The world-state notes that "Junior Binders... fled" while "The Stained" are an "emerging group." Briefly noting if these witnesses are showing the same indigo staining as Liora would strengthen the faction setup for future chapters.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Verbal Tics:** Do not remove Liora’s "bind-bind-bind" or "bind or break" repetitions. These are explicitly defined in her voice signature as panic/decisive signatures.
*   **Clipped Commands:** During the gravity fold—"You want to see the weave?"—the brevity is intentional ritual speech.
*   **Internal Monologue:** Thorne's voice resonating in her marrow (italicized) is a feature of their new "permanent metaphysical tether" and should not be changed to standard dialogue.

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### 8. VERDICT
**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** The chapter captures character voices and the "Dirty Circuit" mechanics perfectly, but contains a significant physical continuity error regarding Thorne's ability to touch Liora while still bolted to the restraint chair. Correcting the sequence of his release is necessary for physical logic.