### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The rhythmic thrum of the Siphon's new heartbeat pulsed through Lena's bones, steady as a gator's tail in still water..."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively grounds the mechanical event in the bayou setting using a simile that aligns with Lena's specific worldview.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "The wound she’d opened to bind the magic had sealed into a thick, crystalline salt-scab."
    *   *Commentary:* This visceral detail provides a concrete physical anchor for the magic's cost, reinforcing the "salt-tithe" theme.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "She didn't have the strength for a full binding, but she had the focus. She pressed her salt-scabbed palm against the valve. She didn't command it; she hummed to it..."
    *   *Commentary:* This transition shows the character's growth from someone who fears magic to someone who understands it as a conversation rather than a confrontation.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "A thick, unnatural white mist began to pour from the vent slats, rolling out into the larger chamber like a physical weight."
    *   *Commentary:* The prose here successfully personifies the magic, making it feel obstructive and tangible rather than just a visual effect.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**LENA DUVAL**
*   **Line:** "The cypress don't lie, cher—the roots whisper what your heart’s too stubborn to hear." 
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics?** YES ("cher," "gator's truth").
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns?** YES (Does not apologize).
*   **Consistent Emotional Register?** YES (Resolute but physically hollowed out from the "Heartbeat").
*   **Audit Note:** The use of "Gator’s truth" twice in the text aligns perfectly with her verbal tic for undeniable facts.

**JAX HARLAN**
*   **Line:** "Pay me by staying alive. Wrap that. We’ve got a long walk through the guts of this place before we see the sky."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics?** YES (Tactical language like "perimeter," "telemetry," "riot squad").
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns?** YES (Remains the "brooding outsider" challenger).
*   **Consistent Emotional Register?** YES (Tactical skepticism has evolved into protective acceptance).

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **The Merging of Magic and Machine:** The description of the Scrambler Box having "fused entirely, the plastic and wire melting into the iron like a graft on a cypress trunk" is a vital image for the Chapter 10 arc completion.
*   **The Physicality of Magic Loss:** The line "my soul feels like an empty cicada shell" perfectly captures the 90% arc completion energy—she is powerful but fundamentally drained by her heritage.
*   **Sensory Grounding:** The recurring smell of "magnolia blossoms competing with the sharp, metallic tang of ozone" maintains the atmospheric consistency required by the "Notes for Writers."

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY (None Found)

*   **Status:** All world-state details from the RAG (Drowned Man dispersed, salt-tithe obligation, Terrebonne security response) are handled accurately in the text. No continuity errors were detected.

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The 'Gator’s Truth' settled into her marrow..."
*   **PROBLEM:** Using quotation marks around a character’s internal realization of their own verbal tic is slightly jarring and breaks the flow, making it feel like a metacommentary rather than a deep POV thought.
*   **FIX:** Remove the quotation marks and capitalization unless it's being spoken: *The gator's truth settled into her marrow: the Siphon hadn't been built just to move water.*

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Suggestion (Optional):** Reference the "Harmonic Bleed" explicitly during her conversation with Jax earlier to heighten the stakes of what was stopped.
    *   *Quote:* "They were pulling the hum out of the swamp to light up those high-rises in the Upper Districts."
    *   *Improvement:* Adding a line about how the "Harmonic Bleed" (using the specific RAG term) would have left the bayou spiritless would bridge the secret she knows with the catastrophe she prevented.

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do not "fix" Lena’s fragmented speech:** Phrases like "No no, not that, no no" are her established imperfection signature for panic.
*   **Do not remove Cajun French:** Terms like "cher" and "mon coeur" are essential markers of her relationship with Jax and the environment.
*   **Do not smooth the "clunky" mechanical descriptions:** The industrial-cathedral atmosphere relies on the contrast between "rust like iron snow" and the organic "gator's tail" metaphors.

### 8. VERDICT

**SCORE: 96**
**JUSTIFICATION:** This chapter is an exceptional realization of the provided RAG context, perfectly capturing Lena's voice, her 90% arc transition, and the specific mechanical-magical atmosphere of the Siphon. Only one minor punctuation/clarity fix is suggested.

**VERDICT: PASS**