### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   **Early:** "The transition from the industrial grit of the siphon drainage to this ancient limestone sanctum felt less like a walk and more like a drowning."
    *   This effectively bridges the physical setting with Lena’s internal status as a "Machine-Witch," using the "drowning" motif established in her backstory.
*   **Mid:** "Grey-white fog began to spill from the crevices in the rock, thick with the scent of magnolia and rotting lilies."
    *   This reinforces the sensory requirements of the voice signature (magnolia and mud/rot) while providing a concrete visual for her magic.
*   **Mid:** "He looked older in the shifting light, the lines around his mouth etched deep with a new kind of resolve."
    *   This provides a necessary beat of character observation that validates Jax’s 80% arc progression from "neutral pilot" to "active defender."
*   **Late:** "The limestone gave way to soft mud and the tangled, protective embrace of cypress knees."
    *   The use of "protective embrace" for a swamp element highlights the core principle that Lena’s power comes from a symbiotic, rather than adversarial, relationship with the land.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Character: Lena Duval**
*   **Line:** "Gator's truth, I’m not going anywhere fast."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Uses the required "Gator's truth" for an undeniable fact.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** **YES.** She does not apologize or say "I give up."
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** Reflects the "weary yet transcendent" state of ch-11.
*   **Constraint Check:** The line "no no, not that, no no" (Late) correctly utilizes her panic-signature repetition.

**Character: Jax Harlan**
*   **Line:** "TDC's going to be crawling over that grate any minute. We need to move deep or move out."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Uses clipped, pragmatic language consistent with a pilot/defender.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** **YES.**
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** Shows the "fiercely protective" stance mentioned in the RAG character state.

**Character: Aunt Maribelle Duval**
*   **Line:** "Lena, mon cœur perfide, the Bend sings your name now."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Uses Cajun French ("mon cœur") as per the relationship notes for those she "claims" to care for.
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** Reflects the "Vigilant" and manipulative nature of her faction attitude.

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Tactile Grounding:** The passage where Lena "reached out, her fingers trailing over a patch of slick, bioluminescent moss" (Early) perfectly adheres to her "What they REACH FOR" voice signature requirement.
*   **Theme of Symbiosis:** The dialogue "The land don't forget a debt, Jax... The Hum… it’s louder in here" (Early) maintains the core principle that magic in Cypress Bend is a matter of give-and-take.
*   **Arc Integration:** The specific mention of her feeling "95% gone" (Late) aligns with the RAG arc percentage, showing her acceptance of the "Warden" role over her desire for the city.

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "[Jax] checked his sidearm, a hollow click in the silence." (Mid)
*   **PROBLEM:** Jax is described in the Physical state for ch-11 as having "raw knuckles from climbing," but his primary physical constraint in ch-10/11 is a "stiff shoulder" and "adrenaline crash." The description of him checking a sidearm is fine, but the RAG context emphasizes his "raw knuckles" as a specific tactile detail. More importantly, the world state says Terrebonne Security is "FRUSTRATED" and "locked out," but Jax acts as if they are seconds away.
*   **FIX:** "He checked his sidearm, the movement making him wince as his stiff shoulder protested. 'They’re locked out for now,' he muttered, 'but Frustration makes men burn doors down.'"

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The Siphon’s true purpose was a 'Harmonic Bleed' for the upper districts -- Jax remains unaware." (Context/Subtext)
*   **PROBLEM:** In the text, Lena says: "It’s a Harmonic Bleed, cher... To power the upper districts, to light up the city with the soul of the bayou." This contradicts the "Known Secrets" section of the RAG context, which explicitly states **"Jax remains unaware"** of the Harmonic Bleed. By explaining it to him in this chapter, the writer has prematurely burned an "Open Loop/Secret."
*   **FIX:** Lena should remain vague to preserve the secret. 
    *   **REWRITE:** "It’s a sickness in the stone, cher. The TDC, they weren't just moving water. They were trying to take something the swamp won't give back. I’m just... I’m the one holding the seal shut."

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Scent Context:** While the prose mentions "magnolia and rotting lilies," it could more explicitly ground Lena's specific scent of "magnolia and mud" as per the "Notes for Writers."
    *   **Quote to modify:** "Grey-white fog began to spill... thick with the scent of magnolia and rotting lilies." (Mid)
    *   **Suggestion:** Change to "thick with the scent of magnolia and rising mud—the smell of Lena’s own skin amplified by the mist."

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do NOT "fix" Lena’s grammar:** Lines like "The land don't forget a debt" and "The cypress don't lie" are intentional voice signatures.
*   **Do NOT remove the "no no" repetitions:** This is her specific imperfection signature for panic.
*   **Do NOT remove the mention of "cher":** This is a mandatory endearment for her loved ones.

### 8. VERDICT
**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**JUSTIFICATION:** The chapter captures the atmosphere and Lena's voice signature with high accuracy, but it contains a major continuity violation regarding "Known Secrets." Lena explains the "Harmonic Bleed" to Jax (Mid), directly contradicting the RAG instruction that "Jax remains unaware" of this secret in chapter 11. This must be corrected to maintain the long-term tension of the plot.