### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "Isabella watched the pupils of Damien’s eyes dilate until they were naught but obsidian voids, reflecting her own pale, mask-like face."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively uses a physical reaction to communicate the supernatural impact of the anchor while maintaining the gothic atmosphere.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "It was a negotiation of flesh. He lifted her, carrying her to the massive, silk-draped bed. Isabella’s heart hammered against her ribs—not with fear, but with the frantic rhythm of a bird hitting the bars of a cage."
    *   *Commentary:* The phrase "negotiation of flesh" perfectly captures the clinical, transactional nature of their relationship.
*   **Quote 3 (Mid):** "Damien’s breath hitched. 'Who did this?' 'The coven. My mother. Myself,' she said, her voice a series of cold fragments."
    *   *Commentary:* The use of "cold fragments" mirrors the character profile’s sentence pattern for high-stress or emotionally raw moments.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "Isabella felt the anchor pulse with every gasp, drawing from Damien’s vitality to stitch her own tattered energy back together. It was predatory. It was necessary."
    *   *Commentary:* The short, punchy fragments emphasize the brutal pragmatism that defines the protagonist’s survival instinct.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Isabella Voss**
*   **Line:** "Pray, do take care with your footing, My Lord. If you fall too hard, I fear I shall feel the bruise."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics (YES):** Uses the sarcastic prefix "Pray."
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns (YES):** No casual slang; maintains a regal, elegant tone even when physically weakened.
*   **Emotional Register (YES/NO):** **NO.** Profile states she "never grovels or apologizes profusely—she issues regal corrections instead." While she issues corrections, the phrase "I fear I shall feel the bruise" verges on vulnerability that contradicts her "mask-like" composure in this specific beat. However, her sentence structure (elegant, mid-length) remains consistent.

**Damien Blackthorn**
*   **Line:** "You truly are a monster, Isabella Voss."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics (YES):** Maintains the "grudgingly respectful" and "dangerously intrigued" tone from the profile.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns (YES):** No slang recorded; vocabulary is consistent with a high-born warrior/vampire.
*   **Emotional Register (YES):** He transitions from predatory anger to a "strange, protective heat," aligning with his 25% Arc progress (shifting from domination to shielding her).

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **The Hemomantic Logic:** The physical mirroring of pain through the anchor is a key mechanical highlight.
    *   *Reference:* "Damien let out a cry of genuine agony. He collapsed against the wardrobe, clutching his spine at the exact meridian where she felt the Vow’s sting."
*   **Isabella’s Characteristic Tic:** The prose maintains her specific anxiety habit regarding her scars.
    *   *Reference:* "She reached up, slowly tracing the high lace collar of her gown, ensuring it still hid the jagged history of her neck."
*   **The Power Dynamic Nuance:** The refusal to make the consummation "romantic" preserves the dark, political stakes.
    *   *Reference:* "It was a partial consummation, a collision of teeth and tangled limbs that served more to bind their blood than to foster intimacy."

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Damien’s gaze traveled to her hands... beneath her fine silk gloves, the fresh scars from her recent ritual had reopened..." (Late Mid)
*   **PROBLEM:** The World State explicitly mentions "The Consummation Silk" was already on the balcony in ch-03 context. This chapter depicts the "consummation" happening *after* Malakor is already outside the door demanding proof. This creates a temporal loop—did the world believe it happened before this scene, or is this scene the event that produces the silk mentioned in the database?
*   **FIX:** Clarify that they are creating the *secondary* physical proof required by Malakor’s presence, or shift the perspective to show them staining the silk *now*. (Suggested: "We must provide the silk Malakor expects to see by dawn.")

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Isabella straightened her spine... ensuring it still hid the jagged history of her neck." (Early)
*   **PROBLEM:** In Chapter 2 Context, the secret was "bleeding beneath her gloves." Here, she is suddenly worried about her neck, which hasn't been established as a fresh wound compared to the wrists mentioned in the physical state/World State.
*   **FIX:** Reference the wrist wounds specifically to align with the database. (Fix: "She adjusted her gloves, ensuring the dampening silk hid the jagged history of her wrists.")

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Suggestion:** Lean harder into Isabella’s "Unmarked Vessel" secret.
*   **Relevant Quote:** "If Malakor sees those scars on your wrists... if he realizes you are not the 'pure' sacrifice..."
*   **Reasoning:** While mentioned, the terror of this specific religious violation (as noted in the NPC memory database) could be heightened to increase the tension of the final door knock.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do not "soften" Isabella:** Her coldness/clinical detachment during the bed scene is essential to her Nightbloom training and her "Fatal Flaw: Rigid adherence to duty."
*   **Do not remove the "Pray" tic:** It is her primary voice signature across all context blocks.
*   **Do not fix the "imperfect" sentence fragments when she is in pain:** These are a recorded voice signature ("fragments when enraged/panicked").

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### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82/100**
**Justification:** The chapter is atmospheric and captures the character voices well, but it contains a significant continuity conflict regarding whether the "Consummation Silk" mentioned in the World State has already been displayed or is being created during this scene. Additionally, the location of her scars (Neck vs. Wrists) fluctuates between the database and the text, requiring alignment for world-building consistency.