### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The Bridal Chamber was a cage of opulence, carved into the very crown of Blackthorn Keep. Mortared with ancient spite and lit by the low, guttering flame of black tallow candles, the room smelled of cold incense and the metallic tang of the storm brewing outside..."
    *   *Commentary:* This establishes a strong sensory anchor and reinforces the gothic atmosphere of the "forced annexation" setting.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "Isabella felt the first sharp needle-prick of the Peace Vow. It stirred in her marrow, a cold, oily sensation that punished the flicker of hatred she felt for the man standing before her."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively externalizes the internal world-rule of the Peace Vow, showing rather than just telling the physical cost of Isabella's dissent.
*   **Quote 3 (Mid):** "*Blood, blood everywhere,* a voice whispered in the back of her mind—the echo of her mother’s final moments, the crimson spray on the executioner’s block."
    *   *Commentary:* This perfectly aligns with the "Imperfection signature" in Isabella’s voice profile, highlighting her trauma-induced repetition.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "The air in the room seemed to vanish as the raw evidence of her illegal hemomancy was bared to the flickering candlelight, the stagnant blood of her broken oaths beginning to bead upon her skin."
    *   *Commentary:* The phrase "stagnant blood" provides a visceral contrast to the "sanctified vintage" mentioned earlier, heightening the stakes of her exposure.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Isabella Voss**
*   **Line:** "Pray, do not mistake a bride’s exhaustion for a conspirator’s guilt."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. She uses "Pray" to prefix a command/request sarcastically.
*   **Avoid Forbidden Speech:** YES. She maintains her "regal correction" and avoids casual slang.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. She is at 20% arc, attempting to maintain a mask of composed pride even as it slips.

**Damien Blackthorn**
*   **Line:** "Pray, let us not drape it in the finery of delusion."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** NO. Damien is mimicking Isabella's signature "Pray" tic to taunt her, which is effective for his "darkly impressed" and "smoldering rival" persona.
*   **Avoid Forbidden Speech:** YES. His voice is a "low, melodic rasp" and avoids modernisms.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. He is at 15% arc, shifting from predator to someone obsessed with her secrets.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Mechanical Stakes:** The interplay between the "Unmarked Vessel Clause" and Isabella’s physical condition is perfectly executed. The moment where "A tiny, blooming rose of pink was beginning to seep through the white fabric" keeps the tension grounded in physical evidence.
*   **Voice Consistency:** Isabella’s use of "is it not?" ("There is a sequence to these things, is there not?") and her sarcastic "Pray" are utilized enough to establish identity without becoming repetitive to the point of annoyance.
*   **The Power Dynamic:** The shift from Damien’s physical intimidation to Isabella’s verbal defense ("I am no one's tool") maintains the "nuclear standoff" described in the world state.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The binding... it takes time to settle. Is it not expected?" [...] "The binding settles easily on those with nothing to hide," Damien said...
*   **PROBLEM:** Per the World State [Active World Events], the "Peace Vow" is current/active, but the "Blood-Ink Anchor" was created/resolved at the end of Chapter 2. However, the Context States Isabella "knows she has successfully manipulated Damien's blood to create a temporary anchor." If this has already happened, Damien’s life is linked to hers. If this chapter is the *first* time they are in the chamber, the "Blood-Ink Anchor" should be the *climax* or *result* of this scene. The context says it was created "during the consummation attempt." The chapter ends with him seeing the scars, but the "Anchor" isn't mentioned as having happened yet.
*   **FIX:** Ensure the narrative reflects that the Anchor is either about to happen or has just happened. Given the chapter text ends precisely on the reveal of scars, adding a beat where the blood from her scars touches him to trigger the "Anchor" described in the RAG is necessary.

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Damien’s eyes narrowed. 'You're in pain.' 'It is... nothing. A shadow of the ritual's end,' she managed... 'the binding... it takes time to settle.'"
*   **PROBLEM:** There is slight confusion between the "Binding Ritual" (the marriage/treaty), the "Peace Vow" (the magic punishing dissent), and the "Blood-Ink Anchor." The reader might conflate which magic is causing her pain.
*   **FIX:** Clarify that the pain is specifically the "Peace Vow" recoil.
    *   *Correction:* "It is... nothing. A shadow of the Peace Vow's enforcement," she managed...

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Optional (Tactile Detail):** In the section: "He reached out, his hand hovering inches from her left wrist," consider mentioning his hands are unscarred to emphasize his status as an "Unmarked" predator compared to her "broken tool" status.
*   **Optional (Pacing):** The transition between Isabella saying "take what you think is yours" and him actually pulling the glove is very fast. A moment of him looking at the "blooming rose of pink" one last time would stretch the tension.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **DO NOT** smooth out Isabella’s repetition of "the wine, the wine." This is her explicit imperfection signature (panicked repetition) and must remain.
*   **DO NOT** remove the sarcastic "Pray" or the rhetorical "is it not?" as these are her core voice signatures.
*   **DO NOT** make Isabella more submissive. Her "regal corrections" are central to her identity as a Voss.

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### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**

**Justification:** While the prose is evocative and the character voices are highly accurate to the RAG profiles, there is a significant continuity/clarity issue regarding the "Blood-Ink Anchor." The RAG context listed the Anchor as "Active" and "created during the consummation attempt," but the chapter ends at the *reveal* of the scars before the magical tethering/anchor occurs or is acknowledged. This needs a beat of alignment to ensure Ch-02 matches its own metadata.