### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   "The tips came away dark and gleaming in the absolute blackness of the kitchen." (Early) – Effectively uses sensory contrast (dark/gleaming) to establish the severity of the injury while maintaining the "absolute blackness" of the scene.
*   "Sarah reached out, her left hand finding the edge of the granite countertop. It felt cold—impossibly cold—and slick with a condensation that shouldn't have been there." (Early) – This grounded tactile detail heightens the sense of wrongness without relying on flowery prose.
*   "The overhead light fixture had rained down in shards." (Mid) – This is a concise, visceral image that explains the "crunching" sound Elias hears, grounding the supernatural event in physical debris.
*   "He sat there, a static anchor of skepticism in a room that smelled of the abyss." (Late) – While slightly more metaphorical than the rest of the text, it accurately captures Mark's role as defined in the World State RAG.
*   "It sounded like footsteps, echoing through the hollow guts of the house, moving slowly and deliberately toward the living room floor." (Late) – The personification of the house's "guts" creates a claustrophobic, horror-genre appropriate ending to the chapter.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Sarah Miller**
*   **Dialogue:** "E-Elias... Empirically speaking... that wasn't a power surge. That was an a-acoustic weaponization of a standing wave."
*   **Uses signature vocabulary/tics?** YES. She uses "Empirically speaking" and stammers initial consonants ("E-Elias", "a-acoustic") as required by her profile under stress/audio feedback.
*   **Avoids forbidden speech?** YES. She avoids flowery supernatural affirmations, sticking to "acoustic weaponization" rather than "ghosts."
*   **Consistent emotional register?** YES. She remains analytical (probing data patterns) despite her injuries.

**Elias Thorne**
*   **Dialogue:** "The 14Hz hum—it hit a resonance frequency. It wasn't just interference, Sarah. It was trying to manifest."
*   **Uses signature vocabulary/tics?** YES. His focus on the "manifestation" and the "14Hz hum" aligns with his "active participant" arc.
*   **Avoids forbidden speech?** N/A (No forbidden patterns listed for Elias).
*   **Consistent emotional register?** YES. He is protective and diagnostic, consistent with a shift from "observer" to "participant."

**Mark**
*   **Dialogue:** "It’s just the grid, Elias... Old wiring. I told Sarah she was imagining things."
*   **Uses signature vocabulary/tics?** YES. Per the World State, he is a "static skeptical anchor," which is reflected in his dismissive dialogue.
*   **Avoids forbidden speech?** YES. Profile notes avoid "unsubstantiated traits"; he remains a flat, skeptical foil.
*   **Consistent emotional register?** YES. He is described as "Shocked; silent" in the RAG, and his flat, denial-based dialogue reflects a state of shock.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Sensory Consistency:** The frequent mention of the scent of "scorched copper," "sulfur," and "ozone" (e.g., "The atmosphere is heavy with the scent of ozone, scorched copper, and sulfur" in RAG) is successfully integrated: *"She inhaled, and her lungs burned with the sharp, acidic sting of ozone and something deeper, more primal. Sulfur."* This maintain's the project's "Electronic Dead Zone" atmosphere.
*   **Injury Integration:** Sarah’s tinnitus and physical fatigue are not forgotten mid-chapter. *"Sarah flinched as the light hit her eyes, her pupils blown wide and unresponsive."* This maintains the "neurological shock" state from the ch-07 Character State.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The 110-decibel feedback loop had felt like a physical intrusion..." 
*   **PROBLEM:** This chapter is labeled "ch-06" in the THINKING HINT but uses the "ch-07" World and Character State data. In the RAG Context, Sarah's arc is at 55% and Elias is at 40% only *after* the feedback burst in ch-07. If this is ch-06, they should be in the middle of the event, not experiencing the aftermath. 
*   **FIX:** Confirm chapter numbering. If this is meant to be ch-06, the character states must be rolled back. If this is ch-07 (the aftermath), the chapter heading must be updated to **Chapter 7**.

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "Sarah reached out and grabbed his forearm, her grip surprisingly strong. Elias saw her wince, her hand flying to her temple to massage the skin there."
*   **PROBLEM:** Physical logistics. She is already using her left hand on the counter (early in the scene) and her right hand/thumb on the recorder. To grab his forearm AND fly to her temple while maintaining her balance (she is hunched) makes her movements feel cluttered and physically impossible without letting go of the counter/his arm.
*   **FIX:** "Sarah reached out and gripped Elias's forearm for support. She winced, momentarily releasing him to press her palm against her throbbing temple."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **OPTIONAL:** Reference Elias's secrets. 
    *   **Quote:** "Elias felt a cold shiver trace his spine." 
    *   **Suggestion:** Since the RAG mentions Elias knows "the signal matches his pulse" and Sarah doesn't, this shiver could be more specifically described as a thumping in his chest that mirrors the *Thump Thump* at the end of the chapter, deepening the "biological synchronicity" mentioned.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **DO NOT** fix Sarah’s stuttering (e.g., "Th-th-the data"). This is a mandatory voice signature trait related to her audio-feedback headaches.
*   **DO NOT** give Mark more to do. His role as a "static skeptical anchor" who is "silenced by the overwhelming physical evidence" is a specific arc requirement.
*   **DO NOT** remove the "1927" references; these are essential open loops carried from the RAG.

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### 8. VERDICT: REVISE
**SCORE: 82**
**JUSTIFICATION:** The chapter perfectly executes character voices and the specific environmental "Electronic Dead Zone" atmosphere. However, there is a fundamental conflict between the chapter header (ch-06) and the RAG state provided (ch-07), which lists the feedback loop as a past event. Additionally, minor physical blocking issues with Sarah's movements require refinement for clarity.