### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The Siphon was a golden nail driven through her soul into the floor of the bayou."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively physicalizes the internal stakes, anchoring Lena’s transformation to a specific, painful sensation that matches her "Warden" role.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "He paced the narrow iron grate, his boots ringing out—a harsh, mechanical sound that made Lena flinch."
    *   *Commentary:* This reinforces the character's voice signature requirement that she "flinches from loud music/sounds" while highlighting the growing sensory divide between her and Jax.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "Without hesitation, she pricked the center of her silver-scarred palm. A single drop of dark, thick blood welled up."
    *   *Commentary:* This passage aligns perfectly with the "Bayou Binding" magic system where power involves blood-oaths and physical sacrifice.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "It was a cold, distorted ripple, a voice carried on the very frequency Lena was now tuned to."
    *   *Commentary:* This expertly bridges the gap between the mechanical "frequency" plot and the magical "voice" of Aunt Maribelle.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Lena Duval**
*   "The cypress don't lie, cher—the roots whisper what your heart's too stubborn to hear."
    *   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES ("cher," "cypress don't lie," "roots whisper").
    *   **Avoid Forbidden Speech:** YES (No "I give up" or preemptive apologies).
    *   **Emotional Register:** YES (Reflects her 100% arc completion as the Warden).

**Jax Harlan**
*   "Hellfire, Lena. We fought TDC to get you free, not to turn you into a damn battery for the swamp."
    *   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES (Uses "Hellfire," which Lena's sheet identifies as an upset expression—appropriate here given her sacrifice).
    *   **Avoid Forbidden Speech:** N/A (No specific forbidden patterns listed for Jax).
    *   **Emotional Register:** YES (Reflects his 95% arc transition to "combatant-guardian").

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Sensory Integration:** The detail "She could feel the minnows darting a mile downstream" effectively communicates her 100% arc integration without needing a lengthy explanation.
*   **The Life-Debt Visualization:** The "shimmering, translucent shadow of him, tethered to her heart by an ethereal, golden cord" provides a necessary visual payoff for the "Life-Debt" active world event mentioned in the context.
*   **Tactile Grounding:** The repeating motif of Lena reaching for things ("fingers trailing over a patch of damp, velvet moss") adheres strictly to the character profile's grounding mechanism.

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Jax... his hand hovering over her shoulder before he let it drop... He reached for her..." vs "Jax caught her, his touch a grounding wire that pulled her back..."
*   **PROBLEM:** Minor physiological inconsistency; earlier in the chapter, Jax is depicted as mourning her and hesitant to touch her ("The way one looks at a ghost"), but later he catches her during her vision with ease. This transition needs to feel more earned by his protective nature.
*   **FIX:** Ensure the second instance acknowledges the initial hesitation: "Despite his fear of what she’d become, Jax didn't hesitate this time; he caught her, his touch a grounding wire..."

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Jax mentioned a mole... 'Terrebonne had codes they shouldn't have had,' Jax said... 'Someone in the security detail was feeding 'em intel.'"
*   **PROBLEM:** Per the RAG context "Active obligations," Jax needs to *identify* the mole. In this text, he simply confirms there *is* a mole without providing new information or a specific lead, which stalls the unresolved loop.
*   **FIX:** Add a specific detail to Jax's dialogue: "Terrebonne had codes only a Duval or a senior Security lead would know. I saw a log entry—the signature was scrubbed, but the timestamp came from inside the Estate."

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Voice Reinforcement (Lena):** When Lena mentions her Mother's locket, she is twisting it. The profile says "readers spot it as her guilt signal."
    *   **Quote:** "Jax,' she breathed, her hand going instinctively to the silver locket at her throat, twisting the chain until it bit into her skin."
    *   **Suggestion:** Briefly emphasize the *guilt* she feels here—perhaps that she is becoming the very thing her mother sacrificed herself to avoid or control.

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Imperfect Speech:** Do not "correct" Lena’s panic-repetition: "no no, not that way, no no." This is a documented flaw in her voice signature.
*   **Cajun Endearments:** Do not remove "cher" or "mon couer" despite their frequency; these are the core of her emotional register.
*   **Tactile Focus:** Do not replace descriptions of moss, mud, and water with more abstract magical descriptions; she is a grounded, physical witch.

### 8. VERDICT: PASS
**SCORE: 92**

**Justification:** The chapter perfectly executes the "Warden" transformation and integrates almost every complex world-state element (Life-Debt, Mole subplot, Frequency/Siphon mechanics) with excellent character voice. Only minor continuity of touch and a lack of specific progress on the "mole" identification (Must-Fix Clarity) prevent a perfect score.