### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The silver locket thrummed against her chest like a trapped hornet, its mechanical hum drowning out the faint croak of frogs beyond the safehouse walls."
    *   *Commentary:* This establishes the industrial horror theme immediately by contrasting natural sounds with mechanical intrusion.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "She traced the rough texture, trying to find the slow, ancient pulse of the earth, but it was faint, smothered by the whine in her chest."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively demonstrates Lena’s "What they REACH FOR" character trait (tactile grounding) while highlighting her current sensory deprivation.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "She felt magically blind, her internal compass spinning wildly as the industrial noise amplified."
    *   *Commentary:* This succinctly summarizes the character’s mechanical disadvantage and the "Frequency Shift" world event without over-explaining.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "The rain was starting to fall, a greasy, slick drizzle that coated the world in a reflective sheen."
    *   *Commentary:* The choice of descriptors like "greasy" reinforces the "industrial resonance" and the corruption of nature in this urban setting.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Character: Lena Duval**
*   **Quote:** "Gator's truth, Jax—the land has a heartbeat."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. She uses "Gator's truth" as per her "undeniable fact" tic and "Hellfire" as an upset stress expression.
*   **Forbidden Speech Patterns:** YES. She does not say "I give up" and does not apologize prematurely.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. She is at 50% arc—frightened but realizing the shift is a tuning issue, which matches her dialogue about the world becoming a place where her power doesn't belong.
*   **Constraint Check:** She uses "mon coeur" for Jax, which is consistent with the rule of using Cajun French only for those she cares for.

**Character: Jax Harlan**
*   **Quote:** "We move... No more hiding in the shadows if the shadows are screaming your name."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. His voice is grounded, suspicious, and protective, reflecting his 25% arc transition from a hire to a vested investigator.
*   **Forbidden Speech Patterns:** N/A (Jax does not have "Never Say" constraints in the provided context, but maintains his "gravel-hard" tone).
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. His focus on security leaks and "going loud" aligns with his history as an escort and his growing frustration with the safehouse breach.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **The Sensory Conflict:** The physical manifestation of Project Phlegethon through the locket.
    *   *Reference:* "The locket on Lena’s chest began to glow with a faint, sickly blue light, the silver turning hot against her skin."
*   **Tactile Grounding:** Lena’s reliance on touch to navigate her magic.
    *   *Reference:* "She found a small, dried patch of moss... She traced the rough texture, trying to find the slow, ancient pulse of the earth."
*   **World-Building Integration:** The explanation of "industrial resonance" as a form of fracking the spirit world.
    *   *Reference:* "They’re leeches. They found the ley lines... and they’re fracking them."

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "'Jax, mon coeur, if we go out there...'" (Late)
*   **PROBLEM:** Per the Voice Signature, Lena "Peppers Cajun French endearments... only for those she truly cares for." While she is developing feelings, the Project Context states her arc is at 50% and her relationship with Jax is "love interest + brooding outsider." Using "mon coeur" (my heart) during a high-stress panic attack feels premature for a character with a "stubborn independence" flaw who is still "trapped and desperate." 
*   **FIX:** Change to a less intimate but still caring term or remove the endearment to maintain the slow-burn tension. Rewrite: "'Jax, if we go out there...'" or use "cher" which is more versatile.

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Lena scrambled to gather her herbs and the small jars of bayou water she kept as conduits..." (Late)
*   **PROBLEM:** In Chapter 6, Lena is in a "Safehouse basement" in the "Lower Ninth Ward" and is described as "exposed and under mental/spiritual siege." The narrative establishes she is "magically blind." Having her "scramble to gather herbs" contradicts the high-tension, "adrenaline-fueled" immediate threat of the heavy engine vibrating the floorboards.
*   **FIX:** Ensure the kit is already packed or she grabs only one essential item. Rewrite: "Lena snatched her satchel, the glass jars of bayou water clinking together in a frantic rhythm."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "...those Terrebonne suits were there before we could even kill the engine." (Mid)
*   **PROBLEM:** "Kill the engine" is ambiguous here. Does Jax mean the boat engine (from their arrival), or is it a metaphor for the safehouse's magical wards/Project Phlegethon?
*   **FIX:** Clarify if he refers to their transport or the warding system. Rewrite: "...before we could even kill the boat's engine." or "...before we could even settle in."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Suggestion (Optional):** Enhance the description of the bleeding thumb ritual.
    *   *Quote:* "She pricked her palm with a sharp edge of the silver locket..."
    *   *Reason:* The Project Context mentions a "bleeding thumb from a self-inflicted ritual prick." The text currently says "palm." Using the thumb as specified in the character state adds a specific, recurring detail of her casting style.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do not "fix" Lena’s repetitive speech:** "No, no, not that, no no" is her Imperfection Signature for when she is panicked. It must remain.
*   **Do not remove the "Gator's truth" tic:** This is her specific verbal marker for undeniable facts.
*   **Do not improve Jax’s vocabulary:** He is a boat captain and investigator; his "grunted" and "gravel-hard" responses are essential to his brooding outsider persona.
*   **Do not soften the "Industrial Horror" elements:** The smell of "ozone and burnt rubber" during magic use is a specific feature of the Frequency Shift.

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### 8. VERDICT

**SCORE: 88**
**REVISE**
*Justification:* The chapter is atmospherically strong and adheres well to the voice signatures, but there is a minor intimacy/arc inconsistency regarding the endearment used for Jax ("mon coeur") and a clarity issue regarding the "engine" dialogue. These minor continuity/clarity points require adjustment to perfectly align with the Project Context.