1. PROSE EVIDENCE

"The violet tether pulsed between them like a living vein, anchoring Thorne's wild chaos to her fraying resolve as the Dirty Circuit hummed its fragile stability." (Early)
- This sentence effectively establishes the high-stakes metaphysical connection while grounding the abstract "Dirty Circuit" in sensory descriptions of pulsing and humming.

"It’s not screaming, Thorne. It’s breathing," she snapped... "It’s been suffocating for centuries under the weight of 'pure' threads. We just gave it a lungful of rot, and it doesn't know how to swallow it." (Mid)
- This passage successfully utilizes the character’s specific weaving imagery and personification of threads to explain the world-state shift.

"She felt the dull ache in Thorne’s ribs where the restraints bit deep. She felt his protectiveness—a fierce, stubborn heat that acted as a bulkhead against her own fatalism." (Mid)
- This use of the shared link provides efficient characterization of Thorne’s internal state without needing a POV shift away from Liora.

"The architecture," Thorne said... "It’s shifting. Look." Above them, the great brass gears of the Spindle began to grind in reverse. (Late)
- The prose here transitions well from the internal metaphysical struggle to the physical environmental consequences of the Indigo Contagion.

2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Character: Liora Voss**
- Quote: "Bind or break." (Early) / "Match your heartbeat to the violet light. Bind-bind-bind it now." (Mid)
- Signature vocabulary/tics? YES. Uses "Bind or break" and the repetitive "bind-bind-bind" specified in her Imperfection Signature.
- Avoids forbidden speech? YES. She avoids "Fate will decide" and maintains a fatalistic tone.
- Consistent emotional register? YES. She remains hyper-focused on stabilization and is physically exhausted (evidenced by the "glass shards" breathing and "violet-tinged spittle").

**Character: Thorne Quill**
- Quote: "Liora, if you’re going to fix this, do it now. Don't worry about the cost. I can take the weight." (Late)
- Signature vocabulary/tics? YES. His focus on "weight" and "anchoring" aligns with his role as the necessary sentient anchor.
- Avoids forbidden speech? YES.
- Consistent emotional register? YES. Resolute and protective as per the character-state description.

**Character: Elder Maros**
- Quote: "The Purists have bypassed the lower gates... They’re coming to sever the infection at the root!" (Late)
- Signature vocabulary/tics? YES. Displays political panic and desperation.
- Avoids forbidden speech? YES.
- Consistent emotional register? YES. His "political panic" is explicitly noted in the Chapter Text and context.

3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

- **Physicality of the Loom:** The sensory details regarding the machine ("scent of ozone, lanolin, and the metallic tang of her own blood") bridge the gap between magic and machinery effectively.
- **The "Violet Tether" Mechanics:** The scene where Liora feels Thorne’s ribs ("She felt the dull ache in Thorne’s ribs where the restraints bit deep") reinforces the shared biological/metaphysical link established in Ch-05 context.
- **Liora’s Fatalism:** Her dialogue ("Don't be a martyr, Thorne. It’s an ugly look on you") maintains her "dry humor laced with fatalism" profile requirement.

4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

- **ORIGINAL:** "The violet staining had climbed past her elbow now, creeping toward her shoulder like a slow-moving bruise." (Early)
- **PROBLEM:** The Project Context for ch-05 states "indigo staining reaching mid-bicep." The text says it is "past her elbow" but "creeping toward her shoulder," which is technically the bicep area, but describing it as "now" climbing past the elbow suggests it is lower than the starting state of "mid-bicep." It creates a minor discrepancy in the progression of the "Stained" effect.
- **FIX:** "The violet staining, already consuming her bicep, crept ever closer toward her shoulder like a slow-moving bruise."

5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

- **ORIGINAL:** "Liora saw it then—the Elder’s eyes were clouded with the same violet corruption she carried." (Late)
- **PROBLEM:** The Project Context for Elder Maros states he has "bone-white cane; eyes clouded by indigo cataracts." The chapter text calls it "violet corruption." While "violet" and "indigo" are used somewhat interchangeably in this world, the World State specifically names the phenomenon "Indigo Contagion." Mixing "Violet corruption" and "Indigo cataracts" in the same scene without clarifying they are the same manifestation can confuse the reader regarding which color represents which faction/threat.
- **FIX:** "Liora saw it then—the Elder’s eyes were clouded with the same indigo cataracts, the signature of the corruption she carried."

6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

- **Thorne’s Internal Perception:** (Optional) Since Thorne is "secretively attuned to Loom sentience," the dialogue "The machine... it’s screaming" (Early) could be slightly more specific to show he is hearing something Liora isn't, rather than just reacting to the noise of the room.
- **The Junior Binders:** (Optional) The text mentions the Junior Binders stare with "a terrifying sort of hunger" (Late). Adding a half-sentence about their "traumatized" state (from the NPC Memory context) would heighten the tension of their potential radicalization.

7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

- **Liora's Repetitive Panic:** Do not remove "Bind-bind-bind it now." This is a mandated imperfection signature from her character sheet.
- **Medical Imagery:** Do not smooth out the "lungful of rot" or "liquefy your internal organs" dialogue. These are essential to the fatalistic tone and the biological stakes of the Binding Thread project.
- **Ending Sentence:** The repetition in the final paragraph is a structural choice highlighting the chaos and should not be pruned for "efficiency."

8. VERDICT

**SCORE: 90 / REVISE**
The chapter is strong and aligns closely with the voice signatures and world-state, but two "MUST-FIX" items regarding the color-coding of the corruption and the progression of the stain on Liora's arm require minor revision for continuity.