### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote (Early):** "The stone was cold, but the air was a fever—thick with the scent of ozone, lanolin, and the metallic tang of her own blood."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively integrates the character’s specific sensory profile (lanolin/indigo) with the immediate physical stakes of the scene.
*   **Quote (Mid):** "Shared senses flooded her mind, a violent bridge of empathy. She felt the dull ache in Thorne’s ribs where the restraints bit deep."
    *   *Commentary:* This passage translates the abstract "Violet Tether" into a concrete, visceral experience for the reader.
*   **Quote (Mid):** "Liora’s palm aperture flared, pouring out a fresh wave of violet light and heat. She gasped, her head snapping back."
    *   *Commentary:* This reinforces the physical cost of the magic system, grounding the metaphysical "frayback" in bodily trauma.
*   **Quote (Late):** "She used her bare hand, the stained one, to rip the restraints from the chair. The metal groaned and twisted as if the threads of its very existence were being unmade."
    *   *Commentary:* This represents a significant escalation in Liora's power, moving from simple binding to the raw manipulation of material reality.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Liora Voss**
*   **Quote:** "This knot's tightening."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Uses the "upset" marker from her stress expression scale.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Speech:** **YES.** She remains fatalistic and avoids saying "it will work out."
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** She is hyper-focused on stabilization (Arc 30%).

**Thorne Quill**
*   **Quote:** "Liora, if you’re going to fix this, do it now. Don't worry about the cost. I can take the weight."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** His dialogue reflects his role as the "anchor-weight" and his secret attunement to the Loom's needs.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Speech:** **N/A.**
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** Resolute and protective as per his profile.

**Elder Maros**
*   **Quote:** "The Purists have bypassed the lower gates... They’re coming to sever the infection at the root!"
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Reflects his "politically panicked" state and uses the weaving metaphor ("sever").
*   **Avoids Forbidden Speech:** **N/A.**
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** Acting out of desperation for his own survival.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Sensory Consistency:** The frequent mention of "lanolin," "indigo," and "violet light" maintains the established aesthetic. Specifically, the line: *"She never touched casually—but she gripped the Violet Tether itself"* preserves her character-specific aversion to touch.
*   **Magic Cost (Frayback):** The physical toll of the ritual is well-maintained. Quote: *"The frayback hit Liora instantly. A searing pain tore through her chest, a phantom blade cutting at her own soul-thread."*
*   **Environment Integration:** The Loom's sentience manifesting as architectural shifts provides a unique escape mechanic. Quote: *"A staircase that should have led to a dead-end wall suddenly folded outward, revealing a dark, pulsing vein of a corridor."*

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The violet staining had climbed past her elbow now, creeping toward her shoulder like a slow-moving bruise."
*   **PROBLEM:** In the Character State (ch-05), Liora's staining is described as reaching "mid-bicep." This chapter passage suggests it is only just passing the elbow/creeping to the shoulder, which is a slight regression in the physical corruption timeline.
*   **FIX:** "The violet staining, already stagnant at her mid-bicep, clawed higher toward her shoulder like a slow-moving bruise."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "She used her bare hand, the stained one, to rip the restraints from the chair."
*   **PROBLEM:** Earlier in the chapter, Thorne is described as being in a "restraint chair," but the text says Liora had "gripped the Violet Tether itself" and Thorne was "swaying" before she ripped the restraints. It is unclear if he was physically or metaphysically bound at that specific moment.
*   **FIX:** "She used her bare hand, the stained one, to rip the literal iron shackles from the chair’s frame, freeing his wrists at last."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Suggestion:** Enhance the "Junior Binders" reaction.
*   **Relevant Quote:** *"Behind them, Liora saw the pale, wide-eyed faces of the Junior Binders. They weren't fighting; they were staring at her, at the violet glow, with a terrifying sort of hunger."*
*   **Rationale:** The RAG context mentions they are "at high risk of radicalization." A brief mention of one crying out or reaching toward the light would hammer home the "Stained" movement's birth.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Liora’s Repetitive Panic:** The phrase *"Bind-bind-bind it now"* is a deliberate imperfection signature in her profile (repeats key words when panicked). Do not "clean" this for prose variety.
*   **Technical Metaphors:** Words like "Dirty Circuit," "stabilization grid," and "venting baffles" are intentional blends of weaving and mechanical terminology and should remain.
*   **No Free Laughter:** Ensure Liora never laughs or expresses hope; her line *"A minor snag, but we’re still here"* correctly maintains her dry, fatalistic humor.

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### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**SCORE: 88**
**Justification:** The chapter is tonally perfect and adheres strictly to voice signatures, but requires minor revisions to align the physical progression of the "Indigo Contagion" (staining level) with the RAG database and clarify the physical mechanics of the restraint-ripping scene.