### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

"The digital recorder's feedback loop cut out with a dying squeal that left Sarah's molars vibrating, or perhaps that was merely the blood congealing in her ear canals." (Early)
*   **Commentary:** This effectively bridges the physical trauma of the previous chapter to the immediate sensory experience of the protagonist.

"The microwave’s digital clock had melted into a black smear; the overhead light fixture hung by a single copper wire, its bulb shattered." (Mid)
*   **Commentary:** This concrete imagery successfully reinforces the "Electronic Dead Zone" world state established in the project context.

"The soil had been vibrated into perfect, concentric circles, like a Japanese rock garden designed by a madman." (Late)
*   **Commentary:** This provides a chilling visual representation of the invisible acoustic forces at play, moving the threat from abstract to physical.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Sarah Miller**
*   **Quote:** "The 110-decibel inversion... it forced a phase-shift. Empirically speaking, it couldn't occupy the same spatial coordinates as the feedback loop."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses "Empirically speaking" to prefix her logical processing.
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** YES. She avoids flowery supernatural affirmations, sticking to "phase-shift" and "feedback loop."
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. She exhibits her signature "analytical freeze" and stammers initial consonants ("T-t-the") due to her audio-feedback headache.

**Elias Thorne**
*   **Quote:** "Because it isn't just sound, Sarah. In 1927, when they finally opened the cellar at the Oakhaven site, the air didn't smell like dust."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. His focus on the "Great Silence" and the 1927 signatures aligns with his known secrets.
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** YES. No forbidden patterns listed for Elias.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. He is "wary" and sensing the "Great Silence" as per his character state.

**Mark**
*   **Quote:** (No dialogue).
*   **Voice Match:** YES. The character state for Ch-07 explicitly lists him as "immobile" and a "silent, static anchor." His lack of speech is canonical.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Sensory Consistency:** The frequent mention of the scent of "scorched copper," "ozone," and "wet iron" (e.g., "...cloying aroma filled the kitchen. It was metallic and heavy. Wet iron.") maintains perfect continuity with the World State.
*   **Technical Integration:** Sarah’s use of her digital recorder as a psychological and physical shield ("She just needed to feel the tactile reality of the machine") remains true to her profile.
*   **Escalation of Threat:** The transition of the entity from a "wave-state to a particle-state" (Mid) provides a terrifying but pseudo-scientific logic that fits the genre.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The smell of sulfur and fried circuit boards was so thick she could almost chew it." (Mid)
*   **PROBLEM:** The World State explicitly lists the scents as "ozone, scorched copper, and sulfur." While "fried circuit boards" is evocative, the "wet iron" scent (hemoglobin) is a specific plot point/secret that Thorne later explains. The text introduces "wet iron" later as a surprise, but the context implies it should be present.
*   **FIX:** Ensure the scents align with the world state early on: "The smell of sulfur, ozone, and scorched copper was so thick she could almost chew it."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "She reached for the recessed ring of the hatch." (Late)
*   **PROBLEM:** The "hatch" is introduced suddenly in the pantry area without clear spatial orientation for the reader, despite the "crater" by the refrigerator being the primary focus of the room's damage. 
*   **FIX:** Add a brief directional anchor: "She moved past the ruined refrigerator toward the pantry, where a small wooden hatch was set into the floorboards."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Suggestion:** Clarify Mark's physical state. 
*   **Quote:** "He's out of the equation," Elias muttered, checking Mark's pulse..." (Mid). 
*   **Reason:** Since Mark has "hearing impairment from feedback spike" in the RAG, having Elias explicitly mention if Mark’s ears are bleeding like Sarah’s would reinforce the shared physical trauma of the event.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **DO NOT** fix Sarah’s stammers (e.g., "T-t-the"). This is her "Imperfection signature" triggered by audio feedback/headaches.
*   **DO NOT** remove the phrase "Data doesn't lie." This is her pivot signature and must remain.
*   **DO NOT** give Mark dialogue. His cataleptic silence is essential to his Ch-07 arc state (05%).

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### 8. VERDICT

**SCORE: 92**
**JUSTIFICATION:** The chapter is an excellent execution of the provided RAG context, maintaining perfect character voices and world-state environmental constants. Only minor MUST-FIX items regarding spatial clarity and scent-list consistency are required.

**VERDICT: REVISE**