### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The vines had already woven through the man’s ribcage, using the skeleton as a trellis. There was no smell of rot—only the heavy, cloying scent of crushed magnolia and wet earth."
    *   **Commentary:** This reinforces the "Grand Recission" world state by showing the swamp's active, non-rot-based digestion of technology and intruders.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "Inside, nestled among a snarl of melted copper wiring, sat the Black Box. It was a sleek, vacuum-sealed unit, its LED blinking a defiant red. *Ping.*"
    *   **Commentary:** The rhythmic use of onomatopoeia emphasizes the abrasive nature of technology within the "Great Silence" of the Bend.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "She was suspended within the hollow of the trunk, integrated so completely that Jax couldn't tell where her skin ended and the timber began. She was translucent, a column of light and memory."
    *   **Commentary:** This effectively visualizes Lena’s transition to the "sentient Guardian" arc described in the character state.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Character: Jax Harlan**
*   **Line:** "Gator's truth." (Mid)
*   **Signature vocabulary / verbal tics?** NO. The Voice Signature for **Lena Duval** assigns the phrase "gator's truth" to *her*, not Jax. Having Jax say it here creates a voice bleed, though it could be argued he is echoing her, it is not his signature.
*   **Avoid forbidden speech patterns?** YES. Jax remains clipped and mournful.
*   **Emotional register consistent?** YES. He is "mournful but resolute" as per his profile.

**Character: Lena Duval**
*   **Line:** "The cypress... it don't lie, Jax... The roots whisper what your heart’s too stubborn to hear. You’ve brought the silence back. Hellfire, it’s... it’s good." (Late)
*   **Signature vocabulary / verbal tics?** YES. Uses "Hellfire" (upset/emotional) and "the cypress don't lie" (signature line).
*   **Avoid forbidden speech patterns?** YES. She does not apologize and uses non-standard grammar ("it don't lie") consistent with her "clipped and rhythmic" chant style.
*   **Emotional register consistent?** YES. She exhibits the "Divine Stillness" and "Collective Awareness" of the Ch-15 state.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Environmental Descriptors:** The use of "iridescent sweat" and "iridescent sap" in Jax’s skin consistently reinforces his "Green Fever" physical state from the RAG database.
*   **The Black Box Conflict:** The scene where Jax destroys the transmitter ("He met it with the Hum. He channeled the swamp’s hunger into the device") perfectly resolves his active obligation to "prevent incursion."
*   **Lena’s Transformation:** The physical description of her as "a column of light and memory" integrated into the "cypress capillary system" aligns perfectly with the Ch-15 world state.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "'Gator's truth,' a voice whispered." (Mid)
*   **PROBLEM:** The voice signature identifies "gator's truth" as a verbal tic belonging to **Lena Duval**, used when stating an "undeniable fact about nature." Here, the text attributes it to Jax Harlan’s internal or whispered thoughts before he even reaches Lena.
*   **FIX:** Change Jax’s line to a boat-captain metaphor consistent with his "boat-captain instincts" profile. Change to: "Dead reckoning."

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The use of her old curse word hit Jax like a physical blow." (Late)
*   **PROBLEM:** The text has Lena say "Hellfire." According to the Voice Signature, "Hellfire" is used when she is "upset." However, her emotional state in Ch-15 is "Divine Stillness." While it shows a flash of her old self, the transition is slightly jarring.
*   **FIX:** Ensure the narrative explains that this is a fragment of her "unresolved memory" (The Burden of Memory) surfacing momentarily through the stillness.

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Jax felt the digital signal—a stream of binary math, cold and sterile. He met it with the Hum." (Mid)
*   **PROBLEM:** Since the "Great Silence" is a permanent EMP-like dead zone that "kills all complex electronics," it is unclear why the Black Box is functioning so well or how Jax "feels" binary math.
*   **FIX:** Clarify that the Black Box is shielded against the Great Hum, making its destruction by Jax’s "Green Fever" touch more significant. Rewrite: "The box had been hardened against the Silence, its shielded heart still spitting cold binary math. He met it with the Hum, bypassing the shielding with the swamp's own fever."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Suggestion (Character Detail):** In the RAG context, Lena "twists a silver locket" when hiding emotions. In this chapter, the locket is "half-absorbed into the wood." (Late).
*   **Enhancement:** To show the loss of her human agency, briefly mention that she *cannot* reach for it anymore, emphasizing her transformation.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do not "fix" Jax's grammar:** His use of "Ain't" and "draggin'" is an intentional character choice for a boat captain and should not be polished into standard English.
*   **Do not "humanize" Lena further:** Her lack of breathing and "translucent" state is a permanent Chapter 15 transformation.
*   **Sensory detail:** The "cloying scent of crushed magnolia and wet earth" must remain; its presence grounds her character to the Bayou bones.

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### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** The chapter is atmospheric and aligns well with the RAG world state, but it fails the voice audit by assigning Lena's specific verbal tic ("Gator's truth") to Jax, and requires minor clarity regarding how the Black Box functions within an EMP-dead zone.