### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The vines had already woven through the man’s ribcage, using the skeleton as a trellis."
    *   *Commentary:* This visceral image effectively bridges the gap between the original human reality and the sentient, predatory nature of the swamp's new world state.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "He channeled the swamp’s hunger into the device, imagining the vines outside crushing the signal, the mud drowning the frequencies."
    *   *Commentary:* This passage successfully externalizes Jax's internal transformation, showing his new role as the conduit between technology and nature.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "She was suspended within the hollow of the trunk, integrated so completely that Jax couldn't tell where her skin ended and the timber began."
    *   *Commentary:* The prose clearly communicates the "100% arc completion" stated in the RAG, reinforcing Lena's transition from human to the Permanent Guardian.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Character: Jax Harlan**
*   **Dialogue Line:** "The anchor's draggin', friend, and you're the weight."
*   **Vocabulary/Tics (YES):** Uses nautical metaphors ("anchor," "dragging," "weight") consistent with his boat-captain background and current role as the "Anchor."
*   **Forbidden Patterns (YES):** No forbidden patterns identified for Jax.
*   **Emotional Register (YES):** He is "mournful but resolute," shown in his grim determination to sever the signal.

**Character: Lena Duval**
*   **Dialogue Line:** "The cypress... it don't lie, Jax. The roots whisper what your heart’s too stubborn to hear. You’ve brought the silence back. Hellfire, it’s... it’s good."
*   **Vocabulary/Tics (YES):** Uses her signature line ("The cypress don't lie"), her verbal tic "gator's truth" (appearing in the narrative just before she speaks), and her "hellfire" stress expression. 
*   **Forbidden Patterns (YES):** She does not apologize; her speech follows the rhythm of a chant.
*   **Emotional Register (YES):** She displays "Divine Stillness" even while acknowledging Jax.

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Sensory Grounding:** The chapter maintains the specific scent profile established in the RAG ("only the heavy, cloying scent of crushed magnolia and wet earth"). This must remain to keep Lena's presence consistent even in her transcended state.
*   **The "Green Fever" Visuals:** The description of Jax's skin ("He looked like an oil slick caught in moonlight") perfectly visualizes the physical state described in the Character Sheet.
*   **Thematically Consistent Action:** Jax destroying the Black Box not with a tool, but via his iridescent hand ("Jax reached into the wiring with his bare, iridescent hand"), reinforces his role as the "Security" anchor.

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Ooze—thick, black, and smelling of ancient peat—leaked from the seams."
*   **PROBLEM:** The passage contains a punctuation/capitalization error. "Ooze" is capitalized and followed by a dash, making it appear as a sentence fragment or a typo in the middle of the flow.
*   **FIX:** "Ooze, thick and black and smelling of ancient peat, leaked from the seams."

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Jax felt a tear track through the iridescent sap on his cheek."
*   **PROBLEM:** Per the RAG Context, Jax’s skin is "iridescent sap" because of the Green Fever. However, the world meta for the "Great Silence" and "Grand Recission" suggests the fever is a hardening/integrating process.
*   **FIX:** "Jax felt a stinging warmth track through the iridescent sap on his cheek—a salt-water ghost of a tear that the swamp already sought to reclaim." (This emphasizes his transition to a "Permanent" anchor).

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "A thin fiber-optic cable ran from the box, snaking upward through a ventilation shaft... There was a name scratched into the plastic casing of the terminal: Lange."
*   **PROBLEM:** It is unclear if the name is on the Black Box itself or a separate terminal nearby, and how Jax immediately connects "Lange" to a "Grave-Tender" since the RAG states Grave-Tenders are Duval Coven members, yet this is a TDC installation.
*   **FIX:** "There was a name scratched into the plastic casing of the TDC terminal: *Lange*. Jax spat into the mud. Lange had been a local—a Grave-Tender who'd traded the Coven’s secrets for a corporate paycheck."

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Cajun Endearments (Optional):** Lena’s profile states she uses Cajun French ("cher," "mon coeur") for those she cares for. While her voice is "clipped and rhythmic," adding one in her final exchange would heighten the emotional impact of Jax seeing the "old Lena."
*   **Quote:** "The cypress... it don't lie, Jax."
*   **Suggestion:** "The cypress... it don't lie, *mon coeur*."

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Lena’s Repetition:** Do not fix "no no, not that, no no" if it appears in future panic; it is her imperfection signature.
*   **Jax’s Dialect:** Do not formalize Jax's speech ("ain't", "draggin'"); this reflects his boat-captain background.
*   **Environmental Hostility:** Do not soften the predatory nature of the vines or the "Grand Recission." The RAG specifies the Hum is "sentient and predatory toward outside technology."

### 8. VERDICT

**SCORE: 88**
**REVISE**

**JUSTIFICATION:** The chapter captures the atmospheric and character-voice requirements exceptionally well, but there are minor continuity/clarity issues regarding the "Lange" character's affiliation and a technical punctuation error in the "Ooze" passage that require correction before the final pass.