### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   "The life-debt hummed through Lena’s veins like a gator’s heartbeat under black water, pulling her silver-glow gaze toward the perimeter where Jax stood guard." (Early) — This effectively establishes the physical manifestation of the Ch-12 life-debt while grounding it in the bayou lexicon.
*   "She didn't walk so much as she was ushered along by the shadows." (Early) — A strong stylistic choice that reinforces her transformation into 'The Warden' and her detachment from human kinetics.
*   "The water erupted. A wall of thick, brackish fog rose in a heartbeat, swallowing the soldiers." (Mid) — This provides a concise, impactful demonstration of her "Bayou Binding" magic without over-explaining the mechanics.
*   "Maribelle wasn't there physically, but her presence was a rot in the air. A 'ghost signal'—a projection of her spite fueled by the backflow—shimmered over the valve." (Late) — This successfully bridges the gap between the swamp's supernatural elements and the Siphon’s high-tech "Harmonic Bleed" origin.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Character: Lena Duval**
*   **Quote:** "The cypress don't lie, cher—the roots whisper what your heart's too stubborn to hear."
*   **Signature Tics:** YES. She uses "cher" and her specific signature line provided in the voice sheet.
*   **Forbidden Patterns:** YES. She avoids apologizing and never says "I give up."
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. She feels "transformed and protective," and her repetitive panic-tic ("no no, not that, no no") matches her ch-14 arc.
*   **Specific Constraint Check:** She uses "Gator's truth" (late-mid) when stating an undeniable fact about her role. She also uses "By the bayou's bones" when furious.

**Character: Jax Harlan**
*   **Quote:** "It’s a machine, Lena. A machine built by people who wanted to bleed this place dry. You’re fusing yourself to a parasite."
*   **Signature Tics:** N/A (Jax does not have a formal voice signature block in this prompt, but his dialogue is "resolute but wary" as per character state).
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. He treats his tools like "talismans" and expresses "bone-deep, existential terror" regarding Lena's transformation.

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Bioluminescent Visuals:** The description of Lena's physical state ("tracking the silver light moving under the skin of her throat") is essential to the ch-14 status of her being 100% integrated.
*   **Tactile Grounding:** The chapter adheres to Lena's "What they REACH FOR" constraint: "Her fingers trailed across a patch of damp moss clinging to a brass pressure gauge."
*   **The Conflict Resolution:** Keeping the scene where Lena refuses to apologize for the foggy neutralization of the soldiers is vital to her character arc of "stubborn independence."

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "Maribelle. Hellfire, she’s trying to drown the Core out of spite."
*   **PROBLEM:** In the provided RAG Context (World State: Ch-14), Aunt Maribelle is listed as **DECEASED**. The context states her death was "the manual drainage... consumed by the resulting harmonic backlash." The current chapter text treats her as an active antagonist "trying to drown the Core," which contradicts her legacy as "ended the internal struggle."
*   **FIX:** Rewrite to clarify that the "presence" and "ghost signal" are an echo or a residual automated trap she set before her death. Change Lena’s line: "Maribelle. Hellfire, she left a fail-safe... she’s trying to drown the Core from beyond the mud."

*   **ORIGINAL:** "She pricked her palm on a thorn, a single drop of blood falling into the black water."
*   **PROBLEM:** The RAG "Character State" for Ch-14 explicitly notes Lena is "Physical: Ethereal and stabilized... no longer experiences physical tremors." While she uses blood-oaths, the transition to being 100% "The Warden" suggests her magic is now "constant."
*   **FIX:** This is a minor thematic clash, but the bigger issue is the location of the TDC. The RAG states "The survivors fled into the swamp and are being hunted." The text shows them raising rifles. 
*   **REVISION:** "A group of TDC stragglers... stumbling through the Great Hum's feedback loop, raised their rifles in blind terror."

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "A bypass valve... someone’s opened a secondary line."
*   **PROBLEM:** The RAG World State says "The Secondary Bypass: DESTROYED/OVERGROWN -- Gone with Maribelle." If it was destroyed in the previous beat of Ch-14, Lena and Jax cannot turn the wheel to close it in this beat.
*   **FIX:** Lena should be closing a *different* failure point, perhaps the "Siphon Hub Perimeter" mentioned in Jax's location.
*   **REVISION:** "A pressure vent... the backup seals are failing. The bypass is gone, but the pressure has nowhere to go but up."

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Quote:** "She was the Bend, and the Bend was her." (Early). 
*   **Suggestion:** This is a very common trope. While it fits the Warden arc, it could be sharpened to use more of her specific Bayou Binding principle (symbiosis).
*   **Quote:** "The silver locket (her mother's) chain around her finger... readers spot it as her guilt signal." (Voice Notes). 
*   **Suggestion:** The RAG state says the Locket was "DROPPED... as a symbol of her final release." The text does not mention her reaching for her neck and finding it gone. Adding a moment where she reaches for it and touches only bare skin would reinforce her "Final release from the past."

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Verbal Tics:** Do not remove "Gator's truth" or "By the bayou's bones." These are mandatory voice signatures.
*   **Repetitive Phrasing:** Lena's "no no, not that, no no" (Late) must remain as it is her defined "Imperfection signature" for panic/exhaustion.
*   **Sensory Details:** The scent of "magnolia and mud" must be maintained as per the "Notes for Writers."

### 8. VERDICT: REVISE
**SCORE: 78**
**JUSTIFICATION:** While the prose is atmospheric and the character voice is perfectly aligned with the provided signatures, there are major factual contradictions with the RAG Roster. The chapter treats Aunt Maribelle as a lingering active threat who "wants the legacy," whereas the RAG states she is deceased and the internal struggle is over. Furthermore, the chapter centers on a "Secondary Bypass" that the RAG explicitly states was "DESTROYED/OVERGROWN." These continuity errors must be corrected to align with the project's established world state.