### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The vines had already woven through the man’s ribcage, using the skeleton as a trellis."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively reinforces the "Grand Recission" world event by showing the visceral, invasive nature of the swamp reclaiming industrial intruders.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "He met it with the Hum. He channeled the swamp’s hunger into the device, imagining the vines outside crushing the signal, the mud drowning the frequencies."
    *   *Commentary:* This passage successfully bridges Jax's internal "Green Fever" state with the external sentient environment, showing his evolution into an "Anchor."
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "Jax felt the mourning in his soul begin to dissolve. It was being replaced by something vast, something ancient and green. He wasn't losing himself; he was being promoted."
    *   *Commentary:* The phrase "being promoted" feels slightly too corporate/modern for the increasingly primordial tone of the scene, though it highlights his transition.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "The great cypress soared into the canopy, its bark glowing with a soft, cyan light. Its roots didn't just crawl through the mud; they pulsed like arteries..."
    *   *Commentary:* The anatomical metaphor ("arteries") creates a strong sense of the land as a living, circulatory entity, matching the "Siphon Hub" concept.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Character: Lena Duval**
*   **Quote:** "The cypress... it don't lie, Jax... The roots whisper what your heart’s too stubborn to hear. You’ve brought the silence back. Hellfire, it’s... it’s good."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses "cypress don't lie" (signature line) and "hellfire" (upset/intense stress).
*   **Avoid Forbidden Patterns:** YES. She does not apologize or say "I give up."
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. While transcendent/integrated into the tree, the inclusion of "hellfire" and "stubborn heart" grounds her in her Duval heritage during her final human-adjacent moment.

**Character: Jax Harlan**
*   **Quote:** "The anchor's draggin', friend... And you're the weight."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses boat/maritime metaphors ("anchor," "dragging," "weight") consistent with his boat-captain background.
*   **Avoid Forbidden Patterns:** YES. Consistent with his "mournful but resolute" emotional state.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. His arc shows him trading his "human future" to be an "Anchor," which is directly addressed in his dialogue.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Environmental Body Horror:** The description of the TDC guard in the mudflats ("The vines had already woven through the man’s ribcage") is a vital illustration of the "sentient and predatory" nature of the swamp.
*   **The Narrative Mirroring of Jax’s Hands:** The transition from his hand "twitching" (early) to "steady, powerful thrumming" (late) perfectly communicates his completed character arc without over-explaining the magic.
*   **The Scent of the Bend:** The text correctly identifies that there is "no smell of rot—only the heavy, cloying scent of crushed magnolia and wet earth," which aligns with the character sheet's emphasis on magnolia and mud.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Jax felt the digital signal—a stream of binary math, cold and sterile... The Black Box shrieked a high-pitched electronic wail. The red LED turned a sickly violet, then flickered out." (Mid)
*   **PROBLEM:** The World State explicitly declares "The Great Silence" as a **permanent EMP-like dead zone** that kills all "complex electronics." A fiber-optic box with a blinking LED and digital transmission functions shouldn't be operational this close to the Heart Tree/Hub Core.
*   **FIX:** Describe the Black Box as being shielded by lead or a specific TDC dampening tech, or emphasize that the signal only works *because* of the mole's (Lange) interference with the "Grave-Tending" rituals.
    *   *Revised sentence:* "Inside, nested in a lead-lined dampening sleeve designed to fight the Great Silence, sat the Black Box."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Lange... I don't think he'll be tending any more graves." (Late)
*   **PROBLEM:** It is unclear if Jax actually encountered/killed Lange in this chapter or is simply making an assumption. The previous passage only mentions a name "scratched into the plastic casing."
*   **FIX:** Add a brief sensory detail earlier in the chapter (near the mossy boots) identifying the body as Lange, or clarify that Jax is speaking symbolically about the end of the mole's influence.
    *   *Revised sentence:* "Jax looked back at the moss-covered remains in the corner—Lange's name-tag still pinned to the shredded vest. 'Lange... I don't think he'll be tending any more graves.'"

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Dialect Consistency:** (Late) In the line "You’ve brought the silence back. Hellfire, it’s... it’s good," Lena uses "You've" (contraction). Given her clipped, rhythmic chanting voice, using "You have" might further emphasize her transition from a panicked human (who repeats words "no no") to a deliberate, sentient force.
*   **The Locket Detail:** (Late) The text mentions the locket is "half-absorbed into the wood." The Character Sheet notes the locket contains "Lena's discarded human emotions." Having Jax feel a specific emotion (e.g., a flash of Lena's childhood fear) when he nears the locket would reinforce its significance.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do Not Change:** Jax’s maritime metaphors ("The anchor's draggin'"). These are deep-seated character traits that must remain even as he becomes a supernatural entity.
*   **Do Not Change:** The iridescent skin descriptions. This is a primary physical marker of the "Green Fever" and the character's 100% arc completion.
*   **Do Not Change:** Lena's lack of breathing ("She didn't breathe"). This is a specific "Character State" requirement from the RAG database for Ch-15.

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### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** The chapter is atmospheric and matches character voices perfectly, but it contains a significant world-building continuity error regarding electronic functionality within the "Great Silence" zone and a minor clarity issue regarding the fate of the character "Lange."