### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The stone was cold, but the air was a fever—thick with the scent of ozone, lanolin, and the metallic tang of her own blood."
    *   **Commentary:** This effectively reinforces Liora’s specific sensory profile (lanolin) while grounding the metaphysical crisis in visceral, physical discomfort.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "Shared senses flooded her mind, a violent bridge of empathy. She felt the dull ache in Thorne’s ribs where the restraints bit deep."
    *   **Commentary:** This concisely illustrates the "Soul-Link" mechanic and the "Violet Tether" established in the world state without resorting to dry exposition.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "One guard fired—a kinetic pulse meant to stun. Liora didn't think. She reached out, feeling the guard’s life-thread through the lingering haze of the Soul-Link. It was a thin, grey thing, brittle with unthinking obedience. She didn't sever it—she wasn't that far gone—but she *tugged*."
    *   **Commentary:** The use of weaving metaphors ("thin, grey thing," "tugged") during combat perfectly aligns with her established discipline of Threadbinding.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "The architecture... It’s shifting. Look... A staircase that should have led to a dead-end wall suddenly folded outward, revealing a dark, pulsing vein of a corridor that led toward the upper spires."
    *   **Commentary:** This visually represents the "Indigo Contagion" and "Loom Frequency" world states, showing how the environment is physically reacting to the corruption.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Liora Voss**
*   **Line:** "You can't just pull at fate's hem like it's your favorite cloak—watch the weave, or it'll unravel us both."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics (YES):** Uses weaving imagery ("fate's hem," "weave," "unravel").
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns (YES):** She avoids optimism and expresses her characteristic fatalistic humor.
*   **Emotional Register Consistent (YES):** She is at 30% arc, displaying her fatal flaw of trying to "fix" the connection while being hyper-focused on stability.

**Thorne Quill**
*   **Line:** "The machine... it’s screaming."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics (YES):** Reflects his "secretly attuned to Loom sentience" trait from the character sheet.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns (YES):** No specific forbidden patterns listed for Thorne, but his tone is appropriately resolute.
*   **Emotional Register Consistent (YES):** Displays his protective nature and his role as a "sentient anchor."

**Elder Maros**
*   **Line:** "I’m trying... But the cataracts... I can barely see the controls. The indigo is everywhere." 
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics (N/A):** No specific verbal tic listed, but uses "bone-white cane" as a physical identifier.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns (YES):** Not applicable.
*   **Emotional Register Consistent (YES):** He is "politically panicked" and acting out of a need for survival, as per the character state.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Olfactory Consistency:** The detail "thick with the scent of ozone, lanolin, and the metallic tang of her own blood" (Early) precisely matches the voice signature instruction: "Always smells faintly of lanolin and indigo dye."
*   **Liora’s Panic Response:** The line "Match your heartbeat to the violet light. Bind-bind-bind it now" (Mid) perfectly executes the "Imperfection signature" from the profile: "repeats key words obsessively when panicked, e.g., 'bind-bind-bind it now'."
*   **Metaphorical Integrity:** The internal monologue "The red thread whispers betrayal... But this violet one... it just screams 'existence'" (Mid) adheres to the voice signature: "Personifies threads as living entities."

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Liora Voss clung to the edges of the central obsidian pedestal... her knuckles white." (Early)
*   **PROBLEM:** The Character State notes Liora is currently suffering from "severe physical exhaustion" and "indigo staining reaching mid-bicep," yet the text later has her "rising to her feet with a grace fueled by pure adrenaline" and then "rip the restraints from the chair" with her "bare hand." While adrenaline can mask exhaustion, ripping metal restraints from a chair with a bare hand contradicts her "Physical" description as having "left palm aperture pulsing violet" (a wound/opening). She is a Threadbinder, not physically super-powered.
*   **FIX (Rewrite):** "She used her stained hand, the palm aperture screaming with violet fire, to *bind* the metal of the restraints until they groaned and twisted, the threads of their very existence unmaking themselves." (This shifts the feat from physical strength to magical ability, which fits the world rules).

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Thorne sat in the restraint chair, his chest heaving [..] He wasn't just a sacrifice anymore; he was a weight." (Early)
*   **PROBLEM:** In the Character State, Thorne is described as an "anchor-weight" (Necessary). In the chapter text, Liora calls him "a weight," but the context makes it sound like a burden rather than a stabilizing force until several paragraphs later. This creates initial confusion about whether Thorne is helping or hindering the stability of the circuit.
*   **FIX:** "He wasn't just a sacrifice anymore; he was a ballast—the only thing keeping her soul from unspooling."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Optional Suggestion:** (Mid) Quote: "It’s been suffocating for centuries under the weight of 'pure' threads."
    *   **Critique:** Since the "Conclave Purists" are the primary antagonists, this line could be sharpened to more clearly link the "Dirty Circuit" to her "Stained" status to heighten the thematic stakes of her heresy.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Verbal Tics:** Do not remove Liora’s repetition of "bind-bind-bind." This is an intentional character signature used to signal panic.
*   **Fatalism:** Do not replace Liora’s dry, fatalistic dialogue (e.g., "A minor snag") with more optimistic or heroic speech. Her refusal to believe "it'll all work out" is central to her identity.
*   **Sensory Cues:** The recurring mention of lanolin and indigo must remain; these are tactile anchors for her characterization as a weaver/binder.

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### 8. VERDICT

**VERDICT: REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** The chapter is tonally excellent and follows the Voice Signatures with high precision. However, it requires revision for the "Continuity" and "Clarity" issues identified, specifically regarding Liora's physical capabilities versus her magical ones, and the clarity of Thorne's role as a ballast.