### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The world had gone lethally quiet, save for the merciless ringing in Sarah's ears, as blood trickled warm down her neck."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively establishes the immediate physical stakes and the "Electronic Dead Zone" status of the house through sensory deprivation.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "He saw her then, a shadow against the kitchen doorway. Sarah was hunched, one hand on the counter, the light catching the dark, wet stains on her collar."
    *   *Commentary:* The prose here successfully bridges the character physical states (bleeding ears) with the atmospheric lighting constraints (pitch black, tactical flashlight).
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "Deep beneath the floorboards, in the crawlspace where the light never reached and the dampness never dried, a low, tectonic vibration began to rumble."
    *   *Commentary:* This passage aptly introduces the "Presence in the sub-structure" loop identified in the World State while maintaining the suspenseful tone of the genre.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Sarah Miller**
*   **Dialogue:** "E-Elias... Empirically speaking... that wasn't a power surge. That was an a-acoustic weaponization of a standing wave."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Uses "Empirically speaking" and stammers initial consonants ("E-Elias," "a-acoustic") as required by her imperfection signature.
*   **Avoid Forbidden Patterns:** **YES.** She maintains an analytical focus on "weaponization" and "standing waves" rather than flowery supernatural descriptions.
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** She is hyper-focused on data even while in neurological shock.

**Elias Thorne**
*   **Dialogue:** "It’s sentient... Or it’s biological. It’s reacting to us, Sarah. It’s retreating now, but it’s not gone."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Reflects his specific secret belief (from RAG) that the signal is "sentient/biological."
*   **Avoid Forbidden Patterns:** **N/A.** (No specific forbidden patterns listed in profile).
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** Shows the transition from observer to participant, validating Sarah's experience.

**Mark**
*   **Dialogue:** "Old wiring. I told Sarah she was imagining things. All this talk about h-hums and ghosts... it’s just nerves."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **NO.** Mark’s voice signature is listed as "Unknown." However, the text assigns him a stammer ("h-hums") which is Sarah's specific imperfection signature, not his.
*   **Avoid Forbidden Patterns:** **YES.**
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** He remains a "static skeptical anchor" as defined in his arc.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Sensory Consistency:** The recurring "scent of ozone, scorched copper, and sulfur" and "wet iron" (e.g., "In the sudden, absolute darkness, the scent of wet iron grew exponentially stronger") maintains excellent continuity with the World State environment.
*   **Technical Jargon:** Sarah’s use of specific frequencies (e.g., "Fourteen point zero three... sub-threshold resonance... thirty-hertz decay") reinforces her role as an engineer/analyst.
*   **Physical Vulnerability:** The depiction of Sarah’s injuries ("blood trickled warm down her neck") remains consistent with the "Bilateral tinnitus; bleeding from ears" state in the RAG.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "At the threshold of the front entryway, Elias Thorne stood frozen..."
*   **PROBLEM:** The Character State (ch-07) places Elias in the "Hallway/Kitchen" alongside Sarah. The opening of the chapter implies Elias is just entering the house from the street ("The air inside the house was different from the air on the street").
*   **FIX:** "In the oppressive smog of the hallway, Elias Thorne stood frozen, his hand still gripped around the frame of the kitchen door."
*   **ORIGINAL:** "Sarah looked at Elias. The 'quiet' Mark was praising felt like a predator coiled in the corner."
*   **PROBLEM:** The World State explicitly lists Mark's location as "Living Room (Presumed)" and Sarah/Elias in "Hallway/Kitchen." The prose has Sarah and Elias "move together" to the living room to find Mark, but they then engage in a lengthy dialogue. The narrative needs to clarify that they have entered the living room.
*   **FIX:** Ensure the transition into the living room is physically completed before the dialogue begins to maintain spatial continuity.

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "Mark didn't turn... All this talk about h-hums and ghosts... it’s just nerves."
*   **PROBLEM:** Mark is using Sarah’s specific voice signature (stuttering initial consonants). According to the Voice Audit, this is Sarah's "Imperfection signature" triggered by audio feedback. Mark is "unharmed" and "unmoving"; giving him this trait confuses the character voices. 
*   **FIX:** "All this talk about hums and ghosts... it’s just nerves." (Remove the 'h-h' stutter).

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Optional:** Mention the specific haptic feedback of the recorder again when it starts playing the "ghost-loop." 
    *   *Quote:* "She lifted it to her ear—the one that was bleeding less—and pressed play." 
    *   *Reasoning:* It would emphasize her physical injury and the "Electronic Dead Zone" theme if the device felt "wrong" or "hot" in her hand.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do not "fix" Sarah’s stutter.** It is a core part of her character sheet following audio trauma.
*   **Do not make Mark more reactive.** His "static skeptical anchor" status is an intentional arc choice; his refusal to acknowledge the blood or the smell of sulfur is a character trait, not a plot hole.
*   **Do not remove technical terminology.** Sarah's use of "EMI-induced visual manifestation" is central to her "analytical" nature.

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### 8. VERDICT
**SCORE: 82**
**REVISE**

**Justification:** While the prose is atmospheric and aligns well with the majority of the RAG context, there is a significant voice contamination issue where Mark adopts Sarah’s unique stuttering trait. Additionally, the spatial continuity regarding Elias’s arrival (appearing to enter from the street versus being in the kitchen/hallway per the state file) needs alignment. These MUST-FIX items require a revision pass.