### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The Consummation Silk, stained with their mingled blood and fluttering like a false banner of surrender, caught the moonlight as Damien’s grip on her waist finally eased." 
    *Commentary:* This effectively establishes the "false consummation" ruse (ch-03) through a strong visual metaphor that doubles as a plot anchor.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "It was like drinking liquid starlight, a rush of stolen heat that flooded her veins and stilled the tremors in her hands."
    *Commentary:* This sensory description vividly illustrates the hemomantic bond and the stabilizing effect of Damien's blood magic on Isabella’s exhaustion.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "She began to murmur the incantations of the Nightbloom, her voice a melodic, haunting friction against the night air."
    *Commentary:* This passage maintains the "poetic flourishes" established in Isabella's voice signature while grounding the magical act in physical sensation.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "Isabella felt a strange sensation—a heat radiating from the locket at her throat that had nothing to do with her own magic."
    *Commentary:* This effectively utilizes Isabella’s "vow-sealed talisman" habit mentioned in her character sheet to introduce a new supernatural mystery.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Character: Isabella Voss**
*   **Line:** "Pray, do release the theatrics, Damien. The audience has retired to toast their perceived conquest. We are quite alone, are we not?"
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Uses the sarcastic "Pray" prefix and ends with the reflective "is it not?" (variant: "are we not?") as required by her voice signature.
*   **Forbidden Speech Patterns:** **YES.** Avoids all casual slang; maintains a regal, mid-length sentence structure.
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** She is "calculating and performatively submissive" in public, but shifts to her "regal" and "icy" composure when alone with Damien, aligning with her ch-04 state.

**Character: Damien Blackthorn**
*   **Line:** "I’ve always preferred heresy to tradition. Tradition would have me break you. This… this is much more interesting."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** (General Profile) Displays the "cynical" and "protective" outlook noted in his ch-04 emotional state.
*   **Forbidden Speech Patterns:** **YES.** He avoids modernisms and maintains a "rough velvet" tone.
*   **Emotional Register:** **YES.** He is in the 35% arc position—actively shielding Isabella while maintaining his "predator’s grace."

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Tactical Magic Usage:** The description of the "Crimson Oath Lash" mechanics (though used here as a binding/concealment spell) remains consistent with the "Limitation" on her character sheet. Quote: "I felt the familiar, searing pain of a new scar etching itself into her shoulder... it was a heavy, parasitic weight."
*   **Atmospheric Character Traits:** The use of Isabella’s high collar to hide her scars is a key visual from the character sheet that is successfully integrated. Quote: "silver embroidery hid the worst of the Vow’s marks."
*   **The Power Dynamic:** The "false union" tension is maintained through the scouts and the pressure from Malakor, reinforcing the "Project Context." Reference: The interaction with the hooded scout who "bowed, but the gesture was shallow."

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Isabella pulled a small silver ceremonial dagger from the folds of her gown."
*   **PROBLEM:** Isabella's physical state in the RAG context (ch-04) explicitly lists her as "recovering from exhaustion; wrists bandaged." While she can use magic, the text fails to acknowledge the existing bandages on her wrists when she draws the blade to create *new* cuts, risking a logic gap regarding her "active obligations" to keep her bloodletting hidden from the Coven. More importantly, her character sheet notes she "traces the faint crimson scars on her wrists absentmindedly... drawing faint blood beads." She should use the existing wounds rather than a new dagger-cut to avoid discovery during the upcoming "Anointing."
*   **FIX:** "Isabella reached for the bandages on her wrist, peeling back a layer of linen to expose the sluggishly weeping scars beneath. She did not need a dagger; her history was already written in openings that refused to close."

*   **ORIGINAL:** "He requests that the Lady Isabella be prepared for the Anointing of the Vessel at dawn."
*   **PROBLEM:** In the RAG character state for ch-04, Isabella is already "recovering from exhaustion" in the High Tower solar. The scout’s dialogue refers to her "transition" as if she is a newcomer, but the RAG world state says she has just navigated a "high-stakes interrogation" by Malakor. The scout’s surprise at "delay in the signal" contradicts that she was *successfully interrogated* previously in the chapter.
*   **FIX:** "The Priest was concerned by the lingering shadow on your spirit, Lady Voss. He fears the interrogation did not sufficiently... purge the Nightbloom rot."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Your father plans for a future that requires me to be a docile broodmare. He will be disappointed when the silk is the only thing he manages to stain."
*   **PROBLEM:** This implies the "Consummation Silk" was stained with *only* her blood or fake blood, but the opening line says "stained with their mingled blood." This creates a contradiction: did they actually bleed together for the ruse, or is she claiming he won't be able to "stain" her (implying no real blood was shed)?
*   **FIX:** "He will be disappointed when the silk—stained by a staged prick of the finger—is the only part of me he ever manages to claim."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Optional:** Enhance the link between the "Peace Vow" and the "Blood-Ink Pact." 
*   **Quote:** "The Peace Vow does not take kindly to being bypassed... It demands a price for the blood I spilled to anchor us."
*   **Suggestion:** Reference the specific "Peace Vow" constraint from the World State (ch-04) which "constrains direct violence between the heirs." Explicitly mention that the magic they are performing is a technical violation of that treaty's spirit to heighten the stakes.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Isabella's Sarcasm:** Do not remove "Pray" or her habit of asking rhetorical questions like "are we not?"—these are vital voice signatures.
*   **The Scars:** Do not "heal" Isabella's scars for the sake of a "cleaner" look; the proliferation of scars is a core mechanic of her Hemomancy and arc.
*   **Damien's Lethargy:** Do not make Damien overly energetic; his sympathetic reaction to Isabella's blood-ink pact is a canonical world-state feature (ch-04: "slight sympathetic pulse").

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### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** While the prose is evocative and respects the character voice signatures for both Isabella and Damien, there are critical continuity errors regarding the mechanics of her bandages/scars versus the use of a dagger, and a contradiction regarding the "mingled blood" on the silks. These must be aligned with the RAG character states to maintain world-logic.