### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The Heart Tree thrummed beneath Lena’s translucent skin, its roots no longer distinct from her own neural weave, pulsing sap in place of breath."  
    *Commentary:* This effectively establishes Lena’s physical apotheosis by blending biological and technological imagery ("neural weave," "sap in place of breath").
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "She understood the tether. Her mother hadn't been lost to the swamp; she had been the first stitch in the repair of a tattered world."  
    *Commentary:* This provides strong emotional closure to Lena’s primary character wound from the RAG context.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "The silicon turned to sand, the plastic to mulch. It tumbled from the sky like a dead leaf, disappearing into the hungry green belly of the canopy long before it could hit the ground."  
    *Commentary:* This vivid imagery reinforces the "Grand Recession" world state where the ecosystem metabolizes TDC technology.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Character: Lena Duval**
*   **Line:** "The cypress don't lie, cher—the roots whisper what your heart's too stubborn to hear."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses "cher" and the gator/cypress metaphor.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES. She does not apologize or say "I give up."
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. She reflects the "Bayou Nirvana" and omniscience noted in the character-state.
*   **Constraint Check:** The profile requires her to say "gator's truth" when stating an undeniable fact. She does this: *"Gator's truth," she whispered. "The land don't just take back."*

**Character: Jax Harlan**
*   **Line:** "The last of the survey drones went down in the Shallows. Rusted out before they could even ping a signal back to the corporate office."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. His voice is "gravelly" and focused on the "Shallows" and "terrestrial/TDC intrusions" as per his Eternal Guardian role.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES. No corporate jargon remains in his speech.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. He displays the "absolute clarity" and "shed corporate identity" required by the ch-17 state.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **World State Integration:** The description of the "Biological Cathedral" ("sweeping arches of fused cypress knees and hanging curtains of Spanish moss that acted as fiber-optic strands") masterfully blends the organic and digital themes established in the RAG.
*   **Character Arc Completion:** The moment Lena realizes "There was nowhere to go when you were already everywhere" serves as a perfect capstone to her want (escape) vs. her need (heritage).
*   **Sensory Grounding:** The inclusion of her specific scent—"The heavy scent of magnolia and wet earth shifted"—adheres to the writer's note regarding her grounding scent detail.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "Lena twisted the silver locket around her finger."
*   **PROBLEM:** While this is a physical habit from the profile, the Profile Notes state it should happen "when lying or hiding emotions." In this scene, Lena is in a state of "Bayou Nirvana" and "Omniscient awareness." There is no lie here.
*   **FIX:** Modify the action to reflect her transcendence rather than her human guilt signal: "Lena’s fingers brushed the silver locket at her throat, no longer twisting it in a girl’s nervous guilt, but holding it as one would a steadying anchor."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The infusions are holding. We’ve brought the salt-binding jars to reinforce the eastern bank."
*   **PROBLEM:** This introduces "salt-binding jars" and "infusions" without prior context of what they are for in a "Biological Cathedral" sense. It feels like a late-stage magic system addition that distracts from the apotheosis.
*   **FIX:** "The infusions are holding. We’ve brought the minerals from the deep silt to reinforce the eastern bank where the old levees failed."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Suggestion (Optional):** "She stepped forward, pricking her palm with a thorn grown from her own thumb." 
    *This is a strong use of her signature move, but it could be heightened by mentioning her fever-state limitation: "Though the old fevers no longer burned, the act of binding still drew a phantom heat from the land."*

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Verbal Tics:** Do NOT remove "Gator's truth" or "By the bayou's bones." These are mandatory per the voice signature.
*   **Imperfect Speech:** Do NOT fix the repetition in panicked moments: "no no, don't let the rhythm break, no no." This is her specific imperfection signature.
*   **Dialect:** Do NOT "correct" the grammar in "The land don't just take back." This is intentional rhythmic bayou speech.

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### Eight. VERDICT
**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** The chapter is tonally perfect and hits every RAG requirement for the ch-17 finale, but there is a logic error in using the character's "guilt/lying" physical tell (locket twisting) during a moment of supreme truth/omniscience, plus minor clarity issues regarding the coven's maintenance tools.