### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "Beneath the heavy weight of her ceremonial velvet, the Peace Vow hummed against her marrow—a golden, suffocating thread that vibrated whenever her heart spiked with the urge to scream."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively establishes the physical stakes of the magical world-building by linking Isabella’s internal state directly to the global "Peace Vow" event.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "He stood to her left, a towering monument to acquisitive greed, his robes smelling of old parchment and cold iron."
    *   *Commentary:* This uses strong sensory details (parchment and iron) to reinforce Lord Reginald’s characterization as a man defined by contracts and conquest.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "Isabella gasped, her hand instinctively flying to the heavy, antique vow-sealed locket at her throat. She fiddled with the latch, the cold metal biting into her palm."
    *   *Commentary:* This skillfully integrates a character-specific "physical habit" from the profile, grounding her anxiety in a tactile object.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Isabella Voss**
*   **Line:** "Pray, keep your memories of my mother to yourself, My Lord," she whispered, her words clipped and elegant.
*   **Signature vocabulary / verbal tics?** YES ("Pray" sarcasm prefix used correctly).
*   **Avoids forbidden speech patterns?** YES (No slang or "whatever").
*   **Emotional register consistent?** YES (Regal correction mask under high stress).

**Damien Blackthorn**
*   **Line:** "My bride has a tongue of glass. If you press too hard, she might just shatter and leave us both bleeding."
*   **Signature vocabulary / verbal tics?** YES (Short, cutting sentences; focus on dismantling).
*   **Avoids forbidden speech patterns?** YES (N/A for profile).
*   **Emotional register consistent?** YES (Cruelly intrigued, shadow-husband persona).

**Lord Reginald Thorne**
*   **Line:** "The archives, the hemomantic scrolls, the ancestral nodes—I expect the full handover by dawn."
*   **Signature vocabulary / verbal tics?** YES (Acquisitive focus on assets).
*   **Avoids forbidden speech patterns?** YES (N/A for profile).
*   **Emotional register consistent?** YES (Triumphant architect of annexation).

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **The Hemomantic Concealment:** The tension surrounding the bleeding gloves is a vital narrative engine. 
    *   *Evidence:* "If a single drop soaked through to the exterior, the 'unmarked vessel' clause of her contract would be forfeit." (Mid)
*   **The Specificity of the Peace Vow:** The physical manifestation of the magical law adds high stakes to every line of dialogue.
    *   *Evidence:* "A sharp, internal lash of magic struck her ribs, cold and jagged as ice." (Early)
*   **The "Vessel" Metaphor:** Both Reginald and Isabella use this terms to define her role, highlighting the dehumanizing nature of the contract.
    *   *Evidence:* "But pray, remember that a vessel must be handled with care if you wish it to hold anything of value." (Late)

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The archives, the hemomantic scrolls, the ancestral nodes—I expect the full handover by dawn." (Mid)
*   **PROBLEM:** Lord Reginald is an antagonist who views Isabella as a "pawn" and intends to "sacrifice Isabella once a viable heir is produced" (RAG ch-01). Demanding a "handover by dawn" implies she has the agency/freedom to perform an administrative task, contradicting her "hostage-bride" status and the fact that she has "transferred... via the Blood Contract."
*   **FIX:** "The archives, the hemomantic scrolls, the ancestral nodes—all have been tallied. You are merely the key to the vault now, Isabella."

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "A new era of stability begins, is it not?" (Mid)
*   **PROBLEM:** This is a voice signature collision. The RAG "Voice Signature" specifically assigns the reflective "is it not?" tag to **Isabella Voss** (see Note: "Ends reflective sentences with 'is it not?' even when alone"). Having Reginald use it in his first speech obscures Isabella's unique verbal identity.
*   **FIX:** Change Reginald's line to: "A new era of stability begins. Ensure you do not disrupt it."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Suggestion (Character Tell):** Enhance the moment Isabella traces her scars to show the specific result mentioned in her profile (beading blood).
    *   *Relevant Quote:* "tracing the faint ridges of her old scars through the silk... a rhythmic, grounding motion." (Mid)
    *   *Improvement:* "tracing the faint ridges of her old scars through the silk, pressing until a new bead of warmth bloomed against the fabric inside her glove."

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do not "soften" Isabella's responses.** Her "regal correction" (e.g., "Stillness... is indistinguishable from death") is a core character trait intended to show managed defiance.
*   **Do not remove the "is it not?" tag from Isabella.** Even if it feels repetitive, it is her specific imperfection signature/ghostly affirmation tic.
*   **Do not change the specific phrasing of "a touch inconvenient."** This is her calibrated stress expression for minor upset according to her profile.

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### 8. VERDICT

**REVISE**
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** The chapter is atmospheric and follows the character profiles closely, but it commits a significant "Must-Fix" voice error by giving Isabella’s unique verbal signature ("is it not?") to the antagonist Reginald, and it creates a minor continuity lag regarding Isabella's agency in the asset handover.