### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The cooling fans of the Loom were dying, replaced by the wet, rhythmic thrum of the Thirteenth Strand—a frequency that didn't belong in this world, a sound like a giant’s lungs filling with silt."
    *   **Commentary:** This excellence in sensory writing effectively marries the mechanical and the metaphysical, establishing the "Dirty Circuit" as a biological/machine horror.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "In her mind’s eye, Thorne was a chaotic snarl of wild, unbound threads, white-hot and fraying at the edges. Behind him, the Loom was a towering wall of black warp and weft, shuddering with the introduction of the forbidden Thirteenth Strand."
    *   **Commentary:** This visualization reinforces the specific terminology of the magic system while heightening the stakes of the Liora-Thorne bond.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "The violet light was bleeding through the floorboards, reaching the lower levels. The Indigo Contagion was spreading, manifesting as physical warping of the Spindle’s architecture. The stone was beginning to look like woven fabric, the very walls losing their solidity."
    *   **Commentary:** This passage provides a clear, high-stakes visual of the "Indigo Contagion" moving from an abstract concept to a physical threat.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Liora Voss**
*   **Line:** "You can't just pull at fate's hem like it's your favorite cloak—watch the weave, or it'll unravel us both."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Usesweaving imagery ("hem," "weave," "unravel") and whispers "bind or break" earlier in the scene.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES. She does not say "It'll all work out" and maintains her fatalistic, dry tone.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. Her arc at 30% involves accepting the tether for survival, which is reflected in her desperate "bind it now" mentality.

**Thorne Quill**
*   **Line:** "Liora, the Loom... it isn't broken. It’s awake."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Reflects his secret attunement to Loom sentience as per character profile.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES. No forbidden patterns listed for Thorne.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. Resolute and protective, acting as the "sentient anchor."

**Elder Maros**
*   **Line:** "Voss, the Purists have reached the outer silos! They’ve declared the Spindle a site of spiritual rot!"
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Voice reflects political panic and desperation.
*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. Matches the "politically panicked" state and 20% arc position of forced defense for survival.

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **The Tactile Magic System:** The description of Liora’s physical reaction to the thread-work—specifically "Liora’s left palm felt as though it were being flayed. The aperture in her skin... was now a ragged weeping wound pulsing violet"—is essential for maintaining the "Stained" aesthetic.
*   **Liora’s Compulsive Behavior:** Her need to fix things even as they fail: "She gripped the connection like a lifeline, her compulsive need to fix, to stabilize, to order the chaos..." This is a direct payoff of her fatal flaw.
*   **World Building via Metaphor:** The description of the Purists' arrival, "The heretics' threads end here," maintains the theological weight of the weave-based society.

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "...her hand going to her hair, frantically শুরু braiding a small section near her temple." (Late)
*   **PROBLEM:** Language contamination. The word "শুরু" (Bengali for 'start' or 'beginning') appears inexplicably in the middle of the English sentence, likely a rendering or copy-paste error.
*   **FIX:** Change to: "...her hand going to her hair, frantically beginning to braid a small section near her temple."

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The first strike of the Purist stave hit the air like a thunderclap, and the Weaving Chamber began to scream." (Late)
*   **PROBLEM:** It is unclear if the "scream" is literal (the Loom/machinery) or metaphorical (the sound of the air/resonance). Since the Loom is becoming sentient, literal/conceptual ambiguity here slows the climax.
*   **FIX:** "The first strike of the Purist stave hit the air like a thunderclap, and the Loom's gears let out a metallic, agonizing scream that echoed through the Spindle."

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Suggestion:** Clarify the physical location of Elder Maros during his second disappearance. 
*   **Quote:** "Elder Maros was gone. In his place stood a silhouette clad in the bone-white robes of the Purists..."
*   **Reason:** It’s slightly unclear if Maros was physically dragged away or if he simply fled while the Purist stepped into view. Adding a brief mention of a "shadowy scuffle" or Maros "stumbling back into the dark" would clarify the transition.

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Liora’s Repetitive Speech:** Phrases like "Resonate. Resonate-resonate-resonate" and "Bind-bind-bind" are intentional character signatures found in her profile ("repeats key words obsessively when panicked"). These must not be edited for "varied vocabulary."
*   **Technical Jargon:** Terms like "Dirty Circuit," "Thirteenth Strand," and "Frayback" are established world-building. Do not simplify these for a general audience.
*   **Clipped Commands:** Liora’s dialogue ("Stay... stay still," "Tell them to wait!") is intentionally short as per her "clipped commands during rituals" voice signature.

### 8. VERDICT: REVISE
**SCORE: 82**
**Justification:** The chapter is tonally perfect and adheres strictly to character profiles; however, the inclusion of a non-English word ("শুরু") in the prose is a significant continuity/technical error that requires a revision.