### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "Isabella stood at the center of the hall, her feet aching from hours of ceremonial stillness. She adjusted the hem of her obsidian velvet gown, her fingers grazing the silk of her gloves. Beneath the fine fabric, the silk was stubborn and tacky, clinging to the fresh gashes on her wrists."
    *   **Commentary:** This effectively establishes the physical discomfort and the "undamaged vessel" facade while grounding the reader in the immediate sensory details of her injury.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "He had discarded his ceremonial cape, leaving him in a high-collared doublet of midnight leather that emphasized the breadth of his shoulders. He didn’t look tired. He looked hungry."
    *   **Commentary:** This passage successfully conveys Damien's "predatory vitality" as noted in his character state, contrasting his energy against Isabella's hemomantic exhaustion.
*   **Quote 3 (Mid):** "The Peace Vow flamed in response to her internal spike of hostility, a searing heat that scorched her throat."
    *   **Commentary:** This provides a necessary visceral consequence for the world-building "Peace Vow" rule, showing it is an active, punishing force rather than a passive concept.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "As Damien's hand closed tighter around her gloved wrist—too knowing, too possessive—Isabella felt fresh blood bead beneath the silk, the Peace Vow thrumming a warning: this was only the beginning of her unraveling."
    *   **Commentary:** The metaphor of "unraveling" creates a strong closing hook that aligns with the Hemomancy limitation where betrayal or overuse "risks unraveling the self."

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Isabella Voss**
*   **Line:** "Pray tell, how does one bind a heart with vows of crimson, only to watch it bleed defiance?" (Note: This is the profile example; in-text equivalent: "Pray, do not let my silence be mistaken for compliance.")
*   **Signature Tics:** YES. She uses "Pray" sarcastically and ends reflective sentences with "is it not?" (e.g., "It is a lonely habit, is it not?").
*   **Forbidden Speech:** YES. She avoids slang and maintains a regal, "elegant" sentence structure even under duress.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. She maintains her "regal correction" mask and focuses on the internal "blood" obsession when panicked.

**Damien Blackthorn**
*   **Line:** "I find her more akin to a violin string. Stretched to the point of snapping, yet remarkably quiet."
*   **Signature Tics:** YES. His voice is "low vibration" and "predatory," focusing on dismantling her composure.
*   **Forbidden Speech:** YES. No casualisms; his tone remains "cruelly intrigued."
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. He is positioned at the start of his arc (8%), established as a tormentor who is starting to "test the limits" of her endurance.

**Lord Reginald Thorne**
*   **Line:** "I will not have our investment compromised by a vessel that leaks its power before it can be harvested."
*   **Signature Tics:** YES. His language is acquisitive and imperial ("investment," "harvested").
*   **Forbidden Speech:** YES. Commands the room with aged authority.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. He is at 5% arc, acting as the architect of the annexation.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **The Symbolic Use of Gloves:** The recurring focus on the "silk of her gloves" (Early) and "the deep crimson stain blooming across the white fabric" (Late) perfectly encapsulates the "Undamaged Vessel" facade and the secret of her bleeding.
*   **Isabella’s Psychological Template:** The reference to her mother: "Isabella’s mind flashed to her mother—standing on the scaffold... a final instruction: Never let them see the cost" (Mid). This maintains continuity with her "Known Secrets" and "Wound."
*   **The Power Dynamic of the Peace Vow:** The way the Vow reacts specifically to her "internal spike of hostility" (Mid) makes the magical binding feel like an active character in the scene rather than just a background rule.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Damien’s hand suddenly shot out, grasping her wrist. Isabella gasped as his fingers squeezed the very place where the hemomantic scarring was most severe." (Late)
*   **PROBLEM:** Per the **[character-state]**, Isabella has "fresh wrist scarring from oath-tax" and "silk gloves saturated with blood." However, the **World State** artifact list says Isabella uses gloves to "hide critical hemomantic scarring." Per the **Voice Signature**, use of Hemomancy "etches a visible crimson scar." The text implies Damien can see or cause bleeding through the gloves, but Reginald—who is obsessed with the "unmarked vessel" clause—is standing right there. If Damien squeezes her and "deep crimson stain blooming across the white fabric like a macabre flower" occurs in front of Reginald, it contradicts the established "unresolved" status of her "Maintaining the 'Undamaged Vessel' facade."
*   **FIX:** Amend the scene so Damien’s squeeze is shielded from Reginald’s direct line of sight, or Reginald's "acquisitive gaze lingering" must lead to a more immediate consequence for the "unmarked vessel" clause being breached. *Alternative Fix:* Damien uses his body to block Reginald's view of the blood blooming on the glove to keep the secret "Private," which aligns with his "shadow-mentor" arc.

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The Annexation of the Nightbloom assets is incomplete until the bloodlines are woven. I expect the 'unmarked vessel' clause to be verified. No scars, no flaws." (Mid)
*   **PROBLEM:** The text introduces the "unmarked vessel" clause as something Reginald is monitoring, but Isabella's voice sheet states that "Each use [of Hemomancy] etches a visible crimson scar on her skin." This creates a logic gap: if she is a known Hemomancer from a family of Hemomancers, how could anyone expect her to be "unmarked"?
*   **FIX:** Clarify that the "unmarked vessel" clause refers specifically to *fresh* or *corrupted* scarring that would impede the Binding, or that she is meant to be "unmarked" by the *Blackthorn* brand specifically. Change to: "I expect the 'unmarked vessel' clause to be verified. No *new* scars, no flaws *in the transmission*."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Suggestion:** (Late Chapter) In the dialogue line: "I am merely being polite, Damien. A concept you seem to struggle with. It is a lonely habit, is it not?"
*   **Reason:** While it fits her profile, the use of "is it not?" here is actually *delivered* to Damien. Her profile says she does this "even when alone," but it would be more poignant if she whispered it to the air *after* he turned away, emphasizing her isolation.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do not remove the repetition of "Blood. Blood and silk..."** or "Blood, blood, the smell of it is a treason." These are intentional "Imperfection signatures" noted in her Voice Signature for when she is panicked.
*   **Do not "soften" Isabella's dialogue.** Her sarcastic "Pray" and "regal corrections" are core to herManaged Defiance and should not be made to sound more traditionally "victim-like" or fragile.
*   **Do not remove the "Is it not?" tag.** This is a specific character quirk from her voice sheet and must remain even where it feels repetitive to a standard reader.

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### 8. VERDICT

**SCORE: 82**
**REVISE**

**Justification:** While the prose is evocative and the character voices are largely perfect, there is a significant continuity/logic conflict regarding the visibility of the blood in the Great Hall. If Isabella’s blood is "blooming" on her white/silk gloves in front of the man who legally requires her to be an "unmarked vessel," the "Undamaged Vessel facade" loop should be resolved or failed, yet the RAG context lists it as UNRESOLVED. The narrative needs to clarify how Isabella hides this from Reginald while Damien discovers it.