### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "Her vision was beginning to fray. It wasn't just the darkness of the chamber; it was the monochrome 'frayback' that came when a Weaver’s soul-thread started to thin."
    *   **Commentary:** This effectively bridges the physical sensation with the established world-building mechanics of "frayback" and "soul-threads."
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "The bond felt like a length of rusted iron wire wrapped in silk, vibrating at a frequency that set her molars on edge."
    *   **Commentary:** This sensory metaphor successfully conveys the "dirty" and uncomfortable nature of the unsanctified link.
*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "Indigo and blood-red light spiraled between them, a miniature vortex of heretical magic."
    *   **Commentary:** The visual contrast reinforces the "Dirty Circuit" concept by clashing Liora's signature dye color with the visceral imagery of blood.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "His eyes were two pits of darkness in a gray universe, and his voice was the only sound left in the world."
    *   **Commentary:** This illustrates the total sensory isolation of the "frayback" state while centering the focus on the antagonist/partner.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Liora Voss**
*   **Line:** "You can't just pull at fate's hem like it's your favorite cloak—watch the weave, or it'll unravel us both."
*   **Signature vocab/tics?** YES. Uses "weave," "unravel," and "fate's hem."
*   **Avoids forbidden speech?** YES. She avoids optimism; her dialogue is fatalistic and cautionary.
*   **Consistent emotional register?** YES. She is in a state of high-stress "fix-it" mode, aligned with her 20% arc position as an active heretic.

**Thorne Quill**
*   **Line:** "I can feel your terror. It tastes like lanolin and old ink. It’s pathetic. Is this what the Conclave trains you for?"
*   **Signature vocab/tics?** YES. Uses tactile/sensory descriptors (lanolin, ink) to mock Liora.
*   **Avoids forbidden speech?** YES. Profile suggests a cynical, testing nature; he remains biting and manipulative.
*   **Consistent emotional register?** YES. He is actively testing the bond’s boundaries as per the character state.

**Elder Maros**
*   **Line:** "The Arch-Binders want your head on a platter of silver wire, my dear. They see a heresy. I see... a necessity."
*   **Signature vocab/tics?** YES. Uses calculating, "predatory patience" vocabulary.
*   **Avoids forbidden speech?** N/A (No specific forbidden patterns in context).
*   **Consistent emotional register?** YES. He is weaponizing her heresy rather than punishing it (Arc 15%).

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Sensory Bleed:** The specific description of Thorne's mental intrusion—"It tastes like lanolin and old ink"—is a powerful use of Liora’s character profile (smells of lanolin) reflected back at her.
*   **Incantation Consistency:** Liora’s repetitive panic-mantra ("Bind-bind-bind it now") should remain unchanged as it is a specific "imperfection signature" listed in her character sheet.
*   **The Dead-Tone:** The personification of the Loom’s failure through sound ("The Loom screams in a tone I haven't heard in forty years") maintains the high stakes of the "Loom Decay" world event.

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The voice was cool, measured, and came from above. Liora didn't look up to the High Observation Gallery."
*   **PROBLEM:** The Context [character-state] place Maros on the "High Observation Gallery," but the text implies he is both there and then has him descend. However, the Context states Maros's location is the "High Observation Gallery." While he moves in the scene, the draft must ensure he doesn't appear in two places via a POV slip.
*   **FIX:** Ensure Liora *perceives* his presence above first through the bond or sound before he descends. (Draft currently handles this well, no change needed unless Maros was supposed to remain stationary per the prompt). 
*   **ACTUAL ERROR:** No major continuity errors found between RAG and text.

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "Liora shut her eyes, but the monochrome world remained. She could see him through the bond—a silhouette of jagged black glass against a gray void."
*   **PROBLEM:** "Frayback" is defined in context as vision flickering into monochrome. However, if she shuts her eyes, "seeing" him suggests a mental projection. The transition between physical sight and "bond-sight" is slightly blurred.
*   **FIX:** Clarify that this is an internal vision: "Liora shut her eyes, but the monochrome world persisted behind her lids, transmitted through the Dirty Circuit."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Optional:** In the passage "Liora's knees ground into the cold stone," (Early), explicitly mention the lanolin or indigo smell she carries to reinforce her "Voice Signature" profile elements which mention she "always smells faintly" of these.
*   **Optional:** "I’m a bit tied up at the moment," he replied (Late). Given Thorne's cynical and predatory nature, this pun feels a bit "light" for his 20% arc. Consider: "My threads are currently snagged on your guild’s hospitality," to keep it more weaving-centric.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **DO NOT** fix the repetitive "bind-bind-bind." This is a character-specific panic signature.
*   **DO NOT** remove the phrase "this knot's tightening." This is her specific "upset" stress expression.
*   **DO NOT** make Liora more hopeful. Her profile explicitly forbids optimism.
*   **DO NOT** change the "monochrome" aspect of frayback to "blurry" or "dark." The specific visual style is established world-state.

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### 8. VERDICT

**SCORE: 92/100**
**REVISE** 

**Justification:** The chapter is exceptionally well-aligned with the provided RAG context and character signatures. However, there is a minor "MUST-FIX" regarding the clarity of the frayback vision when eyes are closed (Section 5), and the transition of Maros's movement needs a tighter check to ensure Liora doesn't see him while in "total frayback" later in the scene. Once the "bond-sight" vs "physical sight" distinction is clarified, this is a strong chapter.