### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The heavy oaken doors of Blackthorn Keep's Great Hall groaned shut behind the last of the jeering courtiers, sealing Isabella Voss in a cage of flickering torchlight and predatory gazes."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively establishes the gothic atmosphere and the protagonist's claustrophobic sense of entrapment using strong sensory verbs.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "Beneath the fine fabric, the silk was stubborn and tacky, clinging to the fresh gashes on her wrists. The blood was still warm, a slow, rhythmic weeping that mapped the exact frequency of her heartbeat."
    *   *Commentary:* This visceral imagery successfully connects the physical trauma of the oath-tax to Isabella's internal emotional state.
*   **Quote 3 (Mid):** "I find her more akin to a violin string. Stretched to the point of snapping, yet remarkably quiet."
    *   *Commentary:* This simile perfectly captures the tension of the scene and Damien’s predatory observation of Isabella’s fragile composure.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "A regular tapestry of hemomantic excess."
    *   *Commentary:* This phrase provides an evocative description of Isabella's scarring, though "excess" feels slightly clinical for the high-drama tone of the dialogue.

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### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Isabella Voss**
*   **Quote:** "Pray, do not let my silence be mistaken for compliance."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. She uses the sarcastic "Pray" prefix as specified in her voice signature.
*   **Avoid Forbidden Patterns:** YES. She maintains an elegant, mid-length sentence structure and avoids all casual slang.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. She is in "regal correction" mode, which aligns with her 15% arc position (prisoner-to-bride transition).
*   **Imperfection Signature:** YES. The repeating of "Blood. Blood and silk..." and "Is it not?" (Late: "It is a lonely habit, is it not?") confirms her obsessive panic/seeking of affirmation.

**Damien Blackthorn**
*   **Quote:** "Tell me, does it hurt? The lashing? I felt the resonant kick of it when you snapped at Reginald."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. His voice is "cruelly intrigued" and "predatory," aligning with the RAG context.
*   **Avoid Forbidden Patterns:** YES. He avoids the "regal" flourishes Isabella uses, maintaining a more direct, grounded, yet sadistic tone.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. He is focused on dismantling her composure, exactly as his profile dictates.

**Lord Reginald Thorne**
*   **Quote:** "I will not have our investment compromised by a vessel that leaks its power before it can be harvested."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses imperial, acquisitive language ("investment," "harvested").
*   **Avoid Forbidden Patterns:** YES. Maintains a commanding, aged presence.
*   **Emotional Register:** YES. He is purely focused on the annexation of assets.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **The Physicality of the Blood Tax:** The repetition of the blood seeping into the gloves creates a ticking-clock tension. 
    *   *Reference:* "The silk of her glove darkened instantly, the deep crimson stain blooming across the white fabric like a macabre flower."
*   **Isabella's Dialectical Shield:** Her use of specific linguistic markers to distance herself from her trauma is highly effective. 
    *   *Reference:* "A touch more pallid than the portraits suggested... It is a touch inconvenient to be the subject of such pedestrian scrutiny."
*   **The "Peace Vow" Mechanic:** The description of the Vow as a physical, reactive entity adds a layer of magical stakes to the dialogue.
    *   *Reference:* "...the Peace Vow flared in response to her internal spike of hostility, a searing heat that scorched her throat."

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### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The Annexation of the Nightbloom assets is incomplete until the bloodlines are woven. I expect the 'unmarked vessel' clause to be verified. No scars, no flaws."
*   **PROBLEM:** Per the **Character State**, Reginald is "Monitoring the 'unmarked vessel' clause," but Damien is already "Aware Isabella is hiding hemomantic scarring/bleeding." The dialogue has Damien telling Reginald, "She is a collector of scars, Uncle," which effectively fails the "Maintaining the 'Undamaged Vessel' facade" open loop in the very first scene without sufficient consequence for the contract. If she is "unmarked" per the clause, the exposure should lead to an immediate legal/physical crisis or a more explicit cover-up by Damien.
*   **FIX:** Damien should hide the discovery from Reginald to maintain his "shadow-mentor" role and protect the "asset," rather than announcing it. 
    *   *Suggested Rewrite:* "She is merely... overtaxed, Uncle. A minor tremors of the Vow. I will see to it she is properly calibrated in private." (Removing the line "She is a collector of scars").

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### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "Blood. Blood and silk. Blood and stone." (Early)
*   **PROBLEM:** While this serves the imperfection signature (repetition), the transition from the narrative description of her feet aching to this italicized internal monologue is slightly jarring because the "Blood and stone" element hasn't been grounded in the immediate surroundings yet (she is on wood/carpet in a hall).
*   **FIX:** "Blood. Blood and silk. Blood and cold stone beneath the rug."

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### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **Suggestion:** Heighten the specific reaction to the "locket" to bridge the gap between her fear and her mother's memory.
    *   *Quote:* "Isabella’s thumb traced the edge of the vow-sealed locket hidden beneath her bodice." (Mid)
    *   *Improvement:* Mention if the locket pulses in time with the Peace Vow, showing the conflict between her old life and her new binding.

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### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **The "Is it not?" verbal tic:** This must remain. Even though it appears three times in a short span, it is a defined character signature for Isabella when she is panicked or seeking "ghostly affirmation."
*   **Isabella's lack of apology:** Despite the physical distress, she never grovels to Reginald or Damien. This "Regal Correction" is central to her Voice Signature and must not be softened to make her more "relatable" or "likable."
*   **Fragmented thoughts:** The short, punchy fragments like "*Blood. Blood and silk.*" are intended markers of her enragement/exhaustion and should not be expanded into full sentences.

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### 8. VERDICT

**SCORE: 82**
**REVISE:** The chapter is atmospheric and follows the Voice Signature perfectly, but the **Continuity** error regarding the "Unmarked Vessel" clause is a major plot leak—Damien exposing her scars to Reginald immediately jeopardizes the "Undamaged Vessel" facade loop before it can even be established as a point of tension. If she is "marked," the contract is technically breached, yet the scene proceeds to the bedroom without the expected legal/magical fallout from Reginald.