**1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE**

*   **Voice Signature Accuracy (Mira):** The "Mira variable" is perfectly executed. Her mid-thought pivot—*"We could—actually. No. Yes. We could"*—is mirrored in the final dialogue: *"Actually. No. I corrected him... it’s perfect."* Her use of "obviously" to denote the opposite of the literal meaning remains her strongest sarcasm tell.
*   **Voice Signature Accuracy (Dorian):** His formal understatement scale is handled with architectural precision. His use of "suboptimal" for the previous state of the world and "extraordinary" for the climax/Mira aligns with his rule of reserving superlatives for things that matter deeply.
*   **Tactile Magic:** The description of the merge via Mira’s POV preserves her tactile nature: *"The white-hot lightning... was a bridge into the marrow."* She understands the soul not through theory, but through the sensation of a *"glacier reflecting a thousand suns."*
*   **The Shared Heartbeat Mechanic:** The resolution of the "Binary Star" loop is earned. Using the rhythm of a shared heartbeat rather than incantations feels like a structural necessity for a romantic fantasy finale.

**Voice Profile Verification:** 
*   **Mira:** YES. Her "Curse Scale" is visible (*"past and rot with the evidence"*, *"stars' sake"*, *"burning memory"*), signaling her emotional escalation from focus to relief.
*   **Dorian:** YES. His transition from *"the evidence suggests"* to the incomplete, vulnerable sentence *"Mira..."* efficiently signals the cracking of his armor.

**2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY**

*   **The Regent Discrepancy:** The chapter identifies Kaelen as "Regent Thorne" (Dorian says: *"Regent Thorne... I believe the titles have shifted"*) and later Mira calls both Kaelen and Lyra the "Regents." However, the [character-state] RAG documentation identifies Kaelen as "First Regent" and Lyra as "First Regent."
    *   **Correction:** Dorian should refer to Kaelen by his actual surname (Kaelen’s surname isn't explicitly defined as Thorne, which is Dorian's name). Ensure Dorian says "Regents" or "Regent [Kaelen's Surname]."
*   **The Tonal Reset of the Sky:** The World State [ch-12] notes the sky shimmers with "eternal aurorae of fire and ice" (crimson/blue), but the text describes it as "green, gold, and soft grey."
    *   **Correction:** Align the visual description with the "Grey Era" branding. The aurora should specifically be described as a fusion of the two schools' colors—crimson and ice-blue—blending into the grey equilibrium mentioned in the RAG.

**3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY**

*   **The "Fifteen-Foot Leash" Logic:** In the opening, Mira states the tether vanished: *"The tether between us... vanished. It didn't break; it expanded."* Later, she tests the distance by walking twenty feet away and says, *"tether... It's quiet."*
    *   **Clarity Issue:** It isn't immediately clear if the physical pain is *gone* or if the tether is simply *infinite*.
    *   **Fix:** Add a sentence during the realization at the 20-foot mark where Dorian or Mira clarifies that the "Correction Clause" (the pain penalty) hasn't just been moved—it’s been integrated into their baseline state so it no longer triggers.

**4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS**

*   **Dorian’s Restoration (Optional):** The RAG notes Dorian’s paralyzed arm was restored by the Nexus surge. While the text mentions his "silver-fox fur" and "shredded robes," it doesn't explicitly show him using the previously paralyzed limb. A small gesture—him reaching for Mira with that specific hand—would provide a silent, powerful payoff for that sub-plot.
*   **The "Grey" Magic Visuals (Optional):** The transition from the "violet maw" to "amethyst" is beautiful, but adding one specific mention of the "Grey resonance" neutralizing a specific piece of debris or "unraveling" some entropy would reinforce the "architectural" weight of their new power.

**5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS**

*   **Do Not Fix Dorian’s Dialogue:** His repetitive use of "The evidence suggests" and "The circumstances are..." might feel redundant to a general editor, but these are his established formal understatements. They must remain.
*   **Do Not "Smooth Out" Mira’s Interruptions:** Her mid-sentence pivots (*"Actually. No."*) are central to her voice. Do not combine these into fluid sentences.
*   **Do Not Remove the Sarcastic "Obviously":** This is the "secret language" of the couple; even though they are now in love, the sarcasm is their bond.

**6. VERDICT: REVISE**

**Reasoning:** The chapter is emotionally resonant and structurally sound as a finale, but there is a naming inconsistency regarding "Regent Thorne" (applying Dorian's surname to Kaelen) and a slight visual mismatch between the described aurora and the RAG-defined "fire and ice" aurora. Once the naming of the Regents and the sky colors are aligned with the project's world-state, this is a very strong PASS.