**TO:** Facilitator
**FROM:** Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor
**RE:** Review: The Sparring Arena Disaster (Draft Concept)

I have processed the draft for Chapter 4. As this is the first substantial text block provided for the project, my focus is on establishing the "Ground Truth" for *The Starfall Accord* and identifying any internal logical lapses or conflicts with the established project goal.

### 1. STRENGTHS
*   **Magic/Physics Logic:** The explanation for the arena collapse is grounded in consistent elemental logic: "The training ground hadn't been reinforced for the combined weight of high-frequency thermal stress and deep-freeze expansion." This follows the established rules of fire/ice interaction.
*   **Character Branding:** Dorian’s "signet ring" and "arrogant curls" are established early as visual anchors. Mira’s "jagged scars of old cinder-burns" serves as a permanent physical trait that must be tracked in future chapters involving her forearms.
*   **Setting Consistency:** The "subterranean training grounds" and "ancient stone catacombs" provide a clear verticality to the world-building that can be referenced in later chapters.

### 2. CONCERNS
*   **The "Sensual but Tasteful" vs. YA Tension:** The project description specifies **Target Audience: YA**, but the goal says **Adult romance, sensual but tasteful.** This draft leans heavily into Adult Romance/New Adult territory. Specifically, the line *"He was giving me the choice to burn him or to let the ice in"* and the description of the kiss as a *"collision"* may need to be calibrated once a definitive age rating is locked in by the Facilitator.
*   **The Signet Ring Mystery:** The text notes: *"The silver signet ring on Dorian’s hand reflected the flickering orange... a cold metal eye watching."* Later: *"Dorian... offered me a hand, his signet ring catching the light once more."* I have logged this item. If Dorian is an ice mage, we must clarify if this ring is purely decorative or a focus for his magic. If he uses it to channel, he shouldn't be able to cast as effectively if he loses it in a future chapter.
*   **The "East Wing" Geography:** Mira mentions the *"fountain in the East Wing."* I am noting this as the location of the Cryo-specialists' makeshift gallery. If the schools are merging, we need to establish if the East Wing was originally Fire or Ice territory. The text suggests it is Mira's (*"my hallways"*), so I have logged **East Wing = Fire Wing.**
*   **Injury Continuity:** Mira’s right leg is pinned by a granite slab and suffers "deep bruising." She is also "bleeding on [Dorian's] boots." This injury must be reflected in Chapter 5. She cannot be walking without a limp or significant magical healing in the next scene.

### 3. AMBIGUITY TRACKING
*   **The Arbiter:** A third party is mentioned: *"called the arbiter from the high gallery."* Is this a neutral party, an AI, or a faculty member? Their presence is a variable that needs a name or a more specific description to maintain continuity in the "joint curriculum" scenes.
*   **The "Forbidden Tiers":** Dorian mentions *"No forbidden tiers."* This implies a hierarchy of magic. I am flagging this as an "Unmet Definition." We need a list of what constitutes a forbidden tier to ensure no one accidentally uses one in a later "standard" duel.

### VERDICT: CLEAN / MINOR FLAGS
**Decision:** **PASS.** 
The internal logic of the chapter is sound. There are no contradictions because this is the foundational text. However, the injuries sustained here (Mira's leg, Dorian's head wound) are now **Canon Facts**. I will be watching Chapter 5 very closely to ensure they don't miraculously vanish.