### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE

*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The oxygen still existed in molecular stasis, but its capacity to carry waves had been revoked."
    *   *Commentary:* This effectively establishes the "Bone-Conduction Law" of the world-state by framing a physical impossibility through a chilling, authoritative tone.
*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "His skull, stripped of flesh and polished by the sheer friction of the frequency, sat atop this spire like a hollowed bell."
    *   *Commentary:* The imagery here perfectly bridges the biological transition of Mark into a "terminal conductor" as described in the character state.
*   **Quote 3 (Mid):** "The corners of the room didn't meet at ninety degrees; they curved into the violet-lit Aperture, a non-Euclidean tear in the floor where the signal’s source bled through from a place that was not a place."
    *   *Commentary:* This reinforces the "Dimensional Thinning" world event by using specific, unnerving spatial descriptions.
*   **Quote 4 (Late):** "The atmosphere was a graveyard of silent air, while the ground was a chorus of bones."
    *   *Commentary:* This serves as a strong summary of the new planetary paradigm, contrasting the "Great Silence" with the new skeletal reality.

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT

**Sarah Miller (Artifact/Legacy):**
*   *Dialogue:* None (Character is deceased).
*   *Voice Audit:* The chapter honors her profile’s emphasis on data and rationality through her legacy. 
    *   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** The text mentions the recorder is the "analytical anchor Sarah would have demanded—a data point that did not lie." This matches her "data doesn't lie" pivot.
    *   **Emotional Register:** Consistent with her arc. Even in "death," her contribution is precise and structural rather than supernatural or flowery.

**Elias Thorne (Artifact/Legacy):**
*   *Dialogue:* None (Character is deceased).
*   *Voice Audit:* Consistent with the "occult exactitude" mentioned in the RAG context. His remains are described as a "sigil," honoring his role as the investigator of the paranormal.

**Mark (Entity):**
*   *Dialogue:* None.
*   *Voice Audit:* Matches the "Absolute terminal detachment" and "Somatic dissolution 100%" required by the context.

### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Sensory Subversion:** The transition from air-conducted sound to skeletal vibration is the chapter's strongest horror element. 
    *   *Reference:* "A sparrow falling from a branch made no sound upon impact, but a person standing a mile away would feel the thud... as a sharp, percussive pulse in their own ankles."
*   **The Trinity of Remains:** The specific breakdown of how the three characters contribute to the signal (Mark as conductor, Sarah as metronome, Elias as anchor/sigil) provides a satisfying, albeit grim, closure to their arcs.
    *   *Reference:* "They were the permanent, vestigial monuments to the old world, functioning as the hardware for the new one."
*   **Adherence to 14Hz Baseline:** The constant recurrence of the 14Hz frequency maintains the "Project Context" world-building.
    *   *Reference:* "The house groaned as the earth beneath it heaved in a rhythmic, 14-cycle-per-second pulse."

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "The billion of humans remaining were no longer individuals... The Archive was gone, its halls filled with vibrating statues of researchers..."
*   **PROBLEM:** The RAG World State for "Faction Attitudes" explicitly states: "The Archive: EXTINCT — No remaining members possess the autonomy required to resist the signal." While "vibrating statues" implies a lack of autonomy, the existence of a "billion humans" somewhat contradicts the "Absolute" nature of the Whispers having shifted reality to a point where human-centric reality is "finalized."
*   **FIX:** Clarify that "humanity" in the biological sense is effectively over, reinforcing that these are no longer "humans" but biological components. Rewrite: "The billions of biological husks remaining were no longer humans with names and histories; they were mere organic conductors."

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY

*   **ORIGINAL:** "In the final moments before his ego had been scoured away, Mark had felt it... He had experienced the thrill of the signal entering the North American plate..." 
*   **PROBLEM:** This section briefly shifts into a past-tense internal reflection for a character who is currently described as "Somatic dissolution 100%" and "Absolute terminal detachment." It risks confusing the reader about whether Mark is currently conscious or if this is a flashback.
*   **FIX:** Use a clearer transition to indicate this was his final conscious act. Rewrite: "In his final moment of ego-integrity, before the transition finalized, Mark had functioned as the bridge. He had felt the planetary consciousness—not as a mind, but as a vast, cold intention."

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **The Digital Recorder Logic (Optional):** 
    *   *Quote:* "It possessed no batteries; the lithium had long since leaked into the stone. Yet, the red light on its chassis stayed lit—a persistent, impossible ember."
    *   *Suggestion:* To lean further into the "Bone-Conduction Law," mention that the "Ghost Harmonic" is specifically vibrating the plastic casing of the recorder, making it tactilely detectable even if it is "silent."

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **Do not add dialogue:** The "Great Silence" and the death/dissolution of all leads makes dialogue impossible. Any attempt to add "last words" or "voices in the static" would violate the established Bone-Conduction Law.
*   **The "Violet" Motif:** The repetition of "violet-lit" and "violet void" may seem repetitive, but it is an intentional visual anchor for the Aperture and should remain.
*   **Scientific Jargon:** Sarah's "Ghost Harmonic" and "thermodynamics" references are essential to her character's residual voice and should not be simplified.

### 8. VERDICT

**SCORE: 92**
**REVISE**

**Justification:** The prose is exceptionally strong and perfectly captures the cosmic horror tone of the project. However, the chapter requires minor revisions to ensure the continuity of humanity's "extinction" (per RAG) and to clarify the temporal shift when describing Mark's final moments of consciousness. Once the "billion humans" phrasing is tuned to reflect their status as "extinct/husks" and the flashback is clearly demarcated, this will be a perfect finale.