Since the **PASS 1 narrative prose** was not provided in the prompt, I am providing a **SAMPLE REVIEW** based on a hypothetical opening scene for *Binding Thread* to demonstrate the required rigor and structure. 

**Please provide the actual Chapter 1 text to receive the official review for your draft.**

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### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
*   "Liora’s fingers twitched in the empty air, tracing the jagged, silver-blue lines that tethered the merchant to his coin purse." (Early)
    *   **Commentary:** Successfully establishes Liora's "tactile" nature and her magical perception of the Binding Thread early on.
*   "The air felt heavy, like a loom weighed down by wet wool." (Mid)
    *   **Commentary:** Excellent use of weaving-based imagery consistent with the character's worldview and profession.
*   "She looked him in the eye and smiled brightly. 'Don't worry, everything is going to be just fine!'" (Late)
    *   **Commentary:** This fails significantly as it violates the core character constraint that Liora "never laughs freely or says anything optimistic."

### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT
**Character: Liora Voss**
*   **Quote:** "This knot’s tightening, Thorne. If we don't move, the whole weave is going to shred."
*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics?** YES. Uses "This knot’s tightening" (Upset/Medium stress) and weaving metaphors ("the whole weave").
*   **Avoids Forbidden Speech?** NO. 
    *   *Violation:* Liora says "everything is going to be just fine" (Late). 
    *   *Rule:* Profile states "Never says anything optimistic like 'It'll all work out'."
*   **Emotional Register Consistent?** YES. She exhibits the compulsive need to "fix" the connection in the scene.

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### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **Sensory Branding:** The indigo and lanolin scent mentioned in the profile is successfully integrated. 
    *   *Evidence:* "Thorne caught the scent of indigo dye and raw wool as she brushed past him, a sharp contrast to the city's grime." (Mid).
*   **The "Bind or Break" Ritual:** The inclusion of her verbal tic adds weight to her magic.
    *   *Evidence:* "She leaned over the frayed soul-strand, whispering 'bind or break' so softly the wind nearly stole it." (Late).

### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "Liora reached out and patted Thorne’s shoulder to comfort him."
*   **PROBLEM:** Violation of Character Sheet: "Never touches anyone casually; all contact is deliberate and charged with binding intent." Patted shoulders are too casual for her established trauma/avoidance.
*   **FIX:** "Liora reached toward Thorne, but her hand stopped inches away, her fingers snapping an invisible thread in the air as she wrestled with the urge to bind his anxiety to her own calm."

### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
*   **ORIGINAL:** "The frayback hit her like a wall of gray thread, spinning the room into a mess of colors that didn't have names."
*   **PROBLEM:** The physical sensation of "frayback" is too abstract; readers need to understand the stakes of "life thread weakening."
*   **FIX:** "The frayback hit her—a sharp, tearing sensation in her chest as her own life-thread stretched thin, turning her vision into a blurred, colorless void where the world began to unravel."

### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Suggestion:** Increase the clipped nature of her commands during the ritual to highlight the contrast in her sentence patterns.
*   **Relevant Quote:** "Pull the blue one back and hold it steady until I say." (Mid).
*   **Proposed Change:** "Blue strand. Back. Hold it."

### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **DO NOT** fix Liora's obsessive repetition of "bind-bind-bind" during the climax. This is an intentional "Imperfection signature" used when she is panicked.
*   **DO NOT** remove her personification of threads (e.g., "the red thread whispers"). This is a specific speech quirk, not a logic error.

### 8. VERDICT: REVISE
**SCORE: 78**
**Justification:** While the prose effectively uses the weaving metaphor, there are critical violations of the character’s "Forbidden Speech" and "No Casual Touch" rules that undermine the established personality of Liora Voss. 

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