As Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor at Crimson Leaf Publishing, I have reviewed the draft for Chapter 01 of *The Starfall Accord*. My primary concern is the preservation of established facts and the rigorous enforcement of character voice signatures.

### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
*   **The Ritual Mechanics:** The chapter honors the physical state established in the RAG database, specifically the ritual cuts: "clutched her right hand, her blood slick against the dark stone" and "his own palm dripping onto the same line of power."
*   **Sensory Bleed Integrity:** The "sudden, violent intrusion of cold into her marrow" and Dorian’s "tremors in hands" align perfectly with the physiological consequences of the skip-bond established in the character-state logs.
*   **The Emperor’s Corruption:** The "burnt sugar" scent/visual is maintained as a secret known to Mira (and now discovered by Dorian through the bleed), which is a vital plot anchor.
*   **Voice Differentiation (Dorian Thorne):**
    *   **Voice Signature Check:** Dorian's internal realization uses his evidence-based profile: "realized... that the tether wasn't a spell. It was technology."
    *   **Dialogue Clarity:** While he has only one line ("It is done" belongs to the Emperor), his internal monologue reflects his Subject-Verb-Object precise nature.
    *   **Can I identify him without tags?** YES. The shift from "ice" to "shattered mental discipline" is uniquely Dorian.

### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
*   **Naming Inconsistency (Dorian):**
    *   **The Error:** The chapter text refers to him as "Dorian Solas."
    *   **The Original Fact:** The Character Voice Signature profile (and likely the broader internal database) identifies him as **Dorian Thorne**. However, the Character State log (ch-01) also uses "Dorian Solas."
    *   **The Correction:** There is a naming conflict between the Voice Profile and the State Log. Per the constitutional mandate of "Continuity and Accuracy," we must standardize. Given "Thorne" is listed in the Non-Negotiable Voice Profile, the chapter text should be updated to **Dorian Thorne** or the RAG must be patched to ensure "Solas" is not a hallucination.
*   **Naming/Role Inconsistency (Dorian):**
    *   **The Error:** Chapter text says he looked at her "not as a rival scholar."
    *   **The Original Fact:** Chapter 01 (and project description) established them as **rival magical academy chancellors**. 
    *   **The Correction:** Update "scholar" to "Chancellor" to reflect their specific political and administrative rank.

### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
*   **Passage:** "'It is done,' the Emperor’s voice echoed from the high balcony..."
*   **The Fix:** This transition is slightly abrupt. We need to clarify that the Emperor is physically present at the Obsidian Bridge on a balcony overlooking the center span, as the RAG location lists them all at the "Center Span, Great Crevasse boundary."

### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
*   **Mira’s Voice Signature (Optional):** In the chapter text, Mira "gasped." To better align with her Voice Profile, her reaction to the "cold intrusion" could include a verbal tic like "Stars' sake," indicating her mild-to-moderate irritation with the sudden lack of privacy before she hits the "burning memory" level of pain.
*   **Dorian’s Understatement (Optional):** When Dorian realizes the tether is technology, a private thought using his formal scale ("This is not auspicious") would reinforce his character signature before his composure fully shatters.

### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
*   **Do NOT "smooth out" Mira’s internal reactions:** Her knees buckling and magical flickering are intended signs of her 15% arc progress—she is currently "overwhelmed and violated."
*   **Do NOT change Kaelen’s "singed robes":** This is a specific physical marker from the character-state index and must remain to justify his apprehensive emotional state.
*   **Do NOT remove the "burnt sugar" description:** Even if it feels repetitive, it is the established "Known Secret" in the RAG and must be the primary descriptor for the Emperor’s corruption.

### 6. VERDICT: REVISE
The naming discrepancy between "Dorian Solas" and "Dorian Thorne" must be resolved to maintain a clean canon. Additionally, the "rival scholar" vs. "Chancellor" distinction is a matter of established professional rank that affects the weight of the Accord.