### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE

*   **Rhythmic Mirroring:** The opening paragraph perfectly mirrors the ending of Chapter 15, grounding the reader in the immediate sensory transition from the kiss to the conflict. "The taste of winter mint and surrender..." establishes the chapter’s stakes instantly.
*   **The "Somatic Hum":** The physical byproduct of their union is handled with excellent economy. *“I could feel his apprehension: a structured, tiered system of 'worst-case scenarios'...”* This translates Dorian’s internal character logic into a felt sensation for Mira.
*   **Dorian’s Deconstruction:** The moment Dorian lets his clinical mask fail is high-impact: *"He looked like a man who was terrified that the only thing he’d ever loved was about to be scoured from the world..."* This reinforces the "95% Arc" completion from the context logs.

**VOICE SIGNATURE CHECK:**
*   **Mira:** YES. Her use of "Actually. No." and "Obviously" remains her rhythmic anchor. Her dialogue is fiery, impatient, and protective.
*   **Dorian:** YES. His reliance on "The evidence suggests..." and "suboptimal" maintains his Spire-born precision, even when emotionally frayed.
*   **Voss:** YES. His voice is distinct—cynical, bureaucratic, and sharp.

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### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY

*   **ERROR:** The text mentions Voss "standing exactly where he had retreated during the Gala."
    *   **CORRECTION:** According to Chapter 13/14 logs, Voss didn't just retreat; he was humiliated and sent back to the Capital. The arrival here should feel like a *return* with reinforcements, not a lingering presence.
*   **ERROR:** Mira is addressed as “Warden Mira” by Voss.
    *   **CORRECTION:** Per the logs, she moved from Warden to Chancellor. While Voss uses it as a "pointed malice," the narrative later refers to her "old, lower title." Ensure it’s clear he is demoting her verbally to insult her, which the text currently does, but verify the specific rank of "Warden" vs "Chancellor" matches the Academy's new Charter.
*   **SATURATION ERROR:** The "Steam Phoenix" is described as settling into the rafters of the *office* (Sanctum) at the end, but the logs state it already *resides* in the Chancellor’s Sanctum.
    *   **CORRECTION:** Adjust the phrasing to imply it is returning to its "perch" or "territory" rather than appearing there for the first time.

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### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY

*   **PASSAGE:** *"The button is... irrelevant," Dorian said, though he did use both hands to rake his hair back into some semblance of Chancellor-like order.*
    *   **PROBLEM:** This transition is slightly jerky. We go from a missing button to "straighten your hair" very quickly.
    *   **FIX:** ORIGINAL → "The button is... irrelevant," Dorian said, his fingers grazing the empty threads before he raked his hair back into some semblance of Chancellor-like order. (Adds a beat of physical realization).
*   **PASSAGE:** *“We will not submit to a review. We will reject the Duress Filing in a formal assembly.”*
    *   **PROBLEM:** The logic of *why* rejecting a review is better than fighting it in court is slightly thin.
    *   **FIX:** Add a single line of dialogue from Dorian explaining that a "Summary Rescision" by the Ministry bypasses the High Tribunal, making their public stand the only way to force the Ministry back into a legal (and public) spotlight.

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### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS

*   **SUGGESTION:** *“I caught the scent of damp paper and bile.”*
    *   **RATIONALE:** You use "stagnant water and old parchment" three times for Voss. While repetition is a voice trait, tripling it in five paragraphs feels like a loop.
    *   **OPTIONAL CHANGE:** On the third mention: "stagnant-water scent" → "the cloying reek of Ministry ink."
*   **SUGGESTION:** *"Voss hissed, his voice dropping into a low, parasitic chill."*
    *   **RATIONALE:** Voss represents the status quo. "Parasitic" is a strong adjective, but "Low, bureaucratic chill" might hit the character's core harder.

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### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS

*   **DO NOT** smooth out the "Actually. No." or "The evidence suggests" tics. These are the structural pillars of the characters' worldviews.
*   **DO NOT** remove the detail of the "missing button." It serves as a grounded, physical tether to the illicit nature of their morning—a "somatic liability" made manifest.
*   **DO NOT** reduce the melodrama of the Steam Phoenix. In this genre (Adult Romantic Fantasy), the manifestation of magic mirroring the emotional state is a core convention.

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### 6. VERDICT

**REVISE**
(The continuity regarding Voss’s presence—whether he stayed or returned—needs to be locked down to ensure the threat feels like an escalation rather than a lingering annoyance.)