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+**TO:** Author / Editorial Roundtable
+**FROM:** Cora, Continuity & Accuracy Editor
+**PROJECT:** Cypress Bend
+**CHAPTER:** 31 (The Iron Bell)
+
+---
+
+### 1. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
+*   **Voice Signature Consistency (Marcus Thorne):** Marcus’s reliance on "Diagnostic:" and "System state:" headers in his internal monologue remains perfectly aligned with his established profile. Quote: *"Diagnostic: Structural integrity of the belfry is rated for a static load,"* and *"Status: Ready."* He continues to use tech-debt metaphors for physical sensations, which is a core pillar of his character state from Ch-01 through Ch-31.
+*   **Tactile Anchoring:** The description of the bell as a *"four-hundred-pound deadweight of cast iron that smelled of woodsmoke"* matches the low-tech, reclaimed aesthetic of the Bend established in earlier construction chapters (Ch-29/30).
+*   **World State Integration:** The mention of Julian Avery’s drones and the Sovereign Mesh correctly references the current adversarial "Blinded" status of Avery-Quinn Corp as noted in the World State.
+*   **Character Voice Differentiation:**
+    *   **Marcus:** YES. Analytical, boolean-adjacent, tech-metaphor heavy.
+    *   **Sarah:** YES. Texas lilt, triage-focused, balancing motherly concern with leadership.
+    *   **David:** YES. Tectonic, rhythmic, directional ("North-by-Northwest").
+    *   **Elena:** YES. Mechanical, abrasive, distrustful of "clean" systems.
+    *   **Helen Vance:** YES. Dropping 'g's (*"larnin'"*), reflecting her regression to childhood dialect in old age as per the Arthur/Vance legacy notes.
+
+---
+
+### 2. MUST-FIX — CONTINUITY
+*   **The Helen Vance Anomaly:**
+    *   **Conflict:** Chapter 31 features "Helen Vance" sitting in the front row, speaking to Marcus about the bell. However, the [character-state] for Ch-31 and David's [voice-sig] state that David "Owes Helen a legacy—PAID." Previous context (Ch-01) implies Helen is deceased or at least not active in the current timeline of the "Forty." If she is alive, she has not been indexed in the "Active Characters" for the Chapel sequence.
+    *   **Correction:** Verify Helen’s status. If she is alive, add her to the Character State index. If she is a memory or a ghost, Marcus’s interaction with her needs to be reframed as internal or visionary.
+*   **The Sarah/Marcus Conflict Resolution:**
+    *   **Conflict:** Sarah asks Marcus for a "Status report" and speaks with "hope." The [character-state] for Sarah notes she "Knows the Alpha-7 empathy protocols were a lie—Julian does NOT know she has weaponized that detachment." There is a tension in Ch-31 where she seems too forgiving given the "unresolved" status of Marcus's secret (he hasn't told her he kept the logs yet).
+    *   **Correction:** Ensure Sarah’s dialogue maintains a layer of "weaponized detachment" or professional distance, as her arc is only at 195% and the secret is still "CARRIED."
+
+---
+
+### 3. MUST-FIX — CLARITY
+*   **The "Ocala" Origin:** 
+    *   **Passage:** *"Found her in the ruins of a foundry near Ocala."*
+    *   **Conflict:** [character-state] for Marcus lists an open loop: "The Ocala 'Ghost' Signal (Ch-22)—UNRESOLVED." By introducing an object physically retrieved from Ocala without referencing the signal, the reader may confuse a physical salvage mission with the digital mystery.
+    *   **Correction:** Add a brief mental beat for Marcus connecting the physical bell location to the unresolved digital signal he’s been tracking.
+
+---
+
+### 4. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
+*   **The Alpha-7 Log Physicality:** In the final scene, Marcus feels the drive in his pocket. To tighten continuity with Ch-01, describe the drive using the same "cold, clinical plastic" texture to contrast the "warm, vibrating iron" of the bell.
+*   **Directional Consistency:** David uses "North-by-Northwest" and Miller uses "South-by-Southeast." While thematic, ensure these cardinal directions align with the actual map of Cypress Bend established in the planning phases to avoid "compass drift."
+
+---
+
+### 5. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
+*   **Do not "fix" Marcus’s dialogue:** His habit of answering with probabilities or booleans (e.g., *"Error 404: Structural certainty not found"*) is a hard-coded character trait. Do not make him sound more "natural."
+*   **Do not remove the "g-dropping":** Helen Vance’s *"larnin'"* and *"hiddin'"* are intentional regressions noted in the Vance legacy voice sig. 
+*   **Do not smooth the technical jargon:** The intersection of "PSI" and "Latency" in the same conversation is the core thematic conflict of the book (Analog vs. Digital).
+
+---
+
+### 6. VERDICT
+
+**REVISE**
+(Required: Clarify Helen Vance’s living status/presence in the chapel and unify the Ocala mention with the Ch-22 open loop.)