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+### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
+*   **Early:** "The light of the sanctum was no longer the blinding, violent white of the activation; it had softened into a deep, rhythmic amber, the color of sap and ancient honey."
+    *   *Effect:* This effectively uses sensory, nature-based imagery to signal the shifting magical state of the environment without relying on technical exposition.
+*   **Mid:** "She could feel the spirits moving in the canopy above them—not the screaming shadows of the Blight, but something older, green and vast, singing a song of slow, inexorable growth."
+    *   *Effect:* The contrast between "screaming" and "slow" reinforces the transition in the World State from corruption to the Great Weaving.
+*   **Mid:** "She walked with a measured, rhythmic pace, forcing her breathing to remain calm despite the fire in her ribs."
+    *   *Effect:* This maintains continuity regarding her physical injuries (bruised ribs) while demonstrating her arc-dictated transition into a proactive leader.
+*   **Late:** "The council chamber doors creaked open under the weight of exposed roots, and from the shadows, a forgotten voice whispered, 'The Blight was only the beginning.'"
+    *   *Effect:* While providing a cliffhanger, the personification of the roots "weighing" on the door physically manifests the Council's loss of control to the forest.
+
+---
+
+### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT
+
+**ELARA VANCE**
+*   **Line:** "I... I flow... no, I mean falter... The power didn't just pass through me. It took the banks of the river with it."
+*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** Uses the "by the roots" oath later and employs her water-metaphor stammer.
+*   **Avoid Forbidden Speech:** **YES.** No modern idioms or "I can't" statements.
+*   **Emotional Register/Arc:** **YES.** She acts with "proactive furnace of resolve," fitting her 100% arc transition to leader.
+
+**KAELEN**
+*   **Line:** "I have nowhere else for my feet to find purchase, Elara. I stand."
+*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** **YES.** His speech is clipped and stoic ("I stand"), reflecting his Guardian role.
+*   **Avoid Forbidden Speech:** **YES.** Avoids apologies or flowery language.
+*   **Emotional Register/Arc:** **YES.** He accepts his role as a witness/protector, setting aside his deserter past.
+
+**MIRA**
+*   **Line:** "The sky is open. The gray has retreated to the very edge of the valley."
+*   **Emotional Register/Arc:** **YES.** She is "grateful" and acts as the advocate/messenger as established in the NPC Memory.
+
+**HALLOW (Council Representative)**
+*   **Line:** "The forest is... unstable, Vance. This 'growth' is unnatural."
+*   **Emotional Register/Arc:** **YES.** Matches the "Terrified" faction attitude for the Council.
+
+---
+
+### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
+*   **Spiritual Depletion Signature:** The passage "I... I flow... no, I mean falter" (Mid) perfectly executes the specific imperfection signature from Elara's profile.
+*   **Tactile Grounding:** Elara's habit of tracing the Sigil or touching the talisman, such as "Elara instinctively reached for the small wooden talisman at her belt" (Mid), maintains character consistency.
+*   **The Great Weaving Imagery:** The description of "fern uncurling like waking dreams" and "saplings piercing through the ash" (Late) provides a tangible sense of the world-state change.
+
+---
+
+### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
+*   **ORIGINAL:** "...pulling out a small, blackened scroll case she had recovered from Thorne’s belongings—a piece of evidence that linked the Council to the initial corruption of the Shimmering Falls."
+*   **PROBLEM:** The Context RAG (Open Loops) states Elara "knows Council's role in Blight origin (evidence possessed)" but the specific "blackened scroll case" was not explicitly listed as a physical item in her current state, and the location of Thorne's belongings is unclear given he was "calcified and shattered" in the Heart-Root in Ch-13.
+*   **FIX:** Clarify that she retrieved it from his discarded cloak near the Great Arch before he fell, or that she carried it from the confrontation in Ch-12.
+    *   *Revised sentence:* "...pulling out the blackened scroll case she had secured from the Council's messenger in the Elderwood—a piece of evidence..."
+
+---
+
+### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
+*   **ORIGINAL:** "The council chamber doors creaked open under the weight of exposed roots, and from the shadows, a forgotten voice whispered, 'The Blight was only the beginning.'"
+*   **PROBLEM:** This ending contradicts the RAG Context which states Thorne Blackroot is "DECEASED" and the Circle of Thorns is "EXTINCT." While intended as a hook, it risks confusing the reader as to whether Thorne survived or if a new antagonist has appeared without sufficient tea-up.
+*   **FIX:** Add a brief sensory cue to distinguish this voice from the deceased Thorne.
+    *   *Revised sentence:* "...and from the shadows, a voice like dry leaves—not Thorne’s guttural rasp, but something older—whispered..."
+
+---
+
+### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
+*   **Connection to Kaelen's Secret:** (Late) When Kaelen says his blood is betrayed, there is an opportunity to hint at his "Sun-Guard bloodline" secret mentioned in the context.
+    *   *Quote:* "If they betrayed the roots, they betrayed the blood in my veins."
+    *   *Suggestion:* Kaelen could briefly touch the scar on his arm or his chest, looking away, to emphasize that his "blood" holds more significance than Elara yet knows.
+
+---
+
+### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
+*   **Verbal Tics:** Do not remove "By the roots" or the water-stammering (e.g., "I flow... falter"). These are intentional voice signatures for Elara.
+*   **Sentence Rhythms:** Do not "smooth out" the fragmented sentences during Elara's exhaustion. "The power didn't just pass through me. It took the banks of the river with it" is a deliberate pattern.
+*   **Absence of Slang:** Maintain the formal, nature-integrated dialogue. Kaelen must never say "It's fine" or "No worries."
+
+---
+
+### 8. VERDICT: REVISE
+**SCORE: 82**
+**Justification:** The chapter is voice-accurate and atmospheric, but requires revision due to a continuity ambiguity regarding the physical "evidence" (scroll case) and a clarity issue regarding the final "forgotten voice" which potentially muddies the established "Deceased" state of the primary antagonist.