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+### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
+
+*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "The air in the ravine’s gut did not behave like air; it had the consistency of silt, pulling at Elara’s lungs until every inhale felt like dragging a stone upward through her throat."
+    *   **Commentary:** This effectively establishes the "spiritual gravity" of the location while reinforcing Elara's physical exhaustion and respiratory distress from the blight-spores mentioned in the RAG context.
+*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "Elara swayed like mist-shrouded reeds, her eyes glazing as she looked past Kaelen. 'I... I flow... the current is too heavy...'"
+    *   **Commentary:** This passage masterfully executes the "imperfection signature" from the voice sig, using water-related stammers to signal spiritual depletion.
+*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "The Key didn't pulse with the steady, rhythmic life of the forest she remembered. It began to throb in perfect synchronization with the black sap weeping from the walls. It didn't fight the Blight; it sang to it."
+    *   **Commentary:** This provides a strong sensory payoff for the "Root-Key/Blight sentience" open loop, using rhythmic repetition to heighten the horror of the revelation.
+
+---
+
+### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT
+
+**ELARA VANCE**
+*   **Line:** "The falls whisper what the roots already know—debt binds us deeper than stone, Kaelen."
+*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses "by the roots" earlier in the scene; weaves Elderwood lore/oaths into dialogue.
+*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES. No casual slang or "I can't" present in her dialogue.
+*   **Consistency with Arc:** YES. At 85% arc, she is accepting the physical toll while burdened by the "debt of legacy" (Thalric).
+
+**KAELEN**
+*   **Line:** "I’m already drowning. Give me the truth. I'd rather die knowing what I'm fighting than rot in this fog."
+*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. His focus remains on protection and pragmatism, reflecting his "soldier to guardian" transition (80% arc).
+*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES.
+*   **Consistency with Arc:** YES. He is hyper-attuned to Elara’s health and subordinates his safety to hers.
+
+**THORNE BLACKROOT**
+*   **Line:** "Hark. The false Vessel brings the key. The roots remember, and they are thirsty."
+*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses the prefix "Hark" and the verbal tic "the roots remember."
+*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES. No apologies or doubt; maintains a tone of ecstatic malevolence.
+*   **Consistency with Arc:** YES. At 60% arc, he is portrayed as a jerky, unnatural conduit for the "song" of corruption.
+
+---
+
+### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
+
+*   **Tactile Grounding:** The prose consistently uses the physical environment to reflect internal states, such as: "Elara stumbled... her hand brushing a cedar trunk. The bark was slick, weeping a black, viscous sap that pulsed in time with the violet burn on her palm."
+*   **The Culmination of Secrets:** The revelation regarding Oakhaven is perfectly timed to the environmental climax: "The Council... they lied, Kaelen! There is no retreat to Oakhaven because Oakhaven is the source!"
+*   **Environmental Synchronization:** The RAG requirement that the Blight is synchronized with Elara’s heartbeat is well-maintained: "The Key... began to throb in perfect synchronization with the black sap weeping from the walls."
+
+---
+
+### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
+
+*   **ORIGINAL:** "Thorne stepped from the shadows, his thorn-choked arm raised in a mockery of a blessing."
+*   **PROBLEM:** The RAG context for Thorne’s Physical State specifies: "blight-thorns have pierced through the skin of his arm." While "thorn-choked" is evocative, the chapter misses the specific detail of the *wooden brace* mentioned later: "The wooden brace lashed to his arm was no longer mere timber; it had sprouted jagged, obsidian-colored thorns that pierced back into his own skin."
+*   **FIX:** Ensure the first mention of his arm mirrors the specific horror of the brace piercing his own flesh to align with the "jerky and unnatural" movements described in the character state.
+
+---
+
+### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
+
+*   **ORIGINAL:** "The air in the ravine’s gut did not behave like air; it had the consistency of silt, pulling at Elara’s lungs until every inhale felt like dragging a stone upward through her throat."
+*   **PROBLEM:** While evocative, it slightly muddies the "Blight-spore inhalation" mentioned in the [character-state]. Is she struggling because of the metaphorical "spiritual gravity" or the literal spores?
+*   **FIX:** Add a brief mention of the spores to bridge the metaphor to the established physical state: "...every inhale felt like dragging a stone upward through her throat, the fine, bitter dust of blight-spores coating her tongue."
+
+---
+
+### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
+
+*   **Visual Consistency:** The Sunstone is described as "jagged, pale white" in the World State, but in the text, it is "no longer a comforting orb... a jagged, flickering beam."
+*   **SUGGESTION:** Specifically use the color "pale white" to match the Canon Artifacts entry.
+    *   **Snippet:** "...it had narrowed into a jagged, flickering beam of bone-white light, cutting through the swirling blight-mist..."
+
+---
+
+### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
+
+*   **Do NOT "fix" Elara's stammering:** The lines like "I... I flow... no, I mean falter" are essential signatures of her spiritual depletion.
+*   **Do NOT soften Thorne's melodrama:** His use of "Hark" and elaborate metaphors ("Step into the dark... let us see if your harmony can survive the Harvest") is a core part of his established antagonist voice.
+*   **Do NOT remove the "by the roots" tic:** This is a required resolve-marker for Elara.
+
+---
+
+### 8. VERDICT
+
+**SCORE:** 92
+**JUSTIFICATION:** The chapter aligns exceptionally well with the provided RAG context, voice signatures, and character arcs. Only minor continuity/clarity adjustments are needed to fully integrate the "spore" and "brace" details from the technical sheets.
+
+**VERDICT: REVISE**