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+### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
+
+*   **"I... I flow... no, I mean falter," she stammered, the spiritual depletion making the words slide like silt. "The power didn't just pass through me. It took the banks of the river with it."** (early) - This effectively dramatizes Elara’s spiritual exhaustion through her specific voice signature (stammering with water-related metaphors).
+*   **"He looked like a man carved from winter wood—pale, brittle, but stubbornly upright."** (early) - The use of nature-based similes maintains the tone of the "Echoes of the Forest" project and grounds Kaelen's physical state in the setting.
+*   **"Ferns uncurled like waking dreams. Saplings pierced through the ash of the Circle of Thorns’ encampments, their leaves unfurling with the sound of a thousand soft sighs."** (mid) - These evocative sensory details reinforce the "Great Weaving" world event without relying on dry exposition.
+*   **"She walked with a measured, rhythmic pace, forcing her breathing to remain calm despite the fire in her ribs."** (late) - This reinforces the established physical state of "bruised ribs" while demonstrating Elara's transition into a proactive leader.
+
+---
+
+### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT
+
+**ELARA VANCE**
+*   **Line:** "By the roots, it is only... only begun."
+*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses "By the roots" as an oath.
+*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES. No casual slang or "I can't."
+*   **Emotional Register:** YES. Resolute yet depleted, consistent with Chapter 13 state.
+
+**KAELEN**
+*   **Line:** "I have nowhere else for my feet to find purchase, Elara. I stand."
+*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics:** YES. Uses stoic, grounded imagery.
+*   **Avoids Forbidden Patterns:** YES.
+*   **Emotional Register:** YES. Vigilant and protective, fully embodying the Guardian arc.
+
+**THORNE BLACKROOT (Non-Speaking/Legacy)**
+*   **Note:** The character is deceased as per Context. He does not speak, but the "forgotten voice" at the end is a thematic echo. If that voice belongs to Thorne, it would be a continuity error (see Section 4).
+
+---
+
+### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
+
+*   **Physical Grounding:** The chapter consistently tracks Elara's physical injuries. **Quote:** "...wincing at the twinge in her bruised ribs" (early) and "...fingers seeking the grounding texture of the carvings" (mid).
+*   **Thematic Resolution:** The confrontation with Hallow mirrors the arc requirements of Elara becoming a confident vessel. **Quote:** "As the Elderwood bends but does not break... so the truth emerges from the soil."
+*   **World-State Integration:** The "Great Weaving" is not just mentioned, but shown. **Quote:** "The scorched, blackened earth that had surrounded the sancum was being devoured by a carpet of vibrant green."
+
+---
+
+### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
+
+*   **ORIGINAL:** "...the council chamber doors creaked open under the weight of exposed roots, and from the shadows, a forgotten voice whispered, 'The Blight was only the beginning.'"
+*   **PROBLEM:** The voice signature and specific threat level imply a lingering antagonist. Thorne Blackroot is listed as "DECEASED (Ch-13)" and "calcified and shattered." If this is Thorne, it violates the permanent death state. If it is a new threat, it is introduced too abruptly for the conclusion of the "Reckoning" arc.
+*   **FIX:** Clarify if the voice is a spectral memory or a remaining Council member. If meant as a cliffhanger for a new threat: "The council chamber doors creaked open... and from the gloom, the High Warden’s voice, cold and unrepentant, whispered..."
+
+---
+
+### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
+
+*   **ORIGINAL:** "She reached into her tunic, pulling out a small, blackened scroll case she had recovered from Thorne’s belongings—a piece of evidence that linked the Council to the initial corruption..."
+*   **PROBLEM:** The timeline of *when* she obtained this is unclear. Elara just came from the Heart-Root where Thorne died. When did she search him?
+*   **FIX:** Add a brief beat earlier in the chapter or at the start: "She clutched the blackened scroll case she had wrenched from Thorne’s belt before the Heart-Root claimed him."
+
+---
+
+### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
+
+*   **Suggestion:** Lean harder into Kaelen's secret (Sun-Guard bloodline) during the confrontation.
+*   **Relevant Quote:** "If they betrayed the roots, they betrayed the blood in my veins."
+*   **Reason:** Adding a subtle reaction of shame or suppressed pride here would foreshadow his "Sun-Guard bloodline" secret mentioned in the RAG context.
+
+---
+
+### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
+
+*   **Water Metaphors in Exhaustion:** Do not correct Elara's "I flow... no, I mean falter." This is a required imperfection signature for her spiritual depletion.
+*   **Formal Dialogue:** Do not add contractions or slang to the villagers or Council members; the setting requires a consistent high-fantasy/naturalistic tone.
+*   **Mud/Dew Presence:** Do not "clean up" the characters. The RAG context notes Elara "tracks mud or dew... everywhere," which is maintained in the line "her damp cloak trailing moisture across the new moss."
+
+---
+
+### 8. VERDICT
+
+**SCORE: 82**
+**REVISE**
+The chapter is strong in voice and atmospheric detail, but the introduction of a "forgotten voice" at the end risks a continuity clash with Thorne's death, and the sudden appearance of the evidence (scroll case) lacks a clear "search and find" beat in the previous action sequence.