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+### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
+*   **Early:** "The golden light of the revived forest spilled across the path to Oakhaven like liquid dawn, but Elara’s steps felt leaden, the Council Ledger a stone pressed against her ribs."
+    *   *Commentary: This effectively balances the external environmental restoration with the internal physical and emotional weight Elara carries, grounding the reader in her specific burden.*
+*   **Mid:** "She began the march toward the center of Oakhaven. Each step left a faint, damp trail of dew and mountain mud upon the cobstones."
+    *   *Commentary: This detail masterfully adheres to the character sheet’s "Notes for Writers" regarding her tracking mud/dew, signaling her deepening connection to the land.*
+*   **Mid:** "Elara tried to move to intercept him, but her legs gave way. She slumped against Kaelen, her breath coming in ragged gasps."
+    *   *Commentary: This reinforces her current physical state of "aching ribs" and "spiritual depletion" after the Great Weaving.*
+*   **Late:** "The amber light from Elara’s palm expanded, meeting the dark magic and neutralizing it instantly. The Heart-Root’s neutrality followed her; in the presence of the True Vessel, the corruption of the Council had no soil to take root in."
+    *   *Commentary: This passage clearly illustrates the "Aspect Harmonization" principle where her power serves as a stabilizer against corruption.*
+
+---
+
+### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT
+
+**ELARA VANCE**
+*   **Quote:** "The falls whisper what the roots already know—debt binds us deeper than stone, Kaelen."
+*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics?** YES. She uses her specific example line and the internal oath "By the roots."
+*   **Avoids Forbidden Speech?** YES. No slang or "I can't" phrases appear.
+*   **Consistent Emotional Register?** YES. She is resolute but physically failing, shifting into fragmented speech ("I am the... I am the flow") as her spiritual depletion grows.
+
+**KAELEN**
+*   **Quote:** "Then exhale... We're nearly at the gates. Save your strength for the Elders."
+*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics?** YES. His speech is "clipped" and "protective," focusing on survival and tactical readiness.
+*   **Avoids Forbidden Speech?** YES.
+*   **Consistent Emotional Register?** YES. He has transitioned to the role of the Vessel's shield as per his arc (85%).
+
+**ELDER HARLEN** (Standing in for the Council/similar to Thorne's antagonist register)
+*   **Quote:** "You return with a deserter and a stolen title, claiming credit for the forest’s natural cycle?"
+*   **Signature Vocabulary/Tics?** YES. His dialogue is "elaborate" and "taunting," consistent with the Council faction's arrogance.
+*   **Avoids Forbidden Speech?** YES.
+*   **Consistent Emotional Register?** YES. He transitions from haughty authority to "terrified" and "ashen-faced" as the ledger is revealed.
+
+---
+
+### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
+*   **Sensory Connection to the Land:** The description of Oakhaven merging with the wood ("tender shoots of silver-rye were already piercing the soil") reinforces the World State of "The Integration."
+*   **Tactile Grounding:** Elara reaching for Thalric’s talisman ("hand gripping a small piece of petrified bark") stays true to her Voice Signature requirement to reach for "tactile... natural talismans."
+*   **The Ledger Reveal:** The physical impact of the book ("thudding like a falling tree") provides a strong, grounded climax to the political sub-plot.
+
+---
+
+### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
+*   **ORIGINAL:** "Elder Vane scrambled toward a hidden door behind the tapestries... 'The Council was only the gardener. You’ve killed the weeds, but you haven't seen the depth of the rot.'"
+*   **PROBLEM:** Per the RAG Context (Character State: ch-14), Elder Bram is the specific Elder listed as present on the High Pavilion floor, "ashen-faced and trembling." The text introduces "Elder Harlen" and "Elder Vane" as the primary speakers/interactors. While a council has multiple members, the RAG specifically identifies **Elder Bram** as the one whose "authority has crumbled into dust" and who is a "disgraced prisoner." Bram is missing from the narrative action of this scene.
+*   **FIX:** Replace "Elder Harlen" or "Elder Vane" with "Elder Bram" to align with the provided character state, or specifically mention Bram among the "five Elders" being hauled down by the villagers at the end.
+
+---
+
+### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
+*   **ORIGINAL:** "The Great Weaving had done its work; the grey was receding, replaced by a green so vibrant it seemed to hum."
+*   **PROBLEM:** This implies the primary threat (The Blight) is fully resolved, yet the character state says the "Trial for treason" is UNRESOLVED and "The Exposure" has just occurred. The transition from the "Great Weaving" (which happened at the Heart-Root) to the Oakhaven gates feels slightly rushed, making the spatial relationship between the Pavilion and the village center unclear for new readers.
+*   **FIX:** Add a brief transitional phrase: "The trek from the High Pavilion had been short in miles, but long in spirit. As Oakhaven’s stone walls came into view, the green vibrancy followed her, pushing against the grey stone."
+
+---
+
+### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
+*   **RELEATING TO KAELEN:** 
+    *   **Quote:** "Kaelen’s expression remained stoic, though his eyes flickered toward the horizon..."
+    *   **Suggestion:** Since his "Sun-Guard lineage" is an UNRESOLVED open loop, we could hint at his specific lineage here. *Optional edit: "...his eyes flickered toward the horizon, toward the high peaks where the Sun-Guard’s silent signals once burned."*
+
+---
+
+### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
+*   **Do Not Change:** Elara's fragmented speech during her collapse ("I am the... I am the flow..."). This is a mandatory "Imperfection signature" for her voice when spiritually drained.
+*   **Do Not Change:** The mud and dew trails. This is a specific physical habit noted in her character sheet.
+*   **Do Not Change:** "By the roots." This is her required verbal tic.
+
+---
+
+### 8. VERDICT
+**SCORE: 88**
+**JUSTIFICATION:** The chapter is exceptionally well-aligned with the Voice Signature and RAG context (specifically Elara’s ribs, the Ledger, and the Sigil states). However, a REVISE is required because it neglects **Elder Bram**, who is the only Elder specifically detailed in the RAG character states for this chapter to be in a state of "unresolved trial" and "broken authority." Using "Harlen" and "Vane" without accounting for Bram creates a continuity gap for that specific key NPC's arc.
+
+**VERDICT: REVISE**