editorial: add Dorian's family secret - Severance Key killed his great-uncle (Ch6 butterfly)

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Dorian looked at the heavy obsidian door at the end of the hall, then back at me. He reached out, his hand finding the small of my back, drawing me into a silent, lethal pact. "Then we don't do it alone. We take the Library. We take the evidence. And then we show the Council exactly what happens when you try to extinguish a star."
Mira gripped the charred scroll, the Councils seal crumbling under her thumb. "They didn't want us to lead together, Dorian," she whispered, looking into the eyes of the man she was supposed to hate. "They wanted us to burn out."
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## AUTHOR DIRECTION — BUTTERFLY EFFECT CASCADE (Ch06)
Kaelen's death is now 2 chapters in the past. The grief has hardened into resolve.
- The Gilded Gala (or relevant event) is colored by the absence of Kaelen — Mira notices the empty spot where he would have stood.
- Aric has been formally appointed Acting Proctor but is barely holding the fire students together.
- If the Ministry tries to remove Mira, she can no longer call on Kaelen. She has only Dorian.
- Remove any reference to Kaelen being active. If he is mentioned, it is as the dead.
- Remove any reference to Kaelen being active. If he is mentioned, it is as the dead.
## SECOND DISCOVERY — DORIAN'S FAMILY SECRET (MUST ADD)
In the Library of Ash, after finding the Project Equinox ledger, Dorian finds a SECOND document:
a faded incident report from 50 years ago. The report details the execution of "Accord Protocol Omega" —
the Severance Key was used on the previous pair of Accord Chancellors, one of whom was named Aldric Solas.
Dorian recognizes the name: Aldric Solas was his great-uncle, who "died in a research accident" (the lie
the Solas family was told). Dorian says nothing. He takes the report. He puts it in his coat pocket.
He does not tell Mira.
This is the moment Dorian becomes a man carrying a secret that will define his arc through Chapter 12.
His cold analytical composure in future chapters isn't just personality — it is armor against this grief.