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 ## Lena Duval
 Location: The Heart Tree (Siphon Hub Core)
-Physical: Apotheosis manifest; neural pathways fused with cypress root systems; rhythmic bioluminescent skin pulses.
+Physical: Apotheosis manifest; neural pathways fused with cypress roots; skin glows with rhythmic pulses.
 Emotional: Transcendent serenity; ego dissolved into collective consciousness.
-Active obligations: Perpetual anchor and sentient processor of the Grove — UNPAID (Ongoing).
+Active obligations: Perpetual anchor of the Grove's life-force (Ch-17) -- UNPAID (Ongoing).
 Open loops: None.
-Known secrets: CARRIED (Ch-01--unresolved): Blames herself for witnessing/not stopping mother's sacrificial drowning.
-Arc: 100% — Became the permanent, literal soul and central processor of Cypress Bend.
+Known secrets: None.
+Arc: 100% -- Transitioned from a woman seeking escape to the literal, sentient soul of Cypress Bend.
 Permanent: YES
 
 ## Jax Harlan
 Location: The Shallows (Perimeter)
-Physical: Enhanced by the Veil; scarred; immune to toxins; predator-optimized physiology.
+Physical: Enhanced by the Veil; immune to modern toxins; optimized for predatory defense.
 Emotional: Absolute clarity; fierce, inhuman devotion to the borders.
-Active obligations: Eternal guardian of the Veil’s perimeter — UNPAID (Ongoing).
+Active obligations: Eternal guardian of the Veil’s perimeter (Ch-17) -- UNPAID (Ongoing).
 Open loops: None.
 Known secrets: None.
-Arc: 100% — Transitioned from cynical outsider to the supernatural apex protector of the ecosystem.
+Arc: 100% -- Fully evolved from a cynical outsider into the supernatural apex protector of the ecosystem.
 Permanent: YES
 
 ## Aunt Maribelle Duval
 Location: Siphon Hub (Subterranean)
-Physical: Hybridized biological component; integrated into maintenance systems.
+Physical: Hybridized biological component; integrated into the Hub’s maintenance systems.
 Emotional: Subservient; finds peace in functional utility.
-Active obligations: Maintenance of biological integrity and siphon flow — UNPAID (Ongoing).
+Active obligations: Maintenance of biological integrity and siphon flow (Ch-17) -- UNPAID (Ongoing).
 Open loops: None.
 Known secrets: None.
-Arc: 100% — Relinquished individual ambition to become a vital organ of the collective.
+Arc: 100% -- Relinquished human ambition to become a vital organ of the collective.
 Permanent: YES
 
 ## Remy LeBlanc
 Location: The Interior Grove
-Physical: Vitality sustained by proximity to Heart Tree; aging slowed.
-Emotional: Peaceful resignation.
-Active obligations: Preserving the oral and psychic history of the Transition — UNPAID (Ongoing).
+Physical: Vitality sustained by proximity to the Heart Tree; aging significantly slowed.
+Emotional: Peaceful resignation; the "Memory of the Human."
+Active obligations: Preserving the oral and psychic history of the Transition (Ch-17) -- UNPAID (Ongoing).
 Open loops: None.
 Known secrets: None.
-Arc: 100% — Accepted role as the bridge between human history and the new biological era.
+Arc: 100% -- Accepted role as the living bridge between the world that was and the Bend's new reality.
 Permanent: YES
 
 # World State: ch-17
 
 ## NPC Memory
-- The Duval Coven (Cypress Bend): DEVOTED — Functions as a biological priesthood maintaining the Great Hum.
-- External Entities/TDC (Outside Perimeter): TERRIFIED — Total withdrawal from the "Sentient Exclusion Zone."
+- Duval Coven (The Bend): DEVOTED -- They operate as a biological priesthood maintaining the Great Hum.
+- External Entities/TDC (Outside): TERRIFIED -- Total withdrawal; the Bend is classified as a "Sentient Exclusion Zone."
 
 ## Faction Attitudes
-- The Great Hum: Dominant — Achieved biological homeostasis as a unified, conscious machine.
-- Humanity (External): Retracted — Sovereignty of the Bend acknowledged through fearful distance.
+- The Great Hum (The Land): Dominant -- The swamp has achieved biological homeostasis as a unified, conscious machine.
+- Humanity (External): Retracted -- National borders acknowledge the Bend as sovereign, supernatural territory.
 
 ## Active World Events
-- The Great Silence: Permanent EM dead zone enforced by the Veil; total technological blackout in a 5-mile radius.
-- The Biological Cathedral: Continuous, directed evolution of the swamp's flora and fauna under Lena's consciousness.
+- The Great Silence: Permanent EM dead zone (5-mile radius) enforced by the Veil; all non-biological tech fails instantly.
+- The Biological Cathedral: Rapid, directed evolution of flora and fauna under Lena’s guidance.
 
 ## Key Locations
-- The Heart Tree: Central node of the Grove; Lena’s physical and consciousness throne.
-- The Siphon Hub: Subterranean distribution center for refined life-force.
-- The Veil: Sentient, predatory fog boundary surrounding the sovereign territory.
+- The Heart Tree: Throne of Lena’s consciousness; central node of the Grove.
+- The Siphon Hub: Subterranean machinery distributing refined life-force.
+- The Veil: Sentient, predatory fog boundary shielding the ecosystem.