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+### 1. PROSE EVIDENCE
+*   **Quote 1 (Early):** "Blood trickled from Sarah's ears in warm rivulets, pooling on the cold tile as the bathroom light strobed at 14Hz, syncing with the deafening 110dB hum that clawed at her sanity."
+    *   *Commentary:* This establishes the high-stakes physical toll and tech-horror atmosphere immediately, grounding the "audio ghost" concept in visceral biology.
+*   **Quote 2 (Mid):** "The reflection didn't snarl back. It stood still, though Sarah was doubled over. In the mirror, her eyes were pits of shadow, and the bruising on her shoulders—marks from the apparition's grip—glowed with a sickly, iridescent violet."
+    *   *Commentary:* This effectively utilizes the visual medium of the mirror to illustrate the metaphysical "overdubbing" of Sarah’s reality.
+*   **Quote 3 (Late):** "She had to tell him that her skeptical anchor had snapped, and they were both drifting into the dark."
+    *   *Commentary:* This sentence elegantly captures the character’s internal arc shift from rigid scientist to vulnerable participant in the signal’s narrative.
+
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+
+### 2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT
+**Character: Sarah Miller**
+*   **Dialogue Quote:** "From a r-rational standpoint," she stammered, massaging her temples with stained fingers, "a prophecy is merely a predictive algorithm based on known variables."
+*   **Audit:**
+    *   **Signature vocab/tics?** YES. Incorporates "rational standpoint" and uses the stammering "r-rational" which perfectly aligns with the [voice-sig-sarah] requirement for initial consonant stammers during feedback-triggered stress.
+    *   **Avoids forbidden patterns?** YES. She avoids flowery supernatural affirmations, instead describing a prophecy as a "predictive algorithm."
+    *   **Consistent emotional register?** YES. She exhibits the "analytical freeze" and the transition from 55% arc (active investigator) to 75% (confronting the reality) by weaponizing her vocabulary against her fear.
+
+---
+
+### 3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
+*   **Technical Language as Character Shield:** Sarah’s use of terms like "non-reciprocal transmission," "carrier wave," and "predictive algorithm" even when bleeding from her ears is essential to her specific voice.
+    *   *Reference:* "Empirically speaking... this shouldn't possess a power source. The lithium cell is on the nightstand."
+*   **The 14Hz/110dB Motif:** The consistent use of specific frequencies and decibel levels maintains the "hard sci-fi/occult" blend established in the project context.
+    *   *Reference:* "...bathroom light strobed at 14Hz, syncing with the deafening 110dB hum..."
+*   **The Unpowered Electronics Rule:** The chapter effectively utilizes the "Audio Evolution" world state where dead electronics act as anchors.
+    *   *Reference:* "She’d pulled the batteries two hours ago... yet the green LED glowed with an eerie, steady vibrance."
+
+---
+
+### 4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
+*   **ORIGINAL:** "She lunged for her bag, shoving the digital recorder into her pocket." (Late)
+*   **PROBLEM:** This contradicts the earlier action where the recorder is already in her hand or on her temple. At the start of the scene, she "reached for the digital recorder on her belt" and later "pressed the device to her temple."
+*   **FIX:** Change the late-scene line to reflect her already holding it or having tucked it back into her belt. Corrected sentence: "She lunged for her bag, ensuring the digital recorder was secured to her belt."
+
+*   **ORIGINAL:** "The display flickered. The words *NON-RECIPROCAL TRANSMISSION* vanished, replaced by a single name: *ELIAS*." (Late)
+*   **PROBLEM:** In the Character State [ch-07], Sarah is currently suffering from "temporary deafness following the 110dB terminal burst." While she can hear the "Whispers" (which are psychological/metaphysical), her ability to hear her own "fragile reed" of a voice or specific phone haptics is inconsistent with "temporary deafness."
+*   **FIX:** Explicitly note that she *cannot* hear her own physical voice, only the vibrations and the "internal" sound of the signal. Add: "She couldn't hear her own whisper through the wall of deafness, but she felt the vibration of the words in her jaw."
+
+---
+
+### 5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
+*   **ORIGINAL:** "...pushed her toward the front door. She reached the foyer, her breath coming in ragged gasps. She stopped, her hand on the deadbolt. The house was silent." (Late)
+*   **PROBLEM:** The transition from the "110dB hum" to "sudden silence" is a major plot point (The Great Silence), but the text doesn't clarify if Sarah's deafness has ended or if the *signal* stopped. Given her physical state, the reader needs to know if she's "hearing" the silence or just realizing the vibrations stopped.
+*   **FIX:** "The bone-shaking vibration in her teeth abruptly ceased. She clapped her hands together; she saw the impact, but heard nothing. The house was silent—not because her hearing had returned, but because the signal had withdrawn its weight."
+
+---
+
+### 6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
+*   **Optional (Sarah's Arc):** In the [character-state], Sarah has an "unpaid obligation" to Elias to provide a logical explanation. She attempts this in her recorder message, but adding a specific mention of Chapter 2 would cement the loop.
+    *   *Quote:* "Elias, I... I have the explanation."
+    *   *Suggestion:* Add: "...the one I couldn't give you at the station. It’s a ghost-loop."
+
+---
+
+### 7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
+*   **Do NOT remove Sarah's stammer:** "T-th-this..." and "r-rational" are intentional markers of her audio-feedback-induced neurological stress.
+*   **Do NOT smooth over "Data doesn't lie":** This clunky repetition is a defined "imperfection signature" and must remain.
+*   **Do NOT normalize the 1927 chants:** The juxtaposition of modern technology and archaic occultism is the core of the project's genre.
+
+---
+
+### 8. VERDICT
+**REVISE**
+**SCORE: 82**
+**Justification:** The chapter captures the character voice and atmosphere brilliantly, but has a significant continuity error regarding the physical location/handling of the digital recorder and an ambiguity regarding Sarah's "temporary deafness" vs. the "Great Silence" event that could confuse the reader’s understanding of the world rules.