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+1. PROSE EVIDENCE
+*   "The silver locket thrummed against Lena's chest like a trapped engine, its mechanical rhythm drowning the bayou's whisper she'd always known." (Early): This effectively establishes the "Frequency Shift" theme by contrasting natural and industrial sensory details.
+*   "Since the severing, the world had gone flat and gray, the vibrant green threads of the supernatural replaced by a static that clawed at the back of her eyes." (Early): This clearly communicates the protagonist's "Character State" of being deafened to the supernatural pulse.
+*   "She pricked the soft pad of her thumb with a small silver pin from her pocket. A bead of dark, rich blood welled up. She let it drop into the water, watching the red plume unfurl like a carnation." (Mid): The prose here provides the necessary "tactile" grounding required by the character profile while maintaining a rhythmic, chant-like quality.
+*   "The 'Severing' wasn't a loss of power... It was a relocation. She was being forcibly unplugged from the organic world and plugged into the artificial one." (Late): This serves as a vital internal realization that moves the character arc to the 50% mark as specified in the context.
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+2. CHARACTER VOICE AUDIT
+**Character: Lena Duval**
+*   "Line: 'Gator's truth,' Lena murmured, the familiar phrase tasting like copper."
+    *   Signature vocabulary/tics? YES ("Gator's truth" used correctly; "hellfire", "dang it", "cher" all present).
+    *   Avoids forbidden patterns? YES (No preemptive apologies; no usage of "I give up").
+    *   Emotional register consistent? YES (Panicked repetition "no no, not that, no no" used when magic fails).
+    *   *Note:* The meandering sentence structure regarding the "garden of smoke" aligns with her "vines" profile.
+
+**Character: Jax Harlan**
+*   "Line: 'You owe me an explanation for "Phlegethon." If we’re running into the fire, I want to know whose ritual is lighting the match.'"
+    *   Signature vocabulary/tics? YES (Grim, cautious, active investigator persona from Ch-06 state). 
+    *   Avoids forbidden patterns? YES (N/A for Jax).
+    *   Emotional register consistent? YES (Hyper-vigilant and feeling the weight of the compromise).
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+3. STRENGTHS TO PRESERVE
+*   **Tactile Grounding:** The detail where Lena reaches for "the dry, dead rasp of wood pulp and glue" perfectly enforces the character sheet instruction that she reaches for tactile elements to ground herself.
+*   **The Locket’s Evolution:** The transition of the locket from a "natural pulse" to a "mechanical rhythm" (Early) and finally a "high-pitched mechanical whine" (Late) provides a strong sensory thread for the chapter.
+*   **Jax as an "Organic" Anchor:** The scene where "Jax smelled of diesel, salt air, and something deeply, stubbornly alive" reinforces the established secret that his physical contact mitigates her tremors.
+
+4. MUST-FIX -- CONTINUITY
+*   **ORIGINAL:** "The 'Neutral' Contact (New Orleans): UNMET -- A rumored harbor, but the safehouse’s compromised status makes every contact suspect." (Context) / "The contact is an old associate of Remy’s." (Chapter Text, Mid).
+*   **PROBLEM:** The chapter text identifies the contact as an associate of Remy, but the RAG NPC Memory/Faction logic suggests the safehouse was leaked. If the source of the leak is unresolved, Jax’s sudden trust in a "neutral contact" provided by an associate feels too certain given his "Hyper-vigilant" status.
+*   **FIX:** Add a line of dialogue for Jax expressing doubt: "Remy swears he's clean, but in this city, even friends have a price. Keep your eyes open."
+
+5. MUST-FIX -- CLARITY
+*   **ORIGINAL:** "The contact stepped forward, the light finally catching the edge of a silver instrument held in a gloved hand—a device that pulsed with the exact same industrial light as the Project Phlegethon diagrams."
+*   **PROBLEM:** It is unclear if Lena has seen these diagrams. The "Known Secrets" list says she knows about the project, but not that she has viewed technical schematics.
+*   **FIX:** "a device that pulsed with the same sick, rhythmic light Lena had felt vibrating through the locket since the factory floor."
+
+6. OPTIONAL SUGGESTIONS
+*   **OPTIONAL:** Regarding the phrase "The figure turned" (Late). Since Lena is currently hyper-sensitive to frequencies, this could be enhanced by describing the sound of the figure's movement—the rasp of heavy fabric—rather than just the visual silhouette to emphasize her "Frequency Shift" arc.
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+7. FORBIDDEN CHANGES / NON-GOALS
+*   **Do Not Edit:** Lena’s repetitive "no no, not that, no no" (Mid). This is an "Imperfection signature" explicitly required by her character sheet for moments of panic.
+*   **Do Not Edit:** The use of "cher" or "mon coeur." These are Cajun French endearments reserved for those she cares for (Jax), as per her speech quirks.
+*   **Do Not Edit:** The lack of apologies. Lena owns her words as per the "Never see this character do" section.
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+8. VERDICT: PASS
+SCORE: 96/100
+Justification: The chapter perfectly executes the "Frequency Shift" arc requirement and meticulously adheres to the complex voice signatures and tactile requirements of Lena Duval, with no major continuity or character violations. All MUST-FIX items are minor clarity adjustments.